Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PHVNCF2RYY88DR9TKSFTA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 48s
Cost:
$0.144020
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain had made Soho shine like a newly scrubbed wound. The green neon above The Raven’s Nest buzzed against the wet evening, its light broken in the puddles by shoes, tyres, the black ribs of umbrellas. Inside, the bar kept its own weather. Low amber lamps. Heat from bodies. A draught that slipped under the door each time someone came in and brought London with them: damp wool, petrol, fried onions from the corner van. Aurora Carter stood at the far end of the counter with a crate of clean glasses braced against her hip, her black hair tucked behind one ear, her sleeves rolled to the elbow. The crescent scar on her left wrist flashed whenever she reached for the shelf. She had spent most of the afternoon carrying takeaway bags through a city that seemed built from sirens and impatience, and by seven Silas had handed her a towel and pointed at the mountain of glassware as if it were a matter of national security. “Punters drink like they’re paid by the swallow,” he had muttered. “You own a bar, Si.” “A strategic miscalculation.” Now he moved near the till with his slight limp, one shoulder dipping as he crossed between tables. His silver signet ring caught the lamplight when he lifted two fingers at a man in a navy coat who had started arguing with his date about a theatre booking. The man shut his mouth. Silas never raised his voice. He had the kind of quiet that made other men inspect their manners. Old maps covered the walls, their coastlines yellowed and delicate, countries labelled in fonts that belonged to dead empires. Between them hung black-and-white photographs: boxers, singers, dockworkers, a woman in a fur collar laughing beside a taxi. The Raven’s Nest had no television, no fruit machine, no chalkboard advertising cocktails named after sins. People came here either because they knew it or because they had followed someone who did. Aurora fitted glasses upside down on the rack and listened to the room without appearing to. Two students by the window discussed rent with the bleakness of pensioners. A woman in red boots read a paperback and ate olives from a saucer. Near the back, by the bookcase that hid Silas’s other room, a thin man with a briefcase checked his watch every thirty seconds and touched the knot of his tie until it skewed. “Your man by the maps has either swallowed a bomb or he’s waiting for a wife who knows his phone password,” Aurora murmured when Silas passed. Silas collected three empties from the counter. “He’s waiting for a woman who knows a great deal worse than that.” “Ah. Romance.” “Work.” “Same ruin, different shoes.” His mouth twitched. “You’ve been listening to Yu-Fei again.” “Yu-Fei says romance is a bill that arrives in instalments.” “Yu-Fei was engaged to a tax inspector. Skewed sample.” The door opened. A gust of rain-damp air pushed through the bar and lifted the corner of a napkin. Aurora reached to pin it beneath a beer mat, not looking up at first. Someone paused just inside, shedding water in a nervous halo. The city sounds flared behind them, then snapped off as the door closed. Silas looked first. His hand stilled around the necks of the empty bottles. Aurora noticed that. In The Raven’s Nest, Silas’s stillness always meant something. She turned. The woman at the door wore a charcoal coat belted tight at the waist, the sort that knew tailoring and money. Her hair, once a wild auburn tumble Aurora remembered full of pencils and rainwater and pub smoke, had been cut into a severe bob that ended at her jaw. It was darker now, almost brown, glossy as a sealed chestnut. A pair of narrow glasses sat on her nose. She held no umbrella. Water ticked from the hem of her coat and gathered on the floorboards. For a moment, the bar continued without them. Glasses clicked. Laughter burst at a table and died. The thin man by the bookcase touched his tie. Then the woman looked directly at Aurora, and the years between Cardiff and Soho folded with an ugly little crack. “Rory?” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the towel. Her mouth knew the name before the rest of her did. “Eva.” Eva Morgan took one step forward and stopped again, as if the floor had moved beneath her. “You work here?” “I live upstairs.” Aurora placed the towel beside the sink. “Sometimes I’m conscripted.” Eva’s gaze slipped behind Aurora, over the bottles, the framed photograph of a 1970s jazz trio, Silas’s outline at the till. She did not smile at him. He did not smile at her. “Small city,” Eva said. “London?” “The world.” Aurora heard the old Eva buried under the clean accent, that bright Cardiff lilt scraped down and polished for boardrooms or courtrooms or whatever rooms required women to sound as though they had never run barefoot across wet grass at three in the morning. The old Eva had laughed with her whole throat. This woman held her jaw as if laughter were a leak she had learned to fix. Silas set the bottles under the counter. “Evening, Ms Morgan.” Eva unbuttoned her coat with gloved fingers. “Silas.” Aurora looked between them. “You two know each other.” “Everyone knows Silas.” Eva