Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0NNJTPKPDFTD7V3CX11AMD

Run Details

Duration:
1m 29s
Cost:
$0.118370
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter reached the old oaks just after midnight with a paper map folded in one hand and the Heartstone pendant tucked beneath her jumper. Richmond Park lay behind her, wide and black and wrong. The city had thinned to nothing too quickly. One minute she had passed a road where late taxis hissed over wet tarmac; the next, the path had swallowed the traffic, the lamps, the distant hum of London, and left her with frost-white grass and trees that stood too close together. Her phone showed 00:13. Then 00:13 again. Then 00:13, still. “Brilliant.” Her breath smoked in front of her mouth. The cold pressed through her coat, found the gaps at her cuffs, and bit at the crescent scar on her left wrist. She flexed her fingers and kept walking. The message had arrived at the Golden Empress during the dinner rush, tucked inside a sealed red envelope with no stamp, no address, no handwriting she recognised. Yu-Fei had blamed one of the kitchen lads. The kitchen lads had blamed the delivery drivers. Rory had opened it beside the stockroom bins while steam rolled from the vents and the smell of garlic and hot oil clung to her hair. Midnight. The Grove. Bring the Heartstone. Come alone, if you want the door to stay shut. No name. No explanation. No threat written out clean enough to report, which made it worse. She had left work with soy sauce on one sleeve and a lie on her tongue for everyone who asked where she was going. Now she stood at the edge of a hidden clearing in Richmond Park, staring at ancient oak trunks arranged like standing stones, and the pendant had begun to warm against her chest. Not warmth like skin. Warmth like a cup of tea left too close to a fire until the ceramic burned the fingertips. Rory pulled the silver chain free. The deep crimson stone rested in her palm, no bigger than her thumbnail, its faint inner glow pulsing once. The clearing waited beyond the oaks. Wildflowers grew there despite the month, little blue and yellow heads nodding without wind. Grass lay silver under moonlight. The trees curved around the space in a ring, each trunk thick and old, bark ridged like knuckles. She had been here once before by daylight with Isolde nearby and Eva making jokes to cover nerves. It had looked strange then, too pretty, too polished, like a painting hung in the wrong house. At night, it looked occupied. Not by a person. By attention. Rory stopped before the first oak marker and listened. Nothing. No cars. No fox bark. No bird shifting in a branch. Even the usual London under-noise had been scraped away. Silence settled over the clearing in layers, and beneath it something tapped. Tap. Tap. Tap. She held her breath. The sound stopped. “Right. That’s normal. Ancient haunted grove’s got central heating.” Her voice dropped dead at the boundary. It did not echo. It did not travel. It fell out of her mouth and vanished at her boots. The pendant pulsed again. The heat spread across her palm and up her wrist, grazing the little crescent scar. Rory looked down at it, then at the dark between the trees. She took one step into the Grove. The cold changed. Outside the ring, winter had teeth. Inside, the air felt close and damp, like a cellar under a house where no one had lived for years. Earth and crushed petals scented every breath. Something sweet rotted beneath it, not strong, not enough to name, just enough to make her tongue press against the back of her teeth. Her phone buzzed. Rory snatched it from her pocket. No signal. No notification. The screen still read 00:13. The battery icon had turned black, though it had been at seventy-two percent when she left the flat. She shoved it away and crossed to the centre of the clearing. The wildflowers brushed her boots. Their heads turned as she passed. She stopped. The flowers stilled. Rory lowered her gaze. A cluster of bluebells, impossible in this season, angled towards her left foot. A second later, one by one, they dipped away as though embarrassed. “No. Absolutely not.” She stepped back. Something stepped with her. Not close. Not loud. A soft shift in the grass at the far edge of the clearing, opposite the path she had used. Rory’s shoulders tightened. She turned her head without moving her feet. Between two oak trunks, darkness packed itself into a narrow shape. She blinked. Only bark. Only shadow. Only the space where moonlight failed. Her hand closed around the pendant until the silver chain cut into her fingers. “I came. Whoever sent the note, I’m here.” The Grove gave her the silence again. Then, from somewhere behind her, a restaurant service bell rang. One bright ding. Rory’s stomach pulled tight. The Golden Empress bell had a cracked note because Yu-Fei refused to replace it. This one carried the same split sound, that little metallic cough under the ring. Ding. She turned. No counter. No steam. No Yu-Fei scowling over receipts. Just grass, wildflowers, oak trunks, moonlight. Ding. Closer. “Cute.” She backed towards the nearest tree, choosing the thickest trunk, putting bark to her shoulders. The wood felt wet through her coat. Her fingers found a ridge in the bark and dug in. Another sound came from the clearing. Paper folding. A