Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0GG9XJSEEWPYBM24FYCW3A

Run Details

Model:: Claude Opus 4.7 (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 31.3s
Cost:: $0.071500
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.15%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
45.54%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
98.98%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
81.23%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
93.33%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
76.92%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
58.33%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
80.7607%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert fiction writer.

Always keep the following rules in mind:
- Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang.
- Write in active voice
- Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle.
- Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions.
- Convey events and story through dialogue.
- Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety.
- Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech
- Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself.
- Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action.
- Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe"

When writing text:
- NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely.
- NEVER end with foreshadowing.
- NEVER write further than what I prompt you with.
- AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions.
- STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.

User/Human

Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response:
<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Continue the story using the following instructions:
<instructions>
Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
</instructions>

Model response

The archway shouldn't have been there.

Rory felt it before she saw it — the Heartstone warming against her sternum, a slow pulse like something asleep beginning to stir. She pressed her palm flat over it through her jumper and stopped walking.

"Nyx."

The shadow peeled itself from the ivy-choked wall beside her, coalescing into a shape that was almost a person. Violet eyes caught the light from nowhere.

"I feel it too," Nyx whispered, voice threading through the cold air. "Older than it should be."

Isolde moved past them without breaking stride, silver hair trailing like spilled mercury, bare feet pressing no print into the moss. She lifted a hand and the fog thinned.

"Step between the stones," she told them. "Mind the thresholds. One foot here, one foot there — you'll lose the foot you leave behind."

"Comforting," Rory muttered, and stepped.

The world hinged.

It wasn't a falling sensation, exactly. More like the inside of her ears remembered a pitch they'd forgotten, and her stomach re-learned gravity from scratch. When the green haze cleared, Rory found she was standing in a corridor of air.

Above them, a sky that wasn't sky — a vault of something more like water, stirred and lensed, and through it the pinprick suggestion of other stars. Not the ones she'd grown up under in Cardiff. Not any she could name. The light falling through had no obvious source; it pooled in hollows and left the high places dim, as though shadow and glow had been negotiated differently here.

Nyx drifted forward and their form thickened, gaining edges. "I've been incorporeal for three hundred and eighty years," they said. "I have solid hands right now."

"Is that bad?"

"It's strange." They flexed their fingers, watching the way the light refused to slide off them. "This place has rules. I can feel them."

Rory looked down. She stood on flagstones the colour of old bone, each one inscribed with a single glyph that shifted if she didn't stare at it directly. Between the stones, pale grass grew — no, not grass. When she knelt and touched a blade, it hummed against her fingertip, a note so low she felt it in her molars.

"Singing moss," Isolde said, already several paces ahead. "Don't harvest it. It remembers."

"Remembers what?"

"Hands."

Rory stood up.

They walked. The corridor opened into what might once have been a courtyard, ringed by pillars that had lost their tops to some very slow catastrophe. Each pillar was carved from a different stone — black basalt, a creamy pink marble veined with gold, one that looked like frozen smoke and wouldn't quite hold still in her peripheral vision. Nyx reached for the smoke-pillar and Isolde said, "No," without turning around, and Nyx's hand fell.

At the courtyard's centre stood a fountain. Dry. The basin was carved in the shape of something that had too many wings and not enough face, and at its heart sat a cup of hammered bronze. When Rory leaned close, she could smell wine in it. Not old wine — fresh, sharp, faintly spiced. There was no wine in it. Only dust.

"Dymasian work," Isolde said, coming to stand at her shoulder.

Rory's Heartstone warmed another degree. "Gluttony made this?"

"Gluttony built the cup. Someone else built the hall around it. This place predates Belphegor's rule, predates the drawing of the Veil." She tilted her head. "It is a pocket, child. A seam that closed over something and kept it."

"Kept what?"

Isolde's pale lavender eyes found hers. "That is what you are here to ask."

