Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ02X5ECG5A0KP8Y1GRN74T9

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Duration:
48.4s
Cost:
$0.007343
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The path dissolved between two oaks twisted into a silent archway. Aurora ducked under a low branch, the bark cold and smooth as polished marble against her shoulder. She emerged into a clearing and stopped. Silence. Not the absence of sound, but a dense, living quiet that pressed against her eardrums. It swallowed the distant hum of Richmond Park. Isolde stood ahead, her silver hair a beacon in the gloom. Nyx flowed beside Aurora, their form a smudge of deeper darkness against the perpetual twilight. “Here,” Isolde’s voice was a dry rustle of leaves. “The boundary.” Aurora didn’t see it at first. Then her gaze shifted, and the air rippled. A faint, vertical shimmer, like heat haze rising from summer asphalt, hung between two of the standing stones. The stones themselves were ancient oaks, their trunks petrified to a pale, luminous grey, surfaces carved with spirals that seemed to move if she didn’t look directly at them. “Don’t stare at the patterns,” Nyx whispered, their voice a chill breeze at her ear. “They linger in the eye.” Aurora blinked, focusing on the space between the trees. The shimmer intensified, coalescing into a soft, pearlescent curtain. Through it, the world was muffled, colours drained. “Step through,” Isolde said, already a ghost within the shimmer. “Do not linger on the threshold.” Aurora took a breath that tasted of damp earth and something floral, sharp and unfamiliar. She stepped forward. The transition was a cold brush against her skin, a tingle down her spine, and then the world broke open. The light was wrong. Not sunlight, not moonlight. A diffuse, silver-blue radiance seeped from the canopy of trees that were no longer oaks but something else—towering, spiralling trunks of a pale, bone-white wood, their leaves like hammered copper that didn’t rustle. They glowed from within. The air smelled of rain on hot stone, ozone, and a thick, honeyed sweetness that clung to the back of her throat. She was in a grove, but it was a grove from a fever dream. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible blooms: luminous blue bell-shaped flowers that pulsed with a soft inner light, crimson blossoms that breathed out tiny motes of golden dust, black flowers with petals like velvet that seemed to absorb the surrounding light. A narrow path of crushed, sparkling gravel wound between them. “Time moves strangely here,” Isolde said from a few paces ahead. She left no footprints on the gravel. “An hour spent in wonder may be a minute outside. Or a day. The Grove gives what it wishes.” Aurora glanced at Nyx. Their shadow-form seemed denser here, the edges sharper, but they moved with a wary stillness. “What do you sense?” she asked. “Layers,” Nyx breathed. “It’s… folded. Old. The mortal world is a thin veneer here. Beneath it, older things.” Their violet gaze swept the towering trees. “They’re watching.” Aurora’s hand went to her chest, to the cool weight of the Heartstone pendant under her shirt. It felt inert, dormant. Not like when near a Hel portal. Here, it was just a stone. The lack of reaction was somehow more unsettling. They followed Isolde along the path. The gravel crunched under Aurora’s boots, a sound that felt too loud, too solid. She knelt, brushing her fingers over the ground. The “gravel” was made of tiny, geometric crystals, each one catching the ambient glow and fracturing it into miniature rainbows. “What is this place?” Aurora asked, her voice hushed. “A remnant,” Isolde replied without turning. “A fold in the fabric, stitched long before the Veil was thought of. The Fae used places like this as waypoints, gardens, prisons. This one… simply grew.” She gestured. “See?” Ahead, the path widened into a circle. In its centre stood a statue, no taller than Aurora, carved from a single piece of dark, smoky quartz. It depicted a figure in flowing robes, one hand extended, palm up. In the palm sat a tiny, perfectly rendered stone bird, its wings half-spread. Aurora approached. The statue’s face was smooth, featureless, a blank oval. But the hand holding the bird was exquisitely detailed, every fingernail and knuckle crease rendered with impossible precision. As she drew near, the air around the statue shimmered. A faint, high-pitched chime echoed, not from any direction, but inside her own head. “Don’t touch it,” Nyx warned, their voice tight. “The offering is ancient. The bargain may still hold.” “What bargain?” Aurora asked, eyes fixed on the frozen bird. “That is a riddle I cannot unravel,” Isolde said, her lavender eyes fixed on Aurora’s face, not the statue. “Only the one who leaves the offering knows its price. And they are dust or scattered light.” A chill traced Aurora’s spine. The Heartstone remained cold and silent. She looked away from the statue’s empty face. In the periphery, one of the black velvet flowers seemed to turn its head towards her, following her movement. When she stared directly at it, it was still, just a blossom. They moved on. The path led them into a thicket of the bone-white trees. The trunks were smooth, but as Aurora ran a hand over one, she felt a faint, rhythmic vibration deep within, like a slow heartbeat. The copper leaves above tinkled softly, a constant, delicate music. In a small clearing, Nyx froze. “Here.” Aurora followed their gaze. On the ground lay a circle of stones, not ovals but perfect spheres, each about the size of her fist. They were a deep, milky jade, shot through with veins of gold. In the exact centre of the circle, a patch of earth was scorched black, not as if burned, but as if all colour and life had been drained from it in an instant. From the centre of the scorch, a single, blood-red crystal sprouted like a spike. “What happened?” Aurora whispered. “A duel,” Isolde said, her voice flat. “Or a ritual. Power leaves scars, even here. The Grove remembers.” Aurora reached out, not towards the scorch or the crystal, but one of the jade spheres. Her fingers hovered an inch above its surface. It was ice-cold, colder than the Fae-forged blade