Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ070H3WFGZ0S4H8NC09ZK50

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The three deadbolts clicked open in sequence, a sound like a lock-picking tutorial played in reverse. Rory pulled the door inward, her hand already reaching for the chain she’d forgotten to latch. The hallway beyond was empty. Not empty. Occupied. Lucien Moreau stood in the cramped landing, his platinum blond hair a stark slash against the grimy brickwork. He’d shed the usual charcoal suit for dark jeans and a black cashmere jumper, but he still held the ivory-handled cane, its tip resting on the worn floorboards. One amber eye, one black, fixed on her with an intensity that felt physical. “Rory.” His French accent curled around the syllables, a sound she hadn’t realised she’d scrubbed from her memory until it was there again, slick and warm. “You changed the locks.” She hadn’t. The chain was still in her hand. “You tried the locks?” “A courtesy. To announce myself.” His gaze swept past her, into the chaos of Eva’s flat. “She’s not here.” “Eva’s at the British Library until midnight. And you don’t get to just… appear here.” Rory made to shut the door. The ivory tip of his cane slid into the gap with silent, practiced ease. “I am not here for Eva.” He leaned forward slightly, the movement bringing a scent of sandalwood and something colder, like ozone before a storm. “I am here for you.” “Why?” “May I come in?” The request, so polite and utterly out of place from him, grated. “No.” He didn’t move the cane. “The stairwell is drafty. And what I have to say concerns a certain delivery driver for the Golden Empress. One who has been picking up orders for a client who pays in blood, not cash.” The air in Rory’s lungs turned to ice. Her part-time job, her carefully constructed normal life, punctured by his casual reference. She stepped back. Not an invitation. A retreat. Lucien slid inside, closing the door behind him with a soft click. The three deadbolts remained unthrown. The space, already crammed with Eva’s research scrolls and teetering stacks of books, shrank to nothing with him in it. He navigated the obstacle course of knowledge with a dancer’s economy of movement, his cane tapping a soft, rhythmic punctuation on the hardwood. “Blood money,” he stated, settling on the arm of Eva’s threadbare sofa as if it were a throne. He crossed one ankle over the opposite knee. “A rare and volatile currency. Your employer, Yu-Fei, is not pleased.” “My employer has nothing to do with you.” “Everything in this city has something to do with me.” It wasn’t a boast. A flat statement of geography. “Your deliveries have been intercepted. The last three packages never reached the recipient. They are now in the possession of a rival. A messy one.” Rory folded her arms, the crescent scar on her left wrist a pale line against her skin. “How do you know this?” “I found it interesting. A human girl, ferrying parcels for a wraith-run noodle shop to a demon who deals in memories. So I looked closer. And when I look closer, things have a habit of coming to light.” His mismatched eyes held hers. “The light is often unpleasant.” “What do you want, Lucien?” He uncrossed his legs, the movement fluid. He reached into his pocket and produced not a weapon, but a small, tarnished silver locket. He placed it on the edge of the coffee table, between a stack of occult theory and a half-eaten packet of biscuits. It wasn’t hers. But the woman in the miniature photograph inside—the dark curls, the same bright blue eyes—could have been her mother, or her grandmother. A ghost of a face she’d seen only in faded pictures. “The client is a Collector,” Lucien said, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial murmur. “He doesn’t just buy memories. He curates them. And he has taken an interest in your lineage. That locket was left at a dead drop for him. Your name was on the wrapping paper.” Rory’s blood ran cold. She didn’t move. “That’s insane.” “Sanity is a luxury, chérie. You know this.” He gestured to the room, to the chaotic web of research. “Your friend Eva knows it better than most. What do you think she’s really looking for in all this? Theoretical demons? She’s mapping weaknesses. For you.” “You’re lying.” “Am I?” He tilted his head. “Ask her about the Malphora lineage. Ask her what the name means in the old tongue. She’ll go pale. She’ll change the subject.” He leaned forward, his voice dropping further, intimate and terrible. “Or you can listen to me. The man your client works for is named Kaelen. He believes your family line carries a… key. A resonance to something old and forgotten. He doesn’t want to hurt you, Rory. He wants to unmake you. To see what’s inside.” The silence that followed was heavy, charged with the hum of the old building and the distant wail of a siren. Rory’s mind raced, sorting fact from his likely fiction, her fear from the infuriating, lingering awareness of him in her space. His proximity, the sheer *fact* of him, was an old injury rubbed raw. “Why tell me this?” Her voice was tight. “What’s in it for you?” Lucien picked up the locket, rolling it between his thumb and forefinger. The metal caught the low light. “Kaelen is a rival. A successful, irritatingly careful rival. Anything that disrupts his operations is of interest to me. Also…” He looked up, and for a fleeting second, the sharp, calculating fixer vanished. Something older and more complicated flickered in his heterochromatic gaze. “I find the idea of you being unmade particularly… unpalatable.” The confession, however oblique, landed in the charged air between them. It was a raw nerve touched. Rory felt the heat rise in her cheeks, a furious combination of anger and something else she refused to name. “Get out.” “Not yet.” He stood, the movement sudden and predatory. He closed the distance between them in two strides, the space over the coffee table swallowed. His cane stayed behind, planted on the floor. He was close enough now that she could see the faint, silvery scar that bisected his left eyebrow, a detail she’d forgotten she knew. His hand came up, not to touch her, but to brush a strand of black hair from her shoulder. His fingers were cool. “You will need help. You cannot fight a Collector alone.” “I don’t have your help.” “You have my attention. That is infinitely more dangerous.” His eyes searched hers, the black pupil seeming