Further in, the architecture began to contradict itself. A staircase climbed to a landing that wasn't there, then folded and descended on the far side of the wall it had risen beside. An archway framed empty space and empty space framed a door. Rory stopped counting doors. Nyx had gone quiet in a way that unsettled her more than any of it, because Nyx was usually a layer of mocking commentary over everything.

"Talk to me," she said.

"There are echoes in this place," Nyx murmured. "Not ghosts. Echoes. Things that happened so loudly they kept happening."

She didn't ask them to elaborate. Somewhere to their left, a sound like laughter moved through a room they couldn't see and was gone.

They came to a chamber that took her breath.

The ceiling climbed out of sight, and where a roof might have capped it there was instead a canopy of branching crystal, each facet catching a memory of light and tossing it to the next. The floor had become a shallow pool of something clear as glass and warm as breath, and petals drifted on it — petals of no flower she knew, pale blue fading to black at their edges, smelling of cold iron and honey. In the pool's centre rose a dais, and on the dais an empty chair.

Not a throne. A chair. Wooden, simple, worn smooth by a use that had ended a long time ago.

Rory waded in. The water came only to her ankles and did not soak her jeans. When she touched the chair's back, the wood was warm.

"Someone sat here," she said. "Someone always sat here."

"For a very long time," Isolde agreed.

"What happened to them?"

The Half-Fae considered the chair with a softness Rory hadn't seen on her before. "They left," Isolde said. "Or they were removed. Or they are still here, and we cannot see them. The answer is yes."

Rory withdrew her hand. The Heartstone at her throat pulsed once — strongly enough that she flinched — and then steadied. Somewhere deep in the vault above, the crystal canopy gave a faint, glassy chime, as though a note she'd struck without knowing had finally found its mate.

Nyx appeared at the edge of the pool, their shadow-form bleeding slightly into the water around their feet. "Rory," they whispered. "Your pendant."

She looked down. The crimson stone wasn't only warm now. It was lit from the inside, and in its depths, something was beginning to open an eye.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	15
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	33
tagDensity	0.455
leniency	0.909
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

85.15%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1010

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"slightly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

45.54%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1010

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"comforting"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"marble"
count	1

word	"unsettled"
count	1

word	"echoes"
count	2

word	"crystal"
count	2

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulse"
1	"comforting"
2	"stomach"
3	"marble"
4	"unsettled"
5	"echoes"
6	"crystal"
7	"pulsed"
8	"depths"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	73
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	91
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	41
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1019
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	16
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

838

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.31

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Nyx"

discoveredNames

Heartstone	3
Isolde	7
Rory	11
Cardiff	1
Nyx	8
Half-Fae	1

persons

0	"Heartstone"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Rory"
3	"Nyx"
4	"Half-Fae"

places

"Cardiff"

globalScore

0.844

windowScore

0.833

98.98%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"quite hold still in her peripheral vision"
1	"looked like frozen smoke and wouldn't qui"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1019
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	91
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

24.85

std

23.14

0.931

sampleLengths

0	6
1	36
2	1
3	26
4	17
5	29
6	24
7	5
8	3
9	40
10	69
11	26
12	3
13	24
14	60
15	13
16	2
17	1
18	3
19	75
20	62
21	10
22	8
23	40
24	2
25	14
26	73
27	5
28	19
29	24
30	9
31	91
32	19
33	26
34	9
35	7
36	4
37	36
38	48
39	23
40	27

81.23%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"been negotiated"
1	"was carved"
2	"was carved"
3	"was gone"
4	"was lit"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

151

matches

0	"was standing"
1	"was beginning"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.088

matches

0	"Rory felt it before she saw it — the Heartstone warming against her sternum, a slow pulse like something asleep beginning to stir."
1	"Above them, a sky that wasn't sky — a vault of something more like water, stirred and lensed, and through it the pinprick suggestion of other stars."
2	"The light falling through had no obvious source; it pooled in hollows and left the high places dim, as though shadow and glow had been negotiated differently here."
3	"Between the stones, pale grass grew — no, not grass."
4	"Each pillar was carved from a different stone — black basalt, a creamy pink marble veined with gold, one that looked like frozen smoke and wouldn't quite hold still in her peripheral vision."
5	"Not old wine — fresh, sharp, faintly spiced."
6	"The floor had become a shallow pool of something clear as glass and warm as breath, and petals drifted on it — petals of no flower she knew, pale blue fading to black at their edges, smelling of cold iron and honey."
7	"The Heartstone at her throat pulsed once — strongly enough that she flinched — and then steadied."

