Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ092RV7VF1GPF14AD7G0XFN

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Duration:
30.2s
Cost:
$0.005193
Provider:
Xiaomi

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, hammering the streets of Camden like something trying to erase them. Detective Harlow Quinn tasted iron on her tongue—blood from where she'd bitten the inside of her cheek rounding the corner—and pressed harder into the sprint. Her leather jacket slapped against her ribs. The watch on her left wrist, the worn leather one Morris had given her three years ago, bounced against her pulse point with every stride. There. Twenty yards ahead, his olive skin slick and gleaming under the orange halos of streetlights, Tomás Herrera banked left through a knot of late-night revelers. A woman clutching a takeaway cup swore at him as he shouldered past. He didn't slow. He didn't look back. He just ran, his dark curly hair plastered flat to his skull, the scar on his left forearm catching light as his arm pumped. Quinn wasn't a runner. She was forty-one, built like a middleweight who'd retired two fights too many, and her knees had been filing formal complaints since her thirties. But she had something Herrera didn't: eighteen years of chasing people who didn't want to be caught, and a fury that had been fermenting since the night Morris died on that warehouse floor with his eyes open and his face wrong in ways she still couldn't put language to. "Herrera!" she bellowed. Her voice carried the flat authority of someone used to commanding rooms. "Metropolitan Police! Stop where you are!" He didn't stop. He cut right, down a narrow alley choked with overflow bins and the detritus of a Thursday night—crushed cans, a split cardboard box weeping lettuce onto the tarmac. Quinn's boot slipped on something wet and organic. She caught herself against a brick wall, palm slapping rough surface, and kept going. Ahead, Herrera vaulted a low wall with the fluid economy of someone who'd done this before, dropping into a sunken courtyard behind a row of shuttered market stalls. Quinn cleared the wall less gracefully, her hip cracking against the stone, but she landed solidly on the other side. Herrera was ten yards away, heading for a rusted fire door set into the foundation wall of what looked like a condemned warehouse. A sign above it, half its letters missing, once read CAMDEN LOCK STORAGE. Now it was just a mouth in the dark, hanging open. "You don't know what you're walking into," Herrera called over his shoulder. His voice had the faint ghost of a Seville accent, even in panic. "You need to stop. You need to—" "Shut up and stop running." He pulled the fire door open. The hinges shrieked. Beyond was nothing—just a descending darkness that swallowed the rain and gave back silence. Herrera looked at her then, really looked at her, and she saw something in his warm brown eyes that she recognized. Not guilt. Not even fear, exactly. It was the particular desperation of someone who knew they were cornered and had chosen a cliff over a cage. "I'm trying to help you," he said. "I swear to God, Detective, I am trying to help you." Then he disappeared inside. Quinn reached the doorway and stopped. The rain hammered her back. The smell of wet concrete and rust and something else—something electric, like the air before a lightning strike—rose from the stairwell below. Her hand went to her hip, found her service weapon holstered and dry beneath the jacket. She drew it, thumbed the safety off with a click she felt in her teeth. She should call for backup. She should secure the perimeter, radio it in, let the cavalry descend with their torches and their warrants and their procedures. That was what a good detective did. That was what the rulebook said. The rulebook hadn't accounted for Morris. The rulebook hadn't accounted for what she'd seen in the margins of that case three years ago—the things that didn't fit into any report, the evidence that seemed to dissolve under fluorescent lights, the witnesses who looked at her with eyes that held centuries behind them. The rulebook was written for a world that made sense, and Quinn had stopped living in that world the night Morris died with that expression frozen on his face, the one that said he'd seen something on the other side of reality and it had seen him back. She keyed her radio. "Quinn to dispatch. Pursuing foot, single suspect, heading underground from Camden Lock Storage, east side. Send backup to—" She paused, glancing at the building number half-peeled from the brick. "—17B Gloucester Avenue." The radio crackled. "Copy, Detective. Backup en route. ETA fifteen minutes." Fifteen minutes. In this rain, in this part of the city, with the late-night crowds thinning to nothing, that might as well have been an hour. She went in. The stairs were metal, bolted to the wall, and they sang under her weight. Each step rang out into the shaft below, and the sound bounced back to her multiplied, distorted, as if the space itself were larger than it should have been. Her torch—she'd activated it automatically, muscle memory—and its beam cut a pale cone through air that was thick with dust and something