Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0PWQ8TRH95TW2T63FQG0TZ

Run Details

Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.140175
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door opened on the length of one chain and the width of a hand. Aurora Carter looked through the gap with one bright blue eye, a kitchen knife held flat against her thigh, and the smell of turmeric and rain pushed in around the man on the landing. Lucien Moreau stood beneath the flickering stairwell bulb as if someone had staged him there for a photograph. Charcoal suit, wet at the shoulders. Platinum hair slicked back, no strand out of place despite the weather. Ivory-handled cane in one gloved hand. Amber eye and black eye fixed on her face. For a second, neither of them moved. Downstairs, someone in the curry house shouted for extra coriander. A pan clanged. Ptolemy, Eva’s fat tabby, wound around Aurora’s ankle and shoved his nose into the crack, offended by delay. Lucien glanced down. “Your guard has grown fur.” Aurora tightened her grip on the knife. “He bites.” “He has the face of a tax collector. I believe you.” The old rhythm touched the air between them and died there, quick as a match in rain. Aurora slid her gaze over the landing behind him. Empty stairs. Peeling paint. A damp flyer for cheap phone repairs curling off the wall. No visible tail. No smoke. No shadow bending where it shouldn’t. “You lost?” she asked. “In Brick Lane? Often.” “Try a map.” “I did. It brought me to you.” She nearly shut the door. Lucien’s cane slipped into the gap, not hard, not threatening, just enough to stop the chain from biting into the frame. His mouth didn’t soften, but his fingers flexed once around the ivory handle. “Rory.” Her name in his accent did the same damage it always had. Not much. Not nothing. It found the bruise. “No.” “You haven’t heard the question.” “I heard enough when you said my name like that.” His eyes dropped to the knife, then to the crescent scar on her left wrist where her sleeve had ridden up. “Are you hurt?” She hated that. Hated how fast the question came, stripped of his usual polish. Hated how her body remembered him noticing small things: a limp after a bad delivery route, the burn on her thumb from Yu-Fei’s wok, the tremor in her hand the night Evan had found her number again. Aurora lifted the knife into view. “Only if you keep the cane in my door.” Lucien withdrew it. She shut the door in his face. The chain rattled. One deadbolt turned. Then the second. Then the third. Each metallic snap cut through the narrow flat with the confidence she had spent a year building and a week losing. She opened the door fully. Lucien hadn’t moved. Rain had traced a path from his hairline to his jaw. He didn’t wipe it away. Aurora stepped back. “Wipe your shoes. Eva will murder us both if you get mud on the notes.” “Eva is not here.” “She’ll sense it. Like mould. Or men with secrets.” He came in, and the flat shrank around him. Eva’s place never had much room to give. Books sprawled across the floor in uneven towers. Scrolls lay pinned beneath mugs and coins. A map of London covered half the wall, marked in red thread, brass tacks, and Eva’s violent handwriting. Three lamps burned under mismatched shades, leaving the corners amber and crowded. The windows fogged from the curry house heat rising through the floorboards. Lucien paused just inside the threshold while Aurora locked the three deadbolts behind him. Click. Click. Click. His gaze moved to each lock. “Still three?” “Now four when Eva remembered the chair.” His mouth tilted at the chair wedged under the handle, currently leaning uselessly against a stack of occult journals. “Efficient.” “Cheap.” “Both are virtues.” “Not in your circles.” He took that without flinching. He always took the first blade clean. The second too, if he had decided he deserved it. Ptolemy circled his shoes, sniffed, then sneezed. “See?” Aurora nudged the cat away with her foot. “Tax collector.” Lucien removed his gloves finger by finger. Slow, precise. Stalling, but with style. He tucked them into his coat pocket and set his cane against the wall beside a leaning pile labelled NIGHT MARKET—DO NOT TOUCH in Eva’s block capitals. Aurora pointed the knife at it. “If that thing bleeds on Eva’s carpet, you’re paying.” “The cane or me?” “Whichever starts first.” His gaze came back to her face. The room seemed to lose half its noise. The curry house, the traffic, the rain at the glass, even Ptolemy’s offended chirp became thin. “You look tired.” She laughed once. No humour in it. “And you look expensive. We’ve all got burdens.” “I deserved that.” “You deserved worse.” “Yes.” The word landed between the books and the lamp-glow and the old letters she had never sent him. She had written three after he left. Burned two. Kept one folded inside a cracked copy of The Mabinogion on Eva’s shelf because she had wanted to forget it and failed with academic organisation. Aurora turned away first. “Tea?” Lucien blinked. “I was prepared for a weapon.” “I’ve