Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0MSBXRSR5XSF3TWNW5QS44

Run Details

Duration:
1m 21s
Cost:
$0.105890
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora left her bike chained to the last iron railing before the path gave up pretending to be a path. Richmond Park lay behind her in strips of moonless grass and black tree trunks, the city pushed so far back it might have belonged to someone else. No traffic. No late runners. No dogs tugging at leads. Even the planes had stopped dragging their bellies over London. She checked her phone. 23:17. No signal. “Course.” Her breath made a small white cloud. It should not have been that cold. April had come in damp and mild, all wet pavements and takeaway steam, but the air between the oaks bit through her jacket and needled the skin beneath her sleeves. The Heartstone pendant rested under her jumper, warm against her chest. Not warm. Hot. Rory hooked a finger beneath the silver chain and pulled it out. The deep crimson stone glowed with the dull pulse of something alive under skin, brightening, dimming, brightening again. The size of her thumbnail, Yu-Fei had called it “pretty trouble” when she had spotted it during Rory’s shift at the Golden Empress. Eva had called it “witchy”. Silas had told her not to wear anything that bled light after midnight. Rory had laughed at him then. She did not laugh now. Ahead, the old oaks stood in a half-circle, their trunks broad enough to hide doorways, their limbs bent over the grass like arthritic fingers. Between them, the standing stones waited. At first glance they looked like rotted stumps, black and hunched. Then she took three more steps and the moon slid from behind cloud, and the stones shone pale along their edges, each one cut with shallow grooves that no rain had filled. The pendant pulsed harder. “Right,” she breathed. “So this is either genius or the bit where I get my own plaque.” She had come because the pendant had woken her. Not chimed. Not flashed. Woken. At ten past ten, as she climbed the narrow stairs to the flat above Silas’ bar, it had gone hot enough to sting. She had yanked it off and dropped it into a mug by the sink. The mug had cracked down the middle. A thin red line had crawled across the ceramic, and through that split came a smell of wet ash and old pennies. Then the pendant had turned, on its own, the point of the stone dragging across the counter until it faced west. Richmond. She had known it without a map. That had been the worst part. Now she stood before the boundary of the Fae Grove, a place Eva had once described after too much wine and not enough sense. Hidden clearing. Oak stones. Flowers in winter. Time going strange round the edges. Rory had filed it with pub stories, fairy rings, and customers who swore the Golden Empress prawn crackers cured hangovers. The stone at the centre of her chest thudded once. The oaks answered. Not with sound. With pressure. Rory stepped between two standing stones, and the park vanished behind her like someone had drawn a curtain across the world. The Grove opened in front of her. Wildflowers covered the clearing, white and yellow and violet, blooming in thick clusters despite the cold. Their heads faced her. Every one. A narrow footpath cut through them towards a dark pool ringed with roots. Beyond the pool, more oaks crouched close together, their branches knitting a ceiling that kept the sky out. The place smelled of rain on hot stone, though no rain had fallen. Under that sat another scent, faint but sour. A kitchen bin left too long in summer. Burned sugar. Iron. Rory looked back. The standing stones stood behind her. Good. She fixed their shape in her mind: the left stone split near the base, the right one tilted like a bad tooth. Exit. Remember the exit. The pendant warmed again. “Find the portal, confirm it’s real, leave. That’s the whole plan.” Her voice went flat in the clearing. It did not echo. The words dropped from her mouth and disappeared before they reached the trees. She took the path. The flowers brushed her boots without moving. Their petals stayed turned towards her, rows of tiny pale faces. She kept her eyes on the pool and her hand around the pendant. Halfway across the clearing, something clicked behind her. Not a twig. Not a stone underfoot. A bike chain. Rory stopped. The sound came again. Metal links shifting. Then the soft chime of a bicycle bell, once, distant and polite. Her bike was outside the Grove. Chained to iron. “Nice try.” No answer. The flowers closest to her boots trembled. Nothing touched them. Rory turned. The standing stones remained at the edge of the clearing. Between them, where the path should have led back to Richmond Park, hung a narrow strip of darkness. Not shadow. Shadow belonged to things. This darkness had no source, no edge the eye could hold. It lay between the stones like a vertical wound. The pendant burned her palm. Rory let it go and sucked air through her teeth. A whisper moved behind her left ear. “Laila.” She spun. No one stood there. Her heart struck her ribs with enough force to hurt. The name had not been spoken in years. Evan had used it when he wanted to sound tender in public, when his hand clamped too tight around her wrist under restaurant tables, when he smiled at her parents and told them she got anxious over nothing. Rory rubbed the crescent scar on her left wrist without meaning to. “Don’t.” The Grove held still. Then, from the far trees, came a sound Rory knew better than she wanted to. The Golden