else, a sweetness like burnt sugar and old pennies. Twenty steps. Thirty. The rain noise faded to a distant hiss, then to nothing. The temperature dropped. She could feel it through her jacket, through the damp of her shirt against her skin. The air down here tasted different—thinner, but charged, like breathing in static electricity. At the bottom of the shaft, a corridor stretched ahead, brick-lined, its ceiling low enough that Quinn had to duck slightly. Old utility pipes ran along the right wall, sweating condensation. The floor was concrete, cracked and uneven, and in the beam of her torch she could see Herrera's footprints—wet, definite, leading forward into the dark. She followed them. Her training told her to move carefully, to slice the pie at every junction, to treat every corner as a potential ambush. But Herrera's prints were clear and uninterrupted, and the urgency in her chest wouldn't let her move slowly. He was heading somewhere specific. He knew this place. The corridor turned left, then right, then opened into a wider space that Quinn recognized, with a lurch in her stomach, as a disused Tube station platform. The tiles on the walls were a faded cream, grouted with decades of grime. A sign, its typography unmistakable even in decay, read CHALK FARM in the old Underground typeface. The platform edge dropped into a track bed filled with rubble and old sleepers. A train hadn't stopped here in fifty years, maybe more. But someone had been here recently. Recently and often. The far wall had been painted over with a mural—a vast, intricate piece depicting a market scene. Figures moved through the painting carrying goods Quinn couldn't quite make out in the torchlight, their faces obscured by hoods and masks. At the center of the mural, a green eye stared out, luminous even in paint, and below it, in careful script: THE VEIL MARKET. OPEN WHEN THE MOON REMEMBERS. Quinn stared at it. Her rational mind offered explanations—street art, an elaborate prank, some subcultural in-joke she was too square to decode. But something else, something deeper and older than her rational mind, something that had been whispering to her since the Morris case, told her she was looking at a door. Herrera's footprints led to the mural and stopped. She swept the wall with her torch. The paint was thick, the texture rough under the light. No door handle. No visible seam. She pressed her palm flat against the wall at the point where the footprints ended and felt— Heat. A faint, thrumming warmth, like touching the flank of a sleeping animal. And beneath it, or within it, a vibration so low it was less heard than felt, a subsonic pulse that resonated in the bones of her wrist and radiated up into her shoulder. Her hand jerked back. The torch beam trembled. From somewhere behind the wall, muted but unmistakable, she heard voices. Laughter. The clink of glass. The sound of commerce, of people going about their business in a place that shouldn't exist, hidden beneath the streets of a city she'd patrolled for nearly two decades. Quinn holstered her weapon. She took a breath. She thought of Morris, of his face, of the case file she kept in her desk drawer instead of in the records room where it belonged. She thought of eighteen years of service and what they'd cost her and what they'd failed to teach her. Then she reached into her jacket and pulled out the bone token she'd found three weeks ago in the pocket of a dead informant in Whitechapel—a small, smooth disc of something that wasn't quite ivory, etched with symbols that made her eyes water if she stared too long. She'd carried it since without knowing why, the way you carry a stone in your pocket because its weight has become part of your center of gravity. She pressed it against the wall. The heat surged. The vibration climbed into audible range—a low, resonant hum that filled the platform and made the tiles rattle. A seam appeared in the mural, thin as a hair, then wider, then wide enough to show light on the other side—warm, amber, alive with movement. The wall parted like a curtain. Sound rushed out: music, voices, the hiss of something cooking, the bright percussion of a busy place. And through the gap, Quinn saw it—the Veil Market in full cry, spread across a platform that was larger than the one she stood on, larger than it had any right to be. Stalls lined both sides, their tables heaped with bottles that glowed faintly, with books bound in leather that seemed to breathe, with objects she had no name for. Figures moved between them—some human, some not—and the air above them shimmered with a heat-haze that wasn't heat. Quinn stepped through. The wall closed behind her with a soft, final sound, like a book being shut. The bone token in her hand was warm now, almost hot, and when she looked down at it, the symbols on its surface were glowing faintly green—the same green as the eye in the mural, the same green as the sign above The Raven's Nest, which she now understood she'd never looked at quite right. She was inside. Behind her, a wall. Above her, a city that didn't know this existed. And ahead of her, somewhere in this impossible market, Tomás Herrera, who had said he was trying to help her. The worn leather watch on her wrist ticked. Morris's watch. Morris's time. She tightened her grip on the bone token, felt its edges press into her palm, and moved forward into the light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1829
