Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ083773BDRRK76YV2NWC011

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41.8s
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$0.003114
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door creaked open on the third deadbolt. Three locks. Three layers of security. Some habits died hard. Especially the ones that kept you alive. "Rory." The name was a silk-smooth caress wrapped in French accent that shouldn't have sent shivers down my spine. The voice belonged to Lucien Moreau, standing in the narrow hallway of Eva's flat, his tailored charcoal suit looking painfully out of place among the stacks of books and scrolls that threatened to swallow the cramped space. I froze. My hand still on the brass handle. "What are you doing here, Lucien?" He held up a gloved hand in surrender, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one void-black—taking in the chaos of the room. "May I come in? Or are we conducting business through the threshold?" "Business?" I let the door swing wider, revealing the state of the flat. Books teetered on precarious stacks, scrolls unfurled like sleeping serpents across every surface, and Ptolemy the tabby cat watched from his usual perch on the armchair, tail twitching with disapproval. "I don't recall hiring you." "Then consider this an unsolicited consultation." He stepped inside, his movements economical, precise. The door clicked shut behind him. Three deadbolts engaged in rapid succession. "You're in trouble, chérie." "I'm always in trouble," I countered, moving past him to clear a space on the cluttered coffee table. "It's practically my default setting." Tea. I needed tea. Something to do with my hands besides reaching for the knife block I kept by the sink. "Perhaps. But this trouble smells different." He removed his gloves with practiced grace, revealing hands that looked too elegant for the supernatural underworld he navigated. "Like old secrets and half-forgotten debts." I busied myself with the kettle, filling it from the tap. "We don't have debts between us, Lucien. Just memories." "Memories that owe interest." He chose a stack of books from the floor and shifted them to a precarious-looking pile, making space for himself. "Three years, Rory. Three years since you vanished from Marseille without a word." The kettle whistled. I yanked it off the heat. "People vanish. It's what they do." I poured water into a chipped mug. "Doesn't make them responsible for everyone who notices." "Ah, but you were responsible for me." His voice was quiet, almost lost beneath the steam rising from the mug. "You knew I would look for you." The words struck me harder than I expected. I turned, mug in hand, searching his face for any trace of accusation. There was none. Only that unsettling gaze that seemed to see right through to the parts of me I kept carefully hidden. "I didn't think you'd care," I admitted, the words tasting bitter on my tongue. "Care?" He gave a soft, humorless laugh. "I spent six months tracking you from Marseille to Cardiff, then to London. Care was never the issue, chérie. Control was." The mug felt hot in my hands. "You don't control me." "Perhaps not now." He leaned forward, elbows on his knees. "But then... you let me think I could." The memory washed over me unbidden—Lucien in Marseille, his hands on my hips, his voice whispering promises in French that made my skin burn. I had been vulnerable then, fresh from Evan's hands, and Lucien had been both salvation and temptation. Too much of both. "I never meant to hurt you," I said, more to myself than to him. "Did you mean to vanish?" His question was direct, cutting through the careful walls I'd built around that time. "I had to protect myself." The words came out sharper than intended. "From everyone." "Even me?" The question hung in the air between us, charged with the unspoken history we shared. I set the mug down too hard. Ceramic clinked against saucer. "Especially you." He stood then, closing the distance between us in three fluid steps. "You still wear the scar." My left wrist. The crescent-shaped mark from the childhood accident I never spoke of. My fingers instinctively went to it, covering the pale indentation. "Everyone has scars." "Some scars tell stories." His voice was closer now, his presence filling the small room. "Yours tells a story of running." "I don't run anymore," I lied. The flat above Silas' bar had been my sanctuary for two years. Safe. Predictable. Lonely. "London is a big city to hide in." His gloved fingers brushed against my wrist, exposing the scar to his gaze. "Still so pale after all these years." The touch sent electricity through me, a dangerous current that threatened to short-circuit the careful control I maintained. I pulled back, putting space between us. "What do you want, Lucien?" He didn't answer immediately, his amber eye studying me, the black one seeming to absorb the shadows in the room. "The same thing I wanted in Marseille. The same thing I wanted in Cardiff. The same thing I want now." His gaze dropped to my lips for a fraction of a second before returning to my eyes. "To understand why you left me standing there." My breath caught. "You knew why." "Did I?" His hand moved to my cheek, thumb tracing the line of my jaw. "I thought it was fear. Fear of what we might become together." The warmth of his touch was intoxicating. I leaned into it despite better judgment. "It was fear," I whispered. "Of losing myself." "You never lost yourself with me." His voice was a low rumble that vibrated through me. "You found parts you didn't know existed." "And when you found them, you were terrified." He stepped closer, his body heat radiating toward me. "Rory..." "Rory's gone," I said, though the words sounded hollow even to me. "She left with the rest of my illusions." "Then who is this?" His other hand came up to rest on my hip, pulling me closer until I could feel the steady beat of his heart against mine. "The woman who hides books and deadbolts? Or the woman who used to laugh in the moonlight on Marseille docks?" My resistance crumbled like ancient parchment. I had missed this. The intensity. The danger. The way Lucien saw me—not just as Rory Carter, but as all the things I tried to suppress. "Don't," I breathed, though I didn't pull away. "Don't what?" His lips brushed against mine in a feather-light touch that promised everything. "Don't remind you what it felt like to be truly seen?" The kiss when it came was inevitable, a collision of unspoken years and pent-up longing. His lips moved against mine with a desperate hunger that matched my own. The books, the scrolls, the three deadbolts—all faded into the background as I lost myself in the taste of him, in the impossible rightness of his arms around me. His hands tangled in my black hair, tilting my head to deepen the kiss. I responded with equal ferocity, fingers clutching at the immaculate fabric of his suit, needing to feel more of him, to bridge the three years of absence with nothing but touch. When we finally broke apart, we were both breathing heavily, foreheads resting together. "I shouldn't have come," he murmured, though his arms still held me captive. "Then why did you?" I asked, already knowing the answer. "Because some ghosts don't stay buried," he whispered before claiming my lips again, this time with a slow deliberateness that spoke of promises and possibilities that terrified and excited me in equal measure.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.475
