Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0Q01ZA15QKBQJFT2RSQJG3

Run Details

Duration:
1m 55s
Cost:
$0.142490
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon above The Raven’s Nest buzzed against the rain-dark glass, washing the bottles behind the bar in a sickly river-light. Soho pressed its wet face to the windows. Taxis hissed past. Someone outside laughed too loud, then coughed as if the night had put a hand round their throat. Aurora Carter stood at the far end of the bar with a crate of clean glasses balanced against her hip. She had come downstairs after her shift at Golden Empress with soy sauce on one sleeve and the smell of fried garlic in her hair, meaning only to nick a tonic water and take it upstairs. Silas had pointed at the dishwasher with two fingers, his silver signet ring catching the light. “Five minutes, Rory.” “You say that like you own the stairs.” “I own the ceiling under them.” So she had stayed. The Raven’s Nest held its usual Wednesday crowd: a pair of theatre techs arguing over a crossword, a retired copper nursing stout beneath a framed map of Cold War Berlin, three students pretending not to be drunk, and a woman in a camel coat sitting alone under the black-and-white photograph of Prague in winter. Aurora noticed the coat first. Good wool. Clean lines. The kind of coat that cost more than a month of her old rent in Cardiff and carried no memory of buses, rain, or chip-shop vinegar. Then the woman lifted a glass with her left hand, and Aurora saw the tiny tattoo at the base of her thumb. A swallow. Badly done. Blue ink gone soft under the skin. Aurora set the crate down too hard. Glasses chimed. The woman looked over. For half a second, her face belonged to a girl on a pebble beach in Barry, mouth full of contraband vodka and sherbet, hair dyed the colour of a traffic cone, shoulders shaking as she dared Aurora to climb the locked pier gate. Then the bar light found her properly. Eva Price had cut her hair into a sharp dark bob that tucked under her jaw. The old silver ring through her eyebrow had gone, leaving a small pale mark. Her lipstick did not bleed at the corners. Her nails looked buffed, not bitten. Only the swallow remained, trapped above her thumb as if it had lost the strength to fly off. Aurora wiped both hands on a towel and left it twisted in her fist. “Eva.” Eva put down the glass without drinking. “Rory Carter.” Silas, halfway down the bar, paused with a bottle of rye in his hand. His hazel eyes moved from one woman to the other. Then he turned the label towards the shelf and made himself busy with nothing. Aurora came round the bar. Her trainers stuck for a moment to a patch of spilled lager. “You’re in London.” Eva glanced at the room, as if London might step out from behind the old maps and answer for her. “Looks that way.” “Work?” “Conference. Near Holborn. One of those hotels where the carpet hates everyone.” Aurora let out a breath through her nose. It might have become a laugh once. “You came to Soho for better carpet?” “I came because I remembered a bar with a green sign.” Aurora looked towards the window. The neon trembled in the rain. “You’ve been here before?” “Once. Years ago.” Eva touched the stem of her glass. “You sent me the address, remember? Said there was a room above it and a landlord who didn’t ask questions unless the questions mattered.” Aurora’s fingers tightened round the towel. The crescent scar on her left wrist flashed pale when her sleeve rode up. “I remember the landlord.” Silas set a fresh glass beside the sink without looking over. “Generous of you.” Eva turned towards him. “You must be Silas.” “That depended on who asked.” “Eva Price.” “Rory kept your number written on a receipt for six months.” Aurora shot him a look. “Cheers, Si.” He lifted both hands and moved away with his slight limp, leaving them with the hum of the fridges and the rain needling the windows. Eva stared into her drink. Gin, judging by the lime peel. She used to swear gin tasted like licking Christmas trees. “You still go by Rory?” “Most people here do.” “Not Aurora?” “Only banks, doctors, and my mother when she’s building up to a row.” Eva’s mouth shifted. “Jen still doing the voice?” “Which one?” “The one where every syllable wears a cardigan.” Aurora saw her mother at the kitchen table in Cardiff, exercise books stacked by the fruit bowl, red pen behind one ear, saying Aurora, love, we are not arguing in the hallway. She saw Eva there too, muddy boots on the tiles, stealing toast, calling Jennifer “Miss Ellis” until corrected for the fiftieth time. “She retired last year.” “God. That makes no sense.” “Dad still practises. Still tells waiters he’s a barrister when they bring the wrong wine.” Eva gave a small laugh that broke before it warmed. She pushed the glass an inch away. “And you? You left