Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PNPKCPHWM6YMCZ16Z2W2E

Run Details

Duration:
1m 26s
Cost:
$0.112850
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter reached the ancient oaks just after midnight with a takeaway bag in one hand and the Heartstone Pendant clenched in the other. The order had gone cold twenty minutes ago. Some man with a clipped voice and no surname had rung Golden Empress at closing and asked for dumplings, chilli oil, and jasmine rice to be delivered to the edge of Richmond Park. Cash on arrival. Yu-Fei had narrowed her eyes at the address. “No one lives there, Rory.” “Then he can tip me for the scenic route.” “You hear anything with bells, you turn back.” “I’m Welsh-Irish, Yu-Fei. Bells don’t scare me. Council tax scares me.” Yu-Fei had not smiled. She had pressed a red paper charm into the crease of the takeaway bag and muttered something under her breath that sounded older than Cantonese. Now the charm had blackened at the edges. Rory stood beneath the first oak and watched her breath cloud the dark. Richmond Park stretched behind her in its ordinary winter hush: grass silvered with frost, distant road noise softened into a low urban hum, the faint, blunt shape of a sleeping deer herd near the ridge. Ahead, between the oaks, the air bent. Not moved. Bent. The grove waited past the boundary, where ancient oak trunks grew in a rough circle like standing stones. Their bark carried pale ridges that caught moonlight without reflecting it. Wildflowers crowded the frost-cracked earth beyond them — foxgloves, bluebells, primroses, buttercups — blooming all wrong for January, each petal too open, too eager. The Heartstone pulsed in her palm. Warm. Then warmer. Rory loosened her fingers. The deep crimson gem hung from its silver chain, thumbnail-sized and glowing from inside, as if someone had trapped an ember behind glass. Heat licked the crescent scar on her left wrist. She tucked the delivery bag against her hip and stared between the oaks. “Nope.” Her voice flattened in the cold. The grove swallowed the word before it reached the trees behind her. She glanced back. The path to the road remained clear, a chalky line under the moon. Her scooter sat beyond the scrub, orange delivery box strapped to the back, helmet hooked over one handlebar. Sensible options stood there in a neat queue: go home, call Yu-Fei, lie about a puncture, eat the dumplings, sleep with a chair under the door. The pendant throbbed once. A thin sound answered from the grove. Not a bell. Not quite. A teaspoon tapped against porcelain somewhere deep among the flowers. Rory stopped breathing. Tap. Pause. Tap-tap. She raised the takeaway bag. “Your food’s here.” No answer. The flowers shifted though no wind crossed the clearing. Rory stepped through the oaks. Cold vanished. Warmth slid over her face, damp and green, rich with soil, blossom, and rot under leaves. Behind her, the park’s night sounds folded shut. No traffic. No owl. No distant plane. The grove held its own silence, round and padded, the kind that gathered inside old houses after an argument. The moon hung above the clearing, too large and washed yellow at the rim. It lit the wildflowers in hard detail. Each stem cast a thin shadow. Each shadow leaned the wrong way. Rory looked at the ground. Her own shadow stretched ahead of her towards the centre of the grove. The flowers’ shadows reached back towards her. “Brilliant. Love a theme.” She kept moving because stopping had become worse. The pendant rested against her sternum now, beneath her black jacket, pulsing heat through cotton. Her shoulder-length hair stuck to the damp at her neck. She shifted the delivery bag to her other hand and checked her phone. No signal. The time read 00:03. It had read 00:03 when she left the scooter. “Of course.” A low wooden table sat in the centre of the clearing. It had not been there a moment before. Rory’s grip tightened on the takeaway handles until the plastic cut her fingers. The table looked domestic, almost plain, with four short legs and a dark varnished top. Someone had laid one place setting: white plate, white bowl, bone-handled spoon, folded linen napkin. A glass of water stood beside it. The surface of the water trembled. Tap. The spoon lifted, struck the bowl, and settled back into place. Rory did not move. The spoon lifted again. Tap-tap. “Cute.” Her mouth had gone dry. She forced herself forward, each step flattening flowers that sprang upright behind her with tiny wet clicks. She reached the table, set the bag down, and slid Yu-Fei’s blackened paper charm from the side. The charm crumbled between her fingers. The smell hit next. Not rot now. Perfume. Her mother’s lavender hand cream. Rory’s chest tightened. For half a second, she was eight years old again at the kitchen table in Cardiff, chin sticky with jam, her mother guiding her wrist away from the broken mug. Blood had made a neat crescent under the skin. Her father had sworn in the hallway, arguing with someone on the phone about evidence, always evidence. The grove breathed. Rory stepped back from the table. “No.” The word came out small. She hated that. A laugh rippled through the flowers. It sounded like Eva after two glasses of wine, head thrown back, bangles clattering against a bar top. Rory turned. Nothing