Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0N6V3Y7Q1V3H33W4WQ3711

Run Details

Duration:
2m 42s
Cost:
$0.201050
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven’s Nest wore rain like a second skin. Water crawled down the front windows, bending the green neon sign into a smear over the Soho pavement. Inside, the bar kept its usual half-light: brass lamps under green shades, old maps pinned beneath glass, black-and-white photographs of streets no one in the room had walked down in decades. The air held lemon peel, spilt stout, wet wool, and the faint pepper heat from the two paper bags Rory had carried over from Golden Empress. She set the food on the bar and flexed her fingers. The red plastic handles had cut pale grooves into her skin. The small crescent scar on her left wrist flashed when she pulled her sleeve back down. Silas glanced at it, then at the door. His silver signet ring knocked once against the counter. “Table seven ordered enough duck to start a village fair.” Rory slid one bag towards him. “Table seven can start by paying Yu-Fei, then the village can vote.” A corner of Silas’s mouth lifted beneath his trimmed beard. He took the receipt, his left knee stiff when he turned. The limp came and went with the weather; tonight, the rain had got its teeth in him. He moved through it without complaint. “New face in the back,” he murmured. “Came in ten minutes ago. Asked for whisky, changed her mind, ordered tap water, then stared at the Sarajevo map as if it owed her money.” “Tourist?” “Too tired for a tourist. Too dry for a copper.” Rory reached for a towel and wiped a crescent of beer from the counter. “That your professional opinion?” “That was the free sample.” She looked over. The woman sat beneath the largest map, where the Danube cut through yellowing paper in a blue vein. She had one hand around a glass of water, the other flat on the table beside a black leather folder. Her coat looked expensive in the way quiet money looked expensive: no shine, no logo, cut sharp enough to draw blood. Her hair, once it caught the lamp, showed itself as pale silver, clipped short to the skull. Rory’s gaze moved on, then snapped back. Not the hair. Not the coat. The tilt of the head. The left thumb worrying the skin at the side of the nail until a tiny white half-moon appeared. Rory stopped wiping. The woman lifted her eyes. For a moment the bar thinned out: no glasses, no rain, no scrape of chairs, no Silas placing duck pancakes beside two men arguing about Arsenal. Only those eyes across the room, darker than Rory remembered, set in a face stripped of its old roundness. The woman rose too fast. Her chair leg barked against the floor. “Rory?” No one in London said it that way. Not quite. The first sound tucked under the tongue, half Cardiff, half schoolyard dare. Rory put the towel down. “Eva.” The name came out flat. It landed between them and stayed there. Eva’s mouth moved before she found anything useful. She picked up the glass, set it down, picked it up again. “I didn’t know you worked here.” “I don’t.” Eva looked at the delivery jacket. Golden Empress blazed across Rory’s chest in gold thread gone fuzzy at the edges. Rory unzipped it. “I bring food. I live upstairs.” “Above a bar?” “Below the moon. Depends how poetic you feel.” Eva gave a small laugh, but it broke before it became anything. She pushed the chair back with her knee. “You look—” “Don’t.” Eva nodded once. “Right.” Silas came behind the bar and glanced between them. He had the sense not to tidy anything. “Another drink?” Eva touched the rim of her water. “No. Thank you.” Rory reached for two clean glasses. “Whisky. The quiet one. Not the bottle you sell to men with cufflinks.” Silas took down a squat bottle without looking at the label. Eva watched him pour. “You drink whisky now?” “I also pay council tax and own a screwdriver.” “You hated whisky.” “I hated a lot of things because I had no money and a dramatic fringe.” Eva’s eyes shifted to Rory’s hair, black and straight at her shoulders. “You cut it.” “You dyed yours out of existence.” “I shaved it first.” “I noticed.” Silas placed the glasses down. “On the house.” Rory looked at him. “Old maps like an audience.” He took his limp towards the far end of the bar, where a tourist couple pretended not to listen. Eva sat again only after Rory did. The table between them carried rings from years of glasses, pale ghosts overlapping each other. Rory put her fingers on one and traced its edge. She remembered Eva at fifteen, all bitten nails and green hair, drawing skulls on school exercise books while Mr Pritchard explained contract law to a room of children who wanted lunch. Eva had not belonged in rooms with rules then. Now the rules had dressed her. The black folder sat by her elbow, thick with papers. Rory tipped her chin towards it. “You’re one of them.” “One of who?” “The folder people.” Eva glanced down. “Briefs.” “Course they are.” “I’m a