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Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ06JH0CPBAEAGQHVE1SSWQ3
Run Details
Model:
Xiaomi MIMO v2.5
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
42.8s
Cost:
$0.007363
Provider:
Xiaomi
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
91.18%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
80.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
62.52%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
(details)
21.13%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
67.32%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
40.29%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
25.06%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
6.47%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
97.97%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
78.6204%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The green neon sign of
The Raven’s Nest hummed a low,
electric
note against the London drizzle, its light bleeding onto the wet pavement. Inside,
the air was thick with
the scent of old wood, whiskey, and the faint, metallic tang of rain.
Maps of cities that no
longer existed under those names papered the walls between framed black-and-white photographs of places Rory had never been.
She sat at the far
end of the bar, her shoulders slumped over a half-empty glass of gin, the ice cubes melted into a watery sigh.
The last delivery run of
the night had left her sneakers soaked through, and the damp
chill
had settled deep in her bones.
Silas was polishing a glass
behind the bar, his movements slow and deliberate.
The silver signet ring on
his right hand caught the dim light each time he turned his wrist. He didn’t look at her, but he’d already refilled her glass once without asking. “You’re going to rot your
stomach
out with that stuff,”
he said, his voice a
low rumble. Rory swirled the gin. “It’s medicinal.” “For what?” “For existing.”
He grunted, a sound that
might have been a laugh.
He set the glass down
and leaned against the back counter, his left leg straightening out with a subtle stiffness. “Long night?” “Three dropped pizzas, one broken address, and a man in Brixton who tried to tip me in cryptocurrency.” “That’s London for you.”
The bell above the door
jingled, a sharp, intrusive sound in the mellow quiet of the bar. Rory didn’t look up. New customers were Silas’s domain.
She heard the soft thud
of a closed umbrella, the squeak of wet shoes on the floorboards, and then a pause. A long one. “Rory? Aurora Carter?”
The voice was a splinter
of memory, lodged under her skin.
She knew it before she
turned her head.
Her fingers tightened around her
glass.
Marcus
Thorne stood just inside the doorway, shaking rain from a tailored wool coat.
He was broader in the
shoulders than she remembered, his sandy hair cropped short, his face leaner,
etched
with lines around the eyes and mouth that hadn’t been there five years ago.
He wore a watch that
probably cost more than her entire wardrobe. “
Marcus
.” The name felt foreign on her tongue, a word from another language.
He smiled, but it didn’t
reach his eyes. “I thought it was you. I saw the back of your head and I just—wow. It’s been, what, six years?” “Seven,” Rory said. She didn’t stand.
Her legs felt bolted to
the stool. “Seven. Christ.”
He approached the bar, his
movements confident, assured.
He pulled out the stool
next to hers and sat down, placing his coat over the backrest. “Silas, right? I’ll have a Lagavulin. Neat.” Silas’s gaze
flickered
between them, a quick, assessing glance.
He nodded and reached for
a bottle.
Marcus
turned back to Rory. His eyes—still that startling green, the color of sea glass—swept over her. Taking inventory. “You look… different.” “So do you.”
She took a sip of
her gin. It tasted like nothing. “Last I heard, you were interning at your father’s firm in Manchester. Claiming you’d rather eat glass than wear a suit.” “That was a long time ago.”
He adjusted his cuffs
. The fabric was crisp, expensive. “I’m with Kensington Partners now. Mergers and acquisitions.” Rory let out a short breath that wasn’t
quite a laugh
. “Mergers and acquisitions. You used to call that the death of the soul.” “We were twenty-two. We called everything the death of the soul.” He accepted his whiskey from Silas, raised the glass in a half-hearted toast. “To the death of the soul, then.” Rory didn’t clink her glass against his. She watched him drink. The boy who’d once spent an entire summer reading Kierkegaard in a shed behind his parents’ house, who’d wept openly at the end of *
Old Yeller
*, who’d sworn he’d never sell out—sat beside her in cashmere and polished leather. “What brings you to Soho?” she asked. “Client dinner. It fell through. I was walking, saw the sign.” He
traced
a finger along the condensation ring his glass left on the bar. “I thought about you, actually. After I left Manchester. I called your old number. It was disconnected.” “I moved.” “Obviously.” He looked around the bar, taking in the maps, the photographs. “This place has a certain… atmosphere. How do you know the owner?” “He’s my landlord.” Rory nodded toward Silas, who was now wiping down a spot on the bar ten feet away, clearly listening. “I live upstairs.”