stood between the oaks. The laugh came again, softer, farther to the left. “Rory?” Her name slid out from the darkness beyond the bluebells. She knew Eva’s voice. Knew the crack in it when panic bruised the edges. Knew the way Eva dragged the first syllable when she wanted forgiveness without saying sorry. Rory’s jaw set. “Eva’s in Camden, and she doesn’t call me Rory when she’s scared.” Silence. A twig snapped behind her. Rory spun. Her hand went to the pendant. The Heartstone burned hot enough to sting. At the edge of the clearing, between two oak trunks, a shape pulled itself out of shadow. Tall. Narrow. Not a person. It wore the idea of a person badly, like a coat stolen from someone much smaller. Moonlight skimmed a pale curve where a face should have been and found no features. Only a surface. Smooth as wet clay. Its arms hung too low. Its fingers brushed the flowers without bending them. Rory backed away from the table. The shape did the same. She stopped. It stopped. Her stomach turned cold despite the grove’s warmth. A mirror game. She lifted her left hand. It lifted its right. Not quite mirror, then. The crescent scar on her wrist prickled. “Who ordered the dumplings?” The faceless thing tilted its head. The takeaway bag behind her rustled. Rory didn’t look. Every nerve screamed for it. She kept her eyes on the thing at the oaks. The rustling grew sharper. Paper folded. Plastic stretched. Chopsticks clicked free. Then came chewing. Slow. Wet. Polite. Rory’s skin crawled up her arms. She turned her head a fraction. The place setting had changed. The bowl now steamed. Dumplings sat on the plate, pale skins split, chilli oil shining under moonlight. One dumpling lifted from the plate without a hand and vanished into the empty air above the chair. Chewing. The glass of water drained by half. Rory moved away from the table, angling towards the oak boundary. The faceless shape copied her, gliding along the opposite side of the clearing. No footsteps. No crushed grass. The flowers passed through its calves as though it were mist, but its shadow dragged behind it, dark and thick, flattening petals. Her phone buzzed. She flinched so hard the pendant struck her ribs. The screen lit in her hand. Unknown Number. No signal bars. No battery percentage. Just the call. Rory let it ring once. Twice. The chewing stopped. The faceless thing raised one long hand to the side of its blank head. The phone kept vibrating. Rory answered and held it away from her ear. Static filled the grove, loud enough to stir the petals. Then a man breathed down the line. “Laila.” Not Rory. Not Aurora. Laila. The name pressed against her like a thumb on a bruise. She had used it once in London, the first week after Evan, when every footstep outside the flat above Silas’ bar had sounded like his return. Cash jobs. No paper trail. No forwarding address. Laila had signed for cheap sheets, a burner phone, a life she could lock from the inside. Rory’s fingers went numb around the phone. “Wrong number.” The breath on the line hitched. “You always said that when I found you.” Her ex’s voice should not have reached this place. Evan had never sounded like a monster in the way people expected monsters to sound. No snarl. No theatrical rage. Just calm, powdered with concern, every word dressed for court. The faceless thing took one step forward. Rory ended the call. The phone screen went black. In the reflection, someone stood behind her chair at the table. Rory did not turn. The table creaked as weight settled into the empty seat. A spoon touched porcelain. Tap. “Eat before it gets cold, Aurora.” This voice was hers. Not similar. Not close. Hers. Cardiff softened by London, consonants clipped when annoyed. It came from the chair, from the space where no body sat. Rory swallowed. “I delivered. Transaction complete.” Coins clinked onto the table one by one. Not pounds. Older. Heavier. Each landed with a damp slap, though the table stayed dry. “Take your pay.” “No.” “You came for it.” “I came because someone placed an order.” “You came because it called.” The Heartstone flared. Red light spilled through her jacket, painting her hands as if she had cupped them around a lantern. The faceless thing at the oaks bent towards the glow. The flowers turned too. Every bluebell, primrose, and foxglove swivelled on its stem, petals facing her chest. Rory pulled the pendant out. The gem pulsed faster. Heat climbed the chain. The silver bit into the back of her neck. At the far side of the clearing, between two oak trunks, a seam opened in the air. No flash. No crack. Just a vertical absence, blacker than the gaps between trees, edged in a dull red shimmer. The smell of iron drifted through it, along with cold ash and something buried beneath deep water. The pendant answered with a steady glow. Rory stared at the seam. A Hel portal. She knew without wanting the knowledge. The word sat in her skull like it had waited years for a door to open. The chair scraped. Her own voice spoke from the table. “You were late.” Rory’s eyes tracked the faceless thing. It had stopped copying her now. It stood closer to the portal, its blank face angled towards the red seam. Its arms hung open at its sides, welcoming or waiting. The flowers nearest it had darkened from stem to tip. “I get that a lot.” “Not from