Pre-Law and became…” She looked at Aurora’s black shirt, the damp cuffs, the faint grease mark near the elbow. “This.” Aurora leaned back against the bar. “Careful.” “I didn’t mean it like that.” “You meant something.” Eva took the hit. Her shoulders went still beneath the expensive coat. “I meant I pictured you in court by now. Terrifying men in grey suits. Making them sweat.” “I deliver dumplings and duck pancakes to people who don’t tip. Terrifying work, some nights.” “Rory.” “What?” Eva looked at her, full on now. Her eyes had changed least. Brown, sharp, tired at the edges. “I used to tell everyone you’d get out.” Aurora folded the towel into a square, then unfolded it. “I did.” The students near the door burst into laughter. One of them knocked over an umbrella. The clatter made Eva flinch. Not much. Enough. Aurora caught it. Eva caught Aurora catching it and reached for her drink. “You smoke?” Aurora gestured towards the back corridor. “I stopped.” “Course you did.” “I could stand near a door while you do.” “I stopped too.” They stayed where they were. Silas crossed behind Aurora with two pints, his limp measured, his beard trimmed neat as a line drawn with care. He placed the drinks before the theatre techs and returned to polishing a glass that needed no help. Eva watched him. “He keeps an eye on you.” “He keeps an eye on exits. I benefit by standing near one.” “That sounds like you.” “No. That sounds like him.” Eva looked down at her own hands. No rings. No bracelets. Bare wrist, pale where a watch had sat. “I wrote to you.” Aurora stared at the lime peel in Eva’s gin. “When?” “After. A few times.” “After what?” Eva swallowed. Her throat moved. “After Evan.” The name entered the bar without raising its voice. It sat between them, ugly and familiar, wearing the same old aftershave, the same smile that had fooled rooms before it fooled hands. Aurora placed the towel on the bar. “Don’t.” “I sent emails.” “I changed address.” “I texted.” “I changed number.” “You always changed something.” Aurora’s laugh came out thin. “That was the point.” Eva pressed the heel of her hand against the edge of the bar until her knuckles whitened. “You turned up in London because I told you to get on the coach. You had one bag, a cracked phone, and that stupid blue hoodie you refused to throw away.” “It had a zip.” “It had blood on the cuff.” Aurora looked over Eva’s shoulder to the wall, to a map of the Thames pinned beside a photograph of a woman in sunglasses outside a café in Lisbon. Silas collected such pictures from lives he never explained. In this place, secrets hung framed and no one pointed at them. “I washed it.” “I know.” Eva’s voice lowered. “You washed everything.” Aurora picked up Eva’s glass and tipped the gin down the sink. Eva blinked. “I was drinking that.” “You hated gin.” “I learnt.” “Bad habit.” “From the woman stealing it?” Aurora took a clean tumbler and filled it with water from the tap. She set it in front of Eva. “You used to drink cider out of the bottle and dare bouncers to ask for ID.” “You used to quote case law at parking wardens.” “You used to climb things.” “You used to climb after me.” Aurora’s fingers hovered near the glass, then withdrew. Eva took the water. Her lipstick left no mark. That bothered Aurora more than it should have. “What happened to the orange hair?” “Solicitors’ offices lacked imagination.” “You became a solicitor?” “Human rights, for a while. Then compliance. Then a charity board. Then I stopped explaining the ladder and just climbed it.” Aurora looked at the coat again, the cut of it, the way Eva occupied it like armour made by a polite enemy. “London did that?” “Not London.” “What, then?” Eva rubbed the swallow tattoo with her thumb. The ink blurred under the pressure. “Bills. Mortgages. Men in rooms who called me passionate until I billed them by the hour. My brother needing rehab twice. Mam needing a stairlift. Dad dying with a loan against the house and a shoebox full of apology notes he never posted.” She stopped and took a mouthful of water. “Time, I suppose. Not the poetic kind. The admin kind.” Aurora leaned her hip against the counter. “You always hated admin.” “I still do. I just wear better shoes while losing to it.” Aurora glanced down. Black leather heels, rain-specked, severe. “Can you run in those?” Eva followed her gaze. “Not far.” “That’s a design flaw.” “Everything’s a design flaw if you expect it to save you.” The words landed too near something living. Aurora turned and reached for the crate, lining glasses on the shelf though the shelf had filled ten minutes earlier. Her black hair swung forward, hiding part of her face. She let it. Eva watched her hands work. “You never answered.” “You never came.” “I didn’t know where.” “You knew this place.” Eva’s jaw tightened. There it was, the old Eva temper, not gone