solicitor.” Rory let the whisky touch her lips. It burned clean. “You?” “I passed. Somehow.” “You once glued Mr Davies’s stapler to his desk.” “He survived.” “You wanted to paint murals on underpasses.” “I did paint two.” “And then?” Eva’s thumb went back to the side of her nail. “Then rent wanted paying.” Rory looked at the coat, the folder, the neat silver stud in Eva’s ear where three cheap hoops used to climb the cartilage. “Rent must have got greedy.” Eva’s face tightened. “You still do that.” “What?” “Say something with a butter knife and pretend it’s a spoon.” Rory almost smiled. The old rhythm reached for her, rude and bright, but there was too much distance for it to cross without tearing. Eva lifted the whisky and sniffed it. “God, that’s awful.” “That’s because you haven’t swallowed it.” Eva took a sip. Her eyes watered. She pressed the back of her hand to her mouth. “You were meant to warn me.” “You walked into my local in a courtroom coat. Consider this cross-examination.” “There she is.” The words struck harder than Rory expected. She looked away, past Eva’s shoulder, to a photograph of a street in Prague with tram wires stitched across a white sky. Silas never told the full story behind that one. Men like him preferred maps because maps left out the screaming. Eva lowered her glass. “Sorry.” “Don’t do that either.” “What, apologise?” “Use that voice. Like you’ve found a bruise and want to see if it still hurts.” Eva breathed through her nose. “Does it?” Rory turned back. The bar noise filled the gap: ice in a tin, a stool dragging, rain pattering the window. Someone laughed near the door, too loud, then lowered his head when Silas looked over. Eva’s face had changed with intent. It had narrowed around purpose. The softness of Cardiff had gone from her cheeks; the girl who used to steal chips from Rory’s tray and grin with vinegar on her chin had been planed down into this woman with careful nails and shadows under her eyes. Rory tapped the table. “What are you doing here?” “In the bar?” “In London. In this postcode. Under that map.” Eva looked up at the Danube as if it might supply a nicer answer. “Client meeting off Dean Street. They ordered wine I didn’t want, laughed at things I didn’t understand, then one of them called me girl. I left.” “Good.” “I walked. Saw the sign.” “The green lures in the damaged.” Eva gave a dry breath. “Still sharp, then.” “You still dodged questions, then.” Eva’s jaw shifted. She put both hands around the whisky glass. “I moved here three years ago.” Rory stared at her. “Three years.” “I know how many.” “I didn’t know you were here.” “You sent me here.” Eva flinched. Not much. Enough. Rory leaned back. “You remember that part, yeah?” “I remember all of it.” “No, you remember texts. You remember being brave with a battery percentage.” Eva’s fingers whitened around the glass. “That’s fair.” “Don’t agree with me. It annoys me.” “It is fair.” Rory laughed once, without warmth. “There she is.” Eva looked down. Rory saw the small tremor in her left hand then. Not fear. Exhaustion, perhaps. Too much coffee. Too many years holding herself still. The nail beside her thumb had started to bleed. “You used to answer the phone,” Rory continued. “At midnight. At three. From toilets at parties, from buses, from your nan’s kitchen. You’d pick up and say something filthy before hello.” Eva’s voice came low. “I remember.” “Then when it mattered, you texted me an address.” “I sent money.” “Forty quid.” “It was all I had.” “I know.” Eva lifted her eyes. Rory hated that she did know. Hated the memory of the cashpoint outside Cardiff Central, the receipt in her hand, the impossible kindness of forty pounds from someone whose bank balance lived in single digits. Hated the coach smell, hot plastic and old crisps. Hated the way she had kept one sleeve pulled over the bruises on her wrist, the crescent scar hidden as if Evan had put that there too. Eva swallowed. “I should have come.” Rory looked at the whisky. “You didn’t.” “No.” “You told me, ‘Get out now, Laila. Don’t pack books, don’t pack guilt, don’t leave a note.’” Eva’s mouth pinched at the old nickname. “I kept the books.” “Of course you did.” “I left the guilt. It found my forwarding address.” Eva let out a breath that shook. “I was scared of him.” Rory kept still. The sentence sat naked on the table. Eva had never said that. Not in the texts. Not in the voicemails Rory had refused to play. Not in the six-line email that arrived nine months later with no subject and too much punctuation. Eva looked at the rain-streaked window. “He came to mine after you left.” Rory’s fingers stopped on the glass ring. “When?” “Next day.” “You never told me.” “You changed your number.” “You had my email.” “You didn’t answer the first one.” “So you stopped?” Eva’s eyes flashed. “I was twenty-two, Rory. I had a man in my stairwell putting his fist through the fire door because he thought I’d hidden you in my bath. My