Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0P0EG6Y6RSZBGJC76BWBW0

Run Details

Duration:
2m 24s
Cost:
$0.178595
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn reached the bottom of the service stair with brick dust on her cuffs and the taste of rust behind her teeth. The entrance had sat behind a bricked-up kiosk on Camden High Street, hidden under three coats of council paint and a plywood advert for cheap phone repairs. Uniform had broken it open after a dog walker reported smoke rising through a pavement grate at dawn. The Met liked its crime scenes with doors, neighbours, bins, CCTV, some nosy pensioner peering through net curtains. This place offered none of that. Only a throat of stairs descending beneath Camden, past dead cables and white tiles the colour of old teeth. Her worn leather watch ticked against her left wrist. Five seventeen in the morning. At the final landing, a constable lifted the blue-and-white tape. “Mind your step, ma’am. Platform edge drops away on the left.” Quinn passed him without slowing. Her brown eyes took in the tunnel before her shoes crossed the threshold. The abandoned station opened wide under the city. A platform stretched into gloom beneath a curved ceiling stained by soot and lime. Old Tube signs hung crooked from corroded brackets. Someone had scraped the station name away, leaving only ghost letters under grime. Electric work lamps buzzed on stands, their hard light catching things that had no business in a railway station: velvet-draped tables, iron birdcages, glass jars sealed with red wax, wooden crates packed with black salt, a brass bathtub full of rainwater and pale flowers, stacks of books bound in cracked leather. A market. Not a squat. Not a rave. A market. Detective Sergeant Niall Briggs stood beside a stall covered in little paper packets. He wore blue shoe covers and an expression that belonged in a pub argument. “Hell of a place for a murder.” Quinn stopped at the edge of the platform. The air smelled of damp brick, candle grease, and something sharper beneath it, like lightning trapped in a bottle. The same metal bite had clung to Morris’s coat the night they brought it back in an evidence bag. She pressed her thumb against the strap of her watch until the old leather creaked. “Who found him?” Briggs pointed with his pen towards the far end of the platform. “Two lads from British Transport Police followed smoke through the grate. Thought they’d found a cannabis farm. Got this instead.” “And the body?” “Still in situ. Forensics are having a moan because half the floor’s covered in soot, wax, flour, and God knows what. Looks like a bunch of occult nutters had a lock-in, one of them got stabbed, everyone legged it.” Quinn looked at the closest table. Each item sat in a marked square of clean cloth. Labels had been written in brown ink: mandrake ash, saint’s knuckle, moth glass, grave salt. No till. No price tags in pounds. A shallow dish near the front held teeth drilled through at the root. “That’s your working theory?” Briggs tucked his pen behind his ear. “Gang angle, maybe. Weird set dressing, banned substances, buyers with more money than sense. Victim tries to nick something, seller sticks him, punters scatter. We’ve got one woman in custody upstairs, found hiding in the old staff room with a satchel full of books. Red hair, glasses, shaking like a leaf. Claims she’s from the British Museum.” Quinn turned her head. “Name?” “Eva Kowalski. Research assistant, if her ID isn’t fake. Says she came to ‘verify a provenance’. Her word, not mine. I nearly gave her a round of applause.” A muscle moved in Quinn’s jaw. “Bring her down.” “Here?” “She found her way in. I want to know what she refuses to look at.” Briggs gave her a narrow look but lifted his radio. Quinn walked towards the body. The dead man lay on his back beside a gap between two stalls, arms arranged close to his sides, boots pointed towards the tunnel mouth. Mid-thirties. Expensive charcoal coat. No tie. Dark hair combed away from a forehead marked with sweat dried into salt tracks. A single wound opened under his sternum, black around the edges, neat as a coin slot. Blood had spread beneath him in a glossy pool, red under the lamps. His right hand clutched a small brass compass. His left held a flat piece of bone with a hole through it. The forensic photographer lowered his camera. “Detective.” Quinn crouched beside the body, knees clear of the blood. Her cropped salt-and-pepper hair threw no shadow across his face under the lamp. She studied his fingers first. Clean nails. Soft palms. A pale band around one finger where a ring had been removed. No defensive cuts. No grime under the cuffs. “Pockets?” The crime scene manager, a woman with silver hoops in both ears, consulted a plastic evidence tray. “Wallet, two hundred and forty quid cash, bank cards, no phone. Oyster