but pressed flat under polish. “I came once.” Aurora stopped. “When?” “February. That first year. Snow at the kerb, black ice near Tottenham Court Road. I stood outside under that green sign for half an hour.” Aurora turned slowly. “I was upstairs.” “I know. I saw your light.” “Then why—” “You were laughing.” The bar seemed to tilt, though no glass moved. Aurora remembered that winter in fragments: Silas teaching her how to spot the men who counted exits; Yu-Fei handing her cash in an envelope because payroll took too long; a night when she had laughed so hard at a drunk drag queen’s impression of the Prime Minister that she had spilled tea down her front and cried from the shock of her own noise. Eva’s fingers wrapped round the water glass. “I heard you through the open window. Proper laugh. Not the one you used when you wanted people to stop asking if you were all right. I stood there with wet feet and a speech in my mouth about police reports and witness statements and how I should’ve noticed sooner, and then you laughed.” She drew a breath that scraped. “So I went home.” Aurora felt the towel’s dampness against her palm though she no longer held it. “You thought laughing meant I was fine?” “I thought I’d bring Cardiff back into the room.” “You were Cardiff.” “I know.” The students left in a burst of cold air and cheap cologne. The door swung shut, trapping the rain outside again. Silas gathered their glasses without a word. His signet ring knocked once against the wood. Aurora looked at Eva’s face and tried to fit the woman before her over the girl who had once slept on Aurora’s bedroom floor for a whole summer because her parents had been “renovating”, though no one ever saw paint tins or dust sheets. That girl had chewed pen lids, stolen Jennifer’s biscuits, and held Aurora’s hand under a table while Evan charmed their friends. “You told me to leave him,” Aurora murmured. Eva’s eyes flashed. “Once.” “More than once.” “Not loudly enough.” “He wouldn’t have listened.” “I wasn’t speaking to him.” Aurora opened her mouth, closed it. Eva pushed back from the bar and stood. She was taller in the heels, almost level with Aurora. The camel coat fell open to show a navy dress, tailored, plain. No swallow earrings, no chipped rings, no badge that read RIOT NOT DIET from the old school rucksack. She looked like someone who knew how to enter boardrooms and leave no fingerprints. “I was a coward with good timing. That’s all.” Aurora shook her head. “You got me out.” “I sent a text.” “You sent money.” “Fifty quid.” “That bought the coach ticket.” Eva stared at the bar top. “And then I disappeared.” “So did I.” “You were allowed.” Aurora’s laugh struck sharper this time. “Who handed out the permissions?” Eva looked at her then, and the years between them showed up not as distance but as damage: thin lines at the corners of Eva’s eyes, a notch in Aurora’s calm, old weather held in two bodies that had kept moving because stillness had cost too much. Silas came over with a bottle of whisky and two short glasses. “On the house.” Aurora frowned. “We didn’t ask.” “No. You didn’t.” He set them down. “That’s why.” Eva looked at him. “I don’t really drink whisky.” “Good. Then you won’t waste it by pretending you like it.” He limped away to serve the retired copper another stout. Aurora poured a finger into each glass. She lifted hers but did not drink. Eva picked up the other, sniffed it, and winced. “That smells like a chapel pew on fire.” “You became soft.” “I became hydrated.” Aurora drank. The whisky burned clean. Eva took a smaller sip and coughed into her fist. “There she is,” Aurora muttered. Eva wiped her eyes with the back of her hand. For a second, the polish cracked wide enough for the old grin to show, crooked and rude. “Shut up.” “You first.” Eva set the glass down. “I saw Evan last year.” Aurora’s hand went still around her drink. “At a fundraiser in Cardiff. He had a wife with yellow hair and a baby strapped to his chest. He introduced himself to my boss as if we’d never met.” Eva’s lips thinned. “He had the same watch.” Aurora stared at the whisky. “What did you do?” “I shook his hand.” The answer moved through Aurora like cold water under a door. Eva looked sick before Aurora spoke. “I know.” “You shook his hand.” “My boss was there. His wife was there. The baby grabbed my necklace. I stood in a room full of donors and canapés and shook his hand.” Aurora placed her glass down with care. “Did he recognise you?” “Yes.” “What did he do?” “He smiled.” Aurora closed her eyes for one beat. When she opened them, Silas had turned his head from the other end of the bar. Not intruding. Present. Eva’s voice dropped. “I went to the loo and threw up. Then I came back out and finished the pitch. We got the funding.” “Congratulations.” “Don’t.” Aurora felt the old urge to cut. It