Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PEECFRQ196ETZBBACYM2V

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.5
Duration:
1m 45s
Cost:
$0.127170
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain needled the roof of Detective Harlow Quinn’s unmarked Vauxhall hard enough to blur the windscreen into a sheet of fractured sodium light. Soho ran wet and black around her, alleys steaming, gutters choked with cigarette ends and takeaway cartons, neon signs bleeding colour across the road. The green sign above The Raven’s Nest buzzed through the downpour. Quinn sat with the engine off, one hand on the wheel, the other resting near the radio clipped to her coat. Her worn leather watch had gone dark with rainwater where it peeked from her left cuff. The minute hand ticked towards eleven. Across the street, beneath the pub’s narrow awning, Tomás Herrera stepped out of the door with his collar turned up and his head low. Quinn leaned closer. Short curly dark hair. Olive skin. Same height as the hospital file. A glimpse of the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat when he glanced left, then right. He carried a battered canvas medical bag tight against his ribs, not like a man coming off shift, like a man transporting a pulse. A bus groaned past and drowned the street in spray. Herrera moved when it cleared. Quinn opened her door without slamming it and stepped into the rain. It struck her cropped salt-and-pepper hair, ran down the sharp line of her jaw, slipped beneath her collar. She crossed between parked cars, boots hissing through puddles. “Herrera.” He stopped. Only for a second. His shoulders lifted, his head turned enough for her to catch one warm brown eye over the rim of his collar, and then he bolted. “Police. Stop.” He shoved past a man smoking under an umbrella and cut down Wardour Street. Quinn ran. The city narrowed to breath, boot soles, and the slap of rain on awnings. Herrera moved fast, not panicked, not loose. He knew the pavement’s cracks, the delivery doors, the angles between taxis. He swerved around a group spilling from a late bar; Quinn drove through them with her shoulder. “Move.” A pint glass hit the pavement behind her and burst. Herrera darted across the road through a gap between a black cab and a cyclist. The cyclist yelled, “Oi, watch it!” Quinn didn’t look at him. Her lungs pulled in cold exhaust and rain. Her coat dragged at her thighs. She kept Herrera’s bag in sight, that dark square tucked beneath his arm, jumping with each stride. He cut left into an alley where restaurant bins overflowed and hot kitchen air breathed garlic, oil, and bleach into the wet night. Quinn entered two seconds behind him and saw him vault a toppled stack of crates. She didn’t vault. She kicked through them. Plastic snapped. Something rotten burst underfoot. Herrera glanced back. “Quinn, don’t.” His voice carried between brick walls, sharp with Spanish edges. She drew her baton halfway, then shoved it back. “Bag on the ground.” “You’ve no idea what you’re chasing.” “I’m looking at him.” He hit the far end of the alley and hooked right. Quinn emerged into a narrower street under scaffolding, rain drumming on the metal planks above like thrown gravel. Herrera’s trainers splashed ahead. He clipped a scaffolding pole with his shoulder, recovered, kept going. Quinn touched her radio. “Control, this is DI Quinn. Foot pursuit from The Raven’s Nest, suspect Tomás Herrera, male, twenty-nine, heading north from Soho. Request units towards Charing Cross Road.” Static chewed the reply. “DI Quinn, repeat location.” “Northbound. He’s carrying a bag. Do not approach without—” Herrera flung something behind him. It clattered once on the pavement and burst in a puff of grey dust. Quinn threw an arm across her face too late. The dust struck her eyes and mouth with the taste of chalk and old pennies. The street lights bent. For half a heartbeat, every reflection in every puddle showed another street beneath this one: tunnel mouths, hanging lamps, figures with antlered silhouettes, stalls under torn canvas. Then a horn blared. She skidded back as a minicab clipped the kerb inches from her knee. “Jesus Christ!” The driver leaned on his horn again. Quinn wiped her eyes with the back of her hand. Herrera had gained thirty metres and now ran towards Tottenham Court Road, the bag bouncing against his side. The rain rinsed the dust from her face, but not the cold patch it left behind her sternum. She ran harder. The old injury in her right ankle protested at the change in pace. She ignored it. Morris had once called that ankle her built-in barometer, six months before the case that left him dead in an empty warehouse with no blood in his veins and frost on the inside of his teeth. Quinn saw Herrera shove through a metal gate beside a boarded shopfront. A red sign warned DANGER: STRUCTURAL WORKS. Behind it, steps dropped into shadow. She reached the gate as it swung back. A chain hung loose, the padlock open. Not broken. Opened. She grabbed it. The metal felt wet and greasy. Below, Herrera’s footsteps hammered down concrete stairs. Quinn looked back at the street. London carried on without her. Buses