flatmate moved out that night. My landlord told me trouble followed girls like me. I slept at work for a week behind a filing cabinet.” Rory heard her own breath. Eva pressed her bleeding thumb into a napkin. “I’m not offering that as a receipt. I’m telling you because I should have told you then.” Rory stared at her. The old anger, fed for years on silence, lifted its head and found another animal in the room. Not smaller. Not gone. Different. “You could have rung Silas,” Rory murmured. “I didn’t know Silas existed.” “He didn’t, to you.” “Exactly.” Rory rubbed the heel of her hand against her forehead. “I thought you’d washed your hands of me.” “I thought you were alive and hated me. I took the bargain.” The simplicity of it struck the table harder than any apology. Silas passed behind them to collect empty glasses. He did not look over. His ring caught the green light and threw it onto the wood in a small, cold spark. Eva watched him move away. “He helped?” Rory nodded. “He gave me the flat. Cash shifts. A lock Evan didn’t know.” “Good.” “Don’t sound so relieved. You’ll hurt yourself.” Eva looked at her. “I was relieved every time I checked the court listings and didn’t see your name.” Rory frowned. “Court listings?” “I looked.” “For what?” “Assault. Injunctions. Anything. I had no right to, but I did.” Eva pushed the folder aside as if it had begun to smell. “First as a receptionist. Later with passwords I shouldn’t have used. I told myself if your name didn’t appear, you had got clear.” Rory stared at the old map. Cities bloomed in black print, neat and bloodless. “You could have found me.” “I found three Aurora Carters. One in Swansea, one in Croydon, one dead in 1984.” “Cheerful.” “Your father came up once. Brendan Carter, barrister. I closed the screen.” Rory’s throat tightened at the sound of her father’s name in Eva’s mouth. “Why?” “Because if I called him, I’d have to say I lost you.” The bar door opened, letting in wet air and a man in a navy coat. Silas took him with a nod. The green neon flickered over Eva’s shaved head, over the faint lines near her eyes that had not been there in Cardiff. Rory picked up her whisky and emptied half of it. Eva watched. “You still speak to them?” “Mam rings on Sundays. Dad sends articles about legal aid cuts and pretends that counts as affection.” “He always terrified me.” “He terrifies judges. Children were a hobby.” Eva smiled then, and for a second Rory saw the girl from school: chipped black nail varnish, chewing gum tucked in her cheek, laughing outside the headteacher’s office while rain soaked both their blazers. Then Eva’s smile folded away. “I saw Evan last year.” Rory’s glass touched the table with no sound. Eva did not rush. “At a charity thing. One of the partners invited him. He had a new suit and a woman with yellow hair holding his sleeve.” Rory felt her wrist prickle beneath the fabric. “What did you do?” “I dropped a tray of smoked salmon on his shoes.” Rory blinked. Eva’s face stayed grave for half a breath, then cracked. “Not on purpose.” “Liar.” “Entirely on purpose.” Rory laughed before she could stop herself. It came out rough, unused. A few heads turned. Silas, at the bar, did not. Eva’s laugh joined it, quieter, edged with something close to pain. They both let it die on its own. “He knew me,” Eva added. “He said my hair suited me.” Rory’s hand closed around the glass. “I told him his shoes didn’t.” “Eva.” “I know.” “No, you don’t. Was he—” “He didn’t touch me.” Rory heard the question she had not asked and hated that Eva had answered it. Eva folded the blood-marked napkin into a square. “He looked old.” “He was old at twenty-eight.” “He looked smaller.” “They do, from a distance.” Eva studied her. “You sound like you got some distance.” Rory looked around the bar: the maps, the photographs, Silas’s bent knee, the bookshelf at the back that never opened when strangers watched. Above them, her small flat waited with its narrow bed, its kettle, its two mugs though she lived alone. Distance had not arrived as a clean line. It had come in deliveries, rent receipts, new locks, a winter coat bought second-hand, nights when she woke with her hands already fists. “I got metres,” she answered. “Some days kilometres.” Eva nodded. “Good.” “You say that like you mean it.” “I do.” “That’s worse.” “Why?” “Because I kept a version of you I could be angry at. She had green hair and no spine.” Eva touched her short silver hair. “This version has a spine and a pension plan.” “Disgusting.” “I floss now.” “Get out.” Eva smiled into her glass but did not drink. The smile did not last long. “I kept a version of you too,” she said. “You were always on a coach. Every time. Bag on your lap. Looking out the window. Never arriving.” Rory’s chest pulled tight. “I arrived.” “I can see that.” “No. Say it properly.” Eva met her eyes. “You arrived.” Rory let the words settle. They did not heal anything. They did not need to. They put one brick