Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PW15DSQ5JY5HKV4C373G7

Run Details

Duration:
1m 42s
Cost:
$0.132170
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain pressed Soho flat against the windows of The Raven’s Nest, turning the green neon sign above the door into a trembling smear on the pavement. Inside, the bar held its usual dimness: old maps browned at the edges, black-and-white photographs of men in wool coats and women with cigarette fingers, bottles lined up like witnesses behind the counter. Aurora Carter came in through the side door with a stack of empty takeaway bags under one arm and rain darkening the shoulders of her black delivery jacket. Her straight black hair clung to her jaw. She hooked the bike helmet over a stool, shook water from her hands, and reached for the towel Silas slid across the bar without looking up. “You look like the Thames spat you out.” “You should see the Thames.” Silas Blackwood polished a glass with the measured patience of a man who had once taken apart pistols in hotel bathrooms. His silver signet ring clicked against the rim. He had one foot braced on the rubber mat, his left knee angled away from the ache he never named. “Kitchen left you noodles.” “Yu-Fei left me noodles. The kitchen left me judgement.” “They know you ate chips at four.” “They know too much.” Silas’s hazel eyes flicked to the door as the bell gave a small, tired clatter. Aurora turned because everyone in the Nest turned when the door opened after ten. It was not fear. It was habit. Silas’s habit had soaked into the walls. A woman stood under the green wash of the sign, one hand still on the handle, rain dripping from the ends of a cream wool coat that looked too expensive for the weather and too clean for Soho. She had cropped hair now, cut close to the skull, dark at the roots and silver at the ends, the sort of colour that belonged to frost on railings. A thin scar ran from the corner of her mouth towards her cheekbone, pale against brown skin. Her lipstick was gone. The gold hoops were gone. The bright scarves, the chipped blue nail varnish, the battered satchel covered in band stickers—gone. Aurora’s fingers tightened around the towel. The woman’s gaze moved across the bar, past Silas, past the maps, past the whisky shelves, and stopped. “Rory?” The name hit the room with wet shoes and old train smoke. Aurora lowered the towel. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist flashed under the light as her sleeve slipped back. “Eva.” Silas set the glass down. The tap behind the bar gave one last drip. Eva let the door fall shut behind her. For a second, neither of them moved. The years stood between them in a narrow aisle: Cardiff rain, cheap eyeliner, library fines, the station platform where Aurora had climbed into a train with one bag and a cracked phone, Eva’s hands shaking as she shoved cash into her coat pocket. Then Eva smiled, but it stopped before it reached the scar beside her mouth. “You still answer to it.” “You still use it.” “I didn’t know if Aurora would slap me.” “Depends how much you’ve had to drink.” “Nothing yet.” Silas cleared his throat, not loud, not soft. “Aurora?” She heard the question beneath it. Friend, threat, ghost? “She’s all right.” Eva looked at Silas, then at the old photographs, then at the bar top where his ring caught the low light. “That sounded rehearsed.” “It gets used.” Silas’s mouth curved beneath his beard. “What are you drinking?” Eva untied the belt of her coat. Under it she wore a navy suit, sharp at the shoulders, with a white shirt buttoned to the throat. No necklace. No softness anywhere she could remove it. “Gin. No tonic. Ice if it’s clean.” Silas reached for a bottle without comment. Aurora stayed by the stools with the towel hanging from one hand. Her trainers squeaked when she shifted her weight. Eva heard it and glanced down. “You work here?” “I live upstairs.” Eva’s fingers paused on the coat belt. “Here?” “Above. Not in the bar. Silas has standards.” “Flexible ones,” Silas added, dropping ice into a glass. Eva took the drink from him and lifted it, but did not sip. “I walked past three times.” Aurora’s chest tightened. She picked up the bike helmet because her hands needed work. “You came looking?” “I saw the name on a delivery receipt.” Eva looked at the helmet. “Golden Empress. Yu-Fei Cheung still packs too many fortune cookies?” “You know Yu-Fei?” “I’ve ordered enough dumplings to be recognised by postcode.” “You live here?” “Clerkenwell.” The word sat on the bar, polished and distant. Aurora gave a short nod. “Good for you.” Eva’s mouth moved as though she had bitten the inside of it. “That sounded like Cardiff Rory.” “Cardiff Rory was rude.” “Cardiff Rory once told Mrs Pritchard her marking scheme belonged in a museum for bad ideas.” “It did.” Eva’s laugh came out once, surprised, and for half a second the old girl showed up—the one who had stolen traffic cones after freshers’ week and named them after judges, the one who could talk a bouncer into letting six broke students into a gig with one ticket between them. Then her face closed. Silas placed the glass in front of her. “I’ll be in the back.” Aurora glanced at the bookshelf beside the corridor, the one that did not sit flush with the wall. Silas lifted one brow. “You won’t. You’ll stand behind the shelf and pretend wood blocks sound.” “Better acoustics there.” “Si.” He took a cloth and moved towards