Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ093Q0AB0V66BSMKRCKQG9Z

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Duration:
1m 11s
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$0.014379
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Z.AI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt turned before I reached it. I froze, hand outstretched toward the chain, as the second lock clicked open from outside. Ptolemy's ears flattened. The tabby shot under Eva's sofa like orange lightning. Third lock. The door swung inward. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, one hand still raised to the deadbolt, the other resting on his ivory-handled cane. His heterochromatic eyes, one amber and one black, swept over me in a single assessing glance that missed nothing. The old comfortable jumper I'd been sleeping in. The chai I'd let go cold. The shadows under my eyes I'd stopped trying to hide. "Your landlord has appalling taste in locks." His accent wrapped around the words, French underneath London polish. "Three deadbolts, and not one worth a damn." "Breaking and entering is a crime." "Entering. The breaking was minimal." He stepped inside without invitation, filling Eva's cramped flat with the scent of sandalwood and something darker underneath, something that reminded me of old libraries and secrets best left buried. His tailored charcoal suit looked absurd against the stacks of research notes and dog-eared paperbacks. "We need to talk." "No." "Carter—" "You don't get to call me that." The words came out sharper than I'd intended. Three months. Three months since the Kensington job, since I'd watched him walk away through the rain while I bled through a makeshift bandage and pretended it didn't matter. "You don't get to walk into my friend's flat at—" I glanced at the clock on Eva's microwave. "Two in the morning and act like nothing happened." "Something happened." He moved deeper into the room, picking his way between towers of Eva's occult research with a precision that suggested he'd memorised the layout. That he'd been here before. That he'd been watching. "The kind of something that puts you in danger." "My life, my danger." "Childish." "Accurate." He stopped at the window, adjusting the curtain a fraction. Checking sight lines. Old habits. "Evan has resurfaced." The name hit like a slap. Evan. My chest tightened, and I pressed my palm against the kitchen counter behind me, anchoring myself. The crescent scar on my left wrist throbbed with phantom pain, a memory of glass and a different kind of darkness. "You're lying." "I don't lie. It's inefficient." He turned from the window, and the streetlight caught his mismatched eyes. Demon blood, he'd told me once, as casually as mentioning a preference for coffee. His father from Avaros, whatever that meant. It meant those eyes. It meant the way he moved like silk over steel. It meant I'd trusted him, and he'd still left me bleeding. "He's been asking about you in the wrong places. The very wrong places." "Define wrong." "The kind where answers cost fingers." Ptolemy emerged from under the sofa, tail twitching. He wound between Lucien's ankles, purring like a motor. Traitor cat. "I can handle Evan." "You fled across the country to escape him." "I was younger. Different." I crossed my arms over my chest, aware too late that the gesture made me look defensive. Small. The kind of woman Evan had loved to make smaller. "I'm not that person anymore." "No." Something shifted in Lucien's expression. The amber eye seemed to warm, the black one to soften. "You're not." The silence stretched between us, thick with things we'd never said. That night in Kensington, pressed together in a supply closet while hellhounds prowled the corridor outside, his breath warm against my temple. The brush of his lips against my hair. The way he'd whispered *stay* and then vanished before I could answer. "You left." I heard the accusation in my voice and didn't try to hide it. "You told me to stay, and then you left." "I had my reasons." "Reasons." I tasted the word. Bitter. "You have reasons for everything, don't you? Reason you showed up at Eva's flat unannounced. Reason you picked those locks. Reason you're standing here telling me my abusive ex is back instead of just—" "Just what?" "I don't know. Sending a text like a normal person?" The corner of his mouth twitched. Not quite a smile. "Normal passed you by the moment you delivered wontons to a demon summoning." "That was one time." "Twice. The Mikhails in Brixton." "They ordered the wrong thing!" "They ordered calamari and received a cross-dimensional portal." He moved toward me, each step measured, deliberate. The cane tapped against Eva's wooden floor, a soft counterpoint to my racing pulse. "You attract trouble, Carter. You always have. It's one of your more irritating qualities." "Irritating." "Among others." He was close now. Close enough that I could see the faint scar above his left eyebrow, the one he'd gotten in Marseille before he'd learned to duck faster. Close enough that the sandalwood scent wrapped around me like a memory I'd tried to forget. "Three months." I held my ground. "Three months, and you show up now?" "Evan wasn't a threat three months ago." "And you couldn't have sent a warning? A note? A carrier pigeon?" "Would you have listened?" No. He knew me too well. I would have torn the note into pieces and gone looking for danger, because that was what I did when I was scared. I ran toward fire. "What do you want, Lucien?" His jaw tightened. The cane's ivory handle gleamed as his grip shifted. "To keep you alive. Nothing more." "Nothing more," I repeated. The words felt like ash. "Is that why you came yourself? Why you broke into my friend's flat instead of sending one of your