dragged red light through rain. Two clubbers huddled beneath one coat and watched her with wide, drunk eyes. Somewhere, a siren wailed, but not near enough. Not coming for her. Her radio spat. “DI Quinn, units en route. Confirm suspect direction.” She stared down the stairwell. Black water ran along the edges of each step. A draught rose from below, stale and mineral, laced with incense, hot sugar, and something animal. “Herrera,” she called. No answer. Her thumb pressed the radio. “He’s gone underground. Disused access point off Tottenham Court Road, near the closed electrical shop. I’m following.” “DI Quinn, wait for units.” Quinn took the first step. The radio cracked again. “Detective, acknowledge.” She switched the volume down. The stairs doubled back twice, then opened into a maintenance corridor lined with cream tiles browned by age and mould. Pipes sweated overhead. The air carried the subterranean rumble of trains that didn’t belong beneath that stretch of road. Posters peeled from the walls in strips: old theatre adverts, a safety notice, a faded map of the Underground with stations that had not existed for decades. Herrera’s footsteps echoed ahead. Quinn pulled her torch and flicked it on. The beam cut through dripping gloom and caught a smear of blood on the tile wall at elbow height. She touched it with two fingers. Fresh. Not much. He’d hit the scaffolding pole harder than she’d thought. “Herrera, you’re bleeding.” A laugh came from deeper in the tunnel. No humour in it. “You going to arrest me for that too?” “Depends what’s in the bag.” “Bandages.” “You ran like a man carrying a corpse.” “You chased like a woman who wanted one.” Quinn moved after his voice. The corridor bent left and widened. Rusted railings guarded a drop where tracks had once lain. She followed a narrow service walkway, her torch beam jumping over puddles and rats that slipped through gaps in the brickwork. At the far end, Herrera stood in front of an old ticket barrier. Not the plastic gates Quinn knew. Iron turnstiles, waist-high, black with age, each one topped with a brass plate stamped with no station name. Beyond them, a tiled archway swallowed the light. Herrera faced her, breathing hard. Rainwater dripped from his curls. Blood had darkened the left sleeve of his jacket where the scar along his forearm had split or reopened. Around his neck, the Saint Christopher medallion flashed dull gold. His other hand held a small pale disc. Quinn raised her torch to his face. “What is that?” “A reason for you to turn around.” “Put it down.” “This isn’t a police matter.” “Everything becomes a police matter when people run.” He leaned one hip against the turnstile, but his eyes kept shifting past her, to the tunnel behind, to the pipes above, to the black corners her torch didn’t reach. “You don’t know what you followed.” “Then educate me.” “No.” “Fine. Cuff first, lesson after.” She stepped closer. Herrera held up the pale disc between thumb and forefinger. Rain and sweat shone on his knuckles. The disc looked carved, not pressed, with tiny grooves around the edge. Bone. Human, her mind offered before she could stop it. The air around the ticket barrier tightened. Quinn felt it in her teeth. “Herrera.” “I’ve got patients.” “You’ve got outstanding warrants, forged prescriptions, controlled substances, and a connection to three bodies from Bermondsey to Camden.” His jaw hardened. “Those bodies were cold before I arrived.” “Convenient.” “Necessary.” “For whom?” He shoved the bone token into a slot on the turnstile. The brass plate clicked. The tunnel changed. Not with smoke, not with light, not with a magician’s flourish. One breath held a dead station. The next held a crowd. Noise rolled through the archway: bargaining voices, metal pans, distant music plucked on strings, an animal’s bark chopped into three parts, steam whistles, laughter, coughing. Warm air pushed out, carrying spice, wet wool, candle wax, blood, and oranges. Quinn’s torch beam, which had lit cracked tiles a second before, now fell across a set of stone steps descending into a cavernous platform lit by hundreds of hanging lamps. Canvas stalls crowded both sides of old tracks. Signs swung from chains. Bottles glowed from within. Bundles of herbs hung like flayed shadows. People moved below in coats, robes, suits, uniforms, masks. A woman with silver teeth counted coins into a brass bowl. A boy no older than twelve led a goat with three horns past a crate labelled in Cyrillic and Latin. Something under a tarpaulin knocked once, and the stallholder kicked it still. Quinn didn’t lower the torch. Her hand moved to the warrant card clipped inside her coat, as if laminated plastic held weight here. Herrera stepped through the turnstile and backed towards the stairs. “Don’t follow me.” “What is this place?” “The bit of London that bites back.” “Name.” “You need a token to enter. You used yours when you saw it.” “I didn’t use anything.” “Yes, you did.” He looked at her eyes then, not at the torch, not at the badge. His face lost some colour. “Dust on your mouth. Damn it.” Quinn wiped her lips with her sleeve. Grey smudged the fabric. “Open the gate.” “No.” She rammed the turnstile with