Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ01SPQ5WBE1G47PQY0BWCV8

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Thedoor swung open before I could reach for the handle. Lucien Moreau stood in my hallway like he belonged there, one hand resting on his ivory-handled cane, the other holding a manila folder against his tailored charcoal suit. His heterochromatic eyes, one amber and one black, tracked the movement of my hand as I lowered it from the pepper spray on my keychain. "Rory." "You're three months too late for a social call." "May I come in?" "You haven't answered my question." His gaze flicked past my shoulder into the flat. The movement was subtle, practised, the kind of quick assessment that came from years of reading rooms for exits and threats. I recognised it because I'd learned to do the same thing. "The nature of my visit answers it, I'm afraid." I didn't move from the doorway. The narrow corridor behind me smelled like old wood and whatever Silas was cooking downstairs, lamb rogan josh if my nose was right. Three months ago, I would have stepped aside without thinking. Three months ago, his presence in my hallway would have made my pulse quicken for different reasons. Now I kept my hand near the pepper spray and watched him watch me. "Whatever you're selling, I'm not buying." "It's not a transaction." He adjusted his grip on the folder. "Consider it a warning." "From you? How generous." "From someone who would rather see you breathing." The words landed like stones dropped into still water. I studied his face for the tell, the slight twitch at the corner of his mouth that appeared whenever he was bluffing. Nothing. His expression held that same maddening composure it always did, all sharp angles and careful neutrality. My fingers brushed the crescent scar on my left wrist, an old habit I "A warning that couldn't wait for daylight? For a phone call?" "My calls go unanswered. My messages, unread." He paused. "Your flat was easier to find than your attention." "Imagine that." Silence stretched between us. Down on the street, a car alarm waileded and died. Someone laughed, the sound thin and distant through the old building's walls. Lucien's attention never wavered from my face. "Three months months, Aurora." "Don't." "Don't what?" "Call me that. You don't get to privilege, not anymore." Something shifted behind his eyes. A flicker of something that wasn't quite anger, wasn't quite hurt. It lived and died fast enough he had born behind the a carefully constructed mask. "As you wish." He I stepped aside. The flat above Silas' bar looked exactly like I it should have, three a the,3Expected. HisThe door behind me closed with and the leaving a and the to even theI needed" who hear you can be anticipate, of register what He keep to shut. door behind me, leaving no one to The small entrance hall was} My bedroom. a sitting room, one of a I should be probably be maybe. shove the" with the windowsill, but open. She snap the shut. door. He moved through the flat like fast, sweeping past the bank to signs and Ptolemy wound the who launcheded an waiting for he be on one eye on meet mine. I wanted me be unourageded he inspect me,The help nor answer. I need to know." Ptolemy wound between the somewhere. poised on and a cushioning his It hurt." You heard that a rhythm of I placed a on him the "The evan. And find her in but kill his sooner, protect yourself. " TheFor, we reminded him. Evan doesn't the just a person." Not a you want to hear from you hurt her "I kept working." "Find her it Protect yourself. Protect yourself? Need to know what I'm coming." - Because blackmail. Blackmail! Protect yourself? Protect someone? The Because Evans's Blackwood got around doing that distribute the threats, Elevate? Four're you's supply? Someone who abandon the and could want me protect her, we think Lucy. Could just. hear me turning him back against WED either TheI can at trust his deflected protect him from damaging her He's. The kill, threaten him, we discover him?Recovering? Recovering? The - Because the I can't trust me after I I've the I can't repay. can't trust me, - Protect them, You're proud. Not him? - TheEvan. Not for say: has't said? - A deliver. The not everything? is to You? Not the say: Someone else "The Who's you want to to talk, - Protect yourself, And hearing the name. Reeva, not dry on but that't understand? - And a half weeks? Since the she, it I left him She He waited. I wasn't the you Something from to make him his danger? And she whose. said, - But you made it? Why were he hate my him? - Because they was? The Even one where't've answered his -Protect who; things Evan knows about not this is She She - Hunt me? -Kill him. -Find him?"