where a wall had caved in. Silas came over with a fresh napkin and placed it by Eva’s hand. “Thumb,” he noted. Eva looked down, as if surprised to find blood there. “Occupational hazard.” “Your occupation bites?” “Only when cornered.” Silas’s hazel eyes moved to Rory. “Kitchen’s still open if old ghosts require chips.” Rory snorted. “You don’t have a kitchen.” “I have crisps and imagination.” Eva looked between them. “He always like this?” “Worse when trusted.” Silas gave a small bow and limped away. Eva waited until he left. “He looks after you.” Rory rubbed the scar on her wrist with her thumb. “He lets me look after myself where he can see it.” Eva absorbed that. “That sounds better.” “It is.” The rain softened against the glass. Somewhere near the door, the man in the navy coat ordered gin. The tourist couple argued over a map of London on a phone while sitting beneath a map of Europe carved up by dead men. Eva pushed the leather folder further away. “I almost didn’t come in.” “Because of the sign?” “Because I saw you through the window.” Rory’s eyes narrowed. “You said you didn’t know.” “I didn’t, until then.” “You watched me?” “For about ten seconds.” “Creepy.” “You were carrying those bags and arguing with that man about duck.” “Silas started it.” “You looked… busy.” Rory leaned back. “That stopped you?” “No.” Eva’s hand hovered near the whisky. “You looked like someone who had built a life without leaving room for me to apologise in it.” Rory looked at the rings on the table again. One over another, year over year, no clean wood left. “I didn’t build it for you.” “I know.” “I didn’t build it against you either.” Eva’s mouth softened. Rory reached across and slid the clean napkin closer to Eva’s bitten thumb. Their fingers did not touch. “Press harder,” Rory muttered. “You’re bleeding on Silas’s history.” Eva obeyed, the napkin brightening in one spot. “For the record,” Rory added, “your hair looks expensive and a bit tragic.” Eva huffed. “Your jacket looks flammable.” “It is. Yu-Fei called it budget-friendly.” “Is Yu-Fei the one who sends threatening Christmas cards?” “That was one time, and the threat was implied.” Eva shook her head, but her eyes stayed wet at the edges. She did not wipe them. Rory respected that. “You still in Pre-Law?” Eva asked, then grimaced. “Stupid question.” “No.” “I knew that.” “I left Cardiff. Left the lectures, left the essays, left Dad’s dream of Carter versus The Crown.” “You were good.” “I was tired.” “You can be both.” Rory turned the glass between her palms. “You became what I was running from.” Eva looked down at her suit. “Yes.” “That was cruel of me.” “It was accurate.” “I don’t know if those are different tonight.” Eva sat with that, shoulders squared beneath her fine coat. “I thought law would feel like a weapon.” “Does it?” “Some days. Most days it feels like carrying a piano up stairs for people who own lifts.” Rory barked a laugh. Eva smiled without victory. “But sometimes a girl comes in with no coat, and someone has taught her to say it was her fault before she’s even sat down. On those days, I’m useful.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the glass. “You do that work?” “Not enough. More than my boss likes.” Rory nodded once. There were things she could have said then. Thank you for the forty quid. I needed you. I hated you because it was easier than missing you. I was alive, but not in any way that would have reassured you. Instead, she lifted Eva’s whisky and swapped it with her own glass. Eva glanced down. “Why?” “You’ve been nursing that like medicine. Mine’s less offensive now.” “You drank half of it.” “Exactly. Cheaper for your pension plan.” Eva took the glass. Their fingers brushed this time, brief as a match strike. Neither moved away fast enough to pretend it had not happened. Silas called last orders from the bar, his voice carrying over the low murmur and rain. Eva looked towards the door, then back to Rory. “I can go.” Rory let the silence sit long enough to make them both pay for it. Then she hooked the chair opposite with her boot and pulled it closer to the table. “Finish your awful whisky first.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences231
tagDensity0.056
leniency0.113
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3371
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
89.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3371
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"affection"
count1
5
word"grave"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"warmth"
2"silence"
3"flickered"
4"affection"
5"grave"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences238
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences238
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences456
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3371
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions182
wordCount2022
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity3.66