soft crease. Then another. Rory looked down. The map in her hand had folded itself once, neatly along the centre seam. She dropped it. The map landed open on the grass. The paper creased again. One corner lifted without wind and tucked under itself. Then another. It folded into a small square, edges aligned with careful hands. When it finished, it lay at her feet like a note passed across a school desk. Her throat dried. She crouched and opened it with two fingers. The map had changed. The printed paths and pond markings had sunk beneath thin black lines that crawled over the paper. The lines formed the ring of oaks, then the clearing, then a small mark at the centre where she stood. Around that mark, someone had written a word in a tight, looping hand. Laila. Rory went still. No one in London called her that. Almost no one knew the alias at all. She had used it once, out of panic, with the wrong people asking the wrong questions and Evan’s shadow still clinging to every doorway. The pendant grew hotter. She let the map fall. “Don’t use that name.” Her voice came back this time. Not as an echo. As a whisper beside her ear. “Don’t use that name.” Rory jolted away from the tree. The clearing had shifted. The path out no longer lined up with the gap between the oaks. She could still see a gap, but beyond it lay more trees, packed too tightly for Richmond Park. Their branches interlaced overhead, black against black. The moon hung above the clearing, swollen and pale, too low, as though someone had lowered a lamp on a cord. She checked her phone again. 00:13. The screen reflected her face in faint blue-grey: straight black hair loosened from its tie, sharp cheekbones, eyes too bright in the dead glass. Behind her reflection, something pale moved across the clearing. She spun. Nothing stood there. The flowers trembled in a narrow line from one oak to another, as if a hem had dragged through them. Rory slid the phone into her pocket and forced herself to breathe through her nose. One thing at a time. She had come because the note had mentioned a door. The Heartstone reacted to Hel portals. If something had opened, if something had pressed close enough to make the pendant burn, then standing frozen in the middle of the Grove would help no one. She lifted the Heartstone. “Show me.” The crimson gem pulsed. Warmth beat through her palm once, twice, three times, not in time with her heart. The glow deepened until red light slipped between her fingers and painted the flowers beneath. Their petals closed. At the northern edge of the clearing, one oak trunk split open. Not with a crack. Not with splinters. The bark unfolded in strips, each one peeling back without sound, revealing darkness underneath. No hollow, no heartwood. Just darkness, flat and deep, like wet ink held upright. The smell of old smoke rolled out. Rory’s skin tightened along her arms. A door. She took two steps towards it. A child laughed behind her. Rory stopped so hard her ankle turned in the grass. The laugh came again, small and breathy, half hidden behind cupped hands. “Who’s there?” A rustle moved from tree to tree around the ring. Not one body. Several. Light feet through grass. A sleeve brushing bark. A nail against wood. Tap. Tap. Tap. The first sound again. She turned in a slow circle. Nothing showed itself. Then the flowers beside her boot flattened in the shape of a small foot. Another print appeared a metre away. Then another. The invisible feet walked around her in a widening ring, crushing petals, bending stems. Each print sank deep into the damp earth. Too deep for a child. Too precise for an animal. The steps circled once, then twice, and the tapping moved overhead. Rory looked up. The branches above her were full of tied paper slips. They had not been there before. Hundreds of them hung from black twine, swaying though the air stayed still. Each slip carried writing. Some in English. Some in Welsh. Some in a script that hurt her eyes if she looked too long. The closest strip twisted, and moonlight caught the words. Aurora Carter. Another turned. Rory. Another. Malphora. She did not know that name, but the Heartstone pulsed against it hard enough to sting. A paper slip dropped. It brushed her shoulder and landed in the grass. She did not touch it. She read it anyway. Come alone, if you want the door to stay shut. The words faded. New ones bled up through the fibres. You came alone. The restaurant bell rang again. Ding. This time it rang from inside the open oak. Rory faced the black doorway. Something stood within it, set far back where the red glow of the pendant thinned. Tall, narrow, motionless. Its edges refused shape. When she stared at where a face should have been, her eyes watered and slid away. The air between them tightened, as if the clearing had taken a breath and held it. Rory stepped back. The invisible feet stopped circling. A voice came from the doorway, low and familiar enough to make anger cut through fear. “Rory.” Evan’s voice. Not a memory. Not close enough to be a trick of her own head. It carried the same smooth patience he used when he wanted an apology out of her, the same soft drag on her name, the same little pause afterwards to let guilt crawl in. Her hand shook once. Then stilled. “No.” The thing in the doorway moved its head. “Rory, love, come here.” She