Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ02NBXN46660KDZA0S6FMR1

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Duration:
38.3s
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$0.006638
Provider:
Xiaomi

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The triple deadbolt took longer than it should have. Aurora's fingers were stiff from hours hunched over Eva's research notes, and the second lock caught the way it always did—you had to lift while turning, a trick Eva had never bothered to explain, only demonstrated with an impatient flick of her wrist whenever Rory fumbled it. Three in the morning on Brick Lane, and the only sounds were the muffled bass from the curry house below and the wet sigh of London rain against the windows. Ptolemy had been asleep on the desk for two hours, a warm weight pressing against her forearm, and her eyes burned with the particular exhaustion of reading too much old English by bad light. She shouldn't have been here at all. Eva had asked her to watch the cat—just for the weekend, she'd said, which in Eva's vocabulary meant somewhere between four days and two weeks—and Rory had said yes because saying no to Eva had never been a skill she'd managed to acquire. But the weekend had stretched. It had been nine days. The flat was even more cluttered than she remembered, every surface colonized by scrolls and journal pages and books stacked in precarious towers that seemed to defy the laws of physics. Rory had carved out a small territory on the kitchen table, a clearing in the chaos where she could spread her notes and pretend she was being productive rather than hiding from her own life. The third lock turned. The chain slid free. She opened the door expecting the smell of rain and diesel, the ambient grey noise of East London at night. Instead, she got Lucien Moreau. He stood in the narrow hallway with rain beading on the shoulders of his charcoal suit, his platinum blond hair darkened to silver by the wet, and he was holding a bottle of Sauternes in one hand and an expression of studied nonchalance in the other. Water traced the line of his jaw. His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—found hers with the precision of a man who had been planning this moment for longer than the walk up the stairs. "Rory," he said. Just her name. The way he said it, it sounded like a complete sentence. Like a question and an answer and a small, controlled act of violence all at once. Her hand was still on the door. She became aware of it—the crescent scar on her left wrist catching the hallway light, her fingers white-knuckled on the frame. She should have been surprised. She wasn't. Some part of her, the part that had always been too attuned to the current running beneath surfaces, had felt the shift in the building's gravity five minutes ago. The elevator had dinged. Footsteps on the stairs, measured and unhurried. The particular silence of someone pausing on a landing to make a decision. She should close the door. She should close the door and slide the chain and go back to her notes and Ptolemy and the safe, manageable exhaustion of being alone. "What are you doing here?" "Astute as ever." He held up the bottle. "I brought wine. You always did prefer white." "I didn't say you could come in." "You opened the door." "I opened the door because I thought you were—" She stopped. Because who had she thought it was? At three in the morning, in a flat that wasn't hers, with the triple deadbolts and the rain and the particular loneliness of borrowed spaces? She hadn't thought. She'd simply moved toward the sound, the way you move toward a light in a dark room before you know what's casting it. He waited. He was good at that—waiting. It was part of his trade, the fixing, the information brokering, the careful art of sitting across from someone and letting silence do the work that questions couldn't. But this wasn't his professional patience. This was something rawer underneath, held in check by the same impeccable control he applied to everything—the suit, the cane with its concealed blade, the French accent that softened and sharpened depending on his audience. With her, it never softened. With her, he spoke the way he actually thought, which was fast and precise and in a register that seemed to bypass her ears entirely and land somewhere behind her ribs. "Eva's out of town," Rory said. "I know." "Then you know you shouldn't be here." "Those aren't the same thing." He tilted his head. Rain fell from his hair and caught on his eyelash. "May I come in, Rory? I'm getting the hallway wet, and your friend's neighbors on the second floor have already filed two complaints about the noise from the curry house. A third would be unkind." She stared at him. His lips did something that wasn't quite a smile—a twitch at the corner, an acknowledgment of his own audacity. He knew exactly what he was doing. He always did. "Fine," she said, stepping back. "But only because you're going to track water through the hallway regardless, and I'm not the one who'll have to explain it to Eva." "That's the spirit. Warmth and hospitality." He stepped inside. The flat contracted around him. He was not a large man—five-eleven, lean, built like a rapier—but he had a presence that bent rooms toward him, a gravity that had nothing to do with his half-demon heritage and everything to do with the way he occupied space. He shook the rain from his coat with a practiced flick, then hung it on the hook by the door with a care that suggested he'd been here before. He had been here before. She remembered that with a clarity that tightened her chest. Ptolemy, dislodged from his post, padded across the kitchen table with the insouciance of a cat who considered all territory his personal domain. He wound between the scrolls and sniffed at Lucien's shoes, then looked