still got one.” “You offered me tea while holding it.” “I’m Welsh. We multitask.” He followed her into the kitchenette, though there was nowhere for him to stand without touching a fridge magnet, a pile of unpaid bills, or a tower of books on binding rites. He chose a narrow patch near the sink and folded his hands in front of him like a man awaiting sentencing. Aurora filled the kettle. The tap coughed before it ran. She set the knife on the counter within reach. “Why are you here?” Lucien watched the water rise. “Because I was wrong.” Her hand stopped on the kettle switch. The flat’s old pipes knocked inside the wall. Aurora pressed the switch down. The red light came on. “That all? Grand. Mind the stairs.” “Rory.” “No.” She opened a cupboard and took out two chipped mugs, one with a faded dragon, one with EVA’S OTHER CAULDRON. “You don’t get to arrive soaked and tragic and toss that onto the lino like it’s a coin in a fountain.” “I didn’t come to be forgiven.” “Good.” “I came because you needed to know.” “That you were wrong?” “That I lied.” She turned then. Lucien’s face had that careful stillness she knew from bargaining tables and back rooms beneath Soho clubs, where creatures with glass teeth traded favours for names. But his eyes were wrong. His amber eye burned too hot. The black one looked almost human in the yellow kitchen light. Aurora gripped the mug with the dragon so hard her knuckles paled. “About what?” “Which lie would you like first?” “The one where you said leaving was the only way to keep me alive.” A muscle moved in his jaw. “That was not the lie.” The kettle hissed, warming toward a boil. Steam began to ghost from the spout. Aurora set the mug down. “Careful.” “I left because I was afraid that if I stayed, I would choose you over the city.” The words didn’t come dressed in silk. No French flourish, no neat little smile. They came out raw, and that made them worse. Aurora stared at him. The kitchen walls pressed close. A bus sighed past outside. Rain scratched the window. “You arrogant bastard.” His chin dipped. “Yes.” “You decided that for me?” “I decided nothing for you.” “You vanished.” “I made myself vanish.” “Same corpse, different coffin.” His mouth opened. Shut. Good, she thought. Bleed a bit. She turned back to the counter, snatched the tea tin, and yanked the lid off. Loose leaves scattered across the worktop. Her hands had started shaking, which annoyed her more than his confession. Lucien reached for the tin. She slapped his hand away. “Don’t.” He withdrew. “Rory—” “You don’t get to touch things in here. You don’t get to make tea. You don’t get to stand in Eva’s kitchen and look wounded because I didn’t clap for your martyr routine.” “I didn’t expect applause.” “What did you expect? Tears? A kiss? Me falling against that suit because you crossed London in the rain with guilt in your pocket?” “No.” “Then what?” His hand closed around the edge of the sink. His knuckles showed pale under his skin. “To see whether you still hated me.” The kettle clicked off. Aurora breathed through her nose. Once. Twice. “Why?” “Because hatred keeps a door open.” She laughed again, sharper this time, and turned with the kettle in her hand. “You always did dress rot in velvet.” “Rot deserves no velvet.” “Then stop polishing it.” She poured water into the mugs. Steam rose between them, fragrant and bitter. Her sleeve slipped again. The crescent scar caught the light. Lucien looked at it, and she saw memory take him: his thumb once resting beside that scar, not over it, never trapping her wrist; his voice asking permission for everything after Evan had taught her to flinch at nothing. She tugged the sleeve down. His gaze lifted. “I should have come sooner.” “Don’t.” “I should have answered your calls.” “I stopped after two.” “I know.” “You counted?” “I listened to both messages until my phone died.” The kettle clicked as it cooled. Aurora pushed the dragon mug toward him hard enough that tea sloshed over the rim. “Congratulations. That’s the saddest rich-man hobby I’ve heard this week.” Lucien took the mug but didn’t drink. “You sounded calm in the first.” “I was at work.” “In the second, you called me a self-satisfied funeral candle.” “You are tall, pale, and only useful during a blackout.” His mouth betrayed him. A small smile, gone before it could ask for mercy. Aurora hated that too. Hated the tiny satisfaction that struck her ribs when she made him smile. Hated the memory of him across a table at Silas’ bar, amused and dangerous and leaning closer each time she refused to be impressed. Hated how she had once wanted to learn the shape of his mouth without words in the way. He lifted the mug. “I kept that one.” “Of course you did.” “I have no defence.” “Start there more often.” He took a sip and flinched. Aurora arched a brow. “Too strong?” “It tastes like a hedge that lost a fight.” “Eva buys it from a druid in Peckham.” “That explains the aftertaste of moral instruction.” Ptolemy jumped onto the counter with the heavy entitlement of a landlord. Aurora scooped him off