Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ09KZZGFQST7FVM4CMHJKYM

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2m 22s
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Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the rusted stairs that led from the hidden tunnel into the open cavern of the abandoned Tube station. The smell of oil and damp stone hit her before any sound could. She glanced at the worn leather watch on her left wrist, its second hand ticking against the echo of distant drips. The metal face glinted dimly under the flickering lanterns strung haphazardly along the cracked walls. A body lay near the old platform edge, knees twisted, head turned toward the darkness. Dark stains pooled around the torso, the colour of rust more than blood. A thin line of ash traced a crescent around the victim’s left ear. Quinn’s eyes narrowed; she crouched, fingers brushing the grime away. “Eva,” she called, voice low, the words snapping through the stale air. A figure emerged from a doorway of stitched tarps, clutching a satchel that bumped against her hips. Eva Kowalski adjusted the round glasses perched on the bridge of her nose, tucked a curl behind her left ear, and stared at the corpse with a mixture of curiosity and dread. “You’re early,” Eva said, pulling a notebook from the satchel. “I thought the market would still be closed for the full moon. Whoever’s running this… they’re reckless.” Quinn pressed the heel of her hand to the victim’s pulse point, felt only a faint throb. “Pulse stopped at ten minutes past. No sign of struggle. No bruises, no defensive wounds. This looks staged.” Eva flipped a page, eyes scanning quickly. “The victim is a vendor—Mikhail Petrov, a known supplier of enchanted artifacts. His ledger was found in the pocket, but the ink is dry, as if he’s been dead for days. Yet the lanterns outside are only ten minutes old; the ash on the floor is fresh. Something’s off.” Quinn stood, her sharp jaw setting. She moved to the side of the platform where the market’s makeshift stalls lingered like shadows. A brass compass lay half-buried in a puddle of oil. Its casing bore a verdigris patina, the face etched with tiny sigils that caught the lantern light and seemed to pulse. She lifted the compass, turning it over. The needle quivered, not toward magnetic north but toward a faint, invisible line that pulled toward the far end of the tunnel. An odd hum brushed her ear—barely audible, like static. “Did you see this?” Quinn held the compass up. “What do you make of it?” Eva stepped forward, leaning over the brass. “That’s a Veil Compass. It points to the nearest supernatural rift or portal. The market trades in such things. If it’s here… someone wanted to be found.” Quinn’s mind raced. “Or someone wanted to hide. A rift can be a one‑way street. If the needle points toward that tunnel, maybe the body wasn’t left here at all.” “Or the body was moved,” Eva countered, fingers tracing the sigils. “Those protective markings—Shade artisan work. They’re meant to guard the compass from hostile energies, not to hide a corpse.” Quinn moved deeper into the darkness, eyes scanning the walls for any faint glow. She noticed a faint line of soot that ran in a perfect curve along the vaulted ceiling, ending at a small crack near the far tunnel mouth. The crack was barely visible, but where the stone met metal, a thin wisp of vapor rose, curling like smoke. “Someone opened a portal,” Quinn whispered, her breath fogging in the cold air. “And closed it quickly enough that the vapor didn’t disperse.” Eva’s brow furrowed. “Portals don’t just close on command. You need a conduit, an artifact, a binding spell. That compass could be it—or a key.” The detective knelt beside the victim’s hand, noticing a faint indentation on the palm. She brushed away a speck of dust, revealing a tiny rune, barely raised, matching one of the sigils on the compass’s face. “Same symbol,” Quinn muttered. “Petrov knew how to use this. Maybe he was trying to seal something and… he got caught.” She rose, the compass still in her hand, its needle now pointing directly at the crack. “We need to follow this.” Eva hesitated. “You think the rift is still active? If it is, whoever—” “—whoever—might still be in there, or have left a trace,” Quinn finished, tapping the watch. “And if they didn’t want to be seen, they’d choose a place like this. The Veil Market moves every full moon; the crowd is a blend of mortals and… something else. A perfect cover.” Just then, a soft rustle echoed from the shadows near the stalls. A pair of gloved hands slipped a small pouch onto the ledge beside the compass. The pouch was sewn of dark fabric, the seam stitched with silver thread that caught the lantern light. “Hold it,” Quinn said, moving swiftly. She grabbed the pouch, feeling the weight of a few coins and a folded piece of parchment. She unfolded the parchment, eyes scanning the hurried script. “‘Do not trust the compass. It leads to the Veil’s heart, not its mouth. Only the Shade knows the true path.’” “Who wrote that?” Eva asked, voice low, eyes darting