her thigh. It didn’t move. The iron stayed locked. Herrera swore under his breath. Behind Quinn, the tunnel gave a low metallic groan. She turned. At the far end of the service walkway, where she had come in, the cream tiles seemed farther away than before. Her torch stretched towards them and failed to reach. Darkness had gathered in the corridor, thick and ribbed, shifting against the walls as if something large moved without touching the floor. The radio at her shoulder hissed. “...Morris...” Quinn froze. The hiss sharpened, became breath, then a man’s voice under water. “Harlow...” Her fingers dug into the radio casing. “Who is this?” Herrera’s voice cracked across the barrier. “Don’t answer it.” The radio clicked again. “Harlow, left side. It came from the left—” DS Morris had said those words once in a warehouse corridor, gun raised, torch strapped under the barrel, while frost bloomed across the concrete. Quinn had gone right. He had gone left. She found him nine minutes later with his eyes open and no mist from his mouth in the winter air. The turnstile clicked. Quinn looked down. One iron arm had shifted open by a hand’s width. Herrera stared at it with naked alarm. “What did you hear?” Quinn pushed the turnstile. It moved another inch, grinding like a coffin lid dragged over stone. “What did you put in that dust?” “Not that.” “What did you put in it?” “Bone ash and glim. It marks thresholds. It doesn’t talk in dead men’s voices.” The darkness at the far corridor rippled again. Quinn aimed her torch. The beam caught nothing solid, but every wet tile reflected a different face. Morris. Not as she remembered him in life, broad and red-cheeked and impatient with paperwork. Morris as she found him, skin milk-pale, lips split, pupils huge. The radio whispered, “Left side.” Herrera came back to the barrier. “Detective. Look at me.” She didn’t. The turnstile opened another fraction. Below, the market kept moving, though people near the archway had begun to notice. A tall vendor with a stitched leather mask lifted a cleaver and slid it beneath the counter. Two women in black veils gathered jars into a trunk. A man with fox-coloured eyes looked up, sniffed, and vanished behind a hanging rug. Herrera gripped the far side of the turnstile. “If that followed you from the old tunnel, the Market won’t thank either of us.” Quinn forced her gaze from the corridor to his face. Rainwater ran from her chin. “What is it?” “I don’t know. But I know hungry.” “Useful.” “You wanted an education.” The radio clicked. This time the voice came clearer. “Harlow, don’t leave me in here.” Quinn shut the radio off. The whisper continued through the speaker. Herrera’s face tightened. “Smash it.” Quinn tore the radio from her shoulder and slammed it against the iron turnstile. Plastic cracked. She hit it again. The casing split, batteries scattering across the wet floor. The whisper stopped. From the corridor came a sound like nails sorting through cutlery. Quinn drew her baton fully. It looked absurd in her hand, a polished stick against whatever had bent the air behind her. Her other hand went to the PAVA spray, then left it. Useless. She knew useless when it sat in her palm. Herrera reached through the gap between the bars and extended his hand. “Give me your wrist.” “No.” “You need to cross or back away. Standing there gets you killed.” “By what?” “By indecision.” That word landed harder than she allowed. Quinn glanced back towards the stairwell to the street. She could wait. Units would come. Uniforms with torches, body armour, forms to fill, questions she could shape into ordinary language. Suspect fled into abandoned station. Detective pursued. Unknown assailant. Environmental hazard. Gas leak. She could put walls around it. Then the darkness in the corridor spoke without the radio. “Harlow.” Her throat closed. Not Morris now. Her own voice. “Harlow, left side.” Herrera’s hand stayed out. Blood ran from his split sleeve to his wrist, tracking over the old knife scar along his forearm. “You cross, you keep your badge in your pocket,” he warned. “You point it at the wrong stall and someone sells your name by the ounce.” Quinn looked past him into the market. A narrow avenue opened between stalls, slick with rainwater that shouldn’t have reached this deep underground. Lanterns swayed though no breeze moved them. At the foot of the stairs, a chalk circle marked the platform edge, scuffed by hundreds of boots and hooves and wheels. Beyond it lay the suspect she had chased, the bag he had refused to drop, the answers he had kept behind barred doors and smug warnings. Behind her, the old tunnel exhaled. The torch flickered once. Quinn snapped her baton shut, not because she trusted him, but because she needed both hands. She grabbed Herrera’s wrist. His fingers closed around hers, warm, slick with rain and blood. “Don’t let go until the third step.” “I don’t take instructions from suspects.” “You do down here.” He hauled. Quinn shoved her shoulder through the turnstile. Iron scraped her coat, caught at her hip, then gave way with a violent clack. Cold ran over her skin like a sheet pulled from a corpse. For one breath, she smelled the Thames