before he could step in the tea. He swore at her in a gravelly yowl and stalked toward Lucien, where he planted himself on one polished shoe. Lucien glanced down. “I am being claimed.” “You’re being assessed for resale value.” “He will be disappointed.” “Not if we throw in the cane.” The cat rubbed his cheek against Lucien’s trouser leg. Lucien’s hand lowered. Stopped halfway. Aurora saw it. The restraint. The question he hadn’t voiced. She looked away. “Go on. He’ll shed on you either way.” Lucien touched two fingers to Ptolemy’s head. The cat leaned in, purring like a faulty engine. “Traitor,” Aurora muttered. “He has taste.” “He licked a stock cube yesterday.” “Complex taste.” For three breaths, the flat held them in something almost harmless. Then Lucien set the mug down. “I didn’t only come to confess.” Aurora’s stomach cooled. “There it is.” “I need your help.” “Absolutely not.” “You haven’t heard with what.” “Don’t need to.” “It concerns Avaros.” She picked up her mug, drank, burned her tongue, and refused to react. “Lots of things concern Avaros. Demons, half-demons, your father’s charming side of the family, half the underworld’s bad decisions. Buy a noticeboard.” “It concerns the name they gave you.” The mug stopped against her lower lip. Malphora. The name had been spoken once in a basement full of salt and candle smoke, by a thing wearing a dead woman’s mouth. Lucien had gone still when he heard it. Eva had knocked over a jar of powdered bone. Aurora had pretended not to notice either reaction because denial had always fit her like a borrowed coat—wrong, but wearable. She set the mug down. “Get out.” Lucien didn’t move. “Rory.” “No.” “They have begun asking for Laila Carter.” Her blood took one hard step and stopped. Nobody outside a very ugly circle used that false name. She had taken it for three weeks after Evan had found her in London the first time. Eva had made the documents. Lucien had buried the trail with favours that cost him, though he never told her the price. Aurora wiped a drop of tea from the counter with her thumb. “Who?” “Collectors from the Ninth Gate.” “Never heard of them.” “Good.” “Not good enough. Who?” Lucien’s fingers tapped once against the mug. “They retrieve debts from bloodlines that cross realms.” “I don’t have a debt in Avaros.” “No.” His gaze held hers. “I do.” The air changed. Not colder. Tighter. As if every book in the flat had leaned closer. Aurora spoke with care. “Explain.” “When I hid your trail from Evan, I used old channels.” “You told me you paid Silas.” “I did.” “And?” “And I paid my father.” The words made the tiny kitchen feel underground. Aurora stared at him. Rain pulsed against the window in silver threads. Downstairs, laughter rose from the curry house and fell away. “Your demon father.” “Yes.” “The one you once described as a cathedral built from appetite.” “I was drunk.” “You were poetic. Continue.” Lucien’s face sharpened, all the softness burned off. “He wanted a name. Not yours. Mine was enough at the time. A favour owed, undefined.” Aurora stepped back until the counter pressed into her hip. “At the time.” “He has called it in.” Her hand went to the scar on her wrist. She caught herself and dropped it. “And the favour is me.” “No.” “Don’t lie twice in one visit.” His voice dropped. “The favour is my return to Avaros. The collectors used your names to bait me because they know I will come if they touch you.” Aurora’s laugh came out thin. “Well. Isn’t that romantic in the most diseased way possible.” His eyes shut for half a second. “I am not asking you to swoon.” “Good, because my schedule’s packed.” “I am asking you to come with me to Eva’s archive room and find the contract language before midnight.” Aurora looked past him at the living room, at the avalanche of Eva’s notes, at the red-threaded London map, at the hallway leading to the tiny back room Eva called an archive and Aurora called a fire hazard with opinions. “Eva’s in Bath until morning.” “I know.” “Of course you know.” “I monitor trains when my enemies start moving.” “Healthy.” “Necessary.” “Nosy.” “That too.” She folded her arms. The knife lay on the counter behind her. He knew it. She knew he knew it. Neither looked at it. “You broke into my life with demon contract law?” “I knocked.” “You wedged a sword-cane in the door.” “A technical knock.” “I should stab you on principle.” “I would respect the consistency.” That almost did it. Almost cracked the anger into something else. She turned her face aside before he could see. Too late. Lucien crossed no distance. He only leaned back against the sink, giving her the room he had always measured with painful accuracy. “I hurt you.” Aurora’s throat tightened. “Don’t make this neat.” “It wasn’t.” “Don’t make it noble.” “It wasn’t that either.” “Then what was it?” He looked at her then, really looked, without the broker’s mask, without the Frenchman’s charm, without the cruel elegance he wore around London like armour. “Cowardice in a tailored coat.” The answer knocked the next insult out of her mouth. Ptolemy