Isolde had given her, which now rested in a hidden sheath at her thigh. A wave of profound sadness washed over her, heavy and ancient, a grief not her own. She snatched her hand back, heart pounding. “You felt it,” Nyx stated, not a question. She nodded, swallowing against the tightness in her throat. “Loss.” Isolde was already moving away, her silver hair brushing silently against the luminous bark. “The Grove feeds on strong emotion. Joy, sorrow, rage. It preserves echoes. Do not let it hold you.” Aurora followed, the taste of honey in her throat now cloying, almost nauseating. The deeper they went, the more the world tilted. The silver-blue light began to shift, taking on tones of rose, then amber. The air grew warmer, thicker. The musical tinkling of the leaves deepened in pitch, becoming a low, resonant hum that vibrated in her bones. They stepped through a curtain of hanging vines—each strand covered in tiny, glowing motes—into a vast cavern. Not a cavern of stone, but of living wood. The walls were the inner rings of colossal, ancient trees, spiraling up into a vaulted darkness high above. Bioluminescent fungi dotted the walls in cascading clusters of blue and green. A stream of the clearest water Aurora had ever seen cut through the centre of the space, flowing over a bed of polished stones that shone with an inner light. At the far end, the stream widened into a still, black pool. The surface was a perfect mirror, reflecting the eerie forest canopy above with flawless clarity. But in the reflection, the trees were different. They were skeletal, leafless, their branches like clawed hands against a bruised, twilight sky. Aurora stared, her breath catching. “The reflection…” “Is a window,” Isolde finished. “To elsewhere. Do not meet the eyes of anything that looks back from the other side.” Nyx drifted to the water’s edge. Their reflection was a wavering, human-shaped void in the mirror. “I do not like this place, Rory. It listens too well. And it asks questions we don’t know how to answer.” The Heartstone, nestled against her skin, gave a single, faint pulse of warmth. It was gone before she could be sure. Aurora looked from the true grove to its dark reflection, from the ancient, watching trees to the silent, watching pool. The wonder was still there, a profound awe at the sheer alien beauty of it all. But entwined with it now was a cold, creeping unease, a certainty that she was standing in a place that held its secrets close, and its price closer. Isolde walked to the pool’s edge, her reflection showing only the ordinary grove. She dipped a hand into the water and withdrew it. Droplets clung to her fingers, each one a tiny, perfect lens showing a different, fleeting scene: a castle on a cliff, a burning city, a face made of stars. “The Grove gives what it wishes,” she repeated, letting the drops fall. “And it has seen you now, Aurora Carter.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.486
leniency0.971
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.46% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1528
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1528
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"marble"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"beacon"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"chill"
count2
5
word"down her spine"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count2
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"unravel"
count1
12
word"traced"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count3
15
word"crystal"
count2
16
word"profound"
count2
17
word"pounding"
count1
18
word"echoes"
count1
19
word"vibrated"
count1
20
word"cascading"
count1
21
word"flawless"
count1
22
word"wavering"
count1
23
word"pulse"
count1
24
word"warmth"
count1
25
word"fleeting"
count1
highlights
0"marble"
1"silence"
2"beacon"
3"gloom"
4"chill"
5"down her spine"
6"pulsed"
7"velvet"
8"weight"
9"shimmered"
10"echoed"
11"unravel"
12"traced"
13"rhythmic"
14"perfect"
15"crystal"
16"profound"
17"pounding"
18"echoes"
19"vibrated"
20"cascading"
21"flawless"
22"wavering"
23"pulse"
24"warmth"
25"fleeting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences112
matches(empty)
91.84% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences112
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1525
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions50
wordCount1292
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.7
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora22
Nyx8
Heartstone3
Hel1
Isolde12
Ahead1
Fae-forged1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Heartstone"
3"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Hel"
globalScore0.649
windowScore0.5
65.73% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"spirals that seemed to move if she didn’t look directly at them"
1"velvet that seemed to absorb the surrounding light"
2"seemed denser here, the edges sharper, but they moved with a wary stillness"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords4.59
wordCount1525
matches
0"Not the absence of sound, but a dense, living quiet"
1"no longer oaks but"
2"not from any direction, but inside her own head"
3"not ovals but perfect spheres, each about the size of her fist"
4"not as if burned, but as if all colour"
5"not towards the scorch or the crystal, but one of the jade spheres"
6"Not a cavern of stone, but of living wood"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean36.31
std22.74
cv0.626
sampleLengths
035
150
211
361
420
526
616
718
820
967
1065
1137
1225
1327
1442
1548
169
1736
1851
1953
2017
2110
2236
2350
2448
257
2683
274
2818
2969
308
3110
3232
3359
3486
3549
367
3721
3837
3985
4052
4120
92.73% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences112
matches
0"was muffled"
1"was made"
2"been drained"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs194
matches
0"was already moving"
1"was standing"
98.21% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences128
ratio0.016
matches
0"A diffuse, silver-blue radiance seeped from the canopy of trees that were no longer oaks but something else—towering, spiralling trunks of a pale, bone-white wood, their leaves like hammered copper that didn’t rustle."