the far end of the bar, his limp dragging only on the turn. Eva watched him go. “He always like that?” “Like what?” “Like he knows where the exits are.” Aurora put the helmet down. “He owns the place.” “That wasn’t what I asked.” “No.” Eva drank. The gin left a shine on her bottom lip. She set the glass down with care. “You changed your hair.” Aurora touched the damp ends near her cheek. “It was black when you last saw me.” “No. It was dyed black. There’s a difference. You used to miss bits at the back.” “You used to tell me after I’d gone outside.” “You needed humility.” “I had law lectures. Same thing.” Eva looked at the maps on the wall. Her eyes rested on one of Wales, pinned crooked between a photograph of a bridge and a framed advert for stout. “Do you miss it?” “Bad takeaway? Hills? People asking your dad for legal advice in Tesco?” “Cardiff.” Aurora folded the towel into a square. “Sometimes I miss knowing which bus to catch without reading the sign.” “That’s a no.” “That’s an answer.” Eva nodded as if she deserved that. She took another sip. “I went back last month.” “To Cardiff?” “To your old street.” Aurora’s jaw tightened. “Why?” “My mum moved. I helped clear the loft. Found your copy of The Bell Jar with all the angry notes in it.” Eva reached into the inside pocket of her coat and brought out a small paperback wrapped in a freezer bag. The plastic had creases from being handled. “You wrote ‘men fear women with cutlery’ on page forty-two.” Aurora stared at the book. “I wondered where that went.” “You threw it at my brother.” “He called Sylvia Plath dramatic.” “He was twelve.” “He was wrong.” Eva placed the book on the bar between them. “I meant to post it.” “You knew where I was?” “I knew Golden Empress. Not this.” Eva looked around. “Not upstairs over a bar with a man who looks like he made the Cold War personal.” Silas, at the far end, lifted his glass without turning. Aurora pulled the book out of the plastic. The cover had softened at the corners. A faint tea stain bloomed over the title. When she opened it, her younger handwriting crowded the margins, slanted and furious, blue ink digging through the page. Her throat felt scraped. “Thanks.” Eva tapped one nail against the glass. Her nails were short now, unpainted. “I wrote to you.” Aurora kept her eyes on the book. “I know.” “Emails first. Then texts. Then one letter because my therapist said I needed closure and Royal Mail seemed dramatic enough.” Aurora gave a flat smile. “You had a therapist?” “I had three. One quit private practice. One moved to Bristol. One asked if I always answered questions with jokes.” “What did you say?” “I asked if she charged extra for obvious ones.” Aurora shut the book. “I read the emails.” Eva’s hand stilled. “All of them?” “Most.” “You never answered.” “No.” The rain thickened against the glass. A taxi rolled past, tyres hissing, its amber light cutting across Eva’s face. The scar by her mouth looked deeper in the movement. Eva swallowed the rest of her gin. “I thought you were dead for eight days.” Aurora’s eyes lifted. Eva’s voice had no drama in it. That made it worse. “After the station. Your phone went off. Evan came round mine. He had that blue coat. Remember? The one that made him look like he worked in a bank that robbed pensioners.” Aurora’s fingers pressed into the book cover. “I remember the coat.” “He smiled at my mum. Asked if you were upstairs. Called you sweetheart in our hallway.” Eva rubbed the corner of her mouth, thumb passing over the scar without thought. “I told him you’d gone to Ireland.” “You always lied too big.” “He believed me enough to leave. Or he wanted me to think he did.” Aurora breathed through her nose. The bar seemed to shrink. “What happened to your face?” Eva’s smile returned, thin and useless. “You always went straight for the bruise.” “Eva.” “He came back the next night. Not with flowers.” Aurora’s grip slipped from the book. It landed flat on the bar. Silas stopped moving at the far end. The bottle in his hand hovered over a shelf. Eva glanced at him. “It was years ago.” “That doesn’t answer.” “He shoved past me. I shoved back. Door chain snapped. His ring caught me when he swung. My dad came down with a cricket bat, and Evan found religion in the garden path.” Aurora had no words ready. All her quickness, all the clever routes she found through bad rooms and bad men, sat useless in her mouth. Eva looked at the empty glass. “You didn’t know.” “No.” “I wanted you not to. At first. Then I wanted you to know. Then I wanted to punish you for not knowing. Then I got tired.” She pushed the glass away. “Time did what it does. It made me sound reasonable.” Aurora reached for the edge of the bar and held it. “I should’ve called.” “Yes.” “I was scared.” “I know.” “I thought if I spoke to anyone from home, he’d find the thread and pull.” “I know.” “I thought you’d tell me to go to the police.” “I did tell you.” “You also told me to leave.” “I did both. I was ambitious.” Aurora let out a breath that almost became a laugh and failed. Eva’s gaze dropped to Aurora’s left wrist, to the small crescent scar. “You still have that.” “You expected it to leave?” “I don’t know. I expected strange things. I thought I’d see you at thirty with a barrister wig and a house with white cupboards.” “I’m twenty-five.” “You looked thirty at nineteen.” “Cheers.” “You carried everyone’s emergencies in your tote bag. Pens, plasters, other people’s