93.33%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

834

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"Wooden, simple, worn smooth"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.0407673860911271

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.013189448441247002

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	91
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.2

std

8.84

0.79

sampleLengths

0	6
1	23
2	13
3	1
4	19
5	7
6	12
7	5
8	21
9	8
10	7
11	17
12	5
13	3
14	6
15	19
16	15
17	27
18	9
19	5
20	28
21	9
22	11
23	6
24	3
25	16
26	8
27	3
28	25
29	10
30	22
31	8
32	5
33	2
34	1
35	3
36	2
37	24
38	33
39	16
40	7
41	1
42	28
43	10
44	8
45	6
46	2
47	10
48	5
49	3

76.92%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	5
diversityRatio	0.4945054945054945
totalSentences	91
uniqueOpeners	45

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"More like the inside of"
1	"Further in, the architecture began"
2	"Somewhere to their left, a"
3	"Somewhere deep in the vault"

ratio

0.065

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She pressed her palm flat"
1	"She lifted a hand and"
2	"she told them"
3	"It wasn't a falling sensation,"
4	"They flexed their fingers, watching"
5	"She stood on flagstones the"
6	"She tilted her head"
7	"She didn't ask them to"
8	"They came to a chamber"
9	"She looked down."
10	"It was lit from the"

ratio

0.177

100.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The archway shouldn't have been"
1	"Rory felt it before she"
2	"She pressed her palm flat"
3	"The shadow peeled itself from"
4	"Violet eyes caught the light"
5	"Nyx whispered, voice threading through"
6	"Isolde moved past them without"
7	"She lifted a hand and"
8	"she told them"
9	"Rory muttered, and stepped"
10	"The world hinged."
11	"It wasn't a falling sensation,"
12	"The light falling through had"
13	"Nyx drifted forward and their"
14	"They flexed their fingers, watching"
15	"Rory looked down."
16	"She stood on flagstones the"
17	"Isolde said, already several paces"
18	"Rory stood up."
19	"The corridor opened into what"

ratio

0.71

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	62
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The shadow peeled itself from the ivy-choked wall beside her, coalescing into a shape that was almost a person."
1	"Above them, a sky that wasn't sky — a vault of something more like water, stirred and lensed, and through it the pinprick suggestion of other stars."
2	"The light falling through had no obvious source; it pooled in hollows and left the high places dim, as though shadow and glow had been negotiated differently he…"
3	"She stood on flagstones the colour of old bone, each one inscribed with a single glyph that shifted if she didn't stare at it directly."
4	"The basin was carved in the shape of something that had too many wings and not enough face, and at its heart sat a cup of hammered bronze."
5	"Nyx had gone quiet in a way that unsettled her more than any of it, because Nyx was usually a layer of mocking commentary over everything."
6	"Wooden, simple, worn smooth by a use that had ended a long time ago."
7	"Somewhere deep in the vault above, the crystal canopy gave a faint, glassy chime, as though a note she'd struck without knowing had finally found its mate."

58.33%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx whispered, voice threading through the cold air"
1	"Isolde said, coming to stand at her shoulder"

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1	"Rory muttered (mutter)"
2	"Nyx reached (reach)"
3	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
4	"Isolde agreed (agree)"
5	"they whispered (whisper)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.394

leniency

0.788

rawRatio

0.462

effectiveRatio

0.364

80.7607%