Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ02YHG8CYY2M10Z7T29TTND

Run Details

Duration:
7m 3s
Cost:
$0.058079
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The silver chain seared a line across my collarbone. I jerked back and slapped my palm against the rough bark of the nearest standing stone, and the heat vanished, and a chill sank through my gloves and into the bone beneath. I had pedalled from Silas' bar when the Heartstone began its thrumming. Not its usual faint warmth, the kind that greeted me near certain alleyways in Soho, but a frantic arrhythmic pulse that felt less like warning and more like summons. Richmond Park had swallowed the city noise within three minutes of leaving the main road. Now, in this hidden clearing, three ancient grey oak monoliths marked a boundary my skin recognised before my mind could argue. The trees here stood too straight. The silence held weight. Wildflowers crowded the space between the roots. Foxgloves, bluebells, and crimson poppies bristled in impossible abundance, their perfume cloying, almost corrupt. October soil shouldn't yield such chaos. I knelt, my fingers brushing petals that felt like wet silk, and the small crescent scar on my left wrist began to itch. A foxglove bell twitched. No wind stirred the clearing. Just a single deliberate nod toward the circle's centre, as if the stem itself had turned its head. I pulled my hand back. The flowers had no right to bloom here, not in this season, not with this density. I had dismissed those stories during pre-law. Superstition. Spectral evidence. The grove made a mockery of my filing system. I stood, brushing dirt from my knees, and the scar itched harder, a dull insistent scratch from beneath the skin. My phone screen read 00:47. I checked it against my need to leave, the way one checks a locked door twice. When I glanced again, the digits flickered to 03:12. The battery bar jumped from 89% to 2% and back, a stuttering lie. I shoved the useless thing into my jacket pocket. Time moved differently in pockets, the old stories claimed. Now the stories had caught me standing still. A branch cracked behind me. I spun. The clearing offered only shifting shadows, yet the grove beyond the stones rustled with a rhythm too deliberate for weather. Clip-clop. No. Not hooves. Something snapped twigs in careful sequence, mimicking footsteps to draw my eye. I refused to look. I knew bait when I saw it. Evan had used the same technique, making noise in the kitchen at three in the morning to pull me from sleep, to pull me toward him. I fixed my gaze on the centre of the clearing, where the grass lay flattened in a perfect circle, and breathed through my nose until my heart slowed. Movement tugged at my left periphery, a tall shape ducking behind the second stone. When I turned, only moss remained, glistening as if freshly licked. The stone's surface bore no markings, yet I felt certain, with the kind of certainty that bypasses logic, that something had pressed its palm there seconds before and withdrawn. I stepped closer. The moss smelled of iron and fermentation, the underside of a tongue. The Heartstone flared. Its silver chain grew taut against my nape, pulling me toward the flattened circle like a leash. The deep crimson gemstone's inner glow deepened from ember to arterial red. Warmth bled into heat. Heat bled into pain. I stepped forward, not because I wanted to, but because the alternative, resisting, felt like tearing my own throat out. The pendant had come from an unknown benefactor, slipped through my letterbox six weeks ago with no note. I had worn it out of curiosity, then out of habit, then out of fear when I discovered what it could sense. Now it sensed something here that made it frantic. Inside the circle, the air tasted of copper and honey. The sickly combination coated my tongue and lingered in my sinuses. I strained to see into the blackness between the stones. Then the blackness strained back. The space within the oak boundary dilated, breathing, the way a pupil opens to admit light. No light entered here. The wildflowers outside the ring bent lower, their stems creaking, pressing their faces toward the soil as if in prayer or terror. Three rules for surviving fairy tales, Mum used to say. Don't eat the food. Don't give your name. Don't step inside the ring. I'd already failed one. A giggle, high and reedy, drifted from the treetops. Then another, lower, from the soil beneath my boots. The sounds didn't echo. They hung, suspended, too close to my ears. The wildflowers swayed. No breeze moved them. They swayed in opposing directions, bowing toward me, their petals brushing my jeans like curious fingers. I slapped them away. My hand came back stained with pollen that smelled like rotting fruit. I reached for my pocket, for the bike key, for any anchor to the London I'd left outside. My hand found only the pendant. It pulsed now in perfect time with my heartbeat, or perhaps my heart had surrendered to its rhythm. The distinction seemed less important with every second the grove held me. I considered running. The path back lay behind the first stone, but the shadows there had thickened into a wall, a solid mass of dark that swallowed the edges of my vision. Running would mean plunging into that. Standing still meant waiting for whatever had snapped the twigs to finish its approach. Between the oaks, the darkness gathered into angles that suggested shoulders, elbows, too many joints. They did not approach. They waited, motionless, watching me watch them. The scar on my wrist burned. The shapes multiplied, fractioning at the edge of my sight, always vanishing when I turned my head full upon them. I counted five, then ten, then stopped counting when I realised some of them stood upright while others clung to the stone tops like spiders. None of them cast shadows. The moon, if there had been one, offered no assistance. "Rory." The voice dripped from the canopy like sap, sweet