Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0G7YYP34N4843PN84H03FD

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Aurora?" The name landed wrong, like a coin dropped into the wrong pocket. Nobody in this bar called her Aurora. Rory, sometimes. Carter if Silas was being clipped about a delivery. But Aurora, full and formal, with that Cardiff lilt still riding under it, that was a voice from another country. She turned on the stool, pint halfway to her mouth. "Meredith." "God. It is you." Meredith Llewellyn stood in the doorway of the Raven's Nest like she wasn't sure the floor would hold her. Camel coat. A leather briefcase that probably cost more than Rory's scooter. Her hair had gone darker, the red tamed into a cut that would not forgive a windy day. "I thought I'd lost my mind." "You found it then." "Barely." Meredith came over, pulling the stool out beside her. The legs scraped. Silas, behind the bar polishing a glass he'd polished twice already, gave Rory a look. One brow. The smallest tilt of his head. *Trouble?* She shook her head a quarter-inch. He returned to the glass. "What are you drinking?" "Whatever's on. The bitter." "Two," Meredith said, and then, to Rory, "On me. Obviously." "Obviously." Silas pulled the pints without comment and set them down, then drifted to the far end of the bar where a man in a donkey jacket was losing an argument with a crossword. "You look well," Meredith said. "I look like someone who cycled eleven miles in the rain. Don't be a barrister about it." "I am a barrister about it." "I read. The Guardian ran that piece on the housing case." "You read The Guardian now." "I read the free one on the tube." Rory lifted her pint. "Same thing, smaller words." Meredith laughed, and there it was, the old laugh, dry and quick, the one that used to carry them through revision weeks in that damp flat on Cathays Terrace. For a second Rory could smell the place. Instant coffee. Wet trainers on a radiator. The highlighter Meredith always left uncapped. Then the laugh stopped and Meredith's face tidied itself back into something suitable for chambers. "Your father asked after you. In March. I ran into him at a thing." "A thing." "An Inn of Court thing." "Course you did." "He said he hadn't heard from you since Christmas." "Christmas was a phone call. That counts." "Did it." Rory ran her thumb along the crescent scar on her left wrist. An old habit. She'd been doing it, she realised, since Meredith walked in. "What brings you to Soho? You don't drink in places like this. You drink in places with a wine list and a consultation fee." "I had a conference. Kingsway. I was walking to the tube and I thought, I'll just have one somewhere nobody knows me." "Well. Congratulations." "I didn't know, Rory. How would I know." "You wouldn't." The donkey jacket man folded his paper and left. The door coughed shut. Somewhere above them a pipe clanked, a slow three-note complaint from the flat Rory rented from the man now pretending not to listen at the other end of the bar. "You just vanished," Meredith said. Quiet. Not accusing. Worse than that. "I didn't vanish. I moved." "You didn't answer. You didn't answer me, you didn't answer Sarah, you didn't answer anyone. We thought, Christ, Rory, we thought the worst." "I know what you thought." "Do you." "I had reasons." "Evan." Rory kept her eyes on the pump handles. Brass. Smudged. Silas was particular about most things and indifferent about others and she'd never worked out the pattern. "Evan," she said. An agreement. A full stop. "I wrote to you. After. I sent that card to your mum's." "She gave it to me." "You never-" "I know." Meredith picked up her pint and set it down without drinking. "I made silk last spring." "I saw." "Dad cried." "Bet he did." "Your dad was there." Rory looked at her then, fully, for the first time since she'd turned on the stool. Meredith's eyes were the same. Grey, flecked, steady. Everything around them had been rearranged by time and money and the particular violence of being taken seriously for a living, but the eyes were the same, and that was harder to bear than if they'd been strangers. "He was at your silks ceremony." "He sat with my mum. He was so proud of me, Rory, and I knew, the whole time I knew, he was wishing it was you." "He wasn't." "He was." "He wasn't, because it was never going to be me. That's the part you keep not hearing. It was never going to be me. Not in Cardiff, not in London, not in any version of the story where I got to choose." "You chose this?" Meredith's hand lifted, vague, taking in the bar, the polished glasses, the green neon bleeding through the window onto the floor in a soft sick colour. "This is what you chose?" "I chose not him. Everything after's just weather." Silas moved, somewhere in the periphery, and the movement was careful enough that Rory knew he'd heard. He wouldn't say anything later. He never did. That was half of why she stayed. "I'm sorry," Meredith said. "Don't." "I should have come. When you went. I should have got on a train." "You had finals." "I had finals." She said it like she was tasting the phrase and finding it off. "I had finals. God. Listen to me." "Meredith." "No, it's, listen, I tell myself I was a child. We were children. But I wasn't a child, I was twenty-two, and I knew. I knew what he was like. I saw the bruise on your arm in January and I let you tell me it was the bike." "It was the bike. That time." "Was it." Rory didn't answer. She hadn't been asked a question she owed an answer to in a long time and she'd forgotten the shape of it. Meredith opened her briefcase. Not for anything in particular, Rory realised, just for something to do with her hands. A reflex from a life Rory had never learned. Papers. A fountain pen. A card case in oxblood leather. "I'm not going to give you my card," Meredith said, looking into the briefcase. "I was going to. That's