Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0G19V66PFPBM347K2K7N3B

Run Details

Model:: Claude Opus 4.7 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 29.8s
Cost:: $0.072900
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
69.01%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
69.01%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
36.36%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
97.65%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
95.83%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
92.84%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
73.43%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
65.36%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
70.98%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
67.84%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
98.04%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
71.43%	Technical jargon density	(details)
83.33%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
19.57%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
83.1339%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The oak standing stones rose from the wet earth like the ribs of some long-sleeping god, and Rory felt the pendant warm against her sternum as she passed between them.

"Don't step on the moss," Nyx said from her left, their voice barely more than a rustle of wind against her ear. In the grey afternoon light filtering through Richmond Park, they were almost solid — a tall silhouette with faintly violet eyes, the edges of their shape blurring whenever she looked too long. "That isn't moss."

She glanced down. What she had taken for a cushion of green lichen at the base of the nearest stone was slowly, very slowly, breathing. A slow, patient rise and fall, as if something beneath it dreamed.

"Right," she murmured. "Not moss. Got it."

The Fae-forged blade rode cold against her hip beneath her jacket, so cold she could feel it through two layers of fabric. Isolde had given it to her a week ago with a smile like a puzzle, and a promise that when the time came for Rory to see the grove proper, the blade would know the way. Rory hadn't understood. She was beginning to.

They stepped past the last of the stones, and the world changed.

The park noise ended — not faded, ended, as if someone had closed a heavy door behind her. The distant grumble of the North Circular, the sparrows, the tinny echo of a dog walker's voice, all of it snuffed out in a single breath. In its place, a low, layered hum rose from the ground itself: a chord, almost, pitched just beneath hearing, like a cathedral organ holding one enormous note forever.

The sky above was no longer grey. It was the soft bruised-gold of a summer evening, though Rory was sure the sun above London had been sulking behind November cloud. Wildflowers crowded the clearing knee-high, primrose and foxglove and bluebell all in full bloom together, a botanical impossibility grinning up at her in defiance of the season.

"It's beautiful," she said, and hated how small her voice sounded.

"It is," Nyx agreed. They moved a pace ahead of her, and she noticed that where she left prints in the damp loam, they left none — not because they floated, but because the earth simply forgot them. "Keep close. The grove likes to play with distance."

She wasn't sure what that meant until she tried it. She looked at a willow across the clearing — forty feet away, maybe — and took a step toward it. The willow was suddenly ten feet from her face, close enough to see the silver undersides of its leaves shivering without wind. She stopped breathing for a moment. When she blinked, it was forty feet away again.

"Okay," she said. "Okay, that's — that's fine. That's fine and normal."

"Don't stare at anything too long," Nyx said, the whisper of them curling around her. "It feels watched. It stares back."

They went on. Somewhere under the grass, a stream was running; she could hear it, but couldn't see it, and when she knelt to part the flowers, the sound shifted to her other side, coy. She stood up slowly. The pendant against her chest pulsed a low, steady warmth — not the sharp heat she'd felt near rift points before, but something gentler, like a hand laid over her heart. She wondered who had given it to her. She wondered, not for the first time, whether the benefactor had known she'd come here.

"Rory." Nyx had stopped. "Look."

She followed the line of their shadowed arm.

In the center of the clearing stood a ring of pale stones she had not seen a moment ago, smaller than the sentinels at the boundary, smooth as river pebbles but each the size of a man's skull. Within the ring, seated cross-legged on the grass as though she had been waiting a hundred years and might wait a hundred more, was Isolde.

Her silver hair pooled around her like spilled mercury. Her pale lavender eyes found Rory's and did not blink.

"You came," Isolde said, and her voice, strangely, carried the only entirely ordinary sound in this place. "I wondered if the blade would speak clearly enough."

"It spoke plenty," Rory said. She stepped across the ring of stones; the hum of the air deepened an octave as she crossed, as though acknowledging her, then settled. "This isn't the whole grove, is it."

Isolde's mouth tipped into something not quite a smile. "The grove you have seen is the porch. Would you like to come inside?"

Nyx went very still beside her. Even for a being of shadow, stillness could be loud; Rory felt the hesitation come off them like cold off a window.

"Inside," Rory repeated.

Isolde rose in one fluid motion and gestured behind her. Where there had been nothing but more flowers, a path now ran between two elder trees whose trunks were wound together into a braid, their leaves whispering in a language that was almost, almost words. Beyond them, the amber light pooled thicker, older, somehow — the light of a sky that had never known a city.

"The grove remembers the first forests," Isolde said. "Before maps. Before names. I do not go often. But you asked what you asked, Aurora Carter, and answers like yours are not kept in the shallows."

Rory set her hand to the hilt of the Fae blade. Cold bit through her palm, steadying her. She glanced at Nyx. The Shade inclined their head — not reassurance, exactly. Something more like *I am with you, for whatever that is worth here.*

"All right," she said. "Show me."

She stepped between the braided elders, and the light closed around her like water, and the hum of the grove became a song she almost, almost knew.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	12
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	23
tagDensity	0.522
leniency	1
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

69.01%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

968

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slowly"
count	3

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"suddenly"
count	1

highlights

0	"slowly"
1	"very"
2	"suddenly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

69.01%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

968

totalAiIsms

found

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"echo"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"sentinels"
count	1

highlights

0	"could feel"
1	"echo"
2	"whisper"
3	"pulsed"
4	"warmth"
5	"sentinels"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	58
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount	0
hedgeCount	0
narrationSentences	58
filterMatches	(empty)
hedgeMatches	(empty)

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	69
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	38
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

977

ratio

0.01

matches

0	"I am with you, for whatever that is worth here."