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slightly"
2"carefully"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1829
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"gleaming"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"electric"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"could feel"
count1
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"potential"
count1
8
word"lurch"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"intricate"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count1
12
word"resonated"
count1
13
word"trembled"
count1
14
word"etched"
count1
15
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"gleaming"
2"silence"
3"electric"
4"weight"
5"could feel"
6"charged"
7"potential"
8"lurch"
9"stomach"
10"intricate"
11"warmth"
12"resonated"
13"trembled"
14"etched"
15"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences126
matches
0"n in panic"
97.51% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences126
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1808
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1739
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.75
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Herrera"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Harlow1
Quinn13
Morris8
Tomás2
Herrera10
Thursday1
Seville1
Gloucester1
Tube1
Underground1
Heat1
Whitechapel1
Veil1
Market1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Heat"
6"Raven"
places
0"Seville"
1"Whitechapel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like a condemned warehouse"
1"evidence that seemed to dissolve under fluorescent lights, the witnesses who looked at her with eyes that held centuries behind them"
2"quite make out in the torchlight, their faces obscured by hoods and masks"
3"quite ivory, etched with symbols that made her eyes water if she stared too long"
4"leather that seemed to breathe, with objects she had no name for"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1808
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean46.36
std28.13
cv0.607
sampleLengths
074
170
277
321
481
567
632
75
870
918
104
1164
1239
13100
1436
1511
1626
173
1874
1946
2056
2152
2281
2377
2452
258
2640
2746
288
2945
3053
3175
326
3347
34102
353
3670
3736
3833
96.91% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences126
matches
0"were cornered"
1"was written"
2"been painted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs279
matches
0"was heading"
1"was looking"
2"were glowing"
3"was trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences131
ratio0.137
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn tasted iron on her tongue—blood from where she'd bitten the inside of her cheek rounding the corner—and pressed harder into the sprint."
1"He cut right, down a narrow alley choked with overflow bins and the detritus of a Thursday night—crushed cans, a split cardboard box weeping lettuce onto the tarmac."
2"Beyond was nothing—just a descending darkness that swallowed the rain and gave back silence."
3"The smell of wet concrete and rust and something else—something electric, like the air before a lightning strike—rose from the stairwell below."
4"The rulebook hadn't accounted for what she'd seen in the margins of that case three years ago—the things that didn't fit into any report, the evidence that seemed to dissolve under fluorescent lights, the witnesses who looked at her with eyes that held centuries behind them."
5"\"—17B Gloucester Avenue.\""
6"Her torch—she'd activated it automatically, muscle memory—and its beam cut a pale cone through air that was thick with dust and something else, a sweetness like burnt sugar and old pennies."
7"The air down here tasted different—thinner, but charged, like breathing in static electricity."
8"The floor was concrete, cracked and uneven, and in the beam of her torch she could see Herrera's footprints—wet, definite, leading forward into the dark."
9"The far wall had been painted over with a mural—a vast, intricate piece depicting a market scene."
10"Her rational mind offered explanations—street art, an elaborate prank, some subcultural in-joke she was too square to decode."
11"She pressed her palm flat against the wall at the point where the footprints ended and felt—"
12"Then she reached into her jacket and pulled out the bone token she'd found three weeks ago in the pocket of a dead informant in Whitechapel—a small, smooth disc of something that wasn't quite ivory, etched with symbols that made her eyes water if she stared too long."
13"The vibration climbed into audible range—a low, resonant hum that filled the platform and made the tiles rattle."
14"A seam appeared in the mural, thin as a hair, then wider, then wide enough to show light on the other side—warm, amber, alive with movement."
15"And through the gap, Quinn saw it—the Veil Market in full cry, spread across a platform that was larger than the one she stood on, larger than it had any right to be."
