Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0GC2G35BJ2TKJ62DTRQFH1

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Aurora? Aurora Carter?" The voice cut through the jukebox. Rory didn't turn at first. Nobody in London called her that; even Silas had graduated to Rory within a week of her taking the flat upstairs. She pretended to study the lime wedge sinking in her gin, counted to three, and then surrendered to the inevitable. Cerys Pritchard was standing by the stool beside her, one gloved hand resting on the back of it like she wasn't sure whether the wood would stain her coat. "Bloody hell," Rory said. "Cerys." "I thought it was you. I almost didn't, because, well." A laugh that wasn't quite a laugh. "You look tired." "Thanks." "I didn't mean it like that." "You did. It's fine." Cerys slid onto the stool. The coat came off, folded once, placed across her lap as though the bar itself might contaminate it. Camel cashmere. Silk lining the colour of good whisky. She'd been the sort of girl at Cardiff who wore charity-shop jumpers and rolled her own cigarettes and argued, red-faced and righteous, about legal aid reform until three in the morning. Now her hair was expensively blonde where it had been mouse-brown, and her nails were the kind you only got by sitting still for an hour at a time. "What are you drinking?" Cerys asked. "Gin." "God, yes." She waved vaguely at the bar. Silas, behind it, caught Rory's eye first, a flicker of something interrogative under the auburn brow. Rory gave him the barest shake of her head. He poured without speaking. "This place is a find," Cerys said. "I had a meeting up the road. I was looking for somewhere to wait out the rain. Just walked in." "Lucky me." "Don't be like that." "Like what?" "Like you were at the end. When you wouldn't answer anything." The jukebox rolled over into something with brass. Rory rotated her glass so the scar on her wrist caught the light, that thin pale crescent she'd had since she was seven, and watched Cerys pretend not to see it. "You live here?" Cerys asked. "London, I mean." "Above, actually." "Above what?" "Above here." Cerys looked up at the ceiling as though she might see through the boards to whatever Rory had made of herself. "You're working in a bar?" "I'm delivering for a Chinese restaurant. The bar's a bonus. The landlord gives me a discount." "Oh." There was a whole essay in that syllable. Rory had always admired Cerys's capacity for vocabularies of one. At the university mock trials she'd once reduced a boy to tears with the word "perhaps." "And you?" Rory asked. "You're in London for good?" "Chambers in Lincoln's Inn. Two years in." "Barrister, then." "Junior. Commercial." "Commercial." "Don't do that voice." "What voice?" "The Brendan voice." That was fair. Her father had a way of making "commercial" sound like "syphilis." Rory took a longer pull of her gin than she'd meant to. "Dad would be pleased someone ended up doing what he paid for. It wasn't going to be me." "He asks about you." "Does he?" "Through my mother. Not directly. You know how he is." "I know how he is." Rory set the glass down. "He's got my number. He always had my number." "It's been four years, Rory." "Has it." "You know it has." A woman at the other end of the bar laughed too loudly at something nobody else had heard. Silas moved along his boards with the economy of a man who had once done stiller, more dangerous work. He was listening. Of course he was. He always listened. "I heard you were in Dublin," Cerys said. "For a while." "For a minute." "And then?" "And then here." "That's the whole story?" "That's the whole story I'm telling." Cerys turned her glass by its stem. The new ring on her hand threw a little spur of light across the bar. She didn't mention it, which was how Rory knew it was recent, and important, and that Cerys was waiting to be asked. Rory didn't ask. Some meanness in her, old and comfortable, wouldn't let her. "You cut your hair," Cerys said instead. "Years ago." "It suits you." "It's hair." "Rory." "Cerys." "I wrote to you. After." "I know." "You didn't open them, did you." "I opened one." "Which one?" "The one with the photograph. From Aberystwyth." Cerys let out a breath that had been waiting since she'd sat down. "God. That weekend." "Yeah." "You were so happy." "I was twenty-one. Different thing." "Is it?" Rory didn't answer. She watched the ice move in her glass. It was the photograph she'd kept, actually, folded into the back of a book she never read anymore, a picture of the three of them on a sea wall, Cerys and Rory and a boy whose name she still couldn't say out loud without her throat doing something complicated. Evan had taken the photo. She remembered the shape of him crouching in the sand, squinting, telling them to move closer together. She remembered thinking he was kind. "Did you know," Cerys said, carefully, "he's in London now?" The bar sounds went thin and far away, as though somebody had turned a dial. "Don't." "I thought you should hear it from me." "Cerys." "I saw him last Tuesday. At a thing. He asked after you." "What did you tell him?" "Nothing. I said I didn't know." "Good." "But he knew, Rory. He already knew. He knew you were in London. He knew the postcode." Rory's hand went still on the glass. Down the bar, Silas had stopped wiping the same clean patch of wood and was watching her with the quiet attention of a man reading weather off a horizon. The door of the Raven's Nest opened behind them. Cold air. Wet coats. A laugh she hadn't heard in four years.