to the crack. Quinn didn’t answer; she pressed the compass needle against the parchment. The tip of the needle quivered, then steadied, aligning itself with a horizontal line drawn on the paper. A faint glow emerged from the line, illuminating the crack further. “Someone tried to mislead us,” Quinn said, snapping the parchment shut. “They wanted us to think the portal was here, but the compass points elsewhere. That’s why the evidence doesn’t add up: fresh ash, fresh lanterns, but a corpse that’s been here longer.” Eva flipped through her notebook, scribbling rapidly. “If the rift is elsewhere, the body could have been brought back through a secondary portal. The ash could be from the portal’s closing—single use, burns the surrounding stone. That would explain the crescent ash around the ear: a flare from the portal’s energy field.” Quinn glanced at the victim’s ledger, its ink dry but the date scribbled in a different hand: 12th of September, three days ago. The market’s schedule listed the full moon on the 15th. The ledger’s entries stopped abruptly. “Petrov stopped writing before the market moved,” Quinn mused. “Someone cut him off. Maybe the market’s rulers—” A sudden clatter erupted from the far tunnel. A metal barrel rolled down the incline, hitting the edge of a stall. A figure slipped out from behind a stack of crates, hood pulled low, face concealed. “Stay back,” Quinn ordered, stepping in front of Eva. She lifted the compass, letting the needle spin, then point directly at the figure’s feet. “You think that thing points to nothing,” the figure hissed, voice muffled. “It’s a trap for the untrained.” “Who are you?” Quinn demanded, voice steady, eyes scanning for any sign of a weapon. The hooded figure chuckled, a dry sound. “I’m the one who sold you the compass. You think you’re the first detective to chase a ghost in the Veil?” Eva’s fingers twitched, reaching for a small flashlight from her satchel, but the figure raised a hand, and the light sputtered, then died. The lanterns around them flickered, the shadows deepening as a low hum filled the air. “The market moves for a reason,” the figure said, stepping closer. “You think the evidence is wrong because you’re looking for a crime you understand. The Veil doesn’t play by your rules.” Quinn tightened her grip on the compass. “I understand the rules well enough to see a rift when I’m near one. The needle points to a breach, not to you.” A thin smile curved the figure’s lips. “You *see* the breach because you wear the watch that counts the seconds since the rift opened. Your partner’s death… you think it’s unrelated to this. It isn’t.” A sudden flash of memory struck Quinn—her partner, DS Morris, had vanished during a night raid on a suspected occult house, a scream swallowed by a sudden chill. She had never found the cause. The thought slammed into her like a fist. “The night Morris disappeared, a compass was found in his pocket,” the figure whispered. “You think it was a trinket. It was a Veil Compass. He was trying to follow a portal back to whatever took him.” Eva flinched, eyes widening. “That’s… that’s a coincidence.” “It’s not coincidence,” the figure snapped. “You’re standing on a rift that opened three days ago, fed by the market’s trade. The body you found is a decoy, a warning. The real prize—” A metallic clang rang out as the figure’s foot caught a loose pipe. The pipe spun, clanged against the wall, and a spray of oil burst forth, catching the compass's needle. The needle spun wild, then snapped back, pointing now toward the cracked tunnel mouth with an urgency that made the brass hum. The figure staggered, eyes widening. “—the heart of the Veil—” the voice cracked, then fell silent as the crack widened, a thin seam of black light seeping out. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She shoved Eva forward, away from the opening, and used the compass as a lever, thrusting it into the crack’s edge. The brass sank, the needle embedding as if it were a key. The dark light surged, a vortex of swirling colours sucking the air. “Hold onto the rail,” Quinn shouted, grabbing a metal pipe near the edge. She wrapped the compass’s brass in her free hand, feeling the warmth humming against her skin. Eva clutched her satchel tight, her breath ragged. “What happen—” “—the portal is sealing itself,” the figure croaked from behind the vortex, a thin smile forming even as ash began to coat its face. “You’ve bought yourself some time, detective. But the Veil always remembers.” The vortex’s pull grew stronger. Quinn tightened her grip on the compass, feeling its protective sigils glow faintly, pushing against the pull. She forced the compass deeper, aligning its needle with the rift’s core. The metal cracked, a bright pulse exploding outward, a flash that bathed the entire station in white light. When the light faded, the crack was gone, the darkness sealed. The humming stopped. The only sound left was the drip of water from the ceiling and the soft clatter of Eva’s satchel settling. The hooded figure lay crumpled on the ground, the dark fabric of the cloak