Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ061NA9J9WZZ16XH79PB19M

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Duration:
45.5s
Cost:
$0.007404
Provider:
Xiaomi

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The grass whispered against Rory’s knees as she crouched behind the oak standing stone, its surface cold and lichen-rough under her palm. She’d been counting the seconds since she’d stepped through the boundary, a habit born from too many delivery runs where a late drop meant a docked wage. One hundred and twelve. The last time, it had been eighty-seven before the air pressure shifted and the London hum faded. Now, the silence had weight. It pressed on her eardrums. She’d come because the pendant had led her here. It hadn’t been a choice, not really. A warmth against her sternum that grew into a pull, a directional certainty in her bones that had guided her off the Park footpath, through a thicket of holly that didn’t mark any map, and into this impossible clearing. Wildflowers, a riot of impossible purple and gold, carpeted the ground. No London park had flowers like this. They smelled of honey and something metallic, like old coins. Her phone, useless from the moment she’d crossed, sat in her jacket pocket. No signal. The time display had frozen at 23:17. She’d been here longer than a minute. A sound. Not a bird, not the wind. A long, wet drag, like a heavy sack being pulled over damp earth. It came from the far side of the grove, where the ancient oaks hunched together in a knot of shadow. Rory held her breath, her eyes straining. The moonlight, which should have been weak and yellowed by city smog, poured into the clearing with a clarity that hurt. It painted everything in silver and deepest ink. Nothing moved. The sound didn’t repeat. She shifted her weight, her trainers crushing a flower. The petals released a stronger wave of that metallic scent. The Heartstone pendant pulsed against her skin. Not a gentle throb now. A hot, insistent beat. *Thud. Thud. Thud.* It matched her own racing heart for a moment, then doubled its pace. A warning. “Right,” she breathed into the quiet, the word swallowed instantly. She wasn’t sure what she was talking to. The stones. The trees. The air itself. “I’m just here because of this.” She touched the pendant through her shirt. Its warmth seeped into her fingers. “I’m not… I mean you no harm.” The words sounded absurd. Whispers in a cathedral. The grove offered no reply. She rose from behind the stone, her knees protesting. The standing stones formed a rough circle, seven in total, each taller than her, their tops jagged and broken. They felt like teeth. Beyond them, the oaks grew thick and twisted, their branches forming a canopy so dense the sky was a patchwork of black and faint starlight. No path led out. She’d walked in through a gap that was now just another section of impenetrable undergrowth. The drag came again. Closer. Left this time. Rory spun, her hand flying to the small torch clipped to her belt. Her thumb hovered over the switch. Light could be a beacon. But the darkness here felt alive, hungry. Best to leave it for now. She scanned the tree line, tracing every shadow, every knotted root that could be mistaken for a crouching form. Nothing. Only the silvery grass, the luminous flowers, the silent stones. Then a new sound. A giggle. High-pitched, thin, and utterly joyless. It skittered through the air from everywhere and nowhere, bouncing off the oak trunks. It was the sound of a child who’d never learned what happiness meant. Rory’s skin pricked with gooseflesh. She took a step back, her shoulder blade bumping against the rough surface of the standing stone behind her. Solid. Real. Her gaze dropped to the ground. The wildflowers. They were… wrong. Their heads, which had faced the sky, now tilted towards her. Every single one of them. Tiny faces of purple and gold, all oriented in her direction. She blinked, hard. A trick of the light? Of exhaustion? She looked away, looked back. They hadn’t moved. They were just flowers. But they were all watching her. The pendant’s heat spiked, searing through the fabric of her shirt. She gasped and pulled at the neckline, the silver chain digging into her nape. The crimson gem within the setting wasn’t just warm now; it was glowing. A faint, inner light, a deep red ember. She’d never seen it do that. The benefactor—some unknown figure from a life that felt increasingly like someone else’s—hadn’t included an instruction manual. *It pulses near a Hel portal.