16"Figures moved between them—some human, some not—and the air above them shimmered with a heat-haze that wasn't heat."
17"The bone token in her hand was warm now, almost hot, and when she looked down at it, the symbols on its surface were glowing faintly green—the same green as the eye in the mural, the same green as the sign above The Raven's Nest, which she now understood she'd never looked at quite right."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount714
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.023809523809523808
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0070028011204481795
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean13.8
std11.37
cv0.824
sampleLengths
017
125
27
325
41
525
613
73
84
924
104
1124
1249
133
1412
156
163
1728
188
1914
2028
2120
2223
2313
2411
2512
2613
277
285
296
303
3114
3221
332
344
3520
367
3711
384
396
405
4122
4216
4315
445
4521
467
476
486
4946
39.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.33587786259541985
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners44
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences114
matches
0"Then he disappeared inside."
1"Recently and often."
2"Then she reached into her"
ratio0.026
93.68% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences114
matches
0"Her leather jacket slapped against"
1"He didn't slow."
2"He didn't look back."
3"He just ran, his dark"
4"She was forty-one, built like"
5"Her voice carried the flat"
6"He didn't stop."
7"He cut right, down a"
8"She caught herself against a"
9"His voice had the faint"
10"He pulled the fire door"
11"It was the particular desperation"
12"Her hand went to her"
13"She drew it, thumbed the"
14"She should call for backup."
15"She should secure the perimeter,"
16"She keyed her radio."
17"She paused, glancing at the"
18"She went in."
19"Her torch—she'd activated it automatically,"
ratio0.316
69.65% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount89
totalSentences114
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn tasted iron"
2"Her leather jacket slapped against"
3"The watch on her left"
4"A woman clutching a takeaway"
5"He didn't slow."
6"He didn't look back."
7"He just ran, his dark"
8"Quinn wasn't a runner."
9"She was forty-one, built like"
10"Her voice carried the flat"
11"He didn't stop."
12"He cut right, down a"
13"Quinn's boot slipped on something"
14"She caught herself against a"
15"Quinn cleared the wall less"
16"Herrera was ten yards away,"
17"A sign above it, half"
18"Herrera called over his shoulder"
19"His voice had the faint"
ratio0.781
43.86% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"Now it was just a"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"She was forty-one, built like a middleweight who'd retired two fights too many, and her knees had been filing formal complaints since her thirties."
1"But she had something Herrera didn't: eighteen years of chasing people who didn't want to be caught, and a fury that had been fermenting since the night Morris …"
2"Ahead, Herrera vaulted a low wall with the fluid economy of someone who'd done this before, dropping into a sunken courtyard behind a row of shuttered market st…"
3"Beyond was nothing—just a descending darkness that swallowed the rain and gave back silence."
4"It was the particular desperation of someone who knew they were cornered and had chosen a cliff over a cage."
5"The rulebook hadn't accounted for what she'd seen in the margins of that case three years ago—the things that didn't fit into any report, the evidence that seem…"
6"The rulebook was written for a world that made sense, and Quinn had stopped living in that world the night Morris died with that expression frozen on his face, …"
7"In this rain, in this part of the city, with the late-night crowds thinning to nothing, that might as well have been an hour."
8"Each step rang out into the shaft below, and the sound bounced back to her multiplied, distorted, as if the space itself were larger than it should have been."
9"But something else, something deeper and older than her rational mind, something that had been whispering to her since the Morris case, told her she was looking…"
10"And beneath it, or within it, a vibration so low it was less heard than felt, a subsonic pulse that resonated in the bones of her wrist and radiated up into her…"
11"The sound of commerce, of people going about their business in a place that shouldn't exist, hidden beneath the streets of a city she'd patrolled for nearly two…"
12"Then she reached into her jacket and pulled out the bone token she'd found three weeks ago in the pocket of a dead informant in Whitechapel—a small, smooth disc…"
13"The vibration climbed into audible range—a low, resonant hum that filled the platform and made the tiles rattle."
14"Figures moved between them—some human, some not—and the air above them shimmered with a heat-haze that wasn't heat."
15"And ahead of her, somewhere in this impossible market, Tomás Herrera, who had said he was trying to help her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she bellowed (bellow)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.2
80.6123%