torn, exposing a pale face etched with the same sigil as the compass. The face was no longer human; it shimmered, its skin flickering like a candle flame. Quinn stepped back, eyes locked on the creature’s hollow stare. “You were using the market as a cover,” she said, voice low, the words like a verdict. “Selling portals to anyone who could pay, then using the chaos to feed your own hunger.” The creature opened its mouth, a thin sigh escaping, then dissolved into a swirl of ash that rose to the ceiling, disappearing into the cracks of the stone. Eva exhaled, her shoulders slumping. “We—what do we do now?” Quinn tucked the Veil Compass into the pocket of her coat, feeling the brass warm against her hip. She glanced at the watch, its second hand still ticking. “First,” she said, eyes sweeping the cavern, “we secure this place. No more rogue portals. Then we find out who’s pulling the strings at the market. Whoever it is, they’ve just lost a tool.” Eva nodded, flipping a fresh page in her notebook. “I’ll cross‑reference the ledger with the market’s trade logs. If they’re moving every full moon, there’s bound to be a pattern.” A faint rustle echoed from a corner where a stall’s canvas half‑collapsed. A shadow moved, revealing a thin arm clutching a leather satchel identical to the one Eva carried. Inside, a bundle of papers lay, their edges glowing faintly. Quinn moved forward, hand outstretched. “What are you hiding?” The figure—no longer hooded—looked up, eyes dark, lips twisted. “You think this ends with a rift? This is only the opening, detective. The Veil is wider than you imagine.” Quinn’s gaze hardened. “Then I’ll learn every corner of it.” She turned toward the entrance, the lanterns sputtering back to life as the darkness receded. The station’s echo swallowed the last whispers of the portal, but the scent of oil and ash lingered, proof that something had been there. Eva followed, the satchel bouncing with each step, the Veil Compass tucked securely against Quinn’s chest. The market’s hidden stalls waited, their secrets still tangled in the underground. Quinn felt the weight of the compass, the memory of her partner’s disappearance, and the realization that the crime she’d been called to solve was only a fragment of a larger puzzle. She paused at the threshold, looking back at the sealed crack, then forward to the dim hallway that led to the city's veins. “Let’s see what the market has to say about a detective who knows how to read a compass,” she said, voice steady, and walked into the night.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the voice cracked then [then]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.411
leniency0.821
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.036
95.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2175
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
highlights
0"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2175
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"echo"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count4
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count4
5
word"etched"
count2
6
word"quivered"
count2
7
word"magnetic"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count2
11
word"furrowed"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count2
13
word"weight"
count2
14
word"flickered"
count1
15
word"chill"
count1
16
word"warmth"
count1
17
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"traced"
2"pulse"
3"throb"
4"scanning"
5"etched"
6"quivered"
7"magnetic"
8"raced"
9"tracing"
10"perfect"
11"furrowed"
12"echoed"
13"weight"
14"flickered"
15"chill"
16"warmth"
17"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences114
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences114
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords2167
ratio0
matches
0"see"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount1415
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.98
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn28
Tube1
Kowalski1
Eva19
September1
Morris1
Veil2
Compass2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Kowalski"
3"Eva"
4"Morris"
5"Compass"
places(empty)
globalScore0.511
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences93
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.461
wordCount2167
matches
0"not toward magnetic north but toward a faint, invisible line"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
81.08% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean33.34
std14.46
cv0.434
sampleLengths
072
151
212
349
427
535
656
753
838
915
1034
1130
1230
1361
1423
1525
1636
1721
1821
1913
2049
2145
2223
2330
2412
2540
2643
2752
2838
2917
3036
3124
3218
3315
3428
3538
3632
3730
3835
3942
4037
418
4233
4331
4427
4523
4648
4729
4810
4935
96.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences114
matches
0"was sewn"
1"was gone"
2"been called"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs263
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences147
ratio0.054
matches
0"Quinn’s eyes narrowed; she crouched, fingers brushing the grime away."