swallowed. The sweet rot in the air thickened. Her pendant burned against her palm. She pictured the flat above Silas’ bar: the crooked windows, the kettle that screamed, the floorboard by the sofa that complained under one heel. She pictured Eva’s trainers kicked under the table on nights she stayed too late, Yu-Fei swearing at a supplier, Cardiff rain needling the windows of a house she had left behind. The voice changed. “Laila.” Closer. The black inside the oak pressed outward by an inch. No step. No body crossing a threshold. Just that dark plane swelling into the Grove like fabric pushed from behind. The wildflowers nearest the door greyed. Their petals shrivelled inward without falling. Rory raised the Heartstone between herself and the oak. “Stay shut, then.” The pendant’s crimson light flared. The tied paper slips snapped towards the doorway in one motion, twine creaking. The invisible feet scattered through the grass. The child laughed, but the sound broke halfway and stretched into a thin whistle that ran around the ring of oaks. The dark in the tree recoiled. For one second, the open trunk showed a corridor beyond it. Stone floor. Walls sweating with black moisture. A line of old iron hooks. A white hand resting against the far wall, palm flat, fingers too long. Then the bark slammed halfway closed. The force threw Rory backwards. She hit the ground on one elbow. Pain shot up her arm. The pendant flew from her hand but caught on its chain around her neck, striking her collarbone with a hot bite. Her breath left her. Grass pressed wet against her cheek. The clearing did not stay still. The oaks leaned inward. Not enough to topple. Enough to alter the shape of the sky. Branches knitted tighter overhead. The moon broke into pieces between them. Rory pushed herself up. The doorway remained half open. The darkness behind it pulsed. Not with the Heartstone’s rhythm. With a slow, patient knock. Tap. Tap. Tap. Her phone began to ring. The sound came muffled from her pocket, absurd and tinny inside the crushed silence. Rory dragged it out. The screen blazed white. Incoming call: Mum. Jennifer Carter’s name sat there, impossible and ordinary, with her smiling contact photo from some summer afternoon in Cardiff. Rory’s thumb hovered over the screen. The call connected by itself. No signal bars. No touch. Static filled the speaker. Beneath it, a woman breathed in short, careful pulls. “Mam?” The breathing stopped. Then Jennifer’s voice came through, thin as if spoken from the bottom of a well. “Aurora, don’t look at it.” Rory’s grip tightened around the phone. “Mam, where are you?” “Don’t look at it wearing my face.” The line clicked. The screen went black. Something sighed in the clearing. Rory did not lift her head. At the edge of her vision, near the half-shut oak, a pair of bare feet stepped out onto the grass. Pale ankles. The hem of a long skirt. A hand hanging at one side, fingers curled in the exact way her mother’s curled when she carried too many shopping bags and refused help. Rory stared at the mud on her own boots. The figure took a step. Grass whispered. “Aurora.” Her mother’s voice warmed, filled out, became the voice from childhood kitchens and school gates and the end of hard phone calls. “Look at me, cariad.” Rory’s jaw locked. The pendant throbbed against her sternum, heat soaking through wool, skin, bone. Another step. The hem entered the edge of her sight. Dark blue skirt. Sensible shoes now. Her mother owned a pair like that. Rory remembered mocking them. Jennifer had clipped her round the ear with a tea towel and told her barristers’ daughters could still have manners. The figure bent closer. Rory saw the hand. Same wedding ring. Same little burn scar near the thumb from a baking tray. The fingers bent the wrong way at the knuckles, one by one, as though testing a glove. “Rory, love.” Rory closed her eyes. “Piss off.” The thing inhaled through too many teeth. The Grove answered with a shiver through every flower, every slip of paper, every oak trunk. Bark creaked behind her. The half-open door knocked from within. Tap. Tap. Tap. Rory kept her eyes shut and reached for the Heartstone with both hands. The silver chain had twisted around her neck. She found the clasp, found the gem, found the heat. Her left wrist brushed the stone, and the crescent scar flared with a clean, sharp pain. The thing wearing her mother’s voice crouched in front of her. Its breath touched her cheek, cold and damp. “Open your eyes.” Rory tightened her fist around the pendant. “No.” The grass beside her knee flattened under a hand she refused to see. “Open them.” The phone in her pocket buzzed again. Once. Twice. The Heartstone pulsed between her fingers, and from the half-closed oak, the service bell rang one more time.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.08
leniency0.16
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2694
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2694
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"echo"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count5
4
word"absolutely"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"aligned"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"throbbed"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"echo"
3"pulsed"
4"absolutely"
5"stomach"