network of informants? Just to keep me alive?" "Should I have sent flowers instead?" "You should have—" The window shattered. Glass sprayed across Eva's research papers. Ptolemy screeched and bolted for the bedroom. I threw my arms up as something large and dark vaulted through the broken frame, landing in a crouch that cracked the floorboards. Lucien moved faster than human, yanking me behind him. His cane swept up, the ivory handle twisting, and a thin blade gleamed in the streetlight. The intruder raised its head. Not human. Not even close. Grey skin stretched over a skull that was wrong, too angular, too many teeth. It opened its mouth, and the sound that emerged wasn't a growl but words, guttural and ancient. "Malphora." The name hit me like ice water. A name I hadn't heard in years. A name that belonged to a different life, a different world, one I'd buried when I'd fled Cardiff. Lucien's shoulders went rigid. "How do you know that name?" The creature smiled, teeth like broken glass. "The ex sends his regards."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His accent wrapped around [around]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.232
leniency0.464
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.036
95.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1105
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1105
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"comfortable"
count1
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"comfortable"
1"throbbed"
2"silk"
3"silence"
4"measured"
5"racing"
6"pulse"
7"eyebrow"
8"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences81
matches
0"was scared"
72.31% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences81
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"try to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences124
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1105
ratio0.001
matches
0"stay"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount768
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.78
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva6
Moreau1
French1
London1
Three2
Kensington2
Demon1
Avaros1
Lucien5
Small1
Evan2
Bitter1
Marseille1
Cardiff1
Ptolemy3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
3"Evan"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
1"Kensington"
2"Avaros"
3"Marseille"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1105
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean19.05
std19.43
cv1.02
sampleLengths
07
127
26
363
425
56
654
71
81
971
1044
114
121
131
1418
1544
162
1776
182
196
2019
214
228
2337
2419
2553
2624
274
2840
292
3010
3123
324
335
345
3544
361
372
3845
3913
407
4112
424
4333
445
4518
4636
476
483
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs139
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences124
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount770
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.024675324675324677
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0025974025974025974
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences124
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences124
mean8.91
std7.21
cv0.809
sampleLengths
07
115
23
39
42
54
620
719
88
96
1010
1117
128
136
1435
1515
164
171
181
1915
202
2127
2218
239
2426
255
264
279
284
291
301
3110
323
332
343
356
361
3716
3821
392
4017
4114
427
434
4410
4511
4613
472
486
498
56.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.4112903225806452
totalSentences124
uniqueOpeners51
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
62.25% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences71
matches
0"I froze, hand outstretched toward"
1"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
2"His accent wrapped around the"
3"He stepped inside without invitation,"
4"His tailored charcoal suit looked"
5"I glanced at the clock"
6"He moved deeper into the"
7"He stopped at the window,"
8"My chest tightened, and I"
9"He turned from the window,"
10"His father from Avaros, whatever"
11"It meant those eyes."
12"It meant the way he"
13"It meant I'd trusted him,"
14"He wound between Lucien's ankles,"
15"I crossed my arms over"
16"I heard the accusation in"
17"I tasted the word"
18"He moved toward me, each"
19"He was close now."
ratio0.394
9.30% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences71
matches
0"The deadbolt turned before I"
1"I froze, hand outstretched toward"
2"Ptolemy's ears flattened."
3"The tabby shot under Eva's"
4"The door swung inward."
5"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
6"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber"
7"The old comfortable jumper I'd"
8"The chai I'd let go"
9"The shadows under my eyes"
10"His accent wrapped around the"
11"He stepped inside without invitation,"
12"His tailored charcoal suit looked"
13"The words came out sharper"
14"I glanced at the clock"
15"He moved deeper into the"
16"That he'd been here before."
17"That he'd been watching."
18"He stopped at the window,"
19"The name hit like a"
ratio0.901
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber and one black, swept over me in a single assessing glance that missed nothing."
1"I threw my arms up as something large and dark vaulted through the broken frame, landing in a crouch that cracked the floorboards."
2"Grey skin stretched over a skull that was wrong, too angular, too many teeth."
3"A name that belonged to a different life, a different world, one I'd buried when I'd fled Cardiff."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He turned, and the streetlight caught his mismatched eyes"
1"He moved, each step measured, deliberate"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.018
leniency0.036
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.036
81.2035%