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	12
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

854

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.05

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	9
Richmond	1
Park	1
Fae-forged	1
North	1
Circular	1
London	1
November	1
Nyx	6
Isolde	6
Fae	2
Shade	1

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Shade"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"London"

globalScore

0.973

windowScore

0.833

36.36%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"as though acknowledging her, then settled"
1	"not quite a smile"

97.65%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.024

wordCount

977

matches

0	"not the sharp heat she'd felt near rift points before, but something gentler, like a hand laid over her heart"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	69
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.89

std

24.15

0.692

sampleLengths

0	30
1	57
2	37
3	7
4	65
5	12
6	72
7	57
8	11
9	47
10	67
11	12
12	21
13	93
14	5
15	8
16	63
17	19
18	26
19	36
20	23
21	28
22	3
23	66
24	35
25	44
26	6
27	27

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	58
matches	(empty)

95.83%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

128

matches

0	"was beginning"
1	"was running"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.145

matches

0	"In the grey afternoon light filtering through Richmond Park, they were almost solid — a tall silhouette with faintly violet eyes, the edges of their shape blurring whenever she looked too long."
1	"The park noise ended — not faded, ended, as if someone had closed a heavy door behind her."
2	"They moved a pace ahead of her, and she noticed that where she left prints in the damp loam, they left none — not because they floated, but because the earth simply forgot them."
3	"She looked at a willow across the clearing — forty feet away, maybe — and took a step toward it."
4	"Somewhere under the grass, a stream was running; she could hear it, but couldn't see it, and when she knelt to part the flowers, the sound shifted to her other side, coy."
5	"The pendant against her chest pulsed a low, steady warmth — not the sharp heat she'd felt near rift points before, but something gentler, like a hand laid over her heart."
6	"She stepped across the ring of stones; the hum of the air deepened an octave as she crossed, as though acknowledging her, then settled."
7	"Even for a being of shadow, stillness could be loud; Rory felt the hesitation come off them like cold off a window."
8	"Beyond them, the amber light pooled thicker, older, somehow — the light of a sky that had never known a city."
9	"The Shade inclined their head — not reassurance, exactly."

92.84%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	851
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	41
adverbRatio	0.0481786133960047
lyAdverbCount	11
lyAdverbRatio	0.012925969447708578

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	69
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.16

std

10.29

0.727

sampleLengths

0	30
1	22
2	32
3	3
4	3
5	22
6	12
7	3
8	4
9	22
10	36
11	3
12	4
13	12
14	18
15	26
16	28
17	7
18	23
19	27
20	11
21	4
22	34
23	9
24	10
25	20
26	22
27	6
28	9
29	3
30	9
31	15
32	6
33	3
34	32
35	4
36	31
37	8
38	15
39	4
40	1
41	8
42	38
43	25
44	9
45	10
46	17
47	9
48	5
49	24

73.43%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	6
diversityRatio	0.4927536231884058
totalSentences	69
uniqueOpeners	34

65.36%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere under the grass, a"

ratio

0.02

70.98%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She glanced down."
1	"She was beginning to."
2	"They stepped past the last"
3	"It was the soft bruised-gold"
4	"she said, and hated how"
5	"They moved a pace ahead"
6	"She wasn't sure what that"
7	"She looked at a willow"
8	"She stopped breathing for a"
9	"They went on."
10	"She stood up slowly."
11	"She wondered who had given"
12	"She wondered, not for the"
13	"She followed the line of"
14	"Her silver hair pooled around"
15	"Her pale lavender eyes found"
16	"She stepped across the ring"
17	"She glanced at Nyx."
18	"She stepped between the braided"

ratio

0.373

67.84%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The oak standing stones rose"
1	"Nyx said from her left,"
2	"She glanced down."
3	"A slow, patient rise and"
4	"The Fae-forged blade rode cold"
5	"Isolde had given it to"
6	"Rory hadn't understood."
7	"She was beginning to."
8	"They stepped past the last"
9	"The park noise ended —"
10	"The distant grumble of the"
11	"The sky above was no"
12	"It was the soft bruised-gold"
13	"Wildflowers crowded the clearing knee-high,"
14	"she said, and hated how"
15	"They moved a pace ahead"
16	"She wasn't sure what that"
17	"She looked at a willow"
18	"The willow was suddenly ten"
19	"She stopped breathing for a"

ratio

0.784

98.04%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Even for a being of"

ratio

0.02

71.43%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"In the grey afternoon light filtering through Richmond Park, they were almost solid — a tall silhouette with faintly violet eyes, the edges of their shape blurr…"
1	"A slow, patient rise and fall, as if something beneath it dreamed."
2	"Where there had been nothing but more flowers, a path now ran between two elder trees whose trunks were wound together into a braid, their leaves whispering in …"

83.33%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx said, the whisper of them curling around her"

19.57%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"she murmured (murmur)"
1	"Nyx agreed (agree)"
2	"Rory repeated (repeat)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.478

leniency

0.957

rawRatio

0.273

effectiveRatio

0.261

83.1339%