Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ04ZX129G1Y53CYPTVSEEWR

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Duration:
50.5s
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$0.002623
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bell above the door jingled as I wiped down the polished mahogany counter, my fingers tracing the deep grooves where countless glasses had rested. The distinctive green neon sign of The Raven's Nest cast its ghostly glow across the room, illuminating the black-and-white photographs of London's forgotten corners. "Last delivery of the night," I called out, sliding a paper bag across the counter to Silas. His hazel eyes caught the light as he inspected the contents—Golden Empress's special fried rice, extra chilli, no mushrooms. "Rory Carter." His voice was deeper than I remembered, roughened by years of whisky and secrets. "Still delivering for Yu-Fei?" I froze, my rag hovering mid-wipe. "Silas Blackwood. Thought you'd retired to somewhere warmer than London." "Retirement is a myth. Like clean glasses in this business." He chuckled, a sound that didn't reach his eyes. "Been a while since you called me Si." "Eight years, give or take." I forced a smile, my fingers tightening on the damp rag. "Didn't peg you for the type to mix with the delivery crowd." "Why not? People talk when they think they're being served." He gestured to the stool opposite him. "Sit. The night's young." I hesitated, weighing the risk against the absurdity of refusing. "Got another drop." But my feet moved toward the stool anyway, the worn leather creaking under my weight. "Yu-Fei worries about you." Silas poured two fingers of amber liquid into a tumbler, the ice clinking like distant bells. "Especially after... what happened with Evan." The name landed like a stone in still water. "He's history." "History has a way of repeating." His eyes searched my face, cataloging the changes since Cardiff. "You've got your mother's eyes. Bright blue against all this black." "The dye's easier than roots." I traced the crescent-shaped scar on my wrist, a childhood accident that somehow felt like a marker of all the things I'd survived. "London agrees with me." "Does it?" He swirled the whisky, the liquid clinging to the glass like memories. "Or does it simply take less from you than Cardiff did?" I met his gaze directly. "I work at Golden Empress. I live above your bar. I'm not exactly living the high life." "Living isn't about the view from the penthouse." He leaned forward, his signet ring catching the neon light. "It's about what you see when you look in the mirror." "Mirror's been kind." The lie tasted metallic in my mouth. "Wasn't talking about wrinkles." His gaze dropped to my hands, then back to my face. "You always were too smart for your own good, Rory. Even at twelve, figuring out that locked cupboard in my office." My blood ran cold. "That was curiosity." "Curiosity killed the cat." He smiled, but it didn't reach his eyes. "But satisfaction brought it back. Remember?" The memory hit me like a physical blow—the day I'd found his hidden documents, not understanding their importance but knowing they weren't meant for public eyes. He'd caught me, of course, but instead of anger, there'd been something else in his eyes then too. Recognition. "I remember you said some things weren't for children." I kept my voice even, but inside, old fears resurfaced. "Some things never are." He took a slow sip of his drink. "But children grow. And some secrets... they age poorly." The bell above the door rang again, cutting through the tension. Silas straightened, his professional mask settling into place. "Late customer." I watched him move behind the bar, the slight limp barely noticeable now, a consequence of Prague he'd never spoken of but that I'd somehow known about even then. The past wasn't just a country we'd left behind; it was a shadow that followed us into every new room. "Another delivery?" he asked, his tone carefully neutral. "Just finishing up." I slid off the stool, my legs feeling unsteady. "Yu-Fei appreciates your business." "Always did know how to pick a good restaurant." He didn't look at me as he spoke, his attention focused on arranging bottles with military precision. "Some things never change." But they had, I wanted to scream. We weren't the children playing spy games in his Cardiff study. We weren't even the adults who'd awkwardly said goodbye before I fled London all those years ago. We were strangers who shared a history too dangerous to discuss in a place that wasn't really a bar at all. "Rory." His voice stopped me at the door. "The back room. Tomorrow night. Midnight." I turned, my hand on the door handle. "Why?" "Some ghosts," he said, his eyes meeting mine for the first time with unguarded intensity, "need more than just being laid to rest." Outside, the London air felt thick with unspoken things. The green neon sign cast long shadows across the pavement, and for a moment, I wasn't sure which direction led home and which led back to everything I'd tried to leave behind.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount822
