Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PPFMRKH44HQBXG80SEZR2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 26s
Cost:
$0.109390
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The standing stones in Richmond Park looked nothing like stones once the Heartstone woke. Aurora had expected lichen, old oak roots, damp earth under her boots. She had expected a cold midnight walk and Isolde’s silver hair catching stray moonlight between the trees. Instead, the ancient oaks bent inward as if listening, their bark splitting along seams of gold. Sap beaded in the cracks, thick and luminous, and the air smelt of rain on hot iron. The pendant at Aurora’s throat pulsed once. Heat pressed through her shirt. She curled her fingers around the deep crimson stone. It throbbed against her palm, no bigger than her thumbnail, yet it beat with the rude confidence of something alive. “Don’t let it choose your steps,” Nyx murmured from the shadow of an oak. Their shape had gathered into a tall, dark silhouette, violet eyes floating where a face should have been. Leaves passed through the edges of them and came out rimed with frost. Aurora glanced at Isolde. The Seer stood barefoot on the moss. No footprints marked the wet ground behind her. Her pale lavender eyes fixed on the space between the stones, where the air had begun to pucker and fold. “Doors prefer hungry hands,” Isolde murmured. “But doors open wider for those who refuse the meal.” “That counts as advice where you’re from?” “It counts as mercy.” The pendant burned hotter. Aurora drew a breath through her teeth and looked down at her left wrist. The small crescent scar there caught a thread of gold light. Childhood accident, her mother had called it. A slip. A sharp edge. A lesson about running indoors. Now the scar prickled as if someone had laid a needle under her skin. The space between the standing oaks split. No thunder. No flash. The Veil peeled back in a long, wet curve, like skin tugged from fruit. Beyond it, amber light spilled over the grove and painted the wildflowers copper. Warm air rolled out, rich with spices, roasted sugar, crushed herbs, yeast, blood-orange peel, smoke, and meat turning over coals. Aurora’s stomach clenched before her mind caught up. “Dymas,” Isolde breathed. Nyx’s edges drew in. The shadows around them tightened like a cloak. “I hate this place already.” “You’ve been?” “No. It remembers things that have eaten in the dark.” Aurora swallowed. “Grand. That’s comforting.” Isolde lifted one hand. The portal widened into an arch framed by twisting roots and strips of molten-looking bark. Beyond it lay a road paved in black glass, glossy as still water, curving beneath a sky the colour of warm honey. Far away, green terraces climbed hills in impossible layers, each one heavy with vines, orchards, and flowers too large for Earth. Bright shapes moved among them. Winged insects, perhaps. Or servants with lanterns. The Heartstone tugged against Aurora’s grip. She stepped through. Heat wrapped around her. Not summer heat. Kitchen heat. Oven heat. The kind that shoved sweat from the skin and filled the lungs with salt and fat and spice. Her boot struck black glass. It rang. The sound travelled beneath her, down into the road, and came back as a murmur of voices. Aurora froze. The road had faces. Not carved. Not painted. Faces lay beneath the glass, stretched in smoky layers, mouths open as if speaking through water. Their eyes followed the light from the portal. Some slept. Some wept. One turned as Aurora shifted her weight and pressed both palms against the underside of the road. She jerked her foot back. “Don’t stand still,” Nyx warned, sliding through after her. “It notices weight.” Isolde stepped last, and the portal folded shut behind her with a soft bite of air. The grove vanished. No park. No London damp. No distant traffic. Only amber sky, rolling green abundance, and the road beneath their feet whispering in a language Aurora almost understood. “Those are people.” “Contracts,” Isolde replied. “Signed mouths. Sealed bellies. Paid appetites.” Aurora looked at the faces under the glass. A woman with pearl earrings stared up through smoke, lips moving around silent words. “She can’t lie,” Aurora muttered, more to herself than to Nyx. “But she can make me wish she would.” Isolde moved forward. “Wish after sunrise. Walk before the road asks your name.” They followed. The black road ran between two rows of trees with silver trunks and leaves shaped like spoons. Fruit hung from their branches in clusters: purple pears with translucent skins, golden figs that opened and closed like gills, pale globes filled with drifting sparks. When the breeze touched them, the fruit chimed. Not bells. Cutlery against porcelain. Aurora kept her hands in the pockets of her jacket and left every branch alone. A fig split as they passed. Steam unfurled from its pink flesh. Inside, a