to swallow the light. “The flat above Silas’ bar is not secure. His client now knows your face, your patterns. You need to vanish.” “I’m not running.” “No. You are going to come with me.” It was not a question. “I have a place. Safe. Warded. We can assess this, and your friend can continue her research without your blood staining the pages.” Every instinct screamed to refuse. To shove him back out into the hallway and throw every bolt, chain or not. But the image of the locket, of Eva’s pale face at the mention of that name, of Yu-Fei’s disappointed sigh when he learned of the botched deliveries… it formed a cage around her. “What if I say no?” Lucien’s smile was a thin, sharp thing. “Then I will wait. Right here. And when Kaelen’s people come—and they will, they are very thorough—I will protect you. And then you will owe me. A debt to me, chérie, is a far heavier burden than a simple request.” He was right. And they both knew it. The power dynamic hadn’t changed. He stood in the wreckage of her normal life, offering a lifeline woven from the same dark thread as the threat. She held his gaze, her cool-headedness a brittle shell. “I hate you.” A genuine, quiet laugh escaped him. It was a sound that had no place here, in this tense, dangerous moment. It was a sound from before. “Of course you do,” he murmured. “Pack a bag. Quickly.” He turned back toward the coffee table, picking up his cane. The mask of the fixer slid back into place. “The sooner we leave, the sooner this becomes a problem we can solve, instead of a problem that finds you.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"His French accent curled around [around]"
1"He turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.306
leniency0.612
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.082
78.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"utterly"
2"carefully"
3"really"
4"very"
5"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"stark"
count1
1
word"intensity"
count1
2
word"practiced ease"
count1
3
word"constructed"
count1
4
word"navigated"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"chaotic"
count1
7
word"resonance"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"charged"
count2
10
word"raced"
count1
11
word"fleeting"
count1
12
word"calculating"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"eyebrow"
count1
highlights
0"stark"
1"intensity"
2"practiced ease"
3"constructed"
4"navigated"
5"rhythmic"
6"chaotic"
7"resonance"
8"silence"
9"charged"
10"raced"
11"fleeting"
12"calculating"
13"flickered"
14"eyebrow"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences79
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1388
ratio0.001
matches
0"fact"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount850
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
French1
Eva4
Rory7
Lucien5
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
4"Yu-Fei"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
55.91% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.441
wordCount1388
matches
0"not a weapon, but a small, tarnished silver locket"
1"not to touch her, but to brush a strand of black hair from her shoulder"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean30.84
std20.85
cv0.676
sampleLengths
037
13
260
330
413
519
635
730
81
94
1013
1140
1229
1360
1437
158
1644
1722
1848
195
2045
2136
2248
239
2445
252
2685
2755
2813
2971
3037
312
3257
3333
345
3541
363
3736
3853
395
4047
4134
4212
4326
4450
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs130
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences110
ratio0.009
matches
0"But the woman in the miniature photograph inside—the dark curls, the same bright blue eyes—could have been her mother, or her grandmother."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount858
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, tarnished silver locket."
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.023310023310023312
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005827505827505828
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean12.62
std9.81
cv0.778
sampleLengths
016
116
25
32
41
518
628
714
826
94
102
117
124
1316
143
1521
1614
1725
185
191
204
2112
221
235
2435
258
2613
273
283
292
3012
315
3220
3323
3418
358
3611
378
3814
395
4025
4117
425
4343
445
455
467
4716
4822
493
51.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.35454545454545455
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
ratio0
9.19% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences74
matches
0"He’d shed the usual charcoal"
1"His French accent curled around"
2"His gaze swept past her,"
3"He leaned forward slightly, the"
4"He didn’t move the cane."
5"Her part-time job, her carefully"
6"She stepped back."
7"He navigated the obstacle course"
8"he stated, settling on the"
9"He crossed one ankle over"
10"It wasn’t a boast"
11"His mismatched eyes held hers"
12"He uncrossed his legs, the"
13"He reached into his pocket"
14"He placed it on the"
15"It wasn’t hers."
16"She didn’t move."
17"He gestured to the room,"
18"He tilted his head"
19"He leaned forward, his voice"
ratio0.527
0.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences74
matches
0"The three deadbolts clicked open"
1"Rory pulled the door inward,"
2"The hallway beyond was empty."
3"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
4"He’d shed the usual charcoal"
5"His French accent curled around"
6"The chain was still in"
7"His gaze swept past her,"
8"Rory made to shut the"
9"The ivory tip of his"
10"He leaned forward slightly, the"
11"The request, so polite and"
12"He didn’t move the cane."
13"The air in Rory’s lungs"
14"Her part-time job, her carefully"
15"She stepped back."
16"Lucien slid inside, closing the"
17"The three deadbolts remained unthrown."
18"The space, already crammed with"
19"He navigated the obstacle course"
ratio0.919
67.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"To shove him back out"
ratio0.014
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Lucien said, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial murmur"
1"He leaned, his voice dropping further, intimate and terrible"
2"His eyes searched, the black pupil seeming to swallow the light"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he stated (state)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.061
leniency0.122
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.082
80.8333%