at low tide, Morris’s aftershave, hospital disinfectant, and the burnt-coffee stink of the CID office at four in the morning. Then her boot hit the first stone step beyond the arch. Herrera pulled again. “Second.” The market noise pressed against her skull. “Third.” Quinn landed beside him on the lower stair and ripped her hand free. The turnstile slammed behind her. On the other side, the tunnel folded back into dead tile and darkness. Something struck the iron bars. Once. Twice. The whole barrier shuddered, brass plates rattling. Every face in the nearest rows of stalls turned towards Quinn. A woman with black eyes from lid to lid smiled around a mouthful of pins. The leather-masked vendor lifted his cleaver onto the counter. Herrera bent, grabbed his fallen bone token from the step, and shoved it into his pocket. “Walk.” Quinn stayed where she stood, rain dripping from her coat onto stone older than the station above it. He glanced at the crowd, then at the arch. “Detective, if you arrest me here, you need three miracles and a lawyer who speaks Enochian.” She fixed her gaze on his medical bag. “Open it.” “No.” A low murmur travelled through the market. Quinn heard her title pass from mouth to mouth, warped by accents and tongues she didn’t know. Police. Peel. Crow. Law-woman. Badge-bitch. The last came from a hunched man selling teeth from velvet trays. Herrera moved down one step. “They smell authority. They hate it.” “Good. Saves introductions.” “You’ve got blood on your sleeve.” “Yours.” “No.” He nodded towards her left arm. Quinn looked. A thin red line cut across the back of her wrist where the turnstile had caught her. Blood mixed with rain and ran beneath the strap of her worn watch. Several people in the crowd watched the blood. Not her face. Not the badge she had kept hidden. The blood. Herrera’s voice dropped. “Cover that.” Quinn pulled her cuff down. From somewhere near the tracks, a bell rang three times. The crowd shifted apart as a shape moved through them: tall, wrapped in a long coat patched from different animal hides, head bowed beneath a hat wide enough to hide the face. Coins sewed along the hem clicked with each step. Herrera muttered, “Market warden.” Quinn kept her stance square. “Does he have a warrant?” “Don’t.” The warden stopped at the foot of the stairs. Up close, Quinn saw no face under the hat, only a dark mesh veil and the pale suggestion of antlers pressed flat beneath the brim. A voice emerged, dry as paper rubbed between fingers. “Who brought the rain?” Herrera opened his mouth. Quinn stepped down to the platform before he could answer. Water fell from her coat onto the chalk circle, dotting the white line dark. “I did.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences97
tagDensity0.062
leniency0.124
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3090
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3090
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"fractured"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"gloom"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count2
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"fractured"
1"pulse"
2"footsteps"
3"echoed"
4"flicked"
5"gloom"
6"weight"
7"whisper"
8"flickered"
9"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences291
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences291
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences382
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3090
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.45% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions107
wordCount2627
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective2
Harlow1
Quinn46
Vauxhall1
Raven1
Nest1
Tomás1
Herrera31
Saint2
Christopher2
Wardour1
Street1
Spanish1
Tottenham1
Court1
Road1
Underground1
Cyrillic1
Latin1
Morris6
Thames1
Blood3
persons
0"Detective"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Tomás"
6"Herrera"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Spanish"
10"Morris"
11"Blood"
places
0"Vauxhall"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
3"Tottenham"
4"Court"
5"Road"
6"Cyrillic"
7"Thames"
globalScore0.624
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences178
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed farther away than before"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3090
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences382
matches
0"called that ankle"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs235
mean13.15
std15.82
cv1.203
sampleLengths
047
111
243
324
43
552
610
75
839
91
102
114
1225
132
1414
152
1650
171
1810
1915
206
2136
2238
237
249
252
2610
2713
286
294
3044
314
3226
334
344
359
365
3714
3855
394
4013
412
427
4346
443
4552
4625
4718
489
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences291
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs449
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences382
ratio0.003
matches
0"He swerved around a group spilling from a late bar; Quinn drove through them with her shoulder."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2638
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"Short curly dark hair."