miniature banquet table sat laid with tiny plates, each dish no bigger than a fingernail. Tiny roasted birds. Tiny puddings. Tiny cups of red wine. A smell like Christmas morning and a Cardiff chip shop drifted out together. Her mouth flooded. Nyx leaned close without footsteps. “It will taste like the first thing you ever wanted and the last thing you’ll regret.” Aurora shut her mouth, bit the inside of her cheek, and tasted blood. “Then it can get in the queue.” The tree leaves rattled. The fruit closed with a damp little snap. The road curved downhill, and Dymas opened beneath them. Aurora stopped despite Isolde’s warning. The valley sprawled wider than sight. Vineyards braided around canals of dark syrup. Orchards rose in rings, each level tended by figures in white aprons and iron collars. Beyond the fields, domes and towers clustered around a lake of gold liquid that steamed in the amber light. Bridges arched over it like ribs. At the centre stood a palace shaped less like a building and more like a feast frozen mid-collapse: columns like stacked bones of sugar, balconies draped in grapevines thick as ship ropes, roofs glazed crimson and green, fountains spilling wine into basins where silver fish leapt and dissolved into foam. The sky held no sun. It glowed from everywhere. Clouds drifted low, soft and white, but as one passed above the nearest vineyard Aurora saw crumbs fall from it. Workers lifted baskets and caught the pieces before they struck the soil. A horn sounded somewhere across the valley. Hundreds of birds burst from the orchards. Their feathers flashed peacock blue and pomegranate red. They wheeled in formation, then plunged into a distant courtyard where flames roared up to meet them. Aurora stared. “Did those birds just fly into a grill?” A man’s scream floated up from one of the terraces, cut short by applause. Isolde’s silver hair stirred in the warm wind. “In Dymas, even pain came dressed for supper.” “That’s not an answer.” “It was never meant to be one.” Nyx crouched at the road’s edge and pressed a shadowed hand to the glass. The faces beneath rippled away from their touch. “Something passed here within the hour. Horned. Heavy. Dragged a chain with seven links.” Aurora looked down the slope. The black road threaded towards a market built beneath enormous crimson mushrooms. Lanterns hung from their caps, and crowds moved below them: horned demons with polished tusks, grey-skinned merchants in embroidered coats, pale human souls carrying trays that bent their backs, and creatures Aurora had no names for. One had too many elbows. Another wore a cage over its head filled with singing moths. The Fae blade rested cold against her hip under her jacket. Its chill cut through the heat, a thin clean line. “Is that where we’re going?” Isolde tilted her head. “The mouth before the throat.” “Again with the—” “The market first,” Nyx cut in. “Questions cost less there than they do at the palace.” Aurora started walking. The slope steepened. The road sang under each step, and the faces below the glass changed as they moved. Old men. Children. Chefs. A soldier with half a moustache. A woman wearing a wedding veil. Some reached upward. Some turned away. One boy grinned at Aurora with blackened teeth and tapped the glass three times. Tap. Tap. Tap. The Heartstone answered with three pulses. Aurora stopped dead. Nyx’s arm flowed across her path, shadow becoming a bar. “What did it do?” “The pendant.” “Show me.” She lifted it from beneath her shirt. The crimson gem glowed from within, bright as banked coals. The boy beneath the road pressed his face against the glass, grin stretching wider. His eyes had no whites. Isolde stepped between Aurora and the road. Her bare feet made no sound. “Not that one.” The boy’s grin vanished. His head snapped backwards as if yanked by a hook. Smoke swallowed him beneath the glass. Aurora tucked the pendant away, hand still clenched around it. “Was he one of Belphegor’s?” Isolde’s gaze followed the place where the boy had disappeared. “He belonged to his hunger before any prince claimed him.” Nyx rose, taller than before, shoulders broadening into a shape that blocked the worst of the amber glare. “Keep moving.” They reached the market as a bell rang from a tower made of stacked plates. Noise struck first. Vendors shouted over one another in languages that scraped and purred. Knives chopped. Oil spat. Chains clinked. Something in a copper vat burped and begged for lemon. Laughter burst from a tent striped in green silk, followed by the crack of a whip and the smell of burnt cinnamon. Aurora stepped beneath the mushroom canopy and looked up. The gills of the fungi glowed pink and gold. Drops of nectar swelled along the ridges, then fell into waiting glass bowls. A demon child with curling ram horns darted between stalls, catching stray drops on a stick of spun sugar. Its mother seized it by the scruff and