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She waved vaguely [vaguely]"
1"the university mock trials she'd once [once]"
2"Cerys said instead [instead]"
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.077
94.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount975
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount975
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"flicker"
2"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences57
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords975
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
23.42% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount632
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.53
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London1
Silas4
Rory16
Pritchard1
Cerys15
Cardiff1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Rory"
2"Cerys"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.234
windowScore0.333
78.57% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences35
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite a laugh"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount975
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs80
mean12.19
std17.93
cv1.471
sampleLengths
03
152
229
35
420
51
66
74
892
96
101
1137
1227
132
144
152
1611
1739
188
192
202
212
2226
2316
241
2534
269
277
282
292
301
314
322
333
3444
354
362
3710
3819
395
402
414
4247
4311
443
452
463
474
486
4957
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs107
matches
0"was standing"
1"was listening"
2"was waiting"
3"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences122
ratio0.008
matches
0"Nobody in London called her that; even Silas had graduated to Rory within a week of her taking the flat upstairs."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount635
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.03779527559055118
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.009448818897637795
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean7.99
std8.12
cv1.015
sampleLengths
03
16
25
321
420
529
64
71
817
93
101
116
124
135
1418
152
167
1731
1829
196
201
218
2216
239
244
257
2620
272
284
292
3011
318
3231
335
343
352
362
372
3821
395
4016
411
428
4310
4416
454
465
477
482
492
67.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.45081967213114754
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners55
69.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"Of course he was."
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences48
matches
0"She pretended to study the"
1"She'd been the sort of"
2"She waved vaguely at the"
3"He poured without speaking."
4"Her father had a way"
5"He was listening."
6"He always listened."
7"She didn't mention it, which"
8"She watched the ice move"
9"It was the photograph she'd"
10"She remembered the shape of"
11"She remembered thinking he was"
ratio0.25
12.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences48
matches
0"The voice cut through the"
1"Rory didn't turn at first."
2"Nobody in London called her"
3"She pretended to study the"
4"Cerys Pritchard was standing by"
5"A laugh that wasn't quite"
6"Cerys slid onto the stool."
7"The coat came off, folded"
8"Silk lining the colour of"
9"She'd been the sort of"
10"She waved vaguely at the"
11"Silas, behind it, caught Rory's"
12"Rory gave him the barest"
13"He poured without speaking."
14"The jukebox rolled over into"
15"Rory rotated her glass so"
16"Cerys looked up at the"
17"Rory had always admired Cerys's"
18"That was fair."
19"Her father had a way"
ratio0.896
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"Now her hair was expensively"
ratio0.021
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She'd been the sort of girl at Cardiff who wore charity-shop jumpers and rolled her own cigarettes and argued, red-faced and righteous, about legal aid reform u…"
1"She didn't mention it, which was how Rory knew it was recent, and important, and that Cerys was waiting to be asked."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Cerys said, carefully,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences78
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.205
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.1842%