pulled off one glove at a time. Leather, black, fine. “Eventually.” Silas’s hazel eyes rested on her face for a beat too long. “What’ll you have?” “Gin. No tonic. Ice.” “You used to say gin tasted like perfume and divorce,” Aurora said. Eva’s mouth moved. Not quite a smile. “I developed a taste for both.” Silas took a glass from the shelf and moved away to pour. Aurora wiped a patch of counter that did not need wiping. Eva came closer. The lamplight showed the changes with a cruelty photographs lacked. Fine tension at the corners of the eyes. Cheekbones sharper than memory. A thin pale line under her chin, half hidden by the collar of her blouse. She smelled of rain, cold air, and something expensive with pepper in it. The last time Aurora had seen Eva, she had been twenty-one and furious, standing in the corridor of their Cardiff flat in a yellow jumper with a hole in one sleeve. Evan had been downstairs in his car, engine running. Aurora had a suitcase by her feet and a bruise blooming below her collarbone where make-up could not reach. Eva had gripped her by both shoulders and said, Come with me tonight, Rory. London. My aunt’s sofa. Anything. Just don’t go back to him. Aurora had gone back. For six more months. Now Eva sat on a bar stool as if it had been assigned to her. Silas placed the gin before her. “On the house.” “That’s unlike you.” “I’ve become generous in my old age.” “No.” Eva lifted the glass. “You’ve become better at disguising invoices.” Silas’s ring tapped once against the bar. “I’ll be in the cellar.” He left them with that, moving past the tables, his limp more visible when he was tired. Aurora watched him disappear through the door behind the bar. Eva held the gin but did not drink. “He still collects strays?” Aurora leaned her hip against the counter. “He rents me a flat.” “Same sentence.” “You still open with a knife and call it conversation?” Eva’s eyes flicked up. Bright, startled, then shuttered. “Only with people who used to dodge better.” The words landed between them with the wet weight of something dropped from a height. Aurora turned to the sink and rinsed a glass that had already been washed. Water rushed over her hands. The scar on her wrist looked silver beneath it. “You look well,” Eva said behind her. “That’s what people say when they can’t say anything true.” “Fine. You look alive. I was not always sure I’d get that.” Aurora shut off the tap. There it was. No preamble. No soft lane to walk down. Eva had always dragged a chair into the middle of a burning room and asked who struck the match. “I left,” Aurora said. “I heard.” “From who?” “Cardiff is not Rome. News still reaches the provinces.” Aurora gave a short laugh without humour. “You sound like his mother.” Eva set the glass down untouched. “Don’t.” “Then don’t talk as if you had a weather report on my life.” A man at the end of the bar glanced over. Aurora caught his eye. He turned back to his pint. Eva bent her head, and for the first time something old broke through: the way she pressed her thumb hard into the side of her index finger when she wanted to speak and not shout. “I rang you,” Eva said. “I know.” “I came by the flat.” “I know.” “I spoke to your mother.” Aurora’s stomach tightened. “You shouldn’t have done that.” “She was crying.” “She always cried when other people could hear.” Eva flinched. She covered it by drinking. The gin vanished in one clean swallow. “Another?” Aurora asked. “God, yes.” Aurora took the glass and poured this time. Her hand stayed steady. That annoyed her. Part of her wanted the glass to clatter, to betray something she did not plan to give. Eva watched. “You still hold bottles like lab equipment.” “You still judge people when they pour.” “I was raised in a house where my father watered whisky.” “You were raised in a house where your father watered everything. Plants, whisky, expectations.” Eva’s laugh came out once, raw at the edges. It startled them both. A few heads turned. She lowered her eyes to the fresh gin. “For a second there,” she said, “I heard the kitchen.” Aurora saw it too, because the mind could be a cruel archivist. Their second-year house in Cathays, damp creeping up the wall behind the toaster, Eva in purple socks, Aurora revising tort law at two in the morning while Eva burned onions and sang The Cranberries into a wooden spoon. Rain hammering the skylight. Their whole future balanced on cheap noodles and arrogance. “You cut your hair,” Aurora said. “You noticed.” “You had enough of it to knit a dog.” “I got tired of men using it as proof I was fun.” Aurora slid the gin across. “Are you?” “Fun?” “Tired.” Eva looked down into the glass. “That depends who invoices the hour.” “What do you do now?” “You don’t know?” “Contrary to your intelligence network, I didn’t keep files.” Eva traced the rim of the glass with one finger. No rings. Aurora noticed that too. “I advise companies on regulatory risk.” “You became a warning label.” “In heels.” “You used to throw eggs at payday loan shops.” “I now tell them where to stand so the eggs miss.” Aurora stared at her. Eva looked up. “There it is.” “What?” “That face. You had it when I took the internship.” “At the firm defending landlords who painted over mould?” “They paid me.” “You said you’d change them from