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.02084912812736922
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0018953752843062926
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences382
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences382
mean8.09
std6.47
cv0.8
sampleLengths
023
124
211
321
416
56
624
73
84
92
106
1116
1224
1310
145
1512
1618
179
181
192
204
2125
222
2314
242
2514
267
2712
2817
291
3010
3115
326
335
348
356
3617
3723
3815
393
404
412
424
433
442
4510
469
474
486
494
48.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3089005235602094
totalSentences382
uniqueOpeners118
64.60% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences258
matches
0"Only for a second."
1"Then a horn blared."
2"Somewhere, a siren wailed, but"
3"Then the darkness in the"
4"Then her boot hit the"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount59
totalSentences258
matches
0"Her worn leather watch had"
1"He carried a battered canvas"
2"It struck her cropped salt-and-pepper"
3"She crossed between parked cars,"
4"His shoulders lifted, his head"
5"He shoved past a man"
6"He knew the pavement’s cracks,"
7"He swerved around a group"
8"Her lungs pulled in cold"
9"Her coat dragged at her"
10"She kept Herrera’s bag in"
11"He cut left into an"
12"She didn’t vault."
13"She kicked through them."
14"His voice carried between brick"
15"She drew her baton halfway,"
16"He hit the far end"
17"He clipped a scaffolding pole"
18"It clattered once on the"
19"She skidded back as a"
ratio0.229
47.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount213
totalSentences258
matches
0"Rain needled the roof of"
1"Soho ran wet and black"
2"The green sign above The"
3"Quinn sat with the engine"
4"Her worn leather watch had"
5"The minute hand ticked towards"
6"Quinn leaned closer."
7"A glimpse of the Saint"
8"He carried a battered canvas"
9"A bus groaned past and"
10"Herrera moved when it cleared."
11"Quinn opened her door without"
12"It struck her cropped salt-and-pepper"
13"She crossed between parked cars,"
14"His shoulders lifted, his head"
15"He shoved past a man"
16"The city narrowed to breath,"
17"Herrera moved fast, not panicked,"
18"He knew the pavement’s cracks,"
19"He swerved around a group"
ratio0.826
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences258
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences109
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Soho ran wet and black around her, alleys steaming, gutters choked with cigarette ends and takeaway cartons, neon signs bleeding colour across the road."
1"The air carried the subterranean rumble of trains that didn’t belong beneath that stretch of road."
2"She followed a narrow service walkway, her torch beam jumping over puddles and rats that slipped through gaps in the brickwork."
3"Quinn’s torch beam, which had lit cracked tiles a second before, now fell across a set of stone steps descending into a cavernous platform lit by hundreds of ha…"
4"Her hand moved to the warrant card clipped inside her coat, as if laminated plastic held weight here."
5"Darkness had gathered in the corridor, thick and ribbed, shifting against the walls as if something large moved without touching the floor."
6"A narrow avenue opened between stalls, slick with rainwater that shouldn’t have reached this deep underground."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"The cyclist yelled (yell)"
1"The radio whispered (whisper)"
2"he warned (warn)"
3"Herrera muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences97
tagDensity0.052
leniency0.103
rawRatio0.8
effectiveRatio0.082
89.8143%