Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PM7KXBFRG3EV0B753PEWA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.125555
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn reached the locked service gate beneath Camden High Street with rain on her collar and grit under her nails. Two constables stood beside the corrugated metal shutter, both young enough to still look offended by night shifts. A strip of police tape sagged between a lamppost and a council bin. Behind it, weekend drinkers drifted past with kebabs, glitter, black lipstick, damp hair, none of them glancing twice at the rust-stained entrance that had no sign, no map marker, no reason to exist. One constable straightened when she came close. “Detective Quinn. DS Briggs is below.” Quinn held out her hand. “Keys.” The constable fumbled with a ring large enough to moor a boat. Quinn watched his fingers miss the right key twice. “Who found it?” “British Transport Police got a call about noises under the old station. Thought it was rough sleepers. Then they found the, er, market.” “The what?” His mouth tightened. “You’ll see.” The gate shrieked up on its runners. Cold air rolled out, stale and mineral-heavy, carrying damp brick, paraffin smoke, old copper, and something sweeter beneath it. Rot disguised with incense. Quinn ducked under the shutter and took the stairs. The first flight had council-green tiles split by black mould. The second had no lights. A scene-of-crime lamp glowed below, white and hard, catching the edge of a poster from another century. VISIT MARGATE. Half the woman’s painted face had peeled away. At the bottom, the station opened like a throat. The platforms had been abandoned long enough for London to forget them, yet someone had filled the place with stalls. Not proper stalls. Doors set on barrels. Velvet cloth over crates. Birdcages hanging from signal arms. Glass jars lined in rows, each stoppered and labelled in brown ink. Dried roots. Bone charms. Silver knives. Small bottles of fluid that reflected colours the lamps did not cast. Quinn paused at the edge of the platform. “Christ.” DS Niall Briggs stood near a chalk outline, paper suit unzipped to his sternum, blond hair flattened by his hood. He held a torch under his chin like a campfire ghost. “Welcome to Camden’s gift shop for lunatics.” Quinn stepped onto the platform. Her boots left clean crescents in the grey dust. “Tell me.” Briggs pointed his torch down. “Male. Thirties or forties. No ID yet. Found at 23:18 by BTP. One wound to the neck, deep. Blood pool under the body. Looks like a deal went bad. Place was full of illegal gear, whatever this lot call illegal. We found packets, powders, knives, some animal remains. Could be a fetish club, could be a smuggling ring. Your sort of headache.” “My sort?” “Organised weirdness.” Quinn looked at the body. The man lay on his back between two stalls, arms bent at neat right angles, palms up. His coat had been expensive once, black wool with horn buttons. Mud crusted the soles of his boots, but the cuffs of his trousers were clean. A cut opened his throat from left to right, wide as a second mouth. Blood had spread beneath him in a dark fan and soaked between the platform tiles. Quinn crouched without touching anything. Her worn leather watch slid against the bone of her wrist. “Who moved him?” “No one. First officers swear it.” “Witnesses?” “None. Place was empty. Traders scarpered before we got here.” Quinn tilted her head. “They took their customers with them?” Briggs gave a thin smile. “Unless the customers are in those jars.” A forensic photographer shifted nearby, camera lowering. Quinn lifted two fingers, and he froze. “Carry on.” The camera clicked. Light flashed across the dead man’s face. His eyes had been opened. Not forced wide with terror; opened after the muscles slackened. Quinn had seen enough bodies to know when the dead had been arranged to look surprised. She rose and moved down the row of stalls. A cracked sign hung above the nearest table, painted in gold on black wood: TOKENS ACCEPTED. Beneath it sat a brass bowl full of small pale discs. Quinn picked up an evidence marker from the kit and nudged one, turning it over. Not ivory. Bone. Cut thin, polished by fingers, each etched with a tiny doorway. Briggs came closer. “Tokens for entry, according to a woman we found in the upper passage.” Quinn looked up. “A witness?” “More like trespasser. Eva Kowalski. British Museum ID. Research assistant in restricted archives, if you can believe they still have those. She had one of these bone bits in her satchel.” Quinn kept her face still. “Where is she?” “Back of the platform, with PC Adler. Talks like she swallowed a library. Claims she came to ‘verify a movement of rare alchemical manuscripts’. I wrote down the phrase in case it turned into English later.” Quinn’s gaze travelled across the market. Nothing here felt raided. The valuable goods remained on display. A tray of rings lay untouched. A