hissed through teeth filed to points. “No freebies, grub. You want a sweet tongue, sell one.” Aurora’s hand moved to the blade. Nyx caught her wrist, not with fingers, but with a band of cool shadow. “Not here.” “That kid—” “Isn’t human.” “That makes it fine?” “That makes it complicated.” Isolde drifted past a stall where skinned fruits twitched on hooks. “In Dymas, pity had a price tag and a butcher’s thumb on the scale.” Aurora pulled free of Nyx and followed, jaw tight. A chef with four arms tossed pale dough into the air. The dough unfolded into a map before slapping back onto his bench. Another vendor bottled aromas in tear-shaped glass: first kiss, hot bread, funeral ham, mother’s kitchen, enemy’s defeat. Human souls queued for the bottles with coins clutched in shaking hands. One woman in a stained apron held out a copper coin. “Just one breath of the sea. Please. I had a cottage in Tenby.” The vendor uncorked a blue vial and held it beneath her nose. The woman inhaled. Her face crumpled. She dropped the coin, and the vendor snatched it before it hit the ground. Aurora turned away and walked into a stall hung with cages of flame. Inside each cage burned a different colour. Emerald fire. Violet fire. Black fire that gave off pale frost. The stallholder had no face, only a smooth mask of skin with a vertical mouth in the throat. “Earthborn,” the mouth rasped. “Fresh marrow. Fresh questions. Fresh fear. Which one did you bring to trade?” Nyx moved beside Aurora. “None.” The stallholder’s throat-mouth stretched. “Shade. Old ash. Old mistake. You smelt of a failed circle.” Nyx became still. The violet in their eyes sharpened. Aurora took one step forward, letting her jacket fall open enough for moonsilver to catch the mushroom light. The stallholder’s mouth closed to a thin seam. “Didn’t bring fear,” Aurora replied. “But I can pick some up if you’re short.” For a moment, even the cages of flame bent away from her. Then the stallholder reached beneath the counter and drew out a small dish of salt-black crystals. “Warden road toll. Palace patrols searched the lower vineyards. A girl with a red stone made the kitchens whisper this morning.” Aurora’s fingers tightened near the dagger hilt. “I’ve never been here.” “Dymas tasted you before you arrived.” Isolde appeared at Aurora’s shoulder, lavender eyes reflecting the caged fires. “Who carried the whisper?” The stallholder turned its throat towards her. “Seer. Half-court exile. Your answers rot before they ripen.” “Then sell me the rot.” A pause. The market clamour pressed around them, heavy and hot. Somewhere nearby, a cleaver chopped through bone in a rhythm too close to a heartbeat. The stallholder slid the dish of crystals closer. “Three stalls down. The baker with brass teeth. He bought a name wrapped in red silk. Human name. Cardiff salt still clinging to it.” Aurora felt the word Cardiff like a hand at the back of her neck. Nyx looked at her. “Rory.” “I heard.” Isolde lifted one of the black crystals between two fingers. It hissed against her skin. “Truth with burnt edges.” The stallholder’s throat-mouth opened again. “Payment.” Nyx placed their palm over the dish. A ribbon of shadow peeled from their wrist and dropped into the crystals. The salt drank it. The flames in the cages leaned close, hungry. The stallholder shuddered with pleasure. “Go before I decide I undercharged.” They left the stall without another word. Aurora pushed through the market crowd. Heat gathered beneath her collar. Spices clawed at her nose. A tray passed inches from her face carrying roasted apples that blinked human eyes from their split skins. She didn’t slow. Three stalls down, the baker with brass teeth worked under a red awning. His ovens were built into the backs of kneeling stone giants. Fire glowed in their open mouths. Loaves emerged from their chests, stamped with symbols that shifted when Aurora looked at them. The baker himself was squat and wide, with arms dusted in flour to the elbow and teeth like polished gears. A strip of red silk lay on his counter. Something inside it moved. Aurora stopped at the edge of the awning. The Heartstone pulsed once, hard enough to hurt. The baker’s brass teeth clicked into a smile. “Ah. There she was.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2365
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2365
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"comforting"
count1
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"footsteps"
count1
7
word"the last thing"
count1
8
word"chill"
count1
9
word"silk"
count3
10
word"whisper"
count2
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"throbbed"
2"stomach"
3"comforting"
4"weight"
5"porcelain"
6"footsteps"
7"the last thing"
8"chill"
9"silk"
10"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences228
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences228
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences283