disgusting, isn't it." "A bit." "I'm so tired, Rory." "I know." "Do you." "No. I don't know your tired. I know mine." Meredith closed the briefcase. She laid her palm flat on top of it, the way she used to lay her palm flat on a textbook before an exam, as if she could press the knowledge up through her skin. The door opened. Two men came in, shaking rain off, loud with the particular loudness of men who'd been loud somewhere else first. Silas greeted them with the flat civility he reserved for strangers and steered them to the far booth. "I have to get the last train," Meredith said, not moving. "Paddington's ten minutes." "I know where Paddington is." "Then go." "Rory." "Meredith. Go. Get your train. Tell my father, next time you see him at a thing, tell him I'm fine." "Are you." From the booth, one of the men laughed, a big loose sound, and under it, closer, the bell above the door jangled as someone new pushed it open, and Rory felt the air change before she saw him, the way a room changes when a window breaks, and she knew, with the certainty of a body that had learned a particular fear by heart, who it was before she turned her head.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1268
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Sarah"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1268
totalAiIsms2
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"silk"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences72
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences72
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
98.45% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount1
maxSentenceWordsSeen72
ratio0.007
matches
0"\"You didn't answer. You didn't answer me, you didn't answer Sarah, you didn't answer anyone. We thought, Christ, Rory, we thought the worst.\""
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1268
ratio0.001
matches
0"Trouble?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
36.21% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount747
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.28
worstName"Meredith"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Meredith"
discoveredNames
Aurora2
Silas6
Cardiff1
Llewellyn1
Raven1
Nest1
Camel1
Rory15
Meredith17
Cathays1
Terrace1
Quiet1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Llewellyn"
2"Raven"
3"Rory"
4"Meredith"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Cathays"
2"Terrace"
globalScore0.362
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1268
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs89
mean14.25
std16.51
cv1.159
sampleLengths
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150
210
31
459
54
648
74
84
910
101
1133
125
1317
146
1511
165
1716
1850
1915
2014
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225
233
249
257
262
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2824
2922
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318
322
3343
3411
355
3623
375
382
393
401
4127
428
4312
445
452
462
4711
485
492
90.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences72
matches
0"being clipped"
1"been rearranged"
2"being taken"
3"been asked"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs117
matches
0"was losing"
1"was tasting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences138
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount749
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.025367156208277702
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004005340453938585
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean9.19
std10.5
cv1.143
sampleLengths
01
112
27
32
49
520
610
71
823
92
1010
1118
126
134
1410
153
1615
172
186
197
205
214
224
2310
241
2533
265
2717
286
2911
305
3112
324
3329
348
352
365
376
3815
3914
402
415
423
439
447
452
4612
473
4810
4924
58.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.4057971014492754
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences58
matches
0"Then the laugh stopped and"
1"Somewhere above them a pipe"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences58
matches
0"She turned on the stool,"
1"Her hair had gone darker,"
2"He returned to the glass."
3"She'd been doing it, she"
4"He wouldn't say anything later."
5"He never did."
6"She said it like she"
7"She hadn't been asked a"
8"She laid her palm flat"
ratio0.155
54.83% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences58
matches
0"The name landed wrong, like"
1"Nobody in this bar called"
2"Carter if Silas was being"
3"She turned on the stool,"
4"Meredith Llewellyn stood in the"
5"A leather briefcase that probably"
6"Her hair had gone darker,"
7"Meredith came over, pulling the"
8"The legs scraped."
9"Silas, behind the bar polishing"
10"The smallest tilt of his"
11"He returned to the glass."
12"Meredith said, and then, to"
13"Silas pulled the pints without"
14"Rory lifted her pint"
15"Meredith laughed, and there it"
16"The highlighter Meredith always left"
17"Rory ran her thumb along"
18"An old habit."
19"She'd been doing it, she"
ratio0.81
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
18.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"But Aurora, full and formal, with that Cardiff lilt still riding under it, that was a voice from another country."
1"She laid her palm flat on top of it, the way she used to lay her palm flat on a textbook before an exam, as if she could press the knowledge up through her skin…"
2"Two men came in, shaking rain off, loud with the particular loudness of men who'd been loud somewhere else first."
3"From the booth, one of the men laughed, a big loose sound, and under it, closer, the bell above the door jangled as someone new pushed it open, and Rory felt th…"
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Meredith said, not moving"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.205
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.6155%