leniency0.949
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1244
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1244
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"sent shivers down"
count1
2
word"navigated"
count1
3
word"charged"
count1
4
word"unspoken"
count2
5
word"sanctuary"
count1
6
word"predictable"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"vibrated"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"sent shivers down"
2"navigated"
3"charged"
4"unspoken"
5"sanctuary"
6"predictable"
7"tracing"
8"warmth"
9"vibrated"
10"could feel"
11"intensity"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences83
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1240
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount880
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.45
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Three"
discoveredNames
French2
Lucien4
Moreau1
Eva1
Books1
Ptolemy1
Tea1
Marseille1
Evan1
Safe1
Rory1
Carter1
Three3
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Books"
4"Evan"
5"Rory"
6"Carter"
places
0"French"
1"Marseille"
2"Three"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"gaze that seemed to see right through to the parts of me I kept carefully hidden"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.806
wordCount1240
matches
0"not just as Rory Carter, but as all the things I tried to suppress"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
88.80% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean26.96
std12.42
cv0.461
sampleLengths
025
156
215
332
448
529
644
731
820
937
1030
1127
1243
1314
1428
1511
1618
1745
1814
1919
2014
2117
2213
2317
2427
2521
2621
2728
2830
2940
3025
316
3227
3322
3423
3518
3620
3749
3832
398
4025
4157
4245
4326
4410
4533
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs145
matches(empty)
40.82% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences112
ratio0.036
matches
0"He held up a gloved hand in surrender, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one void-black—taking in the chaos of the room."
1"The memory washed over me unbidden—Lucien in Marseille, his hands on my hips, his voice whispering promises in French that made my skin burn."
2"The way Lucien saw me—not just as Rory Carter, but as all the things I tried to suppress."
3"The books, the scrolls, the three deadbolts—all faded into the background as I lost myself in the taste of him, in the impossible rightness of his arms around me."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount624
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.03205128205128205
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.009615384615384616
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean11.07
std7.75
cv0.7
sampleLengths
08
12
24
34
47
519
637
72
87
96
1020
1112
1213
1330
145
1513
166
176
184
1918
206
213
2217
2325
246
2511
269
2724
2813
293
306
3113
328
3320
347
358
3613
373
3819
3914
407
4121
427
434
4410
458
4624
4717
484
4914
63.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.41964285714285715
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences73
matches
0"Especially the ones that kept"
1"Only that unsettling gaze that"
2"Too much of both."
ratio0.041
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences73
matches
0"My hand still on the"
1"He held up a gloved"
2"I let the door swing"
3"He stepped inside, his movements"
4"I countered, moving past him"
5"I needed tea."
6"He removed his gloves with"
7"I busied myself with the"
8"He chose a stack of"
9"I yanked it off the"
10"I poured water into a"
11"His voice was quiet, almost"
12"I turned, mug in hand,"
13"I admitted, the words tasting"
14"He gave a soft, humorless"
15"He leaned forward, elbows on"
16"I had been vulnerable then,"
17"I said, more to myself"
18"His question was direct, cutting"
19"I set the mug down"
ratio0.616
14.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences73
matches
0"The door creaked open on"
1"Some habits died hard."
2"The name was a silk-smooth"
3"The voice belonged to Lucien"
4"My hand still on the"
5"He held up a gloved"
6"I let the door swing"
7"Books teetered on precarious stacks,"
8"He stepped inside, his movements"
9"The door clicked shut behind"
10"I countered, moving past him"
11"I needed tea."
12"Something to do with my"
13"He removed his gloves with"
14"I busied myself with the"
15"He chose a stack of"
16"The kettle whistled."
17"I yanked it off the"
18"I poured water into a"
19"His voice was quiet, almost"
ratio0.89
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The memory washed over me unbidden—Lucien in Marseille, his hands on my hips, his voice whispering promises in French that made my skin burn."
1"His lips moved against mine with a desperate hunger that matched my own."
2"I responded with equal ferocity, fingers clutching at the immaculate fabric of his suit, needing to feel more of him, to bridge the three years of absence with …"
35.71% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"He stepped, his movements economical, precise"
1"I admitted, the words tasting bitter on my tongue"
2"His hand moved, thumb tracing the line of my jaw"
3"He stepped, his body heat radiating toward me"
4"I said, though the words sounded hollow even to me"
48.31% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"I admitted (admit)"
1"I lied (lie)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
3"I breathed (breathe)"
4"he murmured (murmur)"
5"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.153
leniency0.305
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.203
79.2430%