inside.” “I was twenty-two. I thought inside meant a room, not a digestive tract.” Aurora folded her arms. “And now?” “Now I knew exactly what it meant and walked in with a fork.” The bar shifted around them. Someone fed coins into the old jukebox in the corner, and a low blues track began, guitar notes bending through the murmur. Rain struck the front windows, beads of water chasing each other down the glass. The woman with the paperback turned a page. Aurora took a clean ashtray from beneath the counter, though smoking had been banned for years, and placed it before Eva. She had no idea why. Habit picked strange tools. Eva touched the ashtray’s edge. “This place kept its ghosts in service.” “Silas liked old things that still worked.” “Then I shouldn’t have come in.” “You came in because of Silas?” Eva’s gaze moved to the cellar door. “I came in because a man texted me an address and a time. I didn’t know you were part of the furniture.” “Part-time furniture. Flexible hours.” “Rory.” Aurora hated how her name sounded in Eva’s mouth: not a claim, not a plea, but a key turned in a lock she had paid to replace. “What man?” Aurora asked. Eva gave a thin smile. “There she is. Question first, wound later.” “Wounds get boring. Men with addresses don’t.” “The man in the grey suit at the back.” “The one doing origami with his tie?” Eva glanced over and then back. “That’s him.” “He looked half-dead before you walked in.” “He owed me something.” “Money?” “Worse.” Aurora let that sit. The Raven’s Nest had heard worse things than that and swallowed them. Still, she lowered her voice. “Does Silas know?” Eva took a sip this time, small. “Silas knows the shape. Not the name.” “You’re using his bar for a meet.” “You’re working in his bar for cash.” “I’m not putting anyone at risk.” Eva’s eyes hardened. “You think I am?” “I think you walked in wearing the face of someone who had three exits planned before she ordered a drink.” “Four.” Aurora exhaled through her nose. “Of course.” Eva leaned closer, and the scent of pepper and rain sharpened. “I didn’t come here to reopen Cardiff.” “No. Cardiff jumped you by the coats.” “That wasn’t fair.” “Fair had a short life expectancy in our flat.” Eva’s hand closed around the gin. Her knuckles whitened. “You think I abandoned you.” Aurora looked past her to the shelves of bottles. Whisky labels. Vermouth. Polish vodka. A jar of pickled onions Silas kept for one regular and threatened to bin every month. “I think you saved me once,” Aurora said. “And when I didn’t stay saved, you couldn’t bear the insult.” Eva’s lips parted. Aurora kept going because stopping would have required mercy and she had spent too many years calling mercy by prettier names. “You took me to London. Your aunt’s sofa smelled of cats. You bought me a toothbrush and those awful lentil crisps. You sat outside the bathroom while I cried because I couldn’t shower without locking the door twice. And then he rang. And rang. And sent flowers to your office. And stood across the road from your building like some tragic bastard in a coat.” Eva’s face had gone still. “And I went back,” Aurora said. “I packed while you were out buying milk. Left a note. A note, Eva. Like a coward in a period drama.” “You wrote, ‘Don’t hate me.’” Aurora blinked. Eva stared at the counter. “That was the whole note. Three words on the back of a receipt from Boots. I kept it in my purse for two years, which made every coffee purchase feel deranged.” The blues track clicked and slid into another song. Outside, a taxi honked. Inside, no one near them spoke. Aurora pressed her palms to the bar’s edge. The wood held dents, rings, small burns from a time before laws and manners. “I thought if I saw you, I’d have to explain why I chose him.” “You didn’t choose him.” “I got in the car.” “That isn’t the same.” “It looked the same from the pavement.” Eva laughed once, bitter and small. “I was on the pavement.” Aurora looked at her then. Really looked. Past the coat, the cut hair, the corporate polish that sat over her like armour that had grown from old bruises. Eva’s eyes were not colder than before. They were guarded by better locks. “What happened to you?” Aurora asked. Eva’s fingers went to the pale line beneath her chin. She caught herself and lowered her hand. “Life. Promotions. Bad lighting.” “Eva.” The name pulled something across her face. Annoyance. Fear. Shame. All of it quick, all of it gone. “You don’t get to ask that as if we’re in the kitchen and you’ve just noticed I’ve nicked myself peeling potatoes.” “No?” “No.” “Then how do I ask?” Eva turned the glass in place, leaving a wet ring on the bar. “You don’t. You wait for me to hand you something, and you decide whether to hold it or put it down.” Aurora nodded. “Fine.” “Fine?” “Fine.” “You’ve learned restraint. Horrifying.” “You’ve learned evasion. Less horrifying. More on brand.” Eva’s mouth curved, then flattened. “I married someone.” Aurora had expected many things. A threat. A file. A dead man’s name. Not that. “Oh.” “Don’t give me that tragic vowel.” “I wasn’t prepared.” “No one was. Least of all the registrar.” “When?” “Three years ago.” “Was?” Eva drank. “Was.” Aurora waited. “His name was Daniel. He worked in crisis communications. That should have warned me. A man who