Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ02EQ0SSDPQCFMSJ9WP35Z0

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Duration:
29.2s
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$0.005176
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Xiaomi

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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air tasted of rain and old secrets. Aurora Carter ducked beneath a low-hanging branch slick with moss, the damp chill of Richmond Park in early winter seeping through her jacket. The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against her collarbone, felt inert here—no pulse, just the familiar cool weight of the crimson gem on its silver chain. She glanced back. Nyx moved behind her, not so much walking as flowing between the shadows of the gnarled oaks, their violet eyes the only constant points of light in their shifting, silhouette form. Ahead, Isolde Varga moved with a silence that wasn't empty, but filled with the soft rustle of her silver hair against the waist-length braid. She paused at the base of an ancient oak, its bark scarred with swirling, deliberate carvings that seemed to writhe in her peripheral vision. The tree was one of a ring, a circle of sentinels bordering a patch of ground where the winter-brown grass grew sparse, revealing dark, rich soil. Isolde pressed a pale hand to the carved wood. "The door remembers," she murmured, her voice a chime of faint echoes. "Though the key is not metal." Rory frowned. "We don't have a key." The Seer turned, her pale lavender eyes holding a shimmer of something that wasn't quite sight. "You carry hunger. It is a key of sorts." Before Rory could ask what that meant, Isolde traced a finger along the spiral carving. The air between the oaks shimmered, thickening like heated oil. It wasn't a distortion; it was a presence, a barrier that thinned to transparency. Through it, the colors of the park vanished, replaced by a soft, eternal twilight. Nyx’s whisper curled near Rory's ear. "The Veil is thin here. Like worn cloth." Isolde stepped through first, her form not so much crossing a line as being accepted by the shimmer. She vanished. Rory took a breath, the scent of wet earth and something floral—too sweet, too persistent for December—filling her nose. She pushed forward. The sensation was like walking through a curtain of cold water, but dry. It prickled her skin, raised the fine hairs on her arms, and for a heartbeat, her scar on her left wrist burned with a phantom memory of the accident that made it. Then it was past. The first thing that struck her was the light. It was the color of late afternoon, a warm, diffuse amber-gold that had no visible source. It didn't cast harsh shadows. The second thing was the sound—a low, resonant hum beneath everything, like the vibration of a giant, plucked string far underground. And the third was the smell. Wildflowers. A riot of them. Rory stood on soft, springy moss that cushioned her boots. Before her stretched a clearing that defied the season. Ankle-high blooms in impossible hues—electric blue, vibrant fuchsia, a shimmering silver— carpeted the ground in wild, joyful patches. They didn't look real. They looked painted by a feverish hand. Trees with bark the color of pearlescent shell rose around the perimeter, their leaves a deep, velvety green, utterly untouched by frost. "You do not step on the silver blooms," Isolde said, already walking a few paces ahead. Her feet left no impression on the moss. Not a single dimple. "Their dreams are easily startled." Rory deliberately steered her path, watching Isolde's silent passage. "Dreams?" "A currency," Isolde offered, her tone light. "And a memory. To crush one is to forget a small, perfect moment." Nyx materialized beside Rory, their form less shadowy here, more solid, yet still indistinct, as if shaped from smoke. Their violet gaze swept the grove, a faint glow pulsing in rhythm with the ambient hum. "This place is old," they breathed. "Older than the Wardens, older than the current Veil." As they moved deeper, the wonder began to curdle with unease at the edges. Rory noticed the stillness. No birdsong. No rustle of small creatures. The only sound was the hum, their footsteps (hers and Nyx's), and the whisper of Isolde's hair. The air was perfectly still, holding the scent of the flowers and a deeper, mineral note, like cold stone. "Where is everyone?" Rory asked, her hand instinctively going to the pendant. It remained cool and quiet. "The Grove is a place of pause, not abandonment," Isolde said. She had stopped beside a pool of water so still it looked like a sheet of polished black glass. The amber light didn't reflect on its surface; it was swallowed by it. "It breathes on its own time. An hour here may be a minute outside. A day. The Veil does not keep a consistent clock." Rory knelt, the moss yielding silently. She peered into the pool. There was no reflection of the shell-barked trees, no echo of the strange sky. Only a profound, bottomless black. A chill, distinct from the Grove's damp air, radiated up from it. "It's not water." "It is what remains when water forgets how to be water," Isolde replied, her lavender eyes fixed on the black mirror. She did not kneel. She merely looked. "A memory of depth." Nyx drifted closer, their silhouette wavering at the pool's edge. The glow in their eyes intensified. "This is a anchor point," they murmured. "The Veil is not a sheet. It is a web, and this is where a strand is knotted to the mortal soil. Dangerous. Beautiful." A sudden movement at the edge of Rory's vision made her jerk her head up. In the shadows between two of the pearlescent trees, something shifted. It wasn't a creature. It was a patch of darkness that deepened and thinned, like a breath. Her hand flew to her hip, where the Fae-Forged Blade Isolde had given