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity7
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Rory67
Golden2
Empress2
Silas16
Danube2
Arsenal1
London2
Cardiff4
Eva74
Mr1
Pritchard1
Prague1
Central1
Evan1
Europe1
Hated3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Empress"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
6"Mr"
7"Pritchard"
8"Evan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Golden"
2"Danube"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
5"Prague"
6"Europe"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences142
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something close to pain"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3371
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences456
matches
0"hated that she"
1"hated that Eva"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs301
mean11.2
std12.75
cv1.138
sampleLengths
09
175
238
317
410
518
644
733
81
910
1018
115
123
1376
147
1529
163
175
1845
1912
201
2122
225
231
2412
2520
266
272
2820
299
303
318
3220
332
341
354
3617
372
3810
3919
4011
418
429
433
4415
4515
466
474
482
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences238
matches
0"been planed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs358
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences456
ratio0.004
matches
0"The limp came and went with the weather; tonight, the rain had got its teeth in him."
1"The softness of Cardiff had gone from her cheeks; the girl who used to steal chips from Rory’s tray and grin with vinegar on her chin had been planed down into this woman with careful nails and shadows under her eyes."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2030
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tiny white half-moon"
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.02857142857142857
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.001477832512315271
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences456
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences456
mean7.39
std6.51
cv0.881
sampleLengths
09
118
231
326
411
511
616
78
89
910
106
1112
1210
1311
1417
156
167
1726
181
1910
2014
214
225
233
2418
2520
2621
2717
287
293
303
315
3218
333
345
3526
3619
375
387
391
408
412
4212
435
441
455
467
478
4812
496
42.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats35
diversityRatio0.2149122807017544
totalSentences456
uniqueOpeners98
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount7
totalSentences212
matches
0"Only those eyes across the"
1"Too much coffee."
2"Too many years holding herself"
3"Then Eva’s smile folded away."
4"Somewhere near the door, the"
5"Instead, she lifted Eva’s whisky"
6"Then she hooked the chair"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences212
matches
0"She set the food on"
1"His silver signet ring knocked"
2"He took the receipt, his"
3"He moved through it without"
4"She looked over."
5"She had one hand around"
6"Her coat looked expensive in"
7"Her hair, once it caught"
8"Her chair leg barked against"
9"It landed between them and"
10"She picked up the glass,"
11"She pushed the chair back"
12"He had the sense not"
13"He took his limp towards"
14"She remembered Eva at fifteen,"
15"It burned clean."
16"Her eyes watered."
17"She pressed the back of"
18"She looked away, past Eva’s"
19"It had narrowed around purpose."
ratio0.165
18.96% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount187
totalSentences212
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest wore rain"
1"Water crawled down the front"
2"The air held lemon peel,"
3"She set the food on"
4"The red plastic handles had"
5"The small crescent scar on"
6"Silas glanced at it, then"
7"His silver signet ring knocked"
8"Rory slid one bag towards"
9"A corner of Silas’s mouth"
10"He took the receipt, his"
11"The limp came and went"
12"He moved through it without"
13"Rory reached for a towel"
14"She looked over."
15"The woman sat beneath the"
16"She had one hand around"
17"Her coat looked expensive in"
18"Her hair, once it caught"
19"Rory’s gaze moved on, then"
ratio0.882
23.58% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences212
matches
0"Now the rules had dressed"
ratio0.005
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She remembered Eva at fifteen, all bitten nails and green hair, drawing skulls on school exercise books while Mr Pritchard explained contract law to a room of c…"
1"Not in the six-line email that arrived nine months later with no subject and too much punctuation."
2"The green neon flickered over Eva’s shaved head, over the faint lines near her eyes that had not been there in Cardiff."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory continued (continue)"
2"Rory murmured (murmur)"
3"Eva added (add)"
4"he noted (note)"
5"Rory muttered (mutter)"
6"Rory added (add)"
dialogueSentences231
tagDensity0.043
leniency0.087
rawRatio0.7
effectiveRatio0.061
88.9496%