up with the evaluative stare of a creature who had met enough supernatural beings to be unimpressed by any of them. "Ptolemy," Lucien said, and extended a finger. The cat sniffed it, considered, and headbutted his knuckle. "Still a poor judge of character, I see." "He likes everyone. It's his flaw." Rory closed the door. The locks felt like an afterthought now, a formality that changed nothing. She went back to the kitchen table and sat down, because sitting felt like the only thing that would keep her upright. The wine bottle sat on the counter where she'd set it down. She didn't look at it. "How did you know I was here?" He moved through the flat with a familiarity that made her stomach clench. He found the glasses without asking—the ones on the second shelf, not the first, because the first shelf glasses were chipped and he'd always been particular about stemware. He poured two glasses with the ease of someone performing a ritual, and he set one in front of her and kept the other for himself. The Sauternes was gold in the kitchen's harsh light, and she could smell the honey and apricot from where she sat. "I didn't know you were here," he said. "I came to see Eva." "Eva's in—" "Portugal. I know." He leaned against the counter, one ankle crossed over the other, the cane resting against his thigh. "I've been trying to reach her for a week. She's not returning my calls, which is either deliberate avoidance or a sign that she's in deeper than she's telling anyone. I came to her flat because she's the kind of woman who leaves a forwarding address, even if she thinks she doesn't." He took a sip of wine. His black eye and his amber eye caught the light differently—one swallowed it, one reflected it back. "You're a surprise, though. A genuine one. I don't get many of those." "You're deflecting." "I'm conversing. There's a difference." "There isn't, with you." Something shifted in his expression. It was small—a loosening around the jaw, a fractional change in the architecture of his face. She'd learned to read him the way you learn to read a language you were never formally taught: through immersion, through repetition, through the slow accumulation of meaning. She knew what his stillness meant. She knew what his almost-smiles meant. And she knew what it meant when the mask slipped for half a second and she caught a glimpse of the thing underneath—something startled and unguarded and almost angry, as if her presence here had cracked something open that he'd spent considerable effort sealing shut. He set his glass down. "How long have you been in Eva's flat?" "Nine days." "Nine days." He said it like he was translating it from another language. "And your job? The restaurant? Cheung will replace you." "Cheung told me to take the time. His niece is visiting from Hong Kong—she's handling deliveries." Rory wrapped her hands around the glass. The wine was cool against her palms. "I needed to be somewhere that wasn't my flat." "Silas's bar." "Above Silas's bar. There's a difference." "A vertical one." He almost smiled again. "You're running from something." "I'm not running from anything. I'm thinking." "At three in the morning. In someone else's flat. With enough research notes to wallpaper a room." He nodded toward the table, where her careful clearing had already been invaded by Ptolemy's tail, which dragged across a page of Eva's handwriting. "Thinking generally doesn't require this much territory." "You don't get to do this." "Do what?" "Show up. With wine. And observations. And that—" She gestured at him, the whole of him, the suit and the cane and the rain-dark hair and the impossible eyes. "That *you* thing, where you walk into a room and rearrange all the furniture without touching anything. We haven't spoken in four months, Lucien." "Three months, fourteen days." "You counted." "So did you." The silence that followed was the kind that had texture. She could feel it pressing against the walls, filling the space between the towers of books and the sleeping cat and the two of them standing in a kitchen that was too small for this, too cluttered, too close. She could smell the rain on his clothes, the wine, the faint cedar of whatever soap he used. She could see the way the fluorescent light above the stove carved shadows under his cheekbones, the way his hand rested on the ivory handle of his cane with a stillness that wasn't relaxed—it was controlled. Everything about him was controlled. It was the thing that drew her in and the thing that drove her away, the way he held himself like a drawn blade, beautiful and always ready to cut. "Why are you really here?" she asked. He looked at her. Both eyes, amber and black, focused and unblinking, and for a moment the control slipped again and she saw it—the wanting, plain and unadorned, naked in his face for exactly one second before he locked it away. But she'd seen it. She always saw it. "Because you were the first person I thought of when I realized something was wrong," he said. "Not Eva. You." He picked up his glass again, turned it slowly. "And I thought if I could just—you know, I had a speech. It was quite good. Very French. There was a metaphor about tides." "Lucien." "I'm here because I can't stop thinking about you, and it's become professionally embarrassing." He said it with the same tone he used to discuss information caches and supernatural territories and the price of favors in London's underworld—matter-of-fact, stripped of ornament, as if the admission of it required the same pragmatic clarity as any other transaction. "I have tried, in the last three months and fourteen days, to recalibrate. To file you in the appropriate category—the way I file everything else. Compartmentalize. Move on. I am, as you know, exceptionally good at this. It's what I do. I sort and organize and I put things where they belong." He took a drink. "You refuse to go where you belong." "Where's that?" "In the compartment marked *not thinking about.