and sharp. It wasn't Eva's. It wasn't anyone's I knew. It knew mine. The sound bypassed my ears and settled in my teeth, vibrating there. I bit down until my jaw ached, refusing to answer, refusing the second rule's breach. Names had power. Every childhood story agreed. Every legal contract I'd studied confirmed it. The standing stones groaned, a sound of roots tearing and wood fibre snapping. The wildflowers recoiled, parting to reveal bare earth scrawled with spirals that hurt to track. My eyes watered when I looked directly at them. The Heartstone snapped its chain. It did not fall. It hovered at eye level, spinning, its crimson light carving a door in the air where the third stone had stood. Through the rift, the air smelled of old snow and burned hair. Something tall and many-handed stepped across the threshold, and the grove fell silent. The flowers stopped swaying. The scar stopped itching. Everything stopped, except the figure, which turned its head toward me with a motion like a breaking clock, and smiled.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1176
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1176
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"silk"
count1
6
word"spectral"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count2
10
word"glistening"
count1
11
word"echo"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"silence"
4"weight"
5"silk"
6"spectral"
7"flickered"
8"footsteps"
9"perfect"
10"glistening"
11"echo"
12"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences111
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1176
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions10
wordCount1167
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"Don"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Don"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Park1
Heartstone2
Mum1
London1
Eva1
Don3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Mum"
2"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
44.37% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like wet silk, and the small cresc"
1"felt like tearing my own throat out"
2"smelled like rotting fruit"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.85
wordCount1176
matches
0"Not its usual faint warmth, the kind that greeted me near certain alleyways in Soho, but a frantic arrhythmic pulse"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
76.38% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs16
mean73.5
std30.67
cv0.417
sampleLengths
041
187
277
360
469
5108
669
7109
878
927
1069
11106
1292
131
1463
15120
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs206
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences112
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount45
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount1
adverbRatio0.022222222222222223
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean10.5
std7.34
cv0.699
sampleLengths
09
132
212
329
415
521
66
74
87
914
106
1123
124
135
1418
155
1616
177
181
192
209
2120
225
2316
249
2513
269
279
288
295
302
3120
321
331
342
3512
364
377
3826
3928
4014
4111
4229
433
4412
453
4617
4712
484
494
44.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3392857142857143
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners38
95.24% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences105
matches
0"Just a single deliberate nod"
1"Then the blackness strained back."
2"Then another, lower, from the"
ratio0.029
82.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences105
matches
0"I jerked back and slapped"
1"I had pedalled from"
2"I knelt, my fingers brushing"
3"I pulled my hand back."
4"I had dismissed those stories"
5"I stood, brushing dirt from"
6"My phone screen read 00:47."
7"I checked it against my"
8"I shoved the useless thing"
9"I refused to look."
10"I knew bait when I"
11"I fixed my gaze on"
12"I stepped closer."
13"Its silver chain grew taut"
14"I stepped forward, not because"
15"I had worn it out"
16"I strained to see into"
17"I'd already failed one."
18"They hung, suspended, too close"
19"They swayed in opposing directions,"
ratio0.343
55.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences105
matches
0"The silver chain seared a"
1"I jerked back and slapped"
2"I had pedalled from"
3"Richmond Park had swallowed the"
4"The trees here stood too"
5"The silence held weight."
6"Wildflowers crowded the space between"
7"Foxgloves, bluebells, and crimson poppies"
8"October soil shouldn't yield such"
9"I knelt, my fingers brushing"
10"A foxglove bell twitched."
11"I pulled my hand back."
12"The flowers had no right"
13"I had dismissed those stories"
14"The grove made a mockery"
15"I stood, brushing dirt from"
16"My phone screen read 00:47."
17"I checked it against my"
18"The battery bar jumped from"
19"I shoved the useless thing"
ratio0.81
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences105
matches
0"Now, in this hidden clearing,"
1"Now the stories had caught"
2"Now it sensed something here"
ratio0.029
57.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Not its usual faint warmth, the kind that greeted me near certain alleyways in Soho, but a frantic arrhythmic pulse that felt less like warning and more like su…"
1"I knelt, my fingers brushing petals that felt like wet silk, and the small crescent scar on my left wrist began to itch."
2"The stone's surface bore no markings, yet I felt certain, with the kind of certainty that bypasses logic, that something had pressed its palm there seconds befo…"
3"The wildflowers outside the ring bent lower, their stems creaking, pressing their faces toward the soil as if in prayer or terror."
4"They swayed in opposing directions, bowing toward me, their petals brushing my jeans like curious fingers."
5"The path back lay behind the first stone, but the shadows there had thickened into a wall, a solid mass of dark that swallowed the edges of my vision."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
89.7165%