6"aligned"
7"whisper"
8"trembled"
9"familiar"
10"throbbed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences338
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences338
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences363
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2694
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions103
wordCount2593
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter3
Heartstone9
Park3
London3
Golden2
Empress2
Grove6
Richmond3
Isolde1
Eva2
Yu-Fei4
Evan2
Hel1
English1
Welsh1
Cardiff2
Rory32
Mum1
Jennifer3
One4
Grass3
Tap12
Ding3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Grove"
3"Eva"
4"Yu-Fei"
5"Evan"
6"Rory"
7"Jennifer"
8"One"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"Golden"
3"Richmond"
4"Hel"
5"English"
6"Welsh"
7"Cardiff"
8"Grass"
globalScore0.883
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences169
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though testing a glove"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2694
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences363
matches
0"know that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs239
mean11.27
std15.01
cv1.332
sampleLengths
025
160
24
33
43
51
637
769
816
92
102
1112
1256
134
1418
1525
166
1772
185
194
202
219
221
2332
241
251
261
274
283
299
3026
314
3227
337
343
3557
363
376
384
395
4018
4123
422
433
4429
453
463
474
4834
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences338
matches
0"been scraped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs391
matches
0"was going"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences363
ratio0.003
matches
0"One minute she had passed a road where late taxis hissed over wet tarmac; the next, the path had swallowed the traffic, the lamps, the distant hum of London, and left her with frost-white grass and trees that stood too close together."
75.74% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1866
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"sweet rotted beneath it,"
1"beneath thin black lines"
2"faint blue-grey: straight black hair"
adverbCount88
adverbRatio0.04715969989281887
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.003215434083601286
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences363
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences363
mean7.42
std6.52
cv0.878
sampleLengths
025
110
28
342
44
53
63
71
88
922
107
1127
128
138
1426
151
162
173
1810
192
202
2112
2224
2332
244
2518
266
2719
286
2914
305
3118
3218
3317
345
354
362
379
381
392
403
416
429
4312
441
451
461
474
483
499
36.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats50
diversityRatio0.24585635359116023
totalSentences362
uniqueOpeners89
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount15
totalSentences278
matches
0"Then 00:13 again."
1"Then 00:13, still."
2"Even the usual London under-noise"
3"Only the space where moonlight"
4"Then, from somewhere behind her,"
5"Just grass, wildflowers, oak trunks,"
6"Almost no one knew the"
7"Just darkness, flat and deep,"
8"Then the flowers beside her"
9"Too deep for a child."
10"Too precise for an animal."
11"Just that dark plane swelling"
12"Then the bark slammed halfway"
13"Then Jennifer’s voice came through,"
14"Dark blue skirt."
ratio0.054
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount56
totalSentences278
matches
0"Her phone showed 00:13."
1"Her breath smoked in front"
2"She flexed her fingers and"
3"She had left work with"
4"She had been here once"
5"It had looked strange then,"
6"She held her breath."
7"Her voice dropped dead at"
8"It did not echo."
9"It did not travel."
10"It fell out of her"
11"She took one step into"
12"Her phone buzzed."
13"She shoved it away and"
14"Their heads turned as she"
15"She stepped back."
16"She turned her head without"
17"Her hand closed around the"
18"She backed towards the nearest"
19"Her fingers found a ridge"
ratio0.201
76.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount213
totalSentences278
matches
0"Aurora Carter reached the old"
1"Richmond Park lay behind her,"
2"The city had thinned to"
3"Her phone showed 00:13."
4"Her breath smoked in front"
5"The cold pressed through her"
6"She flexed her fingers and"
7"The message had arrived at"
8"Yu-Fei had blamed one of"
9"The kitchen lads had blamed"
10"Rory had opened it beside"
11"She had left work with"
12"Warmth like a cup of"
13"Rory pulled the silver chain"
14"The deep crimson stone rested"
15"The clearing waited beyond the"
16"Wildflowers grew there despite the"
17"Grass lay silver under moonlight."
18"The trees curved around the"
19"She had been here once"
ratio0.766
35.97% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences278
matches
0"Now she stood at the"
1"If something had opened, if"
ratio0.007
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences96
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"One minute she had passed a road where late taxis hissed over wet tarmac; the next, the path had swallowed the traffic, the lamps, the distant hum of London, an…"
1"The printed paths and pond markings had sunk beneath thin black lines that crawled over the paper."
2"The moon hung above the clearing, swollen and pale, too low, as though someone had lowered a lamp on a cord."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
91.6879%