Empress ticket printer. Chik-chik-chik-chik. She saw it without wanting to: the little white slips curling from the machine, Yu-Fei shouting table numbers over the hiss of woks, steam pearl-bright on the tiles, her own hands bagging orders, tying knots, counting change. Chik-chik-chik-chik. The sound came from the oak line beyond the pool. Rory moved towards it because the pendant pulled her that way. Each pulse tugged at her sternum. She had to lean against it, one foot after another, as if she walked into a hard wind no flower acknowledged. At the pool’s edge, she crouched. The water reflected nothing. Not the trees. Not the flowers. Not her face. It held a flat black surface, broken only by rings that widened from the centre though nothing had fallen in. The ticket printer stopped. A child laughed somewhere to her right. Rory stood so fast her knee popped. A girl in a red coat slipped behind an oak trunk at the edge of sight. “Oi.” The word came out sharper than she intended. The coat vanished. No footsteps followed. No rustle. No breath. Rory stared at the tree until her eyes watered. The bark held deep ridges, black and silver, and in one groove something pale gleamed. She lifted her phone, turned on the torch, and cut a white beam across the trunk. An old receipt had been pinned to the bark with a thorn. Golden Empress. Delivery order. Her name written at the bottom in Yu-Fei’s square capitals. RORY - TAKE THIS ONE LAST. The address line had smeared, but beneath it another line had appeared in cramped red letters. YOU WERE LATE. Rory stepped back from the tree. “No.” A wet tap sounded from the pool. Tap. Tap. Tap. She angled the torch down. The water had begun to ripple in time with the pendant’s pulse. The stone grew hotter with each ring, light leaking between her fingers. Her skin prickled. The sour smell thickened until she tasted copper at the back of her throat. The pool spoke in her mother’s voice. “Aurora, cariad, answer me.” Rory froze. Her phone screen lit in her hand. Mum. No signal still showed in the corner. The call kept ringing. The pool spoke again, voice soft and Welsh-warm and close enough to hurt. “I know you’re there. Don’t be stubborn.” Rory’s thumb hovered above the green icon. The pendant flared. Pain snapped through her palm, bright and clean. She dropped the phone. It landed in the grass with the torch still on, beam angled up through the flowers, making their stems into thin white bones. The ringing stopped. In the dark glass of the phone screen, another face appeared over her shoulder. Long. Pale. Too still. Rory did not turn. Her breath came through her nose, shallow, controlled. She kept her gaze on the phone, on the reflection standing behind her. It had the outline of a person, tall and narrow, with hair hanging in wet strings around a face without features. No eyes. No mouth. Only smooth skin stretched where expression should have been. It leaned closer. The pendant rested against her jumper, its glow turning the black fabric red. Rory lifted one foot. The reflected thing lifted none. She took one step forward. In the phone screen, it remained behind her, neck bending, featureless face lowering towards the place where her shoulder met her throat. “Not real.” The words barely crossed her teeth. A breath touched the back of her neck. Cold. Damp. Patient. Rory bolted. She snatched the phone as she ran, fingers closing around wet grass and plastic, and tore back along the path. Flowers whipped at her jeans. The clearing stretched longer than before. The standing stones had stood a few dozen metres away; now they crouched at the end of a tunnel of oaks she had not passed through on the way in. Behind her, something walked. Not ran. Walked. Its steps landed in the spaces between hers. When she stumbled, it stopped. When she caught herself and lunged on, it followed. Rory jammed the phone into her pocket and gripped the pendant. Heat soaked through her fingers. The stone’s pulse had changed. No longer a heartbeat. A knock. Knock. Knock. Knock. From the trees came the scrape of a chair across a classroom floor. Her mother’s work voice called roll. “Carter, Aurora.” A gavel cracked on wood. Her father, controlled and clipped: “Answer the question.” A pub glass shattered. Silas: “Rory, don’t look behind you.” She did. Only for a second. The path behind her held a crowd. They stood among the flowers, shoulder to shoulder, all turned her way. No faces. Just smooth pale ovals catching the pendant’s red light. One wore Yu-Fei’s apron. One had Eva’s short boots. One stood in Evan’s long dark coat, hands tucked into pockets, head tilted at an angle she knew from arguments that had started in whispers and ended with bruises hidden under sleeves. The one in the coat raised a hand. It held her silver chain. Rory looked down. The pendant still hung around her neck. The chain in its hand lengthened, link by link, until it dragged through the flowers like a snake. “Laila.” That voice no longer sounded like Evan. It sounded like every voice at once, stacked wrong. Rory ran harder. The standing stones rushed towards her, then slid away to the left as the path bent. It had not bent before. She skidded, boots carving mud from earth that had been dry a moment ago. “No. Absolutely not.” She cut off the path and plunged through the flowers towards the stones. Petals burst beneath her steps without scent. Stems tangled around her ankles. Something thin caught her wrist. She yanked free. The crescent scar burned. A child giggled near her