jumped down and vanished beneath a chair, bored by human ruin. Aurora picked at a loose thread on her sleeve. The crescent scar hid beneath the cuff. Her pulse tapped against it. “You left the night after I kissed you.” Lucien’s hand stilled. There. The thing on the floor at last. She had not planned to say it. Had buried it under jobs, jokes, curry deliveries, Eva’s research, and the daily discipline of not checking whether a tall man in a charcoal suit stood at the end of the street. But the words had teeth and found air. Lucien’s voice came rough. “Yes.” “I thought I’d read it wrong.” “No.” “I thought I’d pushed.” “No.” “I thought I was another obligation you regretted taking on.” His expression changed so fast she almost missed it. Pain, anger, not at her. Never at her. It carved his face clean. “Never.” The word struck the counter between them. Aurora’s hands curled. “You didn’t get to tell me that eight months later.” “I know.” “You don’t get to look at me like that.” “How?” “Like you remember.” His laugh had no humour. His eyes stayed on hers. “I remember your hand on my lapel. I remember you standing on your toes because you refused to let me bend first. I remember you tasting of ginger beer and fury. I remember wanting to lock every door in London so nothing could reach you, and then I became the door that shut in your face.” Aurora stared at him, her breath caught halfway. The flat seemed too warm now. Too full of steam and spice and unsorted paper. Her skin prickled beneath her jumper. Lucien lowered his gaze first. “I had no right to say that.” “No,” she whispered. He reached for his cane. “Give me the archive key. I will find the contract and leave before Eva returns.” The old Aurora—the one built after Evan, after running, after learning how to sleep with furniture against doors—would have taken the clean exit and blessed herself for it. This Aurora looked at Lucien’s wet collar, at the slight tremor in the hand he hid around the cane, at the mug of terrible tea he had drunk because she gave it to him. She stepped between him and the hall. “You don’t know Eva’s filing system.” “I speak four languages and read three dead scripts.” “Eva files by personal offence. If the contract mentions your father, it’ll be under either ‘Men, Predictable’ or ‘Infernal Bellends, Legal’.” Lucien blinked. “That is a system?” “It’s got subcategories.” “I stand corrected.” “You often should.” His gaze searched her face. “You will help?” Aurora picked up the knife from the counter. Lucien’s shoulders tightened, but he held still. She turned it around and offered him the handle. “Put this in the drawer behind you.” He took it with care, as if she had handed him something more dangerous than steel. “Rory—” “Don’t thank me.” “I wasn’t.” “What, then?” He opened the drawer and placed the knife among mismatched cutlery, corkscrews, a cracked lighter, and what looked like a silver bullet wrapped in cling film. “I missed your voice.” Aurora felt the words move through her, slow and unwanted. She reached past him to shut the drawer. Her arm brushed his coat. He inhaled once, sharp through the nose, and the small sound pulled her attention to his mouth before she could stop it. He noticed. Of course he noticed. Lucien Moreau could read a room by the dust on a glass. But he didn’t move. She hated him a little less for that. “Archive,” she said. “Yes.” “Then you explain every clause.” “Yes.” “And if your father put my name anywhere near demon ink, I’ll carve it out with your fancy cane.” Lucien lifted the ivory handle and offered it across both palms. “It has a fine blade.” Aurora took it. The cane felt heavier than it looked, warm from his hand. A hidden catch sat beneath the ivory curve. Their fingers touched. The contact was small. Barely skin. It crossed the months between them with indecent ease. Lucien’s eyes dropped to their hands. Aurora tightened her grip before he could pull away. “Midnight, you said?” His voice came low. “Yes.” She stepped back, cane in hand, and led him toward the narrow hall lined with Eva’s leaning towers of books. “Then keep up, Frenchman. Eva’s grudges won’t search themselves.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences208
tagDensity0.029
leniency0.058
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3379
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3379
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"efficient"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"velvet"
count2
4
word"complex"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"absolutely"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"measured"
count1
9
word"charm"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"predictable"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"efficient"
2"silk"
3"velvet"
4"complex"
5"stomach"
6"absolutely"
7"pulsed"
8"measured"
9"charm"
10"pulse"
11"predictable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences268
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences268
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences470