* The thought surfaced from her memory, unbidden. A snippet from a book in Silas’s restricted section, a text so old the pages crumbled at a touch. Hel portals. Not Heaven. Not fae. Something older, deeper. A branch snapped in the woods. Loud as a gunshot. Rory flinched, her back pressing hard into the stone. The sound had come from directly ahead, in the darkest tangle of oaks. A shadow detached itself from the deeper gloom. Not walking. Gliding. A smudge of absolute black that moved without rhythm, without the give and take of a step. It was tall, too tall, and thin, its proportions all stretched and wrong. Her hand finally found the torch switch. The beam cut a sharp, white cone through the silvered darkness. It speared the spot where the shadow had been. Empty. Just an ancient, gnarled oak trunk, its bark carved with spirals that hadn’t been there a second ago. The giggle came again, closer, right beside her left ear. Rory whirled, the torch beam slashing through the empty air. The light caught the surface of the nearest standing stone. There, scratched into the lichen in jagged, desperate letters, were words. They glowed with a faint phosphorescence. DON’T LOOK AT THE ROOTS. Her breath hitched. Her gaze, against all her screaming instincts, began to lower. Toward the base of the stone. Toward the thick, serpentine roots that plunged into the earth. The Heartstone pulsed a final, agonizing beat, then went cold. Dead weight against her chest. In the sudden absence of its warmth, Rory felt a chill so profound it seemed to crystallise in her lungs. The torch beam trembled in her hand. The wildflowers at her feet rustled, though there was no wind. A sound like a thousand tiny mouths whispering in unison rose from the grass. The giggle joined it, harmonizing, a duet of alien mirth. The shadow was back. Not in the woods. It stood at the edge of the torchlight, a stain on reality, its featureless head cocked as if examining her. It didn’t reflect the light. It absorbed it. It took a step, and the ground beneath its foot didn’t bend. It simply… was not there. Rory’s mind, that cool-headed, quick-thinking instrument, blanked. For one long, frozen second, she was just a woman in a strange field, watching something impossible approach. Then training, instinct, a lifetime of running—from Evan, from expectations, from things that whispered in the dark—kicked in. She didn’t think. She moved. The torch beam swung up, not at the shadow, but at its feet. The words on the stone screamed in her mind. *DON’T LOOK AT THE ROOTS.* She looked. Not at the roots of the standing stone, but at the shadows cast by the trees. At the places where the torchlight should have painted crisp, dark shapes against the silvered grass. The shadows writhed. They bulged and twisted, pulling away from their sources, growing tendrils of pure blackness that snaked across the ground. One tendril brushed the toe of her trainer. It felt like static and grave dirt. A sound tore from her throat, half scream, half sob. The shadow thing at the edge of the light took another silent, gliding step. The whispers from the flowers grew louder, a chorus of dry, sibilant *yeses*. The torch beam flickered. In that blink of darkness, Rory saw them. Not with her eyes, but with the cold, dead weight of the pendant against her skin. All around the circle, in every standing stone, in every twisted oak, something vast and patient was turning its attention. Not looking. *Unfocusing*. The way a predator’s eyes go flat before the strike. The torch died. Absolute blackness fell, thick and choking. The whispers stopped. The giggling ceased. In the new silence, which was worse than any sound, Rory heard only her own ragged breath and the soft, distinct sound of a footstep on grass behind her. Then another.
created_at"2026-04-24T16:44:24.793Z" 4/24/2026, 4:44:24 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1406
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1406
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"weight"
count4
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"beacon"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"searing"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
12
word"profound"
count1
13
word"trembled"
count1
14
word"grave"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"predator"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"warmth"
3"pulsed"
4"throb"
5"racing"
6"beacon"
7"scanned"
8"tracing"
9"searing"
10"gloom"
11"chill"
12"profound"
13"trembled"
14"grave"
15"flickered"
16"predator"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences167
matches
0"felt a chill"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences167
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences168
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords16
totalWords1403
ratio0.011
matches
0"Thud. Thud. Thud."
1"It pulses near a Hel portal."
2"DON’T LOOK AT THE ROOTS."