*" He set the glass down harder than intended. A drop of wine jumped the rim and landed on the counter, a small gold stain. "You won't stay there." Rory looked at him across the kitchen, across the table buried in Eva's research, across the four months and fourteen days of silence that stretched between them like a chasm with no bridge. Her heart was beating too fast. She could feel it in her wrists, in her throat, in the scar on her left wrist where the blood ran close to the surface. She picked up her wine. Drank. It was honeyed and warm and exactly the kind he would have chosen for her, because he paid attention to things like that, to the small tastes and preferences that other people overlooked. It was infuriating. It was one of the things she loved about him. She set the glass down. "Sit down, Lucien," she said. He looked at the chair across from her. At Ptolemy, who had curled into a circle on top of Eva's notes. At the rain-streaked window. At her. "You're sure?" he asked, and his voice was quiet now, stripped of the wry deflection, the French charm, the professional mask. Just his voice. Just the man underneath all of it, standing in a cramped kitchen on Brick Lane at three in the morning with rain on his coat and a question in his eyes that he had never, in all the months she'd known him, asked anyone else. "No," she said. "But sit down anyway." He sat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.381
leniency0.762
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2308
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slowly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2308
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"silence"
count4
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count2
8
word"charm"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"traced"
2"footsteps"
3"measured"
4"silence"
5"warmth"
6"stomach"
7"could feel"
8"charm"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences124
matches(empty)
96.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences124
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords2284
ratio0.002
matches
0"you"
1"not thinking about."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"With her, he spoke the way he actually thought, which was fast and precise and in a register that seemed to bypass her e…"
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1764
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.45
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva8
Rory7
Brick2
Lane2
London3
English1
East1
Lucien3
Moreau1
Sauternes2
Ptolemy5
French2
Rain1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Ptolemy"
5"Rain"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
2"London"
3"East"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"towers that seemed to defy the laws of physics"
1"sounded like a complete sentence"
2"register that seemed to bypass her ears entirely and land somewhere behind her ribs"
3"quite a smile—a twitch at the corner, an acknowledgment of his own audacity"
4"felt like an afterthought now, a formal"
5"felt like the only thing that would kee"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2284
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences162
matches
0"open that he'd"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean35.14
std38.61
cv1.099
sampleLengths
0120
1126
228
35
480
53
630
788
830
95
1016
117
124
1369
14112
156
162
177
1854
1933
2029
216
2293
2356
2424
2568
2688
2713
282
29108
302
315
324
33106
3413
352
3622
3739
382
396
4011
417
4248
436
442
4553
464
472
483
49138
93.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences124
matches
0"been surprised"
1"were chipped"
2"been invaded"
3"was honeyed"
80.53% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs279
matches
0"was being"
1"was holding"
2"was doing"
3"was translating"
4"was beating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences162
ratio0.093
matches
0"Aurora's fingers were stiff from hours hunched over Eva's research notes, and the second lock caught the way it always did—you had to lift while turning, a trick Eva had never bothered to explain, only demonstrated with an impatient flick of her wrist whenever Rory fumbled it."
1"Eva had asked her to watch the cat—just for the weekend, she'd said, which in Eva's vocabulary meant somewhere between four days and two weeks—and Rory had said yes because saying no to Eva had never been a skill she'd managed to acquire."
2"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—found hers with the precision of a man who had been planning this moment for longer than the walk up the stairs."
3"She became aware of it—the crescent scar on her left wrist catching the hallway light, her fingers white-knuckled on the frame."
4"He was good at that—waiting."
5"This was something rawer underneath, held in check by the same impeccable control he applied to everything—the suit, the cane with its concealed blade, the French accent that softened and sharpened depending on his audience."
6"His lips did something that wasn't quite a smile—a twitch at the corner, an acknowledgment of his own audacity."
7"He was not a large man—five-eleven, lean, built like a rapier—but he had a presence that bent rooms toward him, a gravity that had nothing to do with his half-demon heritage and everything to do with the way he occupied space."
8"He found the glasses without asking—the ones on the second shelf, not the first, because the first shelf glasses were chipped and he'd always been particular about stemware."
9"His black eye and his amber eye caught the light differently—one swallowed it, one reflected it back."
10"It was small—a loosening around the jaw, a fractional change in the architecture of his face."
