Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ05DH5E9MG2PWHYM1BAWC4F

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door creaked open just enough for Ptolemy to slip through, then slammed shut against the frame. Three deadbolts turned in rapid succession. Eva didn't look up from her desk where ancient scrolls lay open beside steaming mugs of tea. "Ptolemy, I've told you, you can't-" She froze. The familiar scent of citrus and something else—cardamom, maybe—flooded the cramped flat. "Rory?" Her voice barely above a whisper. "What are you doing here?" Standing in the narrow hallway, Rory shifted the weight of the Golden Empress delivery bag in her arms. "Eva. I wasn't expecting this." The flat smelled of old paper, spices, and something metallic. Rory's gaze swept over the stacks of books that had grown since her last visit. The table where they used to share takeaway curry was now a research station, cluttered with notes and strange symbols drawn in red ink. "Expected what?" Eva pushed back from her desk, her chair scraping against the floorboards. "To never see you again after what you did?" "I had to leave. You know that." Rory stepped inside, the bag rustling. "I brought dumplings." Eva's eyes flickered to the bag then back to Rory's face. "You always could find me when you needed something." The accusation hung in the air between them. "I needed to see you. That's all." "Right." Eva crossed her arms, her gaze intense. "And what about Lucien? He's been asking questions. About you." Rory's hand instinctively went to the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist. "He should mind his own business." "Is that what you told him when you disappeared?" The door to Eva's bedroom opened a crack. A man's silhouette appeared in the doorway. "Eva? Who's-" "Someone from the past," Eva said, not taking her eyes off Rory. The man stepped into view, his platinum blond hair slicked back, tailored charcoal jacket unbuttoned. His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—studied Rory with unnerving intensity. "The Frenchman." Rory didn't flinch. "Lucien." He offered a thin smile, revealing perfect white teeth. "I see the rumors were true. You're back in London." "I never left permanently." "Semantics." Lucien's cane tapped lightly against the floorboards. "Eva, darling, could you possibly make another cup of tea? This conversation might require refreshments." Eva hesitated, then nodded. "I'll put the kettle on." She disappeared into the tiny kitchen area. Lucien closed the distance between them in a few smooth steps. "I've been looking for you, Rory." "I've been busy." "Busy hiding." The accusation struck too close to home. "You don't know anything about my life." "I know enough." Lucien lowered his voice. "I know you left a trail of broken hearts in Cardiff. Including mine." Rory's breath hitched. "That's not fair." "Life rarely is." Eva returned with three steaming mugs. "Here." She handed one to each of them without looking at either. "Drink it. It'll calm your nerves." Lucien took a sip, his eyes never leaving Rory's. "I have a proposition for you." "I'm not interested." "But you will be." Lucien reached into his jacket pocket and pulled out a small, ornate box. "This belongs to you." Rory stared at the box, her composure cracking. "Where did you get that?" "From your father's solicitor. Apparently, he made arrangements before his passing." Rory's father. The name hit her like a physical blow. "He's dead?" Lucien nodded slowly. "Three months ago. The solicitor had been trying to reach you." "How?" "Through me. I've been your guardian angel, Rory. Whether you wanted me to be or not." Eva placed a hand on Rory's arm. "He doesn't mean to hurt you." "I do mean to hurt you," Lucien said. "But not tonight. Tonight, I mean to give you this." He extended the box again. "Your inheritance. And a message." "What message?" "The same one I've been trying to deliver for years." Lucien leaned closer. "Come with me. There's something you need to see." Rory took the box, her fingers trembling. "I can't just up and leave." "Why not? You did before." "That was different." "How?" Rory looked at Eva, whose expression was unreadable. "I had to get away from Evan." "The abusive ex?" Lucien raised an eyebrow. "I'm familiar with the story. But that was years ago, Rory. You can't hide behind him forever." "I'm not hiding." "Then what are you doing?" Rory opened the box. Inside lay a silver locket on a tarnished chain. Her breath caught in her throat. "I had this when I was little. Father used to say it contained something precious." Lucien's gaze softened, just for a moment. "It contains a key. To a safety deposit box. Your father's last gift to you." "And the message?" "He left you instructions. Something about the past. About your mother." Rory's mother. Another ghost from her past. "What about her?" Lucien stepped back, his professional mask firmly in place. "That's for you to discover. But I will be there when you do." Rory closed the locket, the metal cold against her palm. "I need time." "Time is exactly what we don't have." The three deadbolts on the front door clicked into place one by one as Eva locked Rory out of her life for the second time.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva pushed back [back]"
1"Lucien's cane tapped lightly [lightly]"
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.209
leniency0.418
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.06
82.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount864
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"lightly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount864
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"intensity"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"unreadable"
count1
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"firmly"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"whisper"
2"weight"
3"flickered"
4"intensity"
5"perfect"
6"unreadable"
7"eyebrow"
8"firmly"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences54
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords860
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount458
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity4.15
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Ptolemy1
Standing1
Rory19
Golden1
Empress1
Eva11
Lucien11
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount860
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean15.09
std12.02
cv0.796
sampleLengths
072
123
249
323
416
520
68
77
818
917
109
1117
1212
1327
144
1519
164
1723
1816
1917
203
212
2214
2320
246
253
2624
2715
283
2921
3013
3111
3212
3314
341
3516
3613
3728
382
3922
4013
415
423
431
4415
4524
463
475
4834
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs75
matches(empty)
88.95% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences106
ratio0.019
matches
0"The familiar scent of citrus and something else—cardamom, maybe—flooded the cramped flat."
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—studied Rory with unnerving intensity."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount463
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"open beside steaming mugs"
1"revealing perfect white teeth."
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.03455723542116631
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.01079913606911447
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean8.11
std4.86
cv0.599
sampleLengths
017
16
217
38
412
57
65
718
85
910
1015
1124
1214
139
1413
153
1611
179
188
197
208
2110
2211
236
249
258
267
272
2812
2915
3010
312
323
331
349
3510
364
378
3815
394
4012
4111
426
433
442
457
467
477
4813
493
56.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.37735849056603776
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount7
totalSentences50
matches
0"Her voice barely above a"
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
2"He offered a thin smile,"
3"She disappeared into the tiny"
4"She handed one to each"
5"He extended the box again"
6"Her breath caught in her"
ratio0.14
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences50
matches
0"The door creaked open just"
1"Eva didn't look up from"
2"The familiar scent of citrus"
3"Her voice barely above a"
4"The flat smelled of old"
5"Rory's gaze swept over the"
6"The table where they used"
7"Eva pushed back from her"
8"Rory stepped inside, the bag"
9"Eva's eyes flickered to the"
10"The accusation hung in the"
11"Eva crossed her arms, her"
12"Rory's hand instinctively went to"
13"The door to Eva's bedroom"
14"A man's silhouette appeared in"
15"Eva said, not taking her"
16"The man stepped into view,"
17"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
18"Rory didn't flinch."
19"He offered a thin smile,"
ratio0.94
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences14
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Eva pushed back, her chair scraping against the floorboards"
1"Rory stepped, the bag rustling"
2"Eva crossed, her gaze intense"
3"Eva said, not taking her eyes off Rory"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences67
tagDensity0.03
leniency0.06
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
78.6002%