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3375
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions119
wordCount2235
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.83
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Moreau2
Eva11
Aurora41
Yu-Fei1
Evan4
London4
Lucien34
Ptolemy6
Mabinogion1
Soho1
French1
Hated5
Frenchman1
Rain3
Click3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Aurora"
4"Evan"
5"Lucien"
6"Ptolemy"
7"Frenchman"
8"Rain"
places
0"Yu-Fei"
1"London"
2"Soho"
3"Hated"
globalScore0.583
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences152
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a silver bullet wrapped in cl"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3375
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences470
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs353
mean9.56
std11.53
cv1.206
sampleLengths
015
134
251
37
431
53
65
77
82
911
1017
1135
124
134
143
157
165
1734
181
1920
201
215
2210
2321
243
2551
266
279
283
297
3033
315
3219
333
3415
354
369
379
3865
3914
403
416
422
437
4419
451
461
473
484
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences268
matches
0"been spoken"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs386
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences470
ratio0.009
matches
0"He tucked them into his coat pocket and set his cane against the wall beside a leaning pile labelled NIGHT MARKET—DO NOT TOUCH in Eva’s block capitals."
1"Lucien looked at it, and she saw memory take him: his thumb once resting beside that scar, not over it, never trapping her wrist; his voice asking permission for everything after Evan had taught her to flinch at nothing."
2"Aurora had pretended not to notice either reaction because denial had always fit her like a borrowed coat—wrong, but wearable."
3"The old Aurora—the one built after Evan, after running, after learning how to sleep with furniture against doors—would have taken the clean exit and blessed herself for it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1835
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount60
adverbRatio0.0326975476839237
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0038147138964577656
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences470
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences470
mean7.18
std6.82
cv0.949
sampleLengths
015
134
218
36
412
56
69
77
810
93
1018
113
125
137
142
1511
1617
179
182
192
2011
213
222
236
244
254
263
277
285
2921
3013
311
3212
332
342
354
361
375
3810
3921
403
413
4211
4337
446
459
463
477
483
493
44.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats24
diversityRatio0.24468085106382978
totalSentences470
uniqueOpeners115
83.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences239
matches
0"Then the second."
1"Then the third."
2"Then Lucien set the mug"
3"Almost cracked the anger into"
4"Too full of steam and"
5"Of course he noticed."
ratio0.025
87.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount79
totalSentences239
matches
0"She nearly shut the door."
1"His mouth didn’t soften, but"
2"Her name in his accent"
3"It found the bruise."
4"His eyes dropped to the"
5"She hated that."
6"She shut the door in"
7"She opened the door fully."
8"He didn’t wipe it away."
9"He came in, and the"
10"His gaze moved to each"
11"His mouth tilted at the"
12"He took that without flinching."
13"He always took the first"
14"He tucked them into his"
15"His gaze came back to"
16"She laughed once."
17"She had written three after"
18"He followed her into the"
19"He chose a narrow patch"
ratio0.331
29.04% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount206
totalSentences239
matches
0"The door opened on the"
1"Aurora Carter looked through the"
2"Lucien Moreau stood beneath the"
3"Charcoal suit, wet at the"
4"Platinum hair slicked back, no"
5"Amber eye and black eye"
6"Downstairs, someone in the curry"
7"A pan clanged."
8"Ptolemy, Eva’s fat tabby, wound"
9"Lucien glanced down."
10"Aurora tightened her grip on"
11"The old rhythm touched the"
12"Aurora slid her gaze over"
13"A damp flyer for cheap"
14"She nearly shut the door."
15"Lucien’s cane slipped into the"
16"His mouth didn’t soften, but"
17"Her name in his accent"
18"It found the bruise."
19"His eyes dropped to the"
ratio0.862
20.92% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences239
matches
0"As if every book in"
ratio0.004
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood beneath the flickering stairwell bulb as if someone had staged him there for a photograph."
1"Lucien looked at it, and she saw memory take him: his thumb once resting beside that scar, not over it, never trapping her wrist; his voice asking permission fo…"
2"Hated the tiny satisfaction that struck her ribs when she made him smile."
3"He took it with care, as if she had handed him something more dangerous than steel."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences208
tagDensity0.019
leniency0.038
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.019
89.2485%