11"And she knew what it meant when the mask slipped for half a second and she caught a glimpse of the thing underneath—something startled and unguarded and almost angry, as if her presence here had cracked something open that he'd spent considerable effort sealing shut."
12"She could see the way the fluorescent light above the stove carved shadows under his cheekbones, the way his hand rested on the ivory handle of his cane with a stillness that wasn't relaxed—it was controlled."
13"Both eyes, amber and black, focused and unblinking, and for a moment the control slipped again and she saw it—the wanting, plain and unadorned, naked in his face for exactly one second before he locked it away."
14"\"I'm here because I can't stop thinking about you, and it's become professionally embarrassing.\" He said it with the same tone he used to discuss information caches and supernatural territories and the price of favors in London's underworld—matter-of-fact, stripped of ornament, as if the admission of it required the same pragmatic clarity as any other transaction."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1790
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.030726256983240222
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.0067039106145251395
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean14.1
std13.17
cv0.934
sampleLengths
09
147
230
334
47
543
65
75
831
935
104
114
1220
135
1446
157
1627
173
183
1911
2016
217
2221
235
242
2529
264
277
2813
295
3025
315
328
338
347
354
3611
377
3825
393
4023
412
425
4328
446
4535
465
4731
486
492
41.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats27
diversityRatio0.35185185185185186
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners57
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences111
matches
0"Instead, she got Lucien Moreau."
1"Just her name."
2"Just his voice."
3"Just the man underneath all"
ratio0.036
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences111
matches
0"She shouldn't have been here"
1"It had been nine days."
2"She opened the door expecting"
3"He stood in the narrow"
4"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
5"Her hand was still on"
6"She became aware of it—the"
7"She should have been surprised."
8"She should close the door."
9"She should close the door"
10"He held up the bottle"
11"She hadn't thought."
12"She'd simply moved toward the"
13"He was good at that—waiting."
14"It was part of his"
15"He tilted his head"
16"She stared at him."
17"His lips did something that"
18"He knew exactly what he"
19"He always did."
ratio0.568
32.07% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences111
matches
0"The triple deadbolt took longer"
1"Aurora's fingers were stiff from"
2"Ptolemy had been asleep on"
3"She shouldn't have been here"
4"Eva had asked her to"
5"It had been nine days."
6"The flat was even more"
7"Rory had carved out a"
8"The third lock turned."
9"The chain slid free."
10"She opened the door expecting"
11"He stood in the narrow"
12"Water traced the line of"
13"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
14"The way he said it,"
15"Her hand was still on"
16"She became aware of it—the"
17"She should have been surprised."
18"Some part of her, the"
19"The elevator had dinged."
ratio0.856
45.05% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"Because who had she thought"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"The flat was even more cluttered than she remembered, every surface colonized by scrolls and journal pages and books stacked in precarious towers that seemed to…"
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—found hers with the precision of a man who had been planning this moment for longer than the walk up the stairs."
2"At three in the morning, in a flat that wasn't hers, with the triple deadbolts and the rain and the particular loneliness of borrowed spaces?"
3"It was part of his trade, the fixing, the information brokering, the careful art of sitting across from someone and letting silence do the work that questions c…"
4"This was something rawer underneath, held in check by the same impeccable control he applied to everything—the suit, the cane with its concealed blade, the Fren…"
5"With her, he spoke the way he actually thought, which was fast and precise and in a register that seemed to bypass her ears entirely and land somewhere behind h…"
6"His lips did something that wasn't quite a smile—a twitch at the corner, an acknowledgment of his own audacity."
7"He was not a large man—five-eleven, lean, built like a rapier—but he had a presence that bent rooms toward him, a gravity that had nothing to do with his half-d…"
8"Ptolemy, dislodged from his post, padded across the kitchen table with the insouciance of a cat who considered all territory his personal domain."
9"He wound between the scrolls and sniffed at Lucien's shoes, then looked up with the evaluative stare of a creature who had met enough supernatural beings to be …"
10"And she knew what it meant when the mask slipped for half a second and she caught a glimpse of the thing underneath—something startled and unguarded and almost …"
11"She could feel it pressing against the walls, filling the space between the towers of books and the sleeping cat and the two of them standing in a kitchen that …"
12"She could see the way the fluorescent light above the stove carved shadows under his cheekbones, the way his hand rested on the ivory handle of his cane with a …"
13"It was the thing that drew her in and the thing that drove her away, the way he held himself like a drawn blade, beautiful and always ready to cut."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount1
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0"he asked, and his voice was quiet now, stripped of the wry deflection, the French charm, the professional mask"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.19
leniency0.381
rawRatio0
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