excuses.” Eva leaned an elbow on the bar. “Then you vanished, and I had all this room in my life where panic used to sit. I didn’t know what to put there.” Aurora looked towards the door, not to leave, only to give her eyes somewhere less sharp to rest. The neon trembled in the rain. “You put a navy suit there.” Eva glanced down at herself. “Employment law.” “Of course.” “Don’t make that face.” “What face?” “The one where you pretend not to approve because approval would cost you.” Aurora traced the edge of the paperback with her thumb. “You hated law.” “I hated your law lectures. You made jurisprudence sound like a hostage situation.” “It was.” Eva’s shoulders loosened a fraction. “I help women leave bad workplaces. Men with offices instead of fists. Same script, better carpets.” Aurora looked at the scar again. This time Eva did not cover it. “You changed.” “So did you.” “I deliver noodles.” “You survived long enough to deliver noodles.” Silas made a small sound behind his teeth, somewhere between agreement and warning. Aurora shot him a look. He inspected a bottle label with saintly interest. Eva noticed the exchange. “You have people.” “I have a landlord with a hero complex.” “I heard that,” Silas called. “You were meant to.” Eva turned the empty glass between her palms. “I used to imagine you in a flat with nothing in it. Mattress on the floor. Kettle. One mug. No pictures.” Aurora thought of her room upstairs: the narrow bed, the stack of books by the radiator, the chipped blue bowl Yu-Fei had given her, the plant Silas watered when she forgot and denied touching. “I had two mugs by the second month.” “Flash.” “One had a crack.” “Still counts.” The space between them softened, not healed, not clean, but less armed. Eva pulled a card from her pocket and placed it beside the book. Cream stock. Black lettering. A firm’s name Aurora did not recognise. Eva Morgan, Solicitor. “Morgan?” “Mum’s surname. Dad didn’t sulk. Much.” Aurora touched the card but did not pick it up. “You got married?” Eva laughed, sharper this time. “To whom? The concept of admin?” “You look like someone who has a husband named Tom and a calendar for cheese.” “I have a girlfriend named Meena and a calendar for tribunals.” Aurora blinked. Eva waited, chin lifted. Then Aurora nodded. “Meena gets the cheese?” “Meena is lactose intolerant.” “Tragic pairing.” “She says that about us.” Aurora’s thumb stopped on the card. “You talk about me?” “Less than I used to.” That landed without ornament. Aurora took it because it belonged to her. Silas came back with the gin bottle and raised it. “Another?” Eva looked at Aurora. “Are you working?” “No.” “Are you running?” Aurora met her eyes. Bright blue against dark brown, rainlight caught between them. “Not tonight.” Eva slid her glass towards Silas. “Then yes.” Silas poured. The gin struck the ice with a clean crack. Aurora reached under the bar for a second glass. Silas’s brows lifted. “I don’t drink gin.” “You do when old ghosts bring books.” “I’m not a ghost.” Eva picked up her drink. “I paid council tax this morning.” “Worse,” Aurora murmured. Silas poured her a measure. Not generous. Not mean. He watched her hand when she lifted it, watched for tremor, for memory, for the shape of a wound under skin. She steadied the glass against the bar before drinking. The gin burned in a narrow line down her throat. She made a face. Eva pointed at her. “That. That’s the face from first year.” “You bought bathtub vodka from a man named Spider.” “He had references.” “He had fleas.” “He had range.” Aurora laughed then, not much, but enough that Silas looked away and busied himself with the till. Eva’s eyes shone. She blinked once and reached for the paperback. “I nearly kept it.” “You stole half my jumpers. Keep the book and I’ll invoice.” “I gave those jumpers back.” “You gave back one. It had paint on it.” “We painted my room.” “You painted my sleeve.” “You stood too close.” They smiled across the bar, and the years did not vanish. They sat there with them, soaked coats on empty stools, elbows on the polished wood, listening. Eva’s fingers rested on the freezer bag. “Rory.” Aurora braced before she meant to. “I’m not asking for what we had.” “Good.” “I wouldn’t know where to put it now.” “Same.” “I am asking if I can have your number without stealing it from a takeaway receipt like a divorced detective.” Aurora looked at the card, then at Eva’s suit, the scar, the cropped silver hair, the hands that no longer wore chipped blue varnish. She saw the girl from Cardiff in pieces, not gone, not saved whole either. Time had taken its cut and left a woman who held herself like a locked drawer. Aurora took out her phone. The screen lit her damp face. “Give it here.” Eva handed over her phone at once, then seemed to notice the trust in the gesture. Her mouth tightened. Aurora typed in her number and called herself. Her own phone buzzed on the bar between the gin glasses. “There,” Aurora placed Eva’s phone back beside her hand. “No detective work.” Eva looked at the screen. “You saved yourself as Rory.” “That’s my name to you.” Eva nodded, slow. “All right.” The rain eased. Outside, the green neon steadied on the wet pavement. Inside, Silas stacked clean glasses with his ring clicking against each rim, a small metallic pulse beneath the quiet. Eva lifted her drink. “To cracked mugs.” Aurora touched her glass to Eva’s. “To bad lies.” “To surviving them.” Aurora drank. This time she did not make a face.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva looked around [around]"