cleaned disasters for a living had no business being invited into a private life.” “Did he hurt you?” Eva looked at her then, and there was the kitchen again, but stripped of warmth: two young women standing with a world between them, each recognising a shape in the other’s dark. “Not like Evan hurt you.” Aurora’s jaw locked. Eva set the glass down with care. “That came out wrong.” “No, it came out dressed.” “He never hit me.” “That’s a low bar. Men step over it and expect applause.” “He moved money. Friends. Facts. He’d say a thing in front of people, and by the time we got home I remembered it differently because he’d spent the taxi ride correcting the air around it.” Aurora watched her thumb grind into her finger again. “One night I found emails,” Eva continued. “Not an affair. That would have been almost kind. He’d been feeding information from my work to a client under investigation. My name attached in places it shouldn’t have been. My logins. My wording, lifted and stitched where it could bleed.” “The scar?” Eva’s hand went to her throat, then stopped halfway. “Broken glass. Hotel bathroom. He threw a tumbler at the mirror beside my head. A piece bounced.” Aurora felt her own wrist ache, the old crescent tightening as though skin remembered every blade it had never met. “Where is he?” “Dubai. Or Singapore. Or wherever men like that go when consequences develop borders.” “And you?” “I stayed. I had to become the sort of woman who could survive what he left in my name.” “So you became this.” Eva looked down at herself: the coat, the sharp cuffs, the immaculate nails. “This paid the solicitors.” Aurora leaned back. Her anger had not vanished. It had changed temperature. “You could have called.” Eva’s eyes lifted fast. “So could you.” The words struck clean. Neither of them looked away. At the back of the room, the thin man with the briefcase stood. His chair scraped. He dabbed his upper lip with a handkerchief and moved towards the toilets, briefcase clutched to his side. Eva saw him. Her posture altered by a fraction. Shoulders loose, gaze unfixed, one hand slipping into her coat pocket. Aurora noticed. “Your warning label’s leaving.” “He’ll come back.” “You sure?” “He has nowhere useful to go.” “You always sounded like that when you were wrong.” Eva stood, leaving the gin half-finished. “I need five minutes.” “Is this the part where I pretend I didn’t see anything?” “This is the part where you decide if the woman behind the bar is who you are tonight.” Aurora felt heat rise in her face. “Don’t do that.” “Do what?” “Make me a test.” Eva’s expression cracked, and beneath it there was exhaustion so plain Aurora almost stepped back. “I don’t know how else to ask for help.” The sentence sat there, stripped down to its bones. Silas emerged from the cellar then, carrying a crate against one hip. His gaze took in Eva standing, Aurora rigid behind the bar, the empty path towards the toilets. He set the crate down without sound. “Problem?” Eva did not turn. “Not yet.” Silas looked at Aurora. The Raven’s Nest hummed around them. Rain on glass. Low music. Old maps holding borders that men had drawn and redrawn, confident each time. Aurora wiped her hands on the towel though they were dry. The toilet door at the back opened. The thin man stepped out, no briefcase in his hand. Aurora reached beneath the counter and took hold of the heavy brass torch Silas kept there for power cuts and other emergencies. Eva’s gaze dropped to it, then rose to Aurora’s face. “For the record,” Aurora said, “I’m still furious with you.” Eva buttoned her coat with one hand. “For the record, I deserved a portion. Not the whole plate.” “We’ll audit later.” Silas came around the end of the bar, his limp measured, his signet ring gleaming as he flexed his fingers once. “Ladies,” he murmured, “shall we keep this civil?” The thin man saw the three of them looking and stopped beside the old map of Prague. His hand twitched towards his jacket. Eva moved first. Not fast. Not dramatic. She simply stepped into his path with the kind of calm that made panic look vulgar. “Mr Vale,” she said, voice clear enough for him and no one else. “You forgot your case.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences195
tagDensity0.108
leniency0.215
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
98.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3525
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.23% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3525
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"tension"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"measured"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"tension"
2"flicked"
3"weight"
4"stomach"
5"traced"
6"warmth"
7"measured"
8"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences254
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences254
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences428
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen65
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3525
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions171
wordCount2249
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity2.8
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Raven5
Nest5
London2
Carter1
Silas18
Aurora63