knee. “Found you.” Rory kicked through the flowers and hit open ground. The stones stood ahead, split one on the left, tilted one on the right. Between them, the vertical darkness pulsed with the same red light as the Heartstone. Behind her, the crowd inhaled. One shared breath. The whole Grove leaned in. Rory reached the stones and slammed a hand against the left one. Cold bit into her palm. The grooves in the stone crawled under her skin like writing rearranging itself beneath dust. The darkness between the stones did not open to Richmond Park. It opened to a narrow corridor lit by swinging kitchen bulbs. White tiles. Steam. A delivery bag sat on the floor at the far end, red with the Golden Empress logo. Beyond it, something knocked from the other side of a metal door. Knock. Knock. Knock. The pendant answered each blow. Rory stepped back. “That’s not my exit.” The crowd had reached the pool. They did not cross it. They waited at the water’s edge, their pale heads lifted. The figure in Evan’s coat stood in front now. It curled one hand around its own wrist, squeezing, showing her. The old ache sparked in Rory’s bones. She took the pendant off. The Grove’s sounds cut out. No ticket printer. No classroom. No bike bell. No breath at her neck. Silence fell so hard her ears rang. The Heartstone burned in her hand, crimson light seeping between her fingers and washing the standing stones in the colour of fresh embers. The chain dangled, cold against her knuckles. The corridor between the stones flickered. For one blink, she saw Richmond Park: the dark grass, the iron railing, her bike waiting under a bare-limbed tree. Then the corridor returned. Rory looked at the pendant. “Fine. You want the door?” She hurled the Heartstone into the pool. The throw cut clean through the air. The silver chain flashed once, then the stone hit the black water without a splash. The pool swallowed the glow. For half a second, nothing moved. Then every flower in the Grove turned away from her. The crowd at the pool snapped its heads down towards the water. The featureless figure in Evan’s coat unfolded its hands and stepped into the pool’s edge, sinking to the ankle in a surface that had held solid moments before. The standing stones groaned. Rory lunged between them. Cold closed around her, tight as a fist. The corridor vanished. Darkness pressed against her eyes, her teeth, the hollow under her tongue. Something brushed her left wrist, searching for the scar. Rory drove her shoulder forward and tore through. She hit wet grass on hands and knees. Richmond Park spread around her, vast and empty beneath a thin slice of moon. Her bike stood by the railing. The city hummed somewhere beyond the trees, distant but real. Her phone buzzed in her pocket once, then died. Behind her, the two standing stones faced each other with nothing between them but night. Rory pushed herself upright, mud on her palms, breath scraping her throat. Her chest felt bare without the pendant. Cold crept through the place it had rested. From inside the Grove, soft and far away, came the Golden Empress ticket printer. Chik-chik-chik-chik.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.182
leniency0.364
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2470
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.64% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2470
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"pulse"
count4
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"shattered"
count1
7
word"absolutely"
count1
8
word"shared breath"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"pulsed"
2"echo"
3"trembled"
4"whisper"
5"footsteps"
6"shattered"
7"absolutely"
8"shared breath"
9"silence"
10"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences302
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences302
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences321
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2471
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.09% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions103
wordCount2388
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.3
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Park5
London1
Heartstone4
Yu-Fei4
Rory31
Golden6
Empress6
Silas2
Fae1
Grove8
Eva3
Richmond6
Welsh-warm1
Evan5
Chik-chik-chik-chik3
Tap3
Cold4
Knock6
One4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
5"Evan"
6"Tap"
7"Cold"
8"One"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"Golden"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
5"Richmond"
globalScore0.851
windowScore1
87.11% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences159
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like rotted stumps, black and hunc"
1"appeared over her shoulder"
2"sounded like Evan"
3"sounded like every voice at once, stacked"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2471
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences321
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs198
mean12.48
std15.49
cv1.241
sampleLengths
020
147
24
31
42
51
644
711
83
971
106
115
1273
134
1417
159
165
1766
1821
191
207
216
2257
2310
243
255
2621
277
2853
2932
303
316
321
3326
344
3511
3624
374
3831
398
407
413
422
4319
449
452
462
4710
482
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences302
matches
0"been spoken"
1"been pinned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs388
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences321
ratio0.006
matches
0"RORY - TAKE THIS ONE LAST."