card last used yesterday morning at Euston. Name is Martin Vale. Address in Islington.” Briggs came to stand at Quinn’s shoulder. “Cash still there, so not robbery.” Quinn leaned closer to the wound. “Stabbing?” “That’s what it looks like.” “No cut in the shirt.” Briggs bent at the waist. The white shirt beneath the coat sat smooth over the chest, buttoned to the throat. No tear. No slice. No blood soaking through the fabric above the wound. The black-edged hole existed in the skin below a shirt that had not been opened. Briggs’s mouth tightened. “Could’ve been dressed after.” “Then why leave the coat open?” Quinn shifted her gaze to the blood pool. It had gathered under the body but not soaked into the lower edge of the coat. A dry crescent showed where cloth had rested against tile before the blood reached it. She slid a gloved finger under the coat hem and lifted half an inch. “Blood went down after he did.” The crime scene manager glanced over. “Or the coat repelled it. Some fabrics—” “Not this one.” Quinn rubbed the wool between finger and thumb. It drank the damp from her glove. Briggs exhaled through his nose. “Fine. Body moved, then bled. Still fits. Killer stabs him somewhere else, drags him here, dumps him.” “No drag marks.” “Carried, then.” “By who? One person? Two?” Briggs pointed to the mess around them. “Pick a boot print. Place is a jumble.” Quinn stood. Her height let her look across the platform without shifting her feet. Boots had tracked dust, soot, and powder over the tile, but patterns lived inside chaos if a person had patience for them. Market tables formed two lanes down the platform. Most foot traffic curved from stall to stall, short steps, sideways turns, toe marks near displays. Shoppers. Sellers. Browsers. Around the body, the prints changed. A clear band circled him, about a metre wide, as if everyone had kept away from that spot before the police arrived. Quinn pointed. “Why did your panic crowd avoid the corpse before there was a corpse?” Briggs followed her finger. “Could be contamination from our lot.” “Uniform entered from the stairs behind us. Forensics came straight down the centre. That gap predates both.” The photographer took two steps back and stared at the floor as though it had insulted him. Quinn moved towards the nearest stall. Its cloth had been dragged askew. A few glass vials lay on their sides, unbroken. Wax seals showed stamped symbols: crescent, eye, thorn. One square near the back of the table sat empty, cleaner than the rest, about the size of a hardback book. Dust framed it on all four sides. “Something was here.” Briggs joined her. “Seller packed in a rush.” “Everything else stayed.” “Maybe that was the good stuff.” Quinn looked down. Beneath the empty square, a smear of dark powder crossed the table edge and fell in a thin line to the floor. Not spilled outwards. Scraped towards the body. She followed the powder with her eyes. It ran from the stall leg across the tile, broke where the body lay, then resumed beyond his shoulder in a faint crescent. “The body landed on the trail.” Briggs folded his arms. “Or someone knocked powder over after.” Quinn looked at him. “After the corpse arrived, while stepping over him in a panic, and managed to continue the same line on both sides?” He did not answer. A constable escorted Eva Kowalski down the platform. She looked smaller under the station roof, swallowed by a grey coat too thin for the damp. Curly red hair had escaped its clip, and she kept tucking a strand behind her left ear. Her round glasses had fogged at the edges. A worn leather satchel hung across her body, fat with books and loose papers. Mud stained one knee. Her green eyes flicked over the stalls, the lamps, the body. When she saw the compass in Martin Vale’s hand, all colour left her freckles. Quinn watched that, not the gasp Eva swallowed. “Miss Kowalski.” Eva hugged the satchel closer. “I already gave them my statement.” “Give me the useful version.” Briggs made a small noise in his throat. Eva looked at him, then back at Quinn. “I came to identify an object before it changed hands.” “What object?” “I don’t know its trade name. A tablet. Black stone, silver inlay, cuneiform border but not Akkadian. The Museum has three references to it, all redacted.” Quinn touched the empty square on the stall. “This size?” Eva stepped forward, then stopped before the blood. Her fingers went to her hair, tucked it behind her left ear again. “Yes.” Briggs lifted his chin. “So our dead bloke nicked your magic brick, someone stabbed him, crowd ran. Lovely. We can all go get breakfast.” Eva’s face hardened at the word magic, as if he had spat on a manuscript. “Martin Vale couldn’t have stolen it.” “You knew him?” “I knew of him. Broker. Private collections. No field craft.” “Meaning?” “He bought access. He didn’t survive places like this by touching things