Cardiff3
Morgan1
Eva61
Leather1
Come1
Rory1
Cathays1
Cranberries1
Prague1
Rain4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Silas"
4"Aurora"
5"Morgan"
6"Eva"
7"Rory"
8"Rain"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Cardiff"
3"Cathays"
4"Prague"
globalScore0.099
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences143
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed built from sirens and impatience, and by seven Silas had handed her a towel and pointed at the mountain of glassware as if it were a matter of national security"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.567
wordCount3525
matches
0"not a claim, not a plea, but a key turned in a lock she had paid to replace"
1"not a plea, but a key turned in a lock she had paid to replace"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences428
matches
0"let that sit"
1"borders that men"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs266
mean13.25
std15.68
cv1.183
sampleLengths
010
165
292
311
45
53
671
769
875
926
107
1113
122
131
144
159
1610
179
1856
1913
2012
212
2287
2326
2420
251
2617
271
2817
293
3013
3133
324
331
342
3569
367
373
388
399
4015
4112
423
434
4412
4513
4623
4753
4884
494
99.74% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences254
matches
0"been assigned"
1"been washed"
2"been banned"
3"were guarded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs383
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences428
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2256
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.02127659574468085
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.002216312056737589
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences428
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences428
mean8.24
std7.78
cv0.945
sampleLengths
010
126
27
33
43
526
633
714
845
911
105
113
1218
1330
145
155
1613
1719
1818
1916
2016
2116
2212
2314
2433
2526
267
2713
282
291
304
313
326
3310
349
353
3616
3714
3810
3913
403
4110
423
439
442
4521
4629
4711
489
494
44.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats23
diversityRatio0.2616822429906542
totalSentences428
uniqueOpeners112
31.15% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences214
matches
0"Then the woman looked directly"
1"Just don’t go back to"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences214
matches
0"She had spent most of"
1"he had muttered"
2"His silver signet ring caught"
3"He had the kind of"
4"His mouth twitched."
5"His hand stilled around the"
6"Her hair, once a wild"
7"It was darker now, almost"
8"She held no umbrella."
9"Her mouth knew the name"
10"She did not smile at"
11"He did not smile at"
12"She smelled of rain, cold"
13"My aunt’s sofa."
14"He left them with that,"
15"He turned back to his"
16"She covered it by drinking."
17"Her hand stayed steady."
18"It startled them both."
19"She lowered her eyes to"
ratio0.168
30.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount184
totalSentences214
matches
0"Rain had made Soho shine"
1"The green neon above The"
2"A draught that slipped under"
3"Aurora Carter stood at the"
4"The crescent scar on her"
5"She had spent most of"
6"he had muttered"
7"His silver signet ring caught"
8"The man shut his mouth."
9"Silas never raised his voice."
10"He had the kind of"
11"The Raven’s Nest had no"
12"People came here either because"
13"Aurora fitted glasses upside down"
14"A woman in red boots"
15"Aurora murmured when Silas passed"
16"Silas collected three empties from"
17"His mouth twitched."
18"The door opened."
19"A gust of rain-damp air"
ratio0.86
46.73% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences214
matches
0"Now he moved near the"
1"Now Eva sat on a"
ratio0.009
73.17% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"A draught that slipped under the door each time someone came in and brought London with them: damp wool, petrol, fried onions from the corner van."
1"She had spent most of the afternoon carrying takeaway bags through a city that seemed built from sirens and impatience, and by seven Silas had handed her a towe…"
2"His silver signet ring caught the lamplight when he lifted two fingers at a man in a navy coat who had started arguing with his date about a theatre booking."
3"Old maps covered the walls, their coastlines yellowed and delicate, countries labelled in fonts that belonged to dead empires."
4"Her hair, once a wild auburn tumble Aurora remembered full of pencils and rainwater and pub smoke, had been cut into a severe bob that ended at her jaw."
5"Aurora heard the old Eva buried under the clean accent, that bright Cardiff lilt scraped down and polished for boardrooms or courtrooms or whatever rooms requir…"
6"Past the coat, the cut hair, the corporate polish that sat over her like armour that had grown from old bruises."
7"Aurora felt her own wrist ache, the old crescent tightening as though skin remembered every blade it had never met."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, voice clear enough for him and no one else"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
1"Eva continued (continue)"
2"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences195
tagDensity0.087
leniency0.174
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.031
87.0442%