us.” The voice came from the table. Then from the oaks. Then from under the ground, threaded through roots. Us. Rory’s mouth tasted of pennies. She edged left, away from the table, away from the shape, towards the oak boundary nearest the way she had entered. The shadows of the flowers slid with her. Each one pointed at her feet. Each one lengthened. The grove had changed behind her. The path out no longer showed Richmond Park. Between the oaks, darkness pressed thick and close, as if someone had hung black velvet beyond the trunks. Her scooter had vanished. So had the frosted grass, the deer, the dull orange bruise of London’s sky. A child giggled from somewhere low to the ground. Rory looked down. The wildflowers around her boots had opened small mouths. Not animal mouths. Not human. Just slits in petals, lined with pale threadlike teeth. They opened and closed without sound at first. Then they whispered. “Carter.” “Rory.” “Laila.” “Malphora.” The last name struck the clearing flat. The pendant went cold. Every flower shut. The faceless thing jerked as if a hook had caught its spine. Its blank head turned towards Rory with speed that broke the mirror-game softness. No face, yet she felt the stare land on her skin. Rory had never heard that name before. Her body had. Her pulse kicked hard in her throat. The crescent scar on her wrist whitened. The Heartstone dimmed until only a coal-red point remained. The phone buzzed again. She looked at the screen. Mum. Rory’s thumb hovered. Her mother never rang after ten. Never. Jennifer Carter texted first, even for emergencies, with punctuation and restraint. The call vibrated in her palm. The table behind her shifted. Plate. Bowl. Spoon. Chair. The faceless thing raised its hand again, copying the act of holding a phone to an ear. Rory declined the call. The screen lit again at once. Dad. Brendan Carter’s contact photo appeared: him in a raincoat outside the Cardiff courthouse, eyebrows raised as if the camera had insulted him. The grove listened. Rory’s grip tightened until her knuckles blanched. “Stop rummaging through my life.” The phone stopped ringing. For one breath, nothing moved. Then every oak around the clearing knocked. Not branches. Trunks. A deep, hollow rap came from inside the wood. Once. Twice. Then all together. Knock knock knock knock knock. The sound rolled around the grove, patient and formal, like a courtroom door struck by many hands. Bark split in thin vertical lines. Pale sap welled out and shone silver. Rory stepped back from the nearest tree. A voice seeped through the cracks. “Open.” Another trunk answered. “Open.” The table voice joined them in her own tone. “Open.” The portal thinned to a red wound at the edge of sight. The faceless thing began to walk towards her. This time, it did not match her pace. Rory snatched the takeaway bag from the table. The air above the chair hissed as if burned. Coins scattered across the varnish and rolled to the edge, each one marked with a symbol she could not focus on. Where they fell into the flowers, the petals curled and blackened. She backed towards the centre of the clearing, eyes moving from the faceless thing to the oaks to the portal. “No refund if you’re creepy.” Her voice came out rough, but it held. The faceless thing stopped. Its head tilted. The flowers whispered again, softer. “Malphora.” Rory tore the silver chain over her head. The clasp snapped. The Heartstone dropped into her palm, cold as river stone now, its red core dim but not dead. She held it out between herself and the faceless thing. The grove’s warmth vanished. Frost raced across the wildflowers from the oak roots inward, whitening petals, stiffening stems, turning the whispering mouths to brittle seams. Her breath burst out in clouds. The portal flickered. The faceless thing drew one arm across its blank face as if shielding eyes it did not have. From the table, her own voice laughed once. “Better.” Rory’s gaze cut to the empty chair. The napkin unfolded by itself. Words had appeared across the linen in dark red thread. DELIVER TO THE DOOR. The red seam at the far side of the grove widened by the length of a finger. Beyond it, something knocked back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.027
leniency0.054
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2547
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2547
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"charm"
count4
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"porcelain"
count2
4
word"warmth"
count3
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"velvet"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"vibrated"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"charm"
1"pulsed"
2"throbbed"
3"porcelain"
4"warmth"
5"silence"
6"trembled"
7"stomach"
8"footsteps"
9"weight"
10"velvet"
11"pulse"
12"vibrated"
13"raced"
14"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences327
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences327
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences364
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount1
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0.003
matches
0"Knock knock knock knock knock."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2549
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount2403