Marcus
’s eyebrows lifted. “Upstairs from a bar in Soho. That’s not what I pictured for you.” “What did you picture?” “I don’t know. A flat in Clapham with a balcony. A labrador. A life that looked like the brochures.” “That was the plan.” The gin
was making
her head
feel
light, disconnected. “Plans change.” “They do.” His voice softened. “I heard about Evan.” The name landed in the space between them like a stone. Rory’s fingers
traced
the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a habit she’d never broken. “From who?” “Your mum. I called her, looking for you about three years ago. She told me you’d left him. She didn’t say where.” He paused. “She sounded tired.” Rory’s mother’s voice on the phone, three years ago, had been more than tired. It had been brittle, stretched thin over years of worry. *She doesn’t want to talk,
Marcus
. She’s safe now. That’s all I can tell you.* “I’m fine now,” Rory said. The words were automatic, a shield. “Are you?” She turned to look at him fully. His face was open, concerned, but there was something else beneath it. Curiosity, maybe. Or the particular pity of someone who’d escaped a narrow life only to look back at those who hadn’t. “I deliver pizzas for a Chinese restaurant run by a seventy-year-old woman who calls me ‘silly girl’ in Cantonese. I live in a flat where the heating only works when it feels like it. I haven’t spoken to my father in four years because he still thinks I threw my life away.” She took a final sip of gin. “So yes,
Marcus
. I’m fine.” He was quiet for a moment. The jazz record Silas had put on crackled
softly
, a saxophone weeping into the room. “I wasn’t trying to—” “I know what you were trying to do.” She flagged Silas for another drink. He raised an
eyebrow
but poured it. “Can I ask you something?”
Marcus
said. “You’re going to anyway.” “Why London? You could have gone back to Cardiff. Your family’s there.” “My family is the reason I left.” The words came out harder than she intended. She softened her voice. “Eva was here. She’s the one who called me, the night I finally left. She said, ‘Just come. You can sleep on my floor.’ So I did.” “And you stayed.” “London doesn’t let you leave. It just… keeps you.” She looked at him. “You should understand that. You’re still here.” “I go back to Manchester on weekends. My mum’s there.” “Your mum’s not the one who drove a car through your front garden because you forgot to buy his brand of coffee.”
Marcus
flinched. The
silence
that followed was thick,
charged
. He picked up his glass, set it down again without drinking. “I wanted to help. After. I just didn’t know how.” “There was nothing to do. It was a mess. I was a mess.” She stared into her fresh glass. The gin was clear, untroubled. “I spent the first year here flinching every time someone raised their voice. Silas had to teach me how to use the back door of this bar because I was afraid of walking past the pub on the corner.” Silas, from down the bar, said, “You learned quick enough.” Rory ignored him. “You don’t get to
feel
guilty about it,
Marcus
. You weren’t there.” “I’m not feeling guilty.” He ran a hand over his short hair. “I’m feeling… I don’t know. Sad, maybe. That we lost all those years. That I didn’t see it happening.” “You couldn’t have seen it. No one did. Not until it was too late, and then everyone had an opinion.” She thought of her father’s stiff
silence
, her mother’s tearful phone calls, Evan’s friends who’d told her she
was overreacting
. “Eva saw it. That’s all that mattered.” “Eva’s good people.” “She’s the best.” He nodded
slowly
. The confidence he’d walked in with had
fractured
, revealing something more uncertain underneath. He looked older now,
not just in years, but in weight
. “I’m getting divorced,” he said abruptly. Rory turned. “Since when?” “About a year ago. It was final in March. Claire—my wife—she said I was never
really
there. Even when I was physically in the room.” He laughed, a hollow sound. “I thought I’d built something solid. Turns out it was just a
very
expensive house of cards.” “I’m sorry.” “Don’t be. You warned me, remember? At your twenty-first. You said, ‘Don’t marry someone just because it looks right on paper.’ I told you I didn’t believe in fairy tales anyway.” He took a long drink of his whiskey. “Turns out I did. I just believed in the wrong ones.” Rory
remembered that night
. Her twenty-first, in her parents’ garden. She’d been drunk on cheap prosecco, her arm around Evan’s shoulders, convinced she was invincible.
Marcus
had been there, arguing about Camus with her father until three in the morning. It felt like it belonged to a different person, that memory. A ghost’s life. “We were so sure of everything then,” she said. “We were sure of nothing. We just pretended well.” He turned his glass in his hands. “I envy you, you know.” Rory almost choked. “For what? For delivering dumplings in the rain?” “For knowing who you are. Even if it’s painful. I spent ten years becoming someone I didn’t recognize, and I only noticed when she handed me the divorce papers.” She had no response to that. The jazz had shifted to a piano piece, something melancholy and slow. The rain against the windows
sounded like static
. Silas
appeared, silent as a cat, and placed a bowl of salted nuts between them
. “On the house,” he said, and retreated.