3"yeses"
4"Unfocusing"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount1389
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory10
London2
Park1
Heartstone2
Hel2
Silas1
Heaven1
Evan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Park"
2"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
98.45% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences97
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if examining her"
1"felt like static and grave dirt"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.138
wordCount1403
matches
0"not at the shadow, but at its feet"
1"Not at the roots of the standing stone, but at the shadows cast by the trees"
2"Not with her eyes, but with the cold, dead weight of the pendant against her skin"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences168
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean43.84
std25.65
cv0.585
sampleLengths
080
183
229
383
453
551
613
776
864
911
1064
1166
1269
136
1435
1573
1627
1719
1847
195
2044
2162
2253
2343
2432
252
2669
2741
2857
293
3041
312
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences167
matches
0"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs204
matches
0"was talking"
1"was glowing"
2"was turning"
91.84% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences168
ratio0.018
matches
0"The crimson gem within the setting wasn’t just warm now; it was glowing."
1"The benefactor—some unknown figure from a life that felt increasingly like someone else’s—hadn’t included an instruction manual."
2"Then training, instinct, a lifetime of running—from Evan, from expectations, from things that whispered in the dark—kicked in."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1397
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"lichen-rough under her"
1"closer, right beside her"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.026485325697924122
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.007874015748031496
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences168
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences168
mean8.35
std6.38
cv0.764
sampleLengths
022
127
24
317
45
55
69
77
839
911
107
1110
1213
132
147
157
162
176
1813
1920
207
2121
228
232
244
259
2610
277
285
294
301
311
3214
332
3410
358
362
372
383
3913
406
417
424
434
445
459
4619
474
4825
494
37.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.30357142857142855
totalSentences168
uniqueOpeners51
96.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences138
matches
0"Only the silvery grass, the"
1"Then a new sound."
2"Just an ancient, gnarled oak"
3"Then training, instinct, a lifetime"
ratio0.029
92.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences138
matches
0"She’d been counting the seconds"
1"It pressed on her eardrums."
2"She’d come because the pendant"
3"It hadn’t been a choice,"
4"They smelled of honey and"
5"Her phone, useless from the"
6"She’d been here longer than"
7"It came from the far"
8"It painted everything in silver"
9"She shifted her weight, her"
10"she breathed into the quiet,"
11"She wasn’t sure what she"
12"She touched the pendant through"
13"Its warmth seeped into her"
14"She rose from behind the"
15"They felt like teeth."
16"She’d walked in through a"
17"Her thumb hovered over the"
18"She scanned the tree line,"
19"It skittered through the air"
ratio0.319
90.43% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences138
matches
0"The grass whispered against Rory’s"
1"She’d been counting the seconds"
2"The last time, it had"
3"It pressed on her eardrums."
4"She’d come because the pendant"
5"It hadn’t been a choice,"
6"A warmth against her sternum"
7"Wildflowers, a riot of impossible"
8"They smelled of honey and"
9"Her phone, useless from the"
10"The time display had frozen"
11"She’d been here longer than"
12"A long, wet drag, like"
13"It came from the far"
14"Rory held her breath, her"
15"The moonlight, which should have"
16"It painted everything in silver"
17"The sound didn’t repeat."
18"She shifted her weight, her"
19"The petals released a stronger"
ratio0.739
36.23% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"Now, the silence had weight."
ratio0.007
70.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"A warmth against her sternum that grew into a pull, a directional certainty in her bones that had guided her off the Park footpath, through a thicket of holly t…"
1"She scanned the tree line, tracing every shadow, every knotted root that could be mistaken for a crouching form."
2"The benefactor—some unknown figure from a life that felt increasingly like someone else’s—hadn’t included an instruction manual."
3"It stood at the edge of the torchlight, a stain on reality, its featureless head cocked as if examining her."
4"They bulged and twisted, pulling away from their sources, growing tendrils of pure blackness that snaked across the ground."
5"In the new silence, which was worse than any sound, Rory heard only her own ragged breath and the soft, distinct sound of a footstep on grass behind her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she breathed, the word swallowed instantly"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
80.3099%