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter3
Heartstone6
Pendant1
Golden1
Empress1
Richmond3
Park3
Cantonese1
January1
Yu-Fei4
Cardiff3
Eva3
Number1
Rory37
Aurora2
London3
Evan2
Cash2
Hel1
Tap5
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Eva"
5"Rory"
6"Aurora"
7"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore0.73
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences170
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"sounded like Eva after two glasses of wine"
1"sounded like a monster in the way people e"
2"as if shielding eyes it did not have"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2549
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences364
matches
0"heard that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs235
mean10.85
std13.82
cv1.274
sampleLengths
024
152
25
39
48
511
629
78
855
92
101
1153
126
131
142
1549
161
1718
1860
194
207
215
2210
233
241
251
261
275
283
2911
305
312
3250
3333
345
3513
367
374
3846
392
404
419
422
4311
448
4556
461
4711
484
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences327
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs374
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences364
ratio0.003
matches
0"Wildflowers crowded the frost-cracked earth beyond them — foxgloves, bluebells, primroses, buttercups — blooming all wrong for January, each petal too open, too eager."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount569
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.019332161687170474
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences364
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences364
mean7
std5.88
cv0.839
sampleLengths
024
18
233
33
48
55
69
78
811
94
1025
118
1213
1335
147
152
161
1718
1811
1924
206
211
222
234
2423
259
2613
271
286
2912
303
3113
3218
3326
344
357
363
372
3810
393
401
411
421
435
443
452
469
475
482
4916
40.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats36
diversityRatio0.2967032967032967
totalSentences364
uniqueOpeners108
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount12
totalSentences266
matches
0"Only a surface."
1"Then came chewing."
2"Just the call."
3"Then a man breathed down"
4"Just calm, powdered with concern,"
5"Just a vertical absence, blacker"
6"Then from the oaks."
7"Then from under the ground,"
8"Just slits in petals, lined"
9"Then they whispered."
10"Then every oak around the"
11"Then all together."
ratio0.045
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences266
matches
0"She had pressed a red"
1"Their bark carried pale ridges"
2"She tucked the delivery bag"
3"Her voice flattened in the"
4"She glanced back."
5"Her scooter sat beyond the"
6"She raised the takeaway bag."
7"It lit the wildflowers in"
8"Her own shadow stretched ahead"
9"She kept moving because stopping"
10"Her shoulder-length hair stuck to"
11"She shifted the delivery bag"
12"It had read 00:03 when"
13"It had not been there"
14"Her mouth had gone dry."
15"She forced herself forward, each"
16"She reached the table, set"
17"Her mother’s lavender hand cream."
18"Her father had sworn in"
19"She hated that."
ratio0.207
50.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount218
totalSentences266
matches
0"Aurora Carter reached the ancient"
1"The order had gone cold"
2"Some man with a clipped"
3"Yu-Fei had narrowed her eyes"
4"Yu-Fei had not smiled."
5"She had pressed a red"
6"Rory stood beneath the first"
7"Richmond Park stretched behind her"
8"The grove waited past the"
9"Their bark carried pale ridges"
10"Wildflowers crowded the frost-cracked earth"
11"The Heartstone pulsed in her"
12"Rory loosened her fingers."
13"The deep crimson gem hung"
14"Heat licked the crescent scar"
15"She tucked the delivery bag"
16"Her voice flattened in the"
17"The grove swallowed the word"
18"She glanced back."
19"The path to the road"
ratio0.82
18.80% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences266
matches
0"Now the charm had blackened"
ratio0.004
50.42% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"She had pressed a red paper charm into the crease of the takeaway bag and muttered something under her breath that sounded older than Cantonese."
1"Their bark carried pale ridges that caught moonlight without reflecting it."
2"The deep crimson gem hung from its silver chain, thumbnail-sized and glowing from inside, as if someone had trapped an ember behind glass."
3"She forced herself forward, each step flattening flowers that sprang upright behind her with tiny wet clicks."
4"The flowers passed through its calves as though it were mist, but its shadow dragged behind it, dark and thick, flattening petals."
5"Red light spilled through her jacket, painting her hands as if she had cupped them around a lantern."
6"Its arms hung open at its sides, welcoming or waiting."
7"Between the oaks, darkness pressed thick and close, as if someone had hung black velvet beyond the trunks."
8"Its blank head turned towards Rory with speed that broke the mirror-game softness."
9"Brendan Carter’s contact photo appeared: him in a raincoat outside the Cardiff courthouse, eyebrows raised as if the camera had insulted him."
10"The faceless thing drew one arm across its blank face as if shielding eyes it did not have."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
89.3689%