Marcus
took a handful. “So what now? You going to do this forever? The delivery thing?” “It’s not forever. It’s just now.” Rory picked at the label on her glass. “Yu-Fei—my boss—she wants to teach me to cook. Properly. She says I have good hands.” “And your law degree?” “Gathering dust in a drawer somewhere.” She flexed her fingers, the scar on her wrist catching the light. “I don’t think I want to be a barrister like my dad. But maybe… I don’t know. Something. Something that helps people. Not in a courtroom. Maybe somewhere else.” “That sounds like you. The old you.” “The old me was an idiot.” “The old me was a coward.” He met her eyes. “But she was brave about the things that mattered.” The words
hung in the air
. Rory felt a tightness in her chest,
not painful, but present
. A recognition. She hadn’t heard anyone describe her like that in years—
not as brave, but as someone who had been brave once, before everything
. She picked up her glass. “To the dead,” she said quietly.
Marcus
looked at her, confused. “The people we were. They’re gone.” She drank. The gin burned a clean line down her throat. He raised his glass. “To the dead.” They drank together. The rain continued its soft percussion against the windows. Somewhere outside, a siren wailed, dopplering into the distance. Rory stared at the wall of photographs, at faces frozen in time, in places they’d never return to. She wondered if any of them had ever run into an old friend and found a stranger sitting where a memory used to be.
Marcus
set his glass down. “I’m in London until Thursday. Staying at the Savoy.” He pulled a card from his wallet, placed it on the bar. “If you want to get coffee. Or dinner. Or just… talk.” Rory looked at the card. It was thick, embossed. *
Marcus
Thorne, Senior Associate, Kensington Partners*. She picked it up, turned it over. The back was blank. “I work until nine most nights,” she said. “And I’m not great company.” “That’s okay.” He stood, pulling on his coat. He looked down at her, and for a moment, the polished
facade
slipped. He looked like the boy in the shed, surrounded by books, uncertain and earnest. “I’m not great company either anymore.” He left money on the bar, enough for both their drinks. The bell jingled as he pushed through the door, disappearing into the wet London night. Rory sat for a long time after he
was gone
. The card lay on the bar between her empty glass and the bowl of nuts. Silas came over, collected the glasses, and said nothing. He just refilled the nut bowl and moved on. Outside, the green neon sign buzzed its
electric
lullaby. Rory
traced
the edge of the card with her thumb, feeling the raised letters. She thought about Claire, about Manchester, about a house of cards falling. She thought about her mother’s tired voice, her father’s
silence
, Eva’s floor. She thought about the scar on her wrist, and the man who’d put it there, and the seven years since she’d become someone else. She slid the card into her pocket and finished her drink.
created_at
"2026-04-24T16:53:37.431Z"
4/24/2026, 4:53:37 PM
model
"xiaomi/mimo-v2.5-20260422"
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182717
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streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
769
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
42735
tokens_prompt
1094
tokens_completion
4249
native_tokens_prompt
1010
native_tokens_completion
3633
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
605
native_tokens_cached
960
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
num_fetches
(null)
web_search_engine
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"stop"
usage
0.0073628
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provider_responses
0
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"36c35c6cd07b44e59c5a95e0046dba8e"
is_byok
false
latency
675
model_permaslug
"xiaomi/mimo-v2.5-20260422"
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"Xiaomi"
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200
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
37
adverbTagCount
3
adverbTags
0
"He looked around [around]"
1
"he said abruptly [abruptly]"
2
"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences
98
tagDensity
0.378
leniency
0.755
rawRatio
0.081
effectiveRatio
0.061
91.18%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2268
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"softly"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
3
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"softly"
1
"slowly"
2
"really"
3
"very"
80.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
0
"Marcus"
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
62.52%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2268
totalAiIsms
17
found
0
word
"electric"
count
2
1
word
"chill"
count
1
2
word
"stomach"
count
1
3
word
"etched"
count
1
4
word
"flickered"
count
1
5
word
"traced"
count
3
6
word
"eyebrow"
count
1
7
word
"silence"
count
3
8
word
"charged"
count
1
9
word
"fractured"
count
1
10
word
"weight"
count
1
11
word
"facade"
count
1
highlights
0
"electric"
1
"chill"
2
"stomach"
3
"etched"
4
"flickered"
5
"traced"
6
"eyebrow"
7
"silence"
8
"charged"
9
"fractured"
10
"weight"
11
"facade"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
1
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"the air was thick with"
1
"hung in the air"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
146
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
146
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
206
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
61
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
3
markdownWords
23
totalWords
2261
ratio
0.01
matches
0
"Old Yeller"
1
"She doesn’t want to talk, Marcus. She’s safe now. That’s all I can tell you."