her was sheathed. The moonsilver felt frigid against her palm through the leather. "Nix," she said, voice low. Nyx's head turned toward the anomaly, their form flattening, spreading like spilled ink. "I see it. A fold. This place is full of them." They didn't move toward it, but held their position, a barrier of living shadow between Rory and the deeper gloom. Isolde remained by the pool, serene. "The Grove has layers. We are but on the skin of it. To delve is to agree to its terms." "What terms?" Rory asked, not taking her eyes off the shifting dark. "The terms of all ancient places," Isolde said simply. She finally looked away from the pool, turning to face them fully. The amber light caught the silver of her hair, making it glow. "You may see what you need to see. You may not always like it. You may hear a truth that sounds like a lie, and a lie that feels like truth. And you must not," her voice dropped, losing its cryptic lightness for a bare edge of warning, "take anything that has roots, no matter how beautiful it seems." Rory's gaze was drawn downward. At the very edge of the black pool, half-submerged in the moss, was a cluster of fungi. They were small, delicate, their caps a translucent blue that pulsed with a soft inner light, like captured starlight. They were the most beautiful things she had ever seen. A sharp, possessive ache bloomed in her chest. She wanted them. She *needed* them. Her fingers twitched toward her belt pouch. "The roots run deep," Isolde said, her voice cutting through the haze like cold water. "Into the grove's memory. Into the stories it holds. Take one, and you take a piece of its narrative. Leave a hole where a memory should be." Rory snatched her hand back as if burned. The compulsion vanished, leaving her breathless and cold. She looked at Nyx, whose glowing eyes were fixed on her, their shadowy form radiating a silent, intense concern. The unease was no longer at the edges. It was in the air she breathed, in the beautiful, silent flowers, in the dark water that held no reflections. This place was a wonder, yes. But it was a predatory one, draped in a beauty designed to make you forget to look for teeth. Isolde began walking again, her path skirting the black pool. "Come," she said. "The heart of the Grove awaits. It holds answers, though they are rarely packaged in the way one expects." Rory stood, her knees stiff. She drew the Fae blade, its moonsilver a cold, pale comfort in the amber light. The blade hummed faintly, a vibration that matched the Grove's deeper tone. It was a welcome sound. A real sound. She fell into step behind Isolde, with Nyx flowing like a silent guardian at her flank. The wonder of the Grove was still there, in the shell-bark trees and the dreaming flowers, but now it was interwoven with a profound, ancient wariness. They were guests in a house that could change its rooms at will, and the host had not yet made an appearance. Rory's fingers brushed the Heartstone at her throat, still and cool, and she wondered what it would do if they crossed into a place where the Veil was not just thin, but open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said simply [simply]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
86.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1518
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"deliberately"
2"perfectly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1518
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"sentinels"
count1
6
word"echoes"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count2
10
word"electric"
count1
11
word"perfect"
count1
12
word"footsteps"
count1
13
word"echo"
count1
14
word"profound"
count2
15
word"wavering"
count1
16
word"gloom"
count1
17
word"delve"
count1
18
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pulse"
2"familiar"
3"weight"
4"silence"
5"sentinels"
6"echoes"
7"traced"
8"shimmered"
9"whisper"
10"electric"
11"perfect"
12"footsteps"
13"echo"
14"profound"
15"wavering"
16"gloom"
17"delve"
18"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences109
matches
0"e with unease"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences109
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences124
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1513
ratio0.001
matches
0"needed"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
80.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1220
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.39
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Isolde16
Varga1
Rory17
Seer1
December1
Nyx8
Grove3
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Fae2
Veil1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Isolde"
2"Varga"
3"Rory"
4"Seer"
5"December"
6"Nyx"
7"Grove"
8"Blade"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
globalScore0.803
windowScore0.833
52.60% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"carvings that seemed to writhe in her peripheral vision"
1"quite sight"
2"looked like a sheet of polished black gla"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.661
wordCount1513
matches
0"not just thin, but open"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean43.23
std26.23
cv0.607
sampleLengths
08
181
274
327
47
525
653
714
891
962
1070
1133
1210
1320
1450
1561
1617
1767
1845
1932
2047
2169
225
2344
2426
2512
2692
2765
287
2942
3035
3153
3232
3340
3497
89.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences109
matches
0"being accepted"
1"was swallowed"
2"was drawn"
3"were fixed"
4"was interwoven"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs196
matches
0"was like walking"
4.61% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences124
ratio0.048
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against her collarbone, felt inert here—no pulse, just the familiar cool weight of the crimson gem on its silver chain."