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount822
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"tracing"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"intensity"
count1
5
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"weight"
2"traced"
3"tension"
4"intensity"
5"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences43
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences43
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences64
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords820
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount555
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.54
worstName"London"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"London"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
London3
Silas3
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff2
Prague1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Silas"
2"Empress"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
87.50% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a marker of all the things I'"
78.05% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.22
wordCount820
matches
0"not understanding their importance but knowing they weren't meant for public eyes"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
94.54% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean25.63
std12.32
cv0.481
sampleLengths
049
136
220
316
427
528
621
728
826
911
1027
1132
1225
1322
1429
1510
1636
177
1818
1945
2019
2121
2221
2349
248
2516
2630
2756
2814
299
3023
3141
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences43
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs93
matches(empty)
8.93% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences64
ratio0.047
matches
0"His hazel eyes caught the light as he inspected the contents—Golden Empress's special fried rice, extra chilli, no mushrooms."
1"The memory hit me like a physical blow—the day I'd found his hidden documents, not understanding their importance but knowing they weren't meant for public eyes."
2"The past wasn't just a country we'd left behind; it was a shadow that followed us into every new room."
99.13% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount561
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.040998217468805706
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0106951871657754
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences64
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences64
mean12.81
std7.59
cv0.592
sampleLengths
025
124
217
319
416
54
66
710
819
98
1016
1112
1217
134
1410
1518
1620
176
189
192
2016
2111
2228
234
2414
2511
265
2717
2818
2911
3010
3115
3221
334
343
3512
366
3726
3818
391
4019
4112
429
4311
448
452
4629
4720
488
4912
92.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.59375
totalSentences64
uniqueOpeners38
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences42
matches
0"I called out, sliding a"
1"His hazel eyes caught the"
2"His voice was deeper than"
3"I froze, my rag hovering"
4"He chuckled, a sound that"
5"I forced a smile, my"
6"He gestured to the stool"
7"I hesitated, weighing the risk"
8"His eyes searched my face,"
9"I traced the crescent-shaped scar"
10"He swirled the whisky, the"
11"I met his gaze directly."
12"He leaned forward, his signet"
13"His gaze dropped to my"
14"My blood ran cold."
15"He smiled, but it didn't"
16"He'd caught me, of course,"
17"I kept my voice even,"
18"He took a slow sip"
19"I watched him move behind"
ratio0.69
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences42
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"The distinctive green neon sign"
2"I called out, sliding a"
3"His hazel eyes caught the"
4"His voice was deeper than"
5"I froze, my rag hovering"
6"He chuckled, a sound that"
7"I forced a smile, my"
8"He gestured to the stool"
9"I hesitated, weighing the risk"
10"Silas poured two fingers of"
11"The name landed like a"
12"His eyes searched my face,"
13"I traced the crescent-shaped scar"
14"He swirled the whisky, the"
15"I met his gaze directly."
16"He leaned forward, his signet"
17"The lie tasted metallic in"
18"His gaze dropped to my"
19"My blood ran cold."
ratio0.929
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences13
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"We were strangers who shared a history too dangerous to discuss in a place that wasn't really a bar at all."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"I forced, my fingers tightening on the damp rag"
1"But my feet moved, the worn leather creaking under my weight"
2"Silas poured, the ice clinking like distant bells"
3"He swirled, the liquid clinging to the glass like memories"
4"He leaned, his signet ring catching the neon light"
5"he asked, his tone carefully neutral"
6"I slid, my legs feeling unsteady"
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"I called out (call out)"
1"He chuckled (chuckle)"
2"He didn't (do)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.119
leniency0.238
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.143
75.9559%