Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ02MA0HJHK9405MNMVHAPSH

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The damp rag squeaked against the lip of the glass, a thin, complaining sound. Rory worked in circles, her gaze fixed on the smudged fingerprint she’d erased. Three more to go. The clock above the bar ticked with a heavy, deliberate thud, each second a drop of water wearing down stone. “The usual tonight, Silas, or are we branching out?” The voice was a low burr, familiar and foreign at once. It snagged her attention before the words themselves fully landed. She didn’t look up immediately. Just another patron for him. She could finish the glass. The rag completed its circuit, leaving the crystal pristine. “I’m branching out into retirement, if you must know.” Silas’s reply was warm, but threaded with a metallic tension Rory hadn’t heard before. He was standing by the end of the bar, one hand resting on the worn oak. The signet ring on his right hand caught the dim light of the green neon sign filtering through the window, a dull silver wink. Rory’s hand stilled on the glass. She knew that stance. The slight tilt of the head, the way he distributed his weight mostly onto his right leg. She finally looked up. He was older, of course. Fifteen years carved new lines around his eyes and mouth, deepening the ones she remembered. The grey in his auburn hair was no longer just at the temples; it had staged a full, successful invasion. His beard was neatly trimmed, a silvering shield. But the hazel eyes were the same, holding a flicker of the old, assessing intelligence that used to make her feel both seen and slightly transparent. “Silas.” The name left her lips like a dry cough. “Rory.” He didn’t smile, but the corners of his eyes crinkled. “Or is it Aurora these days? I saw the name on the door. ‘Manager: A. Carter’.” “Rory’s fine.” She put the glass down, her movements precise. “I manage the place for Yu-Fei. The actual owner. He’s in Hong Kong.” “Managing a bar.” Silas slid onto a stool two down from her, the limp more pronounced as he settled. “I always pictured you in a courtroom. Tearing apart some pompous barrister’s argument.” “That was my father’s dream.” She picked up the next glass, the familiar rhythm a shield. “Mine involved less shouting at people in wigs.” “A pragmatic choice. I can respect that.” He drummed his fingers once on the bar. “Though the delivery work I hear you doing for the Empire doesn’t sound terribly pragmatic.” Her fingers tightened on the rag. The delivery runs weren’t exactly public knowledge. They were cash-in-hand, off-the-books favours for Yu-Fei that kept her flat above the bar and her past safely in the past. “You hear a lot.” “It’s my business to hear things.” He gestured vaguely at the bar. “This place is a listening post first, drinking establishment a distant second. You know that.” She did know that. She’d spent her first month in London crashing in his spare room, listening to his whispered phone conversations in languages she didn’t understand, watching his contacts slide into and out of the hidden back room through a bookshelf that didn’t look quite right. He’d given her a roof when Evan’s shadow had lengthened to cover all of London. He’d asked no questions about the bruises she hid with long sleeves, the tremor in her hands that only stopped after a few months of quiet, steady routine. “Retirement suits you,” she said, changing the subject. “You look… settled.” “It’s a front. Same as always.” He leaned forward slightly. “How’s your mother?” “Still teaching. Still in Cardiff. She sends her regards, the one time a year I remember to call.” Rory moved to wipe down the counter, putting the length of the bar between them. “Your knee?” “An old acquaintance reminds me of it daily.” He stretched his left leg out, the movement stiff. “Prague made its mark.” Prague. The single word dropped into the quiet bar like a stone into a well. Rory stopped wiping. She hadn’t heard him speak of that failed operation, not directly. It was the shadow that fell over his retirement, the reason for the limp, the reason he’d resurfaced in London with a network instead of a pension. “Time changes things,” she said, her voice low. “It does.” He studied her. “You’ve changed most of all. The girl I met at Eva’s—she was all sharp edges and nervous energy. Ready to bolt at a loud noise.” His gaze dropped to her wrist, where a thin crescent-shaped scar was visible above the cuff of her black shirt. She instinctively pulled her sleeve down. “You seem… anchored now.” “I found a good place to hide.” The truth of it surprised her. She’d built this life like a fortress, brick by careful brick. A job that required silence. A flat above a bar owned by a man who understood secrets. A city vast enough to swallow her whole. “Hiding is temporary. Eventually, you have to step into the light.” Silas tapped his signet ring against the bar, a soft *tin-tin-tin* against the wood. “Or someone drags you out.” A chill traced its way down her spine, unrelated to the evening air seeping through the door. “Is that a threat, Silas?” “A observation.” His tone remained even, but his eyes were sharp, probing. “I’m retired from the Service, Rory. Not from the world. There are still currents. Some of them are pulling at things you might care about.” “What things?” “Yu-Fei’s Empire. For instance.” He let the name hang. “He’s not just a restaurateur, and you know it. His delivery networks… they move more than Cantonese soup.” Her heart hammered against her ribs, a frantic bird trapped in a cage of bone. She forced her hands to remain steady as she placed the clean glass on the shelf. “I deliver food. Noodles. Rice. That’s all.” “That’s all you see. It’s enough.” He softened his voice, a masterful shift from pressure to persuasion. “I’m not here to pull you in. I’m here because I owe you. You helped me, that first year back. More than you know. Let me return the favour.” “By warning me off my boss?” “By telling you the currents are getting stronger.” He stood, the movement fluid despite the limp. He walked to the end of the bar where she stood, so close she could smell the faint, clean scent of his cologne, something woody and sharp. He leaned in, his voice dropping to a murmur meant only for her. “There’s a meeting. Back room. Thursday. People who used to be on the same side of certain… disagreements. They’re worried about the new players.” “Why tell me?” “Because one of the names mentioned was Malphora.” He watched her reaction, his own face unreadable. The name hit her like a physical blow. Malphora. A ghost. An alias she’d shed fifteen years ago, along with a