first.” Quinn held up a hand before Briggs could bite. “How did you enter?” Eva’s gaze moved to the old ticket barriers near the stairs. One had been forced open by uniform. Beside it, hanging from a rusted spike, several small bone discs dangled on string. The same kind the dead man held. “You pay at the threshold.” “With bone?” “With permission.” Briggs gave a dry laugh. “Permission from who?” Eva did not look at him. “Not who.” Quinn stepped back to the body and examined the token in Martin Vale’s left hand. The hole had been worn smooth by a cord. Faint lines crossed its surface, not letters, more like tally cuts. The dead fingers held it with the wrong tension. Not clutched in fear. Placed there, then squeezed by stiffening muscle. She looked at his boots. Black leather, polished, soles clean along the arch. The platform floor had left grey dust on every shoe in sight. Martin’s soles showed one patch of ash under the heel, but no long scuffs, no grit caught in the tread. “He didn’t walk from the entrance.” Briggs crouched. “Carried, like I said.” “Then where are the carriers’ prints?” “Lost in the mess.” Quinn moved around the corpse, scanning the tile. The dust nearest his shoulders lay undisturbed except for the photographer’s markers. No double heel marks. No awkward stagger. No wide stance from someone lowering dead weight. The blood pool sat too round, unbroken by shoe edges. “Not carried from the stairs.” Eva whispered something under her breath. Quinn’s eyes cut to her. “Again.” Eva swallowed. “The Compass.” Quinn looked at the brass object in Martin’s hand. Verdigris crusted its casing in green blooms. Protective sigils ringed the face, etched with a hand steadier than any factory stamp. The needle did not point north. It jerked in tiny spasms towards the tiled wall beyond the platform, the wall where old adverts peeled in strips: soap, cigarettes, a theatre poster from a decade that had buried its actors. Briggs peered at it. “Novelty tat.” Eva’s voice came tight. “No. Shade work.” Quinn crouched and watched the needle. It pulled towards the wall, settled, shivered, pulled again. “What does it find?” Eva locked her lips together. Quinn turned the full weight of her stare on her. “A man is dead. Your brick is gone. If you hold back because you think this place polices itself, I’ll put you in a cell until your Museum pass expires.” Eva gripped the satchel strap until her knuckles blanched. “Rifts. Doors. Weak places.” Briggs spread his hands. “Doors. Great. There’s a platform, a stairwell, and tunnel access. We’ve got doors.” Quinn did not look away from the compass. “None over there.” She walked to the tiled wall. The needle tugged harder as she approached; Martin’s stiff hand moved a fraction where the compass rested in it, brass scraping against his palm. The wall showed cracked cream tiles, a torn poster, grime, nothing more. Quinn lifted her torch and raked light across the surface at a low angle. The beam caught scratches around the poster edge. Fresh. Not random. Short marks at shoulder height, as if something with metal corners had passed through and kissed the tile. She peeled back the poster. Behind it, the grout had darkened in an oval six feet high and three feet wide. No opening. No handle. The tile surface inside the oval looked damp, yet her gloved fingers came away dry. Dust at the base had gathered in a crescent, pushed from both sides towards the centre, not out from the wall. Briggs moved beside her, his scepticism thinning. “What am I looking at?” Quinn crouched. At the foot of the wall lay a flake of black stone, thin as a thumbnail. Silver thread ran through it in a jagged line. She picked it up with tweezers and held it beneath the torch. Eva took one step closer and stopped. Her breath caught again, but this time she did not hide it. “That’s from the tablet.” Quinn placed the fragment into an evidence bag. “The thief didn’t leave by the stairs.” Briggs stared at the sealed wall. “You’re saying someone took a stone tablet through a wall.” “I’m saying the scene asks us to think about stairs while the evidence points here.” He rubbed a hand over his mouth. “Victim follows thief, gets killed, dumped back through?” Quinn turned towards the body. From the wall, the line of dark powder ran to the empty stall, not from it. The corpse lay across the trail like a sandbag thrown over a leak. “No. Vale came through first.” Eva shook her head. “He had the token. He entered properly.” “The token was planted. Left hand. He wore his watch on the right; pale mark shows a ring removed from the left. Dominant hand likely right. A man dying holds the useful thing in the hand he uses. He held the Compass.” Briggs glanced down. “Useful for what?” “Finding the door.” Quinn walked back to Martin Vale and lowered herself beside him. She studied his face, the salt tracks on his brow, the