1"“The victim is a vendor—Mikhail Petrov, a known supplier of enchanted artifacts. His ledger was found in the pocket, but the ink is dry, as if he’s been dead for days. Yet the lanterns outside are only ten minutes old; the ash on the floor is fresh. Something’s off.”"
2"An odd hum brushed her ear—barely audible, like static."
3"“And if they didn’t want to be seen, they’d choose a place like this. The Veil Market moves every full moon; the crowd is a blend of mortals and… something else. A perfect cover.”"
4"Quinn didn’t answer; she pressed the compass needle against the parchment."
5"A sudden flash of memory struck Quinn—her partner, DS Morris, had vanished during a night raid on a suspected occult house, a scream swallowed by a sudden chill."
6"The face was no longer human; it shimmered, its skin flickering like a candle flame."
7"The figure—no longer hooded—looked up, eyes dark, lips twisted."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1420
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.03028169014084507
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.011971830985915493
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean14.74
std8.4
cv0.57
sampleLengths
023
113
221
315
415
513
613
710
812
917
1032
1110
1217
1317
1418
157
1649
176
1816
1910
2021
217
2222
239
249
256
267
2727
283
2927
3011
3119
3214
3327
3420
3513
3610
373
3822
3914
4022
414
4217
4316
445
452
4611
4715
4834
4912
39.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.2585034013605442
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners38
30.03% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"Just then, a soft rustle"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences111
matches
0"She glanced at the worn"
1"she called, voice low, the"
2"She moved to the side"
3"Its casing bore a verdigris"
4"She lifted the compass, turning"
5"She noticed a faint line"
6"She brushed away a speck"
7"She rose, the compass still"
8"She grabbed the pouch, feeling"
9"She unfolded the parchment, eyes"
10"She lifted the compass, letting"
11"She had never found the"
12"She shoved Eva forward, away"
13"She wrapped the compass’s brass"
14"She forced the compass deeper,"
15"she said, voice low, the"
16"She glanced at the watch,"
17"she said, eyes sweeping the"
18"She turned toward the entrance,"
19"She paused at the threshold,"
ratio0.189
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences111
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off"
1"The smell of oil and"
2"She glanced at the worn"
3"The metal face glinted dimly"
4"A body lay near the"
5"A thin line of ash"
6"Quinn’s eyes narrowed; she crouched,"
7"she called, voice low, the"
8"A figure emerged from a"
9"Eva Kowalski adjusted the round"
10"Eva said, pulling a notebook"
11"Quinn pressed the heel of"
12"Eva flipped a page, eyes"
13"Quinn stood, her sharp jaw"
14"She moved to the side"
15"A brass compass lay half-buried"
16"Its casing bore a verdigris"
17"She lifted the compass, turning"
18"The needle quivered, not toward"
19"An odd hum brushed her"
ratio0.964
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the rusted stairs that led from the hidden tunnel into the open cavern of the abandoned Tube station."
1"The needle quivered, not toward magnetic north but toward a faint, invisible line that pulled toward the far end of the tunnel."
2"She noticed a faint line of soot that ran in a perfect curve along the vaulted ceiling, ending at a small crack near the far tunnel mouth."
3"The metal cracked, a bright pulse exploding outward, a flash that bathed the entire station in white light."
4"She paused at the threshold, looking back at the sealed crack, then forward to the dim hallway that led to the city's veins."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"she called, voice low, the words snapping through the stale air"
1"Eva countered, fingers tracing the sigils"
2"Quinn whispered, her breath fogging in the cold air"
3"Eva asked, voice low, eyes darting to the crack"
4"the figure hissed, voice muffled"
5"Quinn demanded, voice steady, eyes scanning for any sign of a weapon"
6"she said, voice low, the words like a verdict"
7"she said, eyes sweeping the cavern,"
8"she said, voice steady, and walked into the night"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"Quinn whispered (whisper)"
1"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
2"Quinn ordered (order)"
3"the figure hissed (hiss)"
4"Quinn demanded (demand)"
5"the figure whispered (whisper)"
6"the figure snapped (snap)"
7"Quinn shouted (shout)"
8"the figure croaked (croak)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.321
leniency0.643
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.321
73.7096%