different life, a different set of rules. It was the name she’d used when she was someone who could move through those currents, not just deliver lunch alongside them. “That’s not my name anymore,” she whispered, the words feeling flimsy against the sudden roar in her ears. “It’s a name someone else is using. Someone who shouldn’t be.” Silas straightened up, the moment of intimacy over. He reached into his jacket and placed a small, heavy object on the bar between them. A silver key, old and ornate. “Back room. Thursday. Nine o’clock. If you want to know who’s wearing your skin.” He turned without waiting for an answer, his limp noticeable as he walked towards the door. The bell above it tinkled his exit, the sound unnaturally loud in the sudden silence. Rory stared at the key. It lay on the dark wood, gleaming with a faint, oily light. The green neon from the sign outside cast a sickly glow across its teeth. Her breath came in short, shallow bursts. The rag she still held was twisted into a tight, damp rope in her fist. Thursday. Malphora. currents. Hiding. The name echoed in the hollow space behind her ribs. She looked from the key to the hidden bookshelf at the back of the bar, the one she’d never opened, the one Silas had always said wasn’t her concern. Now, it looked like a mouth, waiting to swallow her whole. Outside, a siren wailed, its cry rising and falling into the distance. The clock ticked. *Tin. Tin. Tin.* Thursday was two days away. An eternity. No time at all. Her fingers, trembling now, reached out and closed around the cold, heavy metal of the key.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.042
effectiveRatio0.042
93.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1440
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1440
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"crystal"
count1
2
word"pristine"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"down her spine"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
11
word"gleaming"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"crystal"
2"pristine"
3"tension"
4"weight"
5"flicker"
6"silence"
7"chill"
8"traced"
9"down her spine"
10"unreadable"
11"gleaming"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences96
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords1440
ratio0.003
matches
0"tin-tin-tin"
1"Tin. Tin. Tin."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1032
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory6
Silas5
Yu-Fei1
London3
Evan1
Prague1
Thursday2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a mouth, waiting to swallow h"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1440
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences119
matches
0"knew that stance"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean33.49
std20.08
cv0.6
sampleLengths
051
130
224
363
431
574
610
727
823
932
1024
1130
1238
1327
1490
1511
1613
1735
1821
1956
208
2160
2249
2330
2422
2537
262
2727
2838
2946
306
3180
323
3316
3450
3518
3655
3731
3831
3926
4050
4129
4216
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"was twisted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs152
matches
0"was standing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences119
ratio0.008
matches
0"The grey in his auburn hair was no longer just at the temples; it had staged a full, successful invasion."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1038
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"thin crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.036608863198458574
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.017341040462427744
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean12.1
std8.59
cv0.71
sampleLengths
014
113
24
320
420
510
65
75
85
99
1023
1116
1224
136
144
1517
164
175
1815
1920
208
2126
2210
2311
2416
2510
2613
2719
2813
2916
308
3115
3215
336
347
3521
364
3712
3815
394
4043
4115
4228
438
443
4510
463
4733
482
4917
54.62% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.37815126050420167
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners45
38.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"Just another patron for him."
ratio0.012
6.05% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences86
matches
0"It snagged her attention before"
1"She didn’t look up immediately."
2"She could finish the glass."
3"He was standing by the"
4"She knew that stance."
5"She finally looked up."
6"He was older, of course."
7"His beard was neatly trimmed,"
8"He didn’t smile, but the"
9"She put the glass down,"
10"She picked up the next"
11"He drummed his fingers once"
12"Her fingers tightened on the"
13"They were cash-in-hand, off-the-books favours"
14"He gestured vaguely at the"
15"She did know that."
16"She’d spent her first month"
17"He’d given her a roof"
18"He’d asked no questions about"
19"she said, changing the subject"
ratio0.535
0.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences86
matches
0"The damp rag squeaked against"
1"Rory worked in circles, her"
2"The clock above the bar"
3"The voice was a low"
4"It snagged her attention before"
5"She didn’t look up immediately."
6"She could finish the glass."
7"The rag completed its circuit,"
8"Silas’s reply was warm, but"
9"He was standing by the"
10"The signet ring on his"
11"Rory’s hand stilled on the"
12"She knew that stance."
13"The slight tilt of the"
14"She finally looked up."
15"He was older, of course."
16"The grey in his auburn"
17"His beard was neatly trimmed,"
18"The name left her lips"
19"He didn’t smile, but the"
ratio0.919
58.14% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"Now, it looked like a"
ratio0.012
65.64% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"But the hazel eyes were the same, holding a flicker of the old, assessing intelligence that used to make her feel both seen and slightly transparent."
1"They were cash-in-hand, off-the-books favours for Yu-Fei that kept her flat above the bar and her past safely in the past."
2"She’d spent her first month in London crashing in his spare room, listening to his whispered phone conversations in languages she didn’t understand, watching hi…"
3"Outside, a siren wailed, its cry rising and falling into the distance."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"She put, her movements precise"
1"she said, her voice low"
2"Silas tapped, a soft *tin-tin-tin* against the wood"
3"His tone remained, but his eyes were sharp, probing"
4"He watched, his own face unreadable"
5"Silas straightened up, the moment of intimacy over"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.063
leniency0.125
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.042
81.9625%