rose clean, practised, useful. She could slice Eva into neat pieces with it: the coat, the handshakes, the years of silence, the way people called survival strength because they disliked the shape of grief. Instead she looked at Eva’s swallow tattoo. “You still have that.” Eva flexed her thumb. “You dared me.” “You cried.” “The bloke used a guitar string and prison ink.” “It was a terrible plan.” “It was your plan.” Aurora allowed herself a small smile. “I had loads of terrible plans.” “You had maps. Bus routes. Spare keys. You knew which houses had unlocked garden gates between school and the chippy.” “Escape routes.” Eva nodded once. “Yeah.” Rain thickened against the windows. A bus sighed at the stop outside, its interior lights turning the pavement silver. Someone walked past beneath the green sign, face hidden under a newspaper. Eva reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a business card. Cream stock, black lettering, no clutter. She placed it on the bar between them. “I’m at the hotel until Friday.” Aurora did not touch it. Eva took a breath. “I won’t do the thing where I say we should catch up and then make you carry all the history like luggage. But if you want coffee, or a walk, or to sit somewhere and not talk, I can do that.” Aurora looked at the card. Eva Price. Director of Governance. A London number. An email address with too many dots. “You hate silence.” “I learnt.” “You learnt gin. You learnt shoes you can’t run in. You learnt silence.” Eva’s mouth hardened, then softened into something worse. “I didn’t learn how to knock on your door.” Aurora touched the crescent scar on her wrist, thumb circling the pale curve. Childhood accident, broken jam jar, blood in the kitchen sink while Eva screamed louder than Aurora and Jennifer wrapped the cut in a tea towel. Funny, what the skin chose to keep. She picked up the card. Eva watched her hand as if it held a match. “I’m off tomorrow at three,” Aurora replied. Eva nodded. Once, careful. “Three.” “Don’t wear those shoes.” A breath escaped Eva, almost a laugh. “Bossy cow.” “Corporate sell-out.” “Delivery goblin.” “Gin traitor.” Eva’s grin came through again, battered but present. Then it faded as she buttoned her coat. “I missed you, Rory.” Aurora slid the card into her back pocket. “I know.” Eva accepted that. She lifted her glass, swallowed the rest of the whisky with a grimace, and set it down empty. “That was vile.” Silas called from the far end, “That was older than your first regret.” Eva looked at him. “Then it should’ve known better.” She turned towards the door. Her heels clicked across the floorboards, measured at first, then uneven where one sole caught on the warped plank near the entrance. Aurora almost warned her. Eva recovered without looking back. At the door, she paused under the green wash of the sign. Rainlight glazed her face. For an instant, she looked both twenty and forty, both the girl who climbed gates and the woman who shook hands with monsters in funded rooms. “Three,” she repeated. Aurora nodded from beside the bar. “Three.” Eva stepped out into Soho, pulling the coat tight as the rain took her. The door swung shut. The neon buzzed on. Silas came to collect the empty glasses. “You all right?” Aurora watched the water run down the window, breaking the green light into thin, trembling lines. “No.” He nodded and picked up Eva’s glass. “Good. Saves time.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences188
tagDensity0.08
leniency0.16
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3178
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3178
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"trembled"
count1
2
word"measured"
count2
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"silence"
count3
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"trembled"
2"measured"
3"familiar"
4"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences216
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences216
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences389
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen65
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3178
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions172
wordCount2077
uniqueNames27
maxNameDensity3.18
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Carter1
Golden1
Empress1
Wednesday1
Cold1
War1
Berlin1
Prague1
Cardiff2
Aurora66
Barry1
Price2
London2
Christmas1
Eva63
Jennifer3
Thames1
Lisbon1
Silas11
Yu-Fei1
Prime1
Minister1
Evan1
Governance1
Soho2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Aurora"
4"Barry"
5"Price"
6"Eva"
7"Jennifer"
8"Silas"
9"Yu-Fei"
10"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
1"Berlin"
2"Prague"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Thames"
6"Lisbon"
7"Soho"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences138