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2365
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions96
wordCount1978
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.87
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone4
Isolde16
Aurora37
Seer1
Veil1
Nyx15
Earth1
London1
Christmas1
Cardiff2
Dymas1
Fae1
Heat3
One4
Tiny3
Tap3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Isolde"
2"Aurora"
3"Seer"
4"Veil"
5"Nyx"
6"Dymas"
7"Heat"
8"One"
9"Tiny"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.565
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences139
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if listening their bark splitting along seams of gold"
1"as if speaking through water"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.423
wordCount2365
matches
0"not with fingers, but with a band of cool shadow"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences283
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs163
mean14.51
std16.49
cv1.137
sampleLengths
014
162
27
35
429
514
631
74
835
916
107
114
124
1342
1414
157
164
1747
188
193
2012
215
222
2310
242
253
2674
276
283
2929
305
312
3217
332
344
3549
365
3712
3846
393
409
4122
4219
433
4410
452
4656
4715
4852
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences228
matches
0"were built"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs330
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences283
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1986
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.0216515609264854
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0010070493454179255
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences283
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences283
mean8.36
std6.2
cv0.742
sampleLengths
014
112
217
316
417
57
65
79
820
914
1018
1113
124
137
148
1520
166
1710
187
194
204
2114
2211
237
242
253
265
2714
287
292
302
3114
3213
3320
348
353
364
378
385
392
4010
412
423
434
4415
4522
4621
475
483
494
55.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.38162544169611307
totalSentences283
uniqueOpeners108
68.38% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences195
matches
0"Instead, the ancient oaks bent"
1"Only amber sky, rolling green"
2"Then the stallholder reached beneath"
3"Somewhere nearby, a cleaver chopped"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences195
matches
0"She had expected a cold"
1"She curled her fingers around"
2"It throbbed against her palm,"
3"Their shape had gathered into"
4"Her pale lavender eyes fixed"
5"She stepped through."
6"Her boot struck black glass."
7"Their eyes followed the light"
8"She jerked her foot back."
9"Her mouth flooded."
10"It glowed from everywhere."
11"Their feathers flashed peacock blue"
12"They wheeled in formation, then"
13"Its chill cut through the"
14"She lifted it from beneath"
15"His eyes had no whites."
16"Her bare feet made no"
17"His head snapped backwards as"
18"They reached the market as"
19"Its mother seized it by"
ratio0.133
42.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount163
totalSentences195
matches
0"The standing stones in Richmond"
1"Aurora had expected lichen, old"
2"She had expected a cold"
3"Sap beaded in the cracks,"
4"The pendant at Aurora’s throat"
5"She curled her fingers around"
6"It throbbed against her palm,"
7"Nyx murmured from the shadow"
8"Their shape had gathered into"
9"Leaves passed through the edges"
10"Aurora glanced at Isolde."
11"The Seer stood barefoot on"
12"Her pale lavender eyes fixed"
13"The pendant burned hotter."
14"Aurora drew a breath through"
15"The small crescent scar there"
16"Childhood accident, her mother had"
17"A sharp edge."
18"A lesson about running indoors."
19"The space between the standing"
ratio0.836
25.64% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences195
matches
0"Now the scar prickled as"
ratio0.005
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences84
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Instead, the ancient oaks bent inward as if listening, their bark splitting along seams of gold."
1"Faces lay beneath the glass, stretched in smoky layers, mouths open as if speaking through water."
2"Fruit hung from their branches in clusters: purple pears with translucent skins, golden figs that opened and closed like gills, pale globes filled with drifting…"
3"Nyx rose, taller than before, shoulders broadening into a shape that blocked the worst of the amber glare."
4"A tray passed inches from her face carrying roasted apples that blinked human eyes from their split skins."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Aurora muttered, more to herself than to Nyx"
71.88% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
3"Nyx warned (warn)"
4"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.109
leniency0.219
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.156
88.0816%