locked cabinet sat open, its glass intact, filled with vials in velvet slots. If thieves had come, they had shown monkish restraint. She turned back to the body. “Your deal-gone-bad left the stock.” “Panic. Someone gets cut, everyone runs.” “Through which exit?” Briggs aimed his torch towards the tunnel mouth. “That way. Tracks run north, then there’s a maintenance stair. SOCO found fresh scuffs.” “Show me.” They walked along the platform edge. Rainwater dripped from somewhere above, hitting the rail with patient ticks. The old track bed lay below, blanketed in soot and dust. Three sets of footprints crossed it: two officers, marked with blue flags; one unknown, deeper at the heel, heading into the tunnel. Briggs leaned over. “Size nine or ten. Heavy. Running.” Quinn held her torch low. “Running from where?” “From the body.” “Then why no slide at the platform edge?” Briggs frowned. She pointed with the beam. The dust on the platform lip remained smooth, except where officers had climbed down with care. No smear from a hurried boot. No crumble of grit kicked over the edge. The unknown prints began in the track bed, six feet from the platform, as if a man had stepped out of the air and run north. Briggs crouched. “Could’ve jumped.” “From a standing jump with no take-off mark?” He said nothing. Quinn panned the torch across the sleepers. The unknown prints pressed into the dust, deep and clean. Too clean. No loose grit thrown forwards. No drag of laces. Someone had placed weight into each step, not fled. “These weren’t made in flight.” Briggs rose. “Staged?” “Or rehearsed.” A constable approached from the far end of the platform, face pale under the lamp glare. “Detective? The Museum woman asked if she could speak to whoever was in charge.” Quinn glanced at Briggs. “Keep your theory warm.” They found Eva Kowalski seated on an upturned crate outside an old ticket office. Round glasses fogged at the edges. Curly red hair had escaped its clips and sprang around her freckled face. A worn leather satchel sat between her boots, tagged and sealed in an evidence bag. Her green eyes fixed on Quinn’s warrant card, then on Quinn’s watch, then back to her face. “You’re Detective Quinn.” “You’ve heard of me?” Eva tucked hair behind her left ear, caught herself, folded both hands in her lap. “People mention you.” “People?” “The ones who know to avoid attention.” Briggs let out a dry laugh. “That narrows London down.” Quinn stood over her. “Why were you here?” Eva nodded towards the stalls. “A text came through an hour before midnight. Anonymous. It referenced a manuscript stolen from a private collection in Prague. I thought someone planned to sell pages here.” “Here being a dead Tube station full of bones and powders.” “Yes.” “You came alone.” “I have poor judgement, not poor eyesight. The market had rules. Violence broke them.” Briggs shifted beside Quinn. “Markets have rules. Murderers don’t.” Eva looked past him, towards the covered body. “That man wasn’t killed by anyone who traded here.” Quinn watched her hands. Ink stains on two fingers. No tremor now. “You know him?” “No.” “But you know how he died?” “I know what was missing.” Briggs crossed his arms. “Here we go.” Eva lifted her chin. “The Veil Market used bone tokens for entry. Every person inside carried one, or they couldn’t find the platform. If a trader died here, their token would have been taken, cracked, or placed in the toll bowl.” Quinn nodded towards the nearest stall. “There’s a bowl full of them.” “Those were stock. Blank tokens. His entry token should have been on him.” “We haven’t searched the body.” “You won’t find it.” Briggs’s patience frayed across his mouth. “And you know that because of market etiquette?” Eva’s eyes moved to Quinn. “Because no one who entered through the front gate left without paying the exit price. The old places ran on bargains.” Quinn crouched until she met Eva at eye level. “Drop the theatre. What did you see?” Eva swallowed once. “When I arrived, the gate was open. That was wrong. The Market should have been loud. It wasn’t. The stalls were here, but the traders were gone. I heard a bell from the tunnel. Not metal. Glass. Then I found him.” “Did you touch him?” “No.” “You called it in?” “No. I went back up to get signal. Police were already at the shutter.” Quinn studied her face under the cold lamp. Fear had marked her, but not guilt. Fear looked outward. Guilt watched itself. “Who else knew you were coming?” “No one.” “Your phone will tell us.” “It will.” Briggs pulled Quinn aside with a look. “Boss, she had access, motive we don’t understand, and a bag full of old books with notes about this place. If she didn’t cut him, she knows who did.” Quinn kept her voice low. “Bagged her hands?” “PC Adler did.” “Good.” “She’s spinning folklore to muddy us.” “She noticed the same gap you missed.” Briggs stiffened. “The token?” “The market was full, then empty. Goods left behind. No exit rush, no knocked tables, no broken