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"tasted like licking Christmas trees"
1"looked like someone who knew how to enter"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.629
wordCount3178
matches
0"not gone but pressed flat under polish"
1"not as distance but as damage: thin lines at the corners of Eva’s eyes, a notch"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences389
matches
0"remembered that winter"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs274
mean11.6
std14.28
cv1.231
sampleLengths
051
172
23
38
46
54
654
757
82
99
109
114
1250
1362
1414
151
167
172
1838
1917
203
2120
223
231
2412
2515
267
2711
2811
294
3034
3120
324
3311
343
358
365
372
3811
397
4025
4121
425
434
442
4513
468
472
488
4954
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences216
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs353
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences389
ratio0.003
matches
0"Aurora remembered that winter in fragments: Silas teaching her how to spot the men who counted exits; Yu-Fei handing her cash in an envelope because payroll took too long; a night when she had laughed so hard at a drunk drag queen’s impression of the Prime Minister that she had spilled tea down her front and cried from the shock of her own noise."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2084
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount51
adverbRatio0.024472168905950095
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.003838771593090211
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences389
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences389
mean8.17
std8.81
cv1.079
sampleLengths
022
18
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318
420
536
616
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88
96
104
1154
125
132
142
1526
1622
172
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207
212
224
2343
247
2516
2614
278
286
2918
3014
311
327
332
3414
3510
3614
375
3812
393
4020
413
421
4312
448
457
467
4711
485
496
44.34% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.2390745501285347
totalSentences389
uniqueOpeners93
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences193
matches
0"Then the woman lifted a"
1"Then the bar light found"
2"Only the swallow remained, trapped"
3"Then he turned the label"
4"Instead she looked at Eva’s"
5"Then it faded as she"
ratio0.031
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences193
matches
0"She had come downstairs after"
1"Her lipstick did not bleed"
2"Her nails looked buffed, not"
3"His hazel eyes moved from"
4"Her trainers stuck for a"
5"It might have become a"
6"He lifted both hands and"
7"She used to swear gin"
8"She saw Eva there too,"
9"She pushed the glass an"
10"She looked at Aurora’s black"
11"Her shoulders went still beneath"
12"Her eyes had changed least."
13"They stayed where they were."
14"He placed the drinks before"
15"Her throat moved."
16"It sat between them, ugly"
17"She set it in front"
18"Her lipstick left no mark."
19"She stopped and took a"
ratio0.192
11.81% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount173
totalSentences193
matches
0"The green neon above The"
1"Soho pressed its wet face"
2"Taxis hissed past."
3"Someone outside laughed too loud,"
4"Aurora Carter stood at the"
5"She had come downstairs after"
6"Silas had pointed at the"
7"The Raven’s Nest held its"
8"Aurora noticed the coat first."
9"The kind of coat that"
10"Aurora set the crate down"
11"The woman looked over."
12"Eva Price had cut her"
13"The old silver ring through"
14"Her lipstick did not bleed"
15"Her nails looked buffed, not"
16"Aurora wiped both hands on"
17"Eva put down the glass"
18"Silas, halfway down the bar,"
19"His hazel eyes moved from"
ratio0.896
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences193
matches(empty)
ratio0
78.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The kind of coat that cost more than a month of her old rent in Cardiff and carried no memory of buses, rain, or chip-shop vinegar."
1"Eva Price had cut her hair into a sharp dark bob that tucked under her jaw."
2"It sat between them, ugly and familiar, wearing the same old aftershave, the same smile that had fooled rooms before it fooled hands."
3"Aurora remembered that winter in fragments: Silas teaching her how to spot the men who counted exits; Yu-Fei handing her cash in an envelope because payroll too…"
4"Eva looked at her then, and the years between them showed up not as distance but as damage: thin lines at the corners of Eva’s eyes, a notch in Aurora’s calm, o…"
5"Eva watched her hand as if it held a match."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
2"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences188
tagDensity0.027
leniency0.053
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.032
87.3105%