corners of his mouth. No foam. No vomit. No fear carved deep in the muscles. Surprise, perhaps, fixed before death. She lifted his coat lapel with the tweezers. A single hair clung to the wool. Curly. Red. Briggs looked at Eva. Eva stiffened. “That isn’t mine.” Quinn held the hair under the light. Too coarse. Dyed red over grey at the root. Not Eva’s bright copper curl. “Not hers.” Briggs’s eyes narrowed. “How can you tell?” “Because Miss Kowalski’s hair would have snagged with half a library’s dust on it.” Eva bristled despite herself. “My satchel was searched.” “By people looking for knives, not missing tablets.” Quinn straightened and faced her. “Open it.” Eva hesitated. Briggs stepped forward. “Don’t make us ask twice.” Eva unbuckled the worn leather satchel and set it on a cleared corner of the stall. Quinn did not touch it at first. She looked inside from above: notebooks, photocopies, a Latin dictionary, a British Museum ID lanyard, pencils, gloves, a packet of ginger biscuits crushed flat. No tablet. At the bottom, half-buried under a folio, lay another bone token. Quinn pointed. “That yours?” Eva nodded. “They don’t work twice.” “Who gave it to you?” “No names here. That’s rule one.” Briggs snorted. “Convenient rule.” Quinn picked up the token with tweezers. Its cuts differed from Martin’s. Deeper, older, darkened with handling. She compared the two in her palm without touching them together. “Vale’s token is fresh.” Eva leaned in before fear dragged her back. “That’s not a market token.” Quinn looked at her. “It got him past the threshold.” “No. It looks like one from a distance. Wrong bone. Wrong cut count.” Briggs threw up his hands. “Wrong bone. Wrong wall. Wrong bleeding shirt. Anyone else fancy making my morning worse?” Quinn’s sharp jaw set. She turned Martin’s token under the torch. Along one edge, where a thumb would rest, a smear of pale residue filled the cuts. Not dust. Wax. The same red wax used on the vials nearby. She crossed to the stall with the empty square and examined the underside. There, beneath the cloth, a stub of red wax clung to a nail head. Someone had pressed the false token against it while the wax was soft, taking an impression from a real one. “Counterfeit entry.” Briggs followed her line of thought and lost some colour. “So Vale didn’t belong here.” “No. He got smuggled in, or sent in.” “By the thief?” Quinn looked at the compass again. The needle still strained towards the wall, trapped in the dead man’s hand. “By someone who needed the door found from this side.” Eva closed her satchel with fingers that shook less now. “The Veil Market moves at the full moon. Doors don’t stay stable. If someone stole the tablet through a rift, they needed an anchor. The Compass would have given them the nearest weak point.” Briggs stared at her. “You could have mentioned the secret moving black market before we crawled through a rat hole.” “You wouldn’t have believed me.” “No, but I’d have brought coffee.” Quinn ignored them both. She returned to the wall and studied the oval stain again. At the lower right, near a chipped tile, a print marked the dust. Not a boot. Not a shoe. Four narrow points and a flattened heel, like a hand pressed down with too-long fingers. She raised her torch higher. Above it, at head height, something had scraped the tile in two parallel lines. A person carrying a rectangular slab would have struck once, not twice. Two carriers, then. One human, one not shaped for human shoes. Vale had not stolen the tablet. He had found the door. The thief had used him, killed him, laid him across the powder trail, dressed the scene for police eyes, and left the compass clenched in the one hand that made sense only if someone understood what it was. Quinn turned towards Briggs. “Get plaster casts of every mark by that wall. No one walks near it. Not forensics, not you, not the constable with the size elevens at the stairs.” Briggs looked from the corpse to the tiled oval. “And Kowalski?” Quinn’s gaze settled on Eva. “She stays where I can see her.” Eva lifted her chin. “I can help identify the tablet.” “You can start with who knew you were coming.” The market lights hummed above them. Somewhere in the tunnel, water dripped into a bucket with a slow, hollow knock. Eva tucked her hair behind her left ear. “Aurora knew.” Quinn’s face did not change, but her thumb found the worn leather of her watch again. “Full name.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3301
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3301
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"electric"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"grave"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"tension"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"electric"
2"velvet"
3"grave"
4"flicked"
5"tension"
6"scanning"
7"weight"
8"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences263