dialogueSentences196
tagDensity0.061
leniency0.122
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.01
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2894
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
86.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2894
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"charged"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"complex"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"flicked"
2"weight"
3"charged"
4"trembled"
5"traced"
6"complex"
7"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences185
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences370
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2892
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions138
wordCount1708
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.99
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Raven1
Nest2
Carter1
Silas25
Blackwood1
Cardiff2
Aurora49
Eva51
Wales1
Yu-Fei1
Morgan1
Solicitor1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Silas"
4"Blackwood"
5"Aurora"
6"Eva"
7"Yu-Fei"
8"Morgan"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"Wales"
globalScore0.007
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences122
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
96.27% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.037
wordCount2892
matches
0"not healed, not clean, but less armed"
1"not clean, but less armed"
2"not much, but enough"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences370
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs291
mean9.94
std12.57
cv1.265
sampleLengths
059
162
28
35
449
54
69
77
84
943
10108
116
1218
131
1412
1520
161
1714
1858
1914
205
214
228
237
242
258
261
279
283
2921
303
313
326
334
3435
357
367
3726
383
393
407
411
428
439
4413
455
4614
473
4823
493
99.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences185
matches
0"was gone"
1"were gone"
2"being handled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs289
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences370
ratio0.005
matches
0"The bright scarves, the chipped blue nail varnish, the battered satchel covered in band stickers—gone."
1"Eva’s laugh came out once, surprised, and for half a second the old girl showed up—the one who had stolen traffic cones after freshers’ week and named them after judges, the one who could talk a bouncer into letting six broke students into a gig with one ticket between them."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1658
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.021712907117008445
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0012062726176115801
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences370
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences370
mean7.82
std7.23
cv0.926
sampleLengths
026
133
228
38
426
58
65
721
88
920
104
119
127
134
1415
1514
164
173
187
1938
2029
2117
224
235
2415
256
2618
271
2812
294
3016
311
325
339
348
357
3643
3714
385
394
408
417
422
438
441
456
463
473
4821
493
42.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats29
diversityRatio0.21081081081081082
totalSentences370
uniqueOpeners78
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences174
matches
0"Then Eva smiled, but it"
1"Then her face closed."
2"Then Aurora nodded."
3"Bright blue against dark brown,"
ratio0.023
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences174
matches
0"Her straight black hair clung"
1"She hooked the bike helmet"
2"His silver signet ring clicked"
3"He had one foot braced"
4"It was not fear."
5"It was habit."
6"She had cropped hair now,"
7"Her lipstick was gone."
8"She heard the question beneath"
9"Her trainers squeaked when she"
10"She picked up the bike"
11"He took a cloth and"
12"She set the glass down"
13"Her eyes rested on one"
14"She took another sip."
15"Her throat felt scraped."
16"Her nails were short now,"
17"It landed flat on the"
18"She pushed the glass away"
19"He inspected a bottle label"
ratio0.167
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount161
totalSentences174
matches
0"Aurora Carter came in through"
1"Her straight black hair clung"
2"She hooked the bike helmet"
3"Silas Blackwood polished a glass"
4"His silver signet ring clicked"
5"He had one foot braced"
6"Silas’s hazel eyes flicked to"
7"Aurora turned because everyone in"
8"It was not fear."
9"It was habit."
10"Silas’s habit had soaked into"
11"A woman stood under the"
12"She had cropped hair now,"
13"A thin scar ran from"
14"Her lipstick was gone."
15"The gold hoops were gone."
16"The bright scarves, the chipped"
17"Aurora’s fingers tightened around the"
18"The woman’s gaze moved across"
19"The name hit the room"
ratio0.925
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences174
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"A woman stood under the green wash of the sign, one hand still on the handle, rain dripping from the ends of a cream wool coat that looked too expensive for the…"
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva rubbed, thumb passing over the scar without thought"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Silas added (add)"
1"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences196
tagDensity0.015
leniency0.031
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.02
86.1380%