1"It wasn't a distortion; it was a presence, a barrier that thinned to transparency."
2"Rory took a breath, the scent of wet earth and something floral—too sweet, too persistent for December—filling her nose."
3"The second thing was the sound—a low, resonant hum beneath everything, like the vibration of a giant, plucked string far underground."
4"Ankle-high blooms in impossible hues—electric blue, vibrant fuchsia, a shimmering silver— carpeted the ground in wild, joyful patches."
5"The amber light didn't reflect on its surface; it was swallowed by it."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1234
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"electric blue, vibrant fuchsia,"
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.03484602917341977
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.012155591572123177
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences124
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences124
mean12.2
std8.62
cv0.706
sampleLengths
08
123
224
33
431
524
624
726
89
912
106
112
125
1316
149
1515
1610
1714
1814
196
208
2118
222
2319
243
2513
2632
274
289
2916
305
3121
326
331
344
3510
369
3718
384
397
4022
4116
428
434
445
459
461
477
4813
4919
45.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.31451612903225806
totalSentences124
uniqueOpeners39
66.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then it was past."
1"Only a profound, bottomless black."
ratio0.02
81.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences101
matches
0"She glanced back."
1"She paused at the base"
2"she murmured, her voice a"
3"It wasn't a distortion; it"
4"She pushed forward."
5"It prickled her skin, raised"
6"It was the color of"
7"It didn't cast harsh shadows."
8"They didn't look real."
9"They looked painted by a"
10"Her feet left no impression"
11"Their violet gaze swept the"
12"It remained cool and quiet."
13"She had stopped beside a"
14"She peered into the pool."
15"She did not kneel."
16"She merely looked."
17"It wasn't a creature."
18"It was a patch of"
19"Her hand flew to her"
ratio0.347
34.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences101
matches
0"The air tasted of rain"
1"Aurora Carter ducked beneath a"
2"The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against"
3"She glanced back."
4"Nyx moved behind her, not"
5"She paused at the base"
6"The tree was one of"
7"Isolde pressed a pale hand"
8"she murmured, her voice a"
9"The Seer turned, her pale"
10"The air between the oaks"
11"It wasn't a distortion; it"
12"Nyx’s whisper curled near Rory's"
13"Isolde stepped through first, her"
14"Rory took a breath, the"
15"She pushed forward."
16"The sensation was like walking"
17"It prickled her skin, raised"
18"The first thing that struck"
19"It was the color of"
ratio0.851
99.01% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"Before Rory could ask what"
1"Before her stretched a clearing"
ratio0.02
2.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Ahead, Isolde Varga moved with a silence that wasn't empty, but filled with the soft rustle of her silver hair against the waist-length braid."
1"She paused at the base of an ancient oak, its bark scarred with swirling, deliberate carvings that seemed to writhe in her peripheral vision."
2"The Seer turned, her pale lavender eyes holding a shimmer of something that wasn't quite sight."
3"It wasn't a distortion; it was a presence, a barrier that thinned to transparency."
4"It prickled her skin, raised the fine hairs on her arms, and for a heartbeat, her scar on her left wrist burned with a phantom memory of the accident that made …"
5"It was the color of late afternoon, a warm, diffuse amber-gold that had no visible source."
6"Nyx materialized beside Rory, their form less shadowy here, more solid, yet still indistinct, as if shaped from smoke."
7"Nyx's head turned toward the anomaly, their form flattening, spreading like spilled ink."
8"It was in the air she breathed, in the beautiful, silent flowers, in the dark water that held no reflections."
9"Isolde began walking again, her path skirting the black pool."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she murmured, her voice a chime of faint echoes"
1"Rory asked, her hand instinctively going to the pendant"
2"Isolde replied, her lavender eyes fixed on the black mirror"
3"she said, voice low"
4"Rory asked, not taking her eyes off the shifting dark"
5"Isolde said, her voice cutting through the haze like cold water"
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"they breathed (breathe)"
2"they murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.2
77.1228%