2
"Marcus Thorne, Senior Associate, Kensington Partners"
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
25
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
66.67%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
58
wordCount
1343
uniqueNames
16
maxNameDensity
1.56
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
3
worstWindowName
"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven
1
Nest
1
London
2
Rory
21
Silas
10
Thorne
2
Kierkegaard
1
Marcus
11
Evan
2
Camus
1
Senior
1
Associate
1
Kensington
1
Claire
1
Manchester
1
Eva
1
persons
0
"Raven"
1
"Nest"
2
"Rory"
3
"Silas"
4
"Thorne"
5
"Marcus"
6
"Evan"
7
"Claire"
8
"Eva"
places
0
"London"
1
"Manchester"
globalScore
0.718
windowScore
0.667
21.13%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
97
glossingSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"quite a laugh"
1
"felt like it belonged to a different pe"
2
"sounded like static"
3
"appeared, silent as a cat, and placed a bowl of salted nuts between them"
4
"looked like the boy in the shed, surround"
67.32%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
3
per1kWords
1.327
wordCount
2261
matches
0
"not just in years, but in weight"
1
"not painful, but present"
2
"not as brave, but as someone who had been brave once, before everything"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
206
matches
0
"remembered that night"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
91
mean
24.85
std
21.59
cv
0.869
sampleLengths
0
115
1
45
2
17
3
6
4
2
5
2
6
32
7
18
8
4
9
50
10
3
11
83
12
13
13
28
14
13
15
34
16
16
17
22
18
35
19
23
20
24
21
31
22
50
23
7
24
42
25
2
26
24
27
25
28
16
29
4
30
19
31
15
32
9
33
29
34
27
35
39
36
11
37
2
38
104
39
21
40
4
41
21
42
7
43
4
44
12
45
46
46
3
47
20
48
10
49
22
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
146
matches
0
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
234
matches
0
"was polishing"
1
"was making"
2
"was overreacting"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
3
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
2
totalSentences
206
ratio
0.01
matches
0
"His eyes—still that startling green, the color of sea glass—swept over her."
1
"She hadn’t heard anyone describe her like that in years—not as brave, but as someone who had been brave once, before everything."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
957
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.034482758620689655
lyAdverbCount
7
lyAdverbRatio
0.0073145245559038665
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
206
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
206
mean
10.98
std
8.49
cv
0.774
sampleLengths
0
24
1
19
2
23
3
26
4
23
5
13
6
18
7
14
8
17
9
4
10
2
11
2
12
2
13
10
14
20
15
2
16
18
17
4
18
17
19
4
20
5
21
21
22
3
23
3
24
11
25
8
26
6
27
14
28
32
29
12
30
13
31
8
32
20
33
3
34
3
35
7
36
10
37
17
38
7
39
9
40
7
41
5
42
12
43
2
44
3
45
10
46
4
47
21
48
10
49
5
40.29%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
20
diversityRatio
0.27184466019417475
totalSentences
206
uniqueOpeners
56
25.06%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
1
totalSentences
133
matches
0
"Somewhere outside, a siren wailed,"
ratio
0.008
6.47%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
71
totalSentences
133
matches
0
"She sat at the far"
1
"He didn’t look at her,"
2
"he said, his voice a"
3
"He grunted, a sound that"
4
"He set the glass down"
5
"She heard the soft thud"
6
"She knew it before she"
7
"Her fingers tightened around her"
8
"He was broader in the"
9
"He wore a watch that"
10
"He smiled, but it didn’t"
11
"She didn’t stand."
12
"Her legs felt bolted to"
13
"He approached the bar, his"
14
"He pulled out the stool"
15
"He nodded and reached for"
16
"His eyes—still that startling green,"
17
"She took a sip of"
18
"It tasted like nothing."
19
"He adjusted his cuffs"
ratio
0.534
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
128
totalSentences
133
matches
0
"The green neon sign of"
1
"Maps of cities that no"
2
"She sat at the far"
3
"The last delivery run of"
4
"Silas was polishing a glass"
5
"The silver signet ring on"
6
"He didn’t look at her,"
7
"he said, his voice a"
8
"Rory swirled the gin."
9
"He grunted, a sound that"
10
"He set the glass down"
11
"The bell above the door"
12
"Rory didn’t look up."
13
"She heard the soft thud"
14
"A long one."
15
"The voice was a splinter"
16
"She knew it before she"
17
"Her fingers tightened around her"
18
"Marcus Thorne stood just inside"
19
"He was broader in the"
ratio
0.962
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
133
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
49
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
97.97%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
37
uselessAdditionCount
2
matches
0
"he said, his voice a low rumble"
1
"He approached, his movements confident, assured"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
12
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"He laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences
98
tagDensity
0.122
leniency
0.245
rawRatio
0.083
effectiveRatio
0.02
78.6204%