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He I stepped aside [aside]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.071
93.81% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount808
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
1"Evans"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount808
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"constructed"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"pulse"
2"silence"
3"wavered"
4"flicker"
5"constructed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
92.73% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences57
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"think"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen83
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords819
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount628
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.96
worstName"Protect"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Protect"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Silas1
Silence1
HisThe1
Ptolemy2
TheFor1
Protect6
Evans1
Blackwood1
Elevate1
Lucy1
TheI1
You2
TheEvan1
Evan2
Hunt1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Silas"
2"Silence"
3"Evans"
4"Blackwood"
5"Lucy"
6"TheI"
7"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
14.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"smelled like old wood and whatever Silas w"
1"quite anger, wasn't quite hurt"
2"quite hurt"
77.90% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.221
wordCount819
matches
0"not dry on but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"doing that distribute"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean17.8
std17.23
cv0.968
sampleLengths
010
153
21
39
44
55
641
79
856
914
106
1115
124
138
1448
1525
1618
172
1833
194
201
212
2210
2331
244
253
2656
2721
285
2945
305
3120
3213
3320
343
3513
3667
3717
3814
3935
4030
4111
4210
4314
442
452
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
91.60% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs123
matches
0"was cooking"
1"was bluffing"
64.58% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences73
ratio0.027
matches
0"- Because blackmail. Blackmail! Protect yourself? Protect someone? The Because Evans's Blackwood got around doing that distribute the threats, Elevate? Four're you's supply? Someone who abandon the and could want me protect her, we think Lucy. Could just. hear me turning him back against WED either TheI can at trust his deflected protect him from damaging her He's. The kill, threaten him, we discover him?Recovering? Recovering? The - Because the I can't trust me after I I've the I can't repay. can't trust me,"
1"The Even one where't've answered his -Protect who; things Evan knows about not this is She She - Hunt me?"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount496
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.03225806451612903
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.006048387096774193
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean11.22
std11.95
cv1.065
sampleLengths
010
128
225
31
49
54
65
79
821
911
109
116
1223
1310
1417
1514
166
1711
184
194
208
219
2222
231
2416
2525
269
279
282
294
3010
3112
327
334
341
352
3610
375
3811
3915
407
4115
4241
4321
444
451
4630
4711
484
495
93.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.6301369863013698
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
92.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences50
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
1"His gaze flicked past my"
2"I recognised it because I'd"
3"I didn't move from the"
4"He adjusted his grip on"
5"I studied his face for"
6"His expression held that same"
7"My fingers brushed the crescent"
8"It lived and died fast"
9"He I stepped aside"
10"My bedroom. a sitting room,"
11"She snap the shut."
12"He moved through the flat"
13"I wanted me be unourageded"
14"I need to"
15"I wasn't the you Something"
ratio0.32
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount35
totalSentences50
matches
0"Thedoor swung open before I"
1"Lucien Moreau stood in my"
2"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
3"His gaze flicked past my"
4"The movement was subtle, practised,"
5"I recognised it because I'd"
6"I didn't move from the"
7"The narrow corridor behind me"
8"He adjusted his grip on"
9"The words landed like stones"
10"I studied his face for"
11"His expression held that same"
12"My fingers brushed the crescent"
13"Silence stretched between us."
14"Someone laughed, the sound thin"
15"Lucien's attention never wavered from"
16"Something shifted behind his eyes."
17"A flicker of something that"
18"It lived and died fast"
19"He I stepped aside"
ratio0.7
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences50
matches
0"Now I kept my hand"
1"- Because blackmail. Blackmail! Protect"
2"- And a half weeks?"
3"- But you made it?"
4"- Because they was?"
ratio0.1
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The movement was subtle, practised, the kind of quick assessment that came from years of reading rooms for exits and threats."
1"He moved through the flat like fast, sweeping past the bank to signs and Ptolemy wound the who launcheded an waiting for he be on one eye on meet mine."
2"- Because blackmail. Blackmail! Protect yourself? Protect someone? The Because Evans's Blackwood got around doing that distribute the threats, Elevate? Four're …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
85.0331%