1"The standing stones had stood a few dozen metres away; now they crouched at the end of a tunnel of oaks she had not passed through on the way in."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount346
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.02601156069364162
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.002890173410404624
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences321
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences321
mean7.7
std6.71
cv0.872
sampleLengths
020
127
22
33
45
510
64
71
82
91
107
117
1230
1311
142
151
1612
1718
1823
195
2013
216
225
2324
246
2511
2632
274
283
2914
309
312
322
331
3423
3514
367
3722
3821
391
407
416
4224
432
442
453
466
4720
4810
493
38.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats37
diversityRatio0.2875
totalSentences320
uniqueOpeners92
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount11
totalSentences243
matches
0"Even the planes had stopped"
1"Then she took three more"
2"Then the pendant had turned,"
3"Then the soft chime of"
4"Then, from the far trees,"
5"Only smooth skin stretched where"
6"No longer a heartbeat."
7"Only for a second."
8"Just smooth pale ovals catching"
9"Then the corridor returned."
10"Then every flower in the"
ratio0.045
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences243
matches
0"She checked her phone."
1"Her breath made a small"
2"It should not have been"
3"She did not laugh now."
4"She had come because the"
5"She had yanked it off"
6"She had known it without"
7"Their heads faced her."
8"She fixed their shape in"
9"Her voice went flat in"
10"It did not echo."
11"She took the path."
12"Their petals stayed turned towards"
13"She kept her eyes on"
14"Her bike was outside the"
15"It lay between the stones"
16"Her heart struck her ribs"
17"She saw it without wanting"
18"She had to lean against"
19"It held a flat black"
ratio0.222
81.40% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount184
totalSentences243
matches
0"Aurora left her bike chained"
1"Richmond Park lay behind her"
2"She checked her phone."
3"Her breath made a small"
4"It should not have been"
5"April had come in damp"
6"The Heartstone pendant rested under"
7"Rory hooked a finger beneath"
8"The deep crimson stone glowed"
9"The size of her thumbnail,"
10"Eva had called it"
11"Silas had told her not"
12"Rory had laughed at him"
13"She did not laugh now."
14"The pendant pulsed harder."
15"She had come because the"
16"She had yanked it off"
17"The mug had cracked down"
18"A thin red line had"
19"She had known it without"
ratio0.757
20.58% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences243
matches
0"Now she stood before the"
ratio0.004
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences88
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Rory had filed it with pub stories, fairy rings, and customers who swore the Golden Empress prawn crackers cured hangovers."
1"In the phone screen, it remained behind her, neck bending, featureless face lowering towards the place where her shoulder met her throat."
2"One stood in Evan’s long dark coat, hands tucked into pockets, head tilted at an angle she knew from arguments that had started in whispers and ended with bruis…"
3"She skidded, boots carving mud from earth that had been dry a moment ago."
4"The featureless figure in Evan’s coat unfolded its hands and stepped into the pool’s edge, sinking to the ankle in a surface that had held solid moments before."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences22
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