glass underfoot. Whoever cleared this place did it before the body hit the floor.” “Or they’re disciplined criminals.” Quinn turned away from Eva and walked back to the corpse. The path between stalls tightened near the old ticket barriers. Wooden counters displayed objects with labels in several languages. Quinn recognised Latin, Greek, Polish. One stall had cages with open doors and feathers caught in the wire. Another offered compasses in a velvet-lined tray, all brass, all small enough for a palm. One space in the tray sat empty. Quinn stopped. “Photographer.” The camera came up. She leaned close to the label beside the empty slot. The card had been written in a narrow hand: VEIL COMPASS, SHADE-WORK, RIFT-TRUE, NO REFUNDS. Briggs followed her gaze. “You think our killer nicked a compass?” “I think someone wanted us to ignore what they took.” “The place is a buffet of illegal oddities.” “Yet one slot is empty, and its dust is fresh.” The velvet around the gap held a rectangle of darker blue, unworn by grime. Quinn traced the air above it with her finger. “How much did Kowalski have in her bag?” “Books. Notes. One bone token. No compass.” “Search the body’s coat.” The forensic tech looked over. “Ma’am, we haven’t got the pathologist’s clearance.” “Outer pockets. Gloves. Now.” A SOCO knelt and worked through the dead man’s coat. From the left pocket came a folded handkerchief. From the right, a pouch of coins, a broken cigarette, and a small brass compass with green patina eating at the hinge. Its casing bore tiny etched sigils, loops and cuts too precise for decoration. Briggs’s brows drew together. “Or he bought it.” The SOCO placed it in a clear bag. The needle inside did not point north. It quivered towards the tunnel, then swung towards the tiled wall behind the ticket office, striking the glass face with a faint tap. Tap. Tap. Tap. The sound thinned the air. Quinn took the bag by its edge. “Magnets?” Briggs brought his phone close. The compass needle ignored it. It kept pointing at the wall. Quinn looked past the ticket office. The tiles there were older than the rest, cream with a green border. One section had been cleaned. Not repaired. Cleaned. The grout around six tiles held black dust, while the surrounding wall wore decades of soot. She walked to it. “Lamp.” A constable angled light across the wall. Under the beam, scratches emerged at waist height, shallow and recent. Four lines. Not random. Something hard had scraped there in a square. Quinn tapped one tile with her knuckle. Solid. She tapped the next. Solid. The third gave back a dull, hollow note. Briggs leaned in. “Service hatch?” “Painted over, then tiled.” “The station plans didn’t show a room here.” “The station plans didn’t show a market either.” She knelt near the skirting. A smear of dark blood marked the bottom edge of the wall, no longer than a thumbnail. It sat far from the pool under the body. No spatter trail connected them. Quinn’s jaw set. “There.” Briggs crouched beside her. “Could be transfer.” “From what? No one stepped here. Dust untouched.” She pointed to the floor. Dust lay smooth up to the skirting, except for a single round indentation the size of a coin. No shoe print around it. No knee mark. Something had stood on a narrow point, bled once, and vanished. Briggs rubbed his forehead with the heel of his palm. “That makes no sense.” “It makes more than the throat.” She returned to the body and lowered herself near the wound. The blood pool looked convincing from standing height. At floor level, the edge betrayed it. It had flowed in a near-perfect crescent around the shoulders, but the tiles beneath the neck held only a thin sheen. A cut like that should have pumped heat and volume. It should have sprayed the underside of the nearest stall, misted the dead man’s collar, painted the gravel between tiles. The collar remained dry where it tucked under his jaw. Quinn leaned close enough to smell him. Not just blood. Ozone. Cold iron. The sweet scent from the stairs clung to the wound, not the market. “Briggs.” He came to her side. “Look at his hands.” The dead man’s palms faced up. The fingers had curled with rigor, but a grey film coated the skin in streaks. Quinn held her torch at an angle. Fine particles glittered in the creases. “Cement dust?” “Tile dust.” Briggs glanced towards the hollow wall. “He opened something?” “Or held it shut.” Quinn looked at the wound again. “A blade went across his neck after death.” Briggs stared. “That’s a big claim.” “No cast-off. No arterial spray. Blood poured after the heart stopped, or close to it. Someone opened him to give us a murder we understood.” The photographer lowered his camera without meaning to. Briggs kept his voice flat. “Then what killed him?” Quinn took the dead man’s wrist through the sleeve and lifted it a fraction for the SOCO to photograph beneath. Blue-black marks circled the skin, five on one side, one long bar on the other. Not rope. Not cuffs. A handprint with too many pressure points. She let the sleeve fall. “That did part of it.” Briggs’s face lost colour. “Someone grabbed him.” “Something with a grip like a vice.” Eva’s voice cut from behind the tape. “Detective.” PC Adler moved to block her, but Eva had stood, hands raised, eyes fixed on the compass bag. “Don’t let it touch the wall.” Quinn turned. “Why?” Eva’s gaze flicked to the hollow tiles, then to the body. “Because it was already pointing there when I found him.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2637