1"They stepped through a curtain of hanging vines—each strand covered in tiny, glowing motes—into a vast cavern."
70.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1307
adjectiveStacks5
stackExamples
0"diffuse, silver-blue radiance"
1"pale, bone-white wood,"
2"luminous blue bell-shaped flowers"
3"faint, high-pitched chime"
4"single, blood-red crystal"
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.02218821729150727
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.005355776587605203
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean11.91
std7.49
cv0.629
sampleLengths
011
117
27
31
415
58
611
715
89
92
106
118
1218
1329
1415
155
169
179
188
1910
206
2115
223
2320
244
254
2633
274
2822
2914
3041
3110
3211
337
3419
354
3615
376
383
3922
402
4117
424
437
446
458
466
4714
488
4920
50.52% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3359375
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners43
31.75% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"Then her gaze shifted, and"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences105
matches
0"She emerged into a clearing"
1"It swallowed the distant hum"
2"She stepped forward."
3"They glowed from within."
4"She was in a grove,"
5"She left no footprints on"
6"Their shadow-form seemed denser here,"
7"Their violet gaze swept the"
8"It felt inert, dormant."
9"They followed Isolde along the"
10"She knelt, brushing her fingers"
11"It depicted a figure in"
12"She looked away from the"
13"They moved on."
14"They were a deep, milky"
15"Her fingers hovered an inch"
16"It was ice-cold, colder than"
17"She snatched her hand back,"
18"She nodded, swallowing against the"
19"They stepped through a curtain"
ratio0.238
55.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences105
matches
0"The path dissolved between two"
1"Aurora ducked under a low"
2"She emerged into a clearing"
3"It swallowed the distant hum"
4"Isolde stood ahead, her silver"
5"Nyx flowed beside Aurora, their"
6"Isolde’s voice was a dry"
7"Aurora didn’t see it at"
8"A faint, vertical shimmer, like"
9"The stones themselves were ancient"
10"Nyx whispered, their voice a"
11"Aurora blinked, focusing on the"
12"The shimmer intensified, coalescing into"
13"Isolde said, already a ghost"
14"Aurora took a breath that"
15"She stepped forward."
16"The transition was a cold"
17"The light was wrong."
18"A diffuse, silver-blue radiance seeped"
19"They glowed from within."
ratio0.81
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.04% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The stones themselves were ancient oaks, their trunks petrified to a pale, luminous grey, surfaces carved with spirals that seemed to move if she didn’t look di…"
1"Aurora took a breath that tasted of damp earth and something floral, sharp and unfamiliar."
2"A diffuse, silver-blue radiance seeped from the canopy of trees that were no longer oaks but something else—towering, spiralling trunks of a pale, bone-white wo…"
3"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible blooms: luminous blue bell-shaped flowers that pulsed with a soft inner light, crimson blossoms that breathed out …"
4"In the exact centre of the circle, a patch of earth was scorched black, not as if burned, but as if all colour and life had been drained from it in an instant."
5"The musical tinkling of the leaves deepened in pitch, becoming a low, resonant hum that vibrated in her bones."
6"A stream of the clearest water Aurora had ever seen cut through the centre of the space, flowing over a bed of polished stones that shone with an inner light."
7"But entwined with it now was a cold, creeping unease, a certainty that she was standing in a place that held its secrets close, and its price closer."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Nyx whispered, their voice a chill breeze at her ear"
1"Aurora asked, her voice hushed"
2"Nyx warned, their voice tight"
3"Aurora asked, eyes fixed on the frozen bird"
4"Isolde said, her lavender eyes fixed on Aurora’s face, not the statue"
5"Isolde said, her voice flat"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx warned (warn)"
3"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
4"Nyx stated (state)"
5"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.343
71.2170%