matches
0"d in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences263
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences382
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3301
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions132
wordCount2348
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.92
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn45
Camden2
High1
Street1
Met1
Tube1
Sergeant1
Niall1
Briggs31
Morris1
Eva27
Kowalski1
Martin8
Vale4
Latin1
British1
Museum1
One3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Met"
3"Tube"
4"Sergeant"
5"Briggs"
6"Morris"
7"Eva"
8"Kowalski"
9"Martin"
10"Vale"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
globalScore0.542
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences168
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3301
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences382
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs247
mean13.36
std16.86
cv1.261
sampleLengths
024
188
214
310
411
518
694
78
82
927
107
1146
1215
133
1412
1520
163
1739
1851
194
207
2157
224
231
2428
256
263
271
2815
2910
305
3174
328
3313
346
351
3652
371
3817
3926
407
416
426
431
445
455
465
4743
483
494
97.26% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences263
matches
0"been written"
1"been removed"
2"been opened"
3"been dragged"
4"been forced"
5"been worn"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs376
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences382
ratio0.005
matches
0"The needle tugged harder as she approached; Martin’s stiff hand moved a fraction where the compass rested in it, brass scraping against his palm."
1"“The token was planted. Left hand. He wore his watch on the right; pale mark shows a ring removed from the left. Dominant hand likely right. A man dying holds the useful thing in the hand he uses. He held the Compass.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2358
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.015691263782866838
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.002544529262086514
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences382
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences382
mean8.64
std7.47
cv0.865
sampleLengths
024
127
218
318
46
519
69
75
810
911
105
1113
128
1314
148
1513
1651
172
183
193
202
2113
2214
237
248
2519
2619
2715
283
2912
3020
313
3239
336
3410
3515
362
375
3813
394
407
4157
424
431
4428
456
463
471
4815
4910
50.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3324607329842932
totalSentences382
uniqueOpeners127
29.11% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences229
matches
0"Only a throat of stairs"
1"Somewhere in the tunnel, water"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences229
matches
0"Her worn leather watch ticked"
1"Her brown eyes took in"
2"He wore blue shoe covers"
3"She pressed her thumb against"
4"His right hand clutched a"
5"His left held a flat"
6"Her cropped salt-and-pepper hair threw"
7"She studied his fingers first."
8"It had gathered under the"
9"She slid a gloved finger"
10"It drank the damp from"
11"Her height let her look"
12"Its cloth had been dragged"
13"She followed the powder with"
14"It ran from the stall"
15"He did not answer."
16"She looked smaller under the"
17"Her round glasses had fogged"
18"Her green eyes flicked over"
19"Her fingers went to her"
ratio0.166
77.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount175
totalSentences229
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn reached the"
1"The entrance had sat behind"
2"Uniform had broken it open"
3"The Met liked its crime"
4"This place offered none of"
5"Her worn leather watch ticked"
6"Quinn passed him without slowing."
7"Her brown eyes took in"
8"The abandoned station opened wide"
9"A platform stretched into gloom"
10"Someone had scraped the station"
11"Detective Sergeant Niall Briggs stood"
12"He wore blue shoe covers"
13"Quinn stopped at the edge"
14"The air smelled of damp"
15"The same metal bite had"
16"She pressed her thumb against"
17"Briggs pointed with his pen"
18"Quinn looked at the closest"
19"Each item sat in a"
ratio0.764
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences229
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences93
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Electric work lamps buzzed on stands, their hard light catching things that had no business in a railway station: velvet-draped tables, iron birdcages, glass ja…"
1"The black-edged hole existed in the skin below a shirt that had not been opened."
2"It jerked in tiny spasms towards the tiled wall beyond the platform, the wall where old adverts peeled in strips: soap, cigarettes, a theatre poster from a deca…"
3"Eva closed her satchel with fingers that shook less now."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
89.1140%