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2637
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"velvet"
count4
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"quivered"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"etched"
2"weight"
3"traced"
4"quivered"
5"perfect"
6"flicked"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences215
matches
0"e with terror"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences215
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences339
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2637
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions98
wordCount1731
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity2.43
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn42
Camden1
High1
Street1
London1
Niall1
Briggs26
Eva12
Kowalski1
Latin1
Greek1
Polish1
Adler1
One4
Tap3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Briggs"
3"Eva"
4"Kowalski"
5"Greek"
6"Adler"
7"One"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"London"
globalScore0.287
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2637
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences339
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs232
mean11.37
std14.86
cv1.307
sampleLengths
022
164
27
36
45
51
621
73
823
92
103
112
1230
139
1442
159
1666
178
181
1931
207
2114
222
235
2462
252
262
275
2872
2916
303
316
321
3310
344
356
365
377
3814
392
4041
419
4242
4314
443
4513
463
472
4831
495
97.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences215
matches
0"been abandoned"
1"been opened"
2"been arranged"
3"been written"
4"been cleaned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs278
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences339
ratio0.006
matches
0"Not forced wide with terror; opened after the muscles slackened."
1"Three sets of footprints crossed it: two officers, marked with blue flags; one unknown, deeper at the heel, heading into the tunnel."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1741
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.021826536473291212
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0011487650775416428
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences339
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences339
mean7.78
std7.12
cv0.915
sampleLengths
022
118
213
333
47
56
65
71
812
99
103
1123
122
133
142
157
1619
174
189
1910
205
2117
222
238
249
2520
263
274
284
295
3012
312
322
332
3412
358
361
3720
3811
397
405
419
422
435
4462
452
462
475
4817
4911
56.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.37168141592920356
totalSentences339
uniqueOpeners126
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences188
matches
0"His mouth tightened."
1"He held a torch under"
2"Her boots left clean crescents"
3"His coat had been expensive"
4"Her worn leather watch slid"
5"His eyes had been opened."
6"She rose and moved down"
7"She turned back to the"
8"They walked along the platform"
9"She pointed with the beam."
10"He said nothing."
11"They found Eva Kowalski seated"
12"Her green eyes fixed on"
13"She leaned close to the"
14"Its casing bore tiny etched"
15"It quivered towards the tunnel,"
16"It kept pointing at the"
17"She walked to it."
18"She tapped the next."
19"She knelt near the skirting."
ratio0.144
55.74% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount152
totalSentences188
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn reached the"
1"A strip of police tape"
2"Quinn held out her hand."
3"The constable fumbled with a"
4"Quinn watched his fingers miss"
5"His mouth tightened."
6"The gate shrieked up on"
7"Quinn ducked under the shutter"
8"The first flight had council-green"
9"The second had no lights."
10"A scene-of-crime lamp glowed below,"
11"The platforms had been abandoned"
12"Doors set on barrels."
13"Velvet cloth over crates."
14"Birdcages hanging from signal arms."
15"Glass jars lined in rows,"
16"Quinn paused at the edge"
17"DS Niall Briggs stood near"
18"He held a torch under"
19"Quinn stepped onto the platform."
ratio0.809
26.60% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences188
matches
0"If thieves had come, they"
ratio0.005
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Behind it, weekend drinkers drifted past with kebabs, glitter, black lipstick, damp hair, none of them glancing twice at the rust-stained entrance that had no s…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
87.1840%