Run: 2026-04-24-01KQ0Q087KJG2DY9A8B7Y1R5W3

Run Details

Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.121700
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter reached Richmond Park at twenty-three minutes past midnight with a delivery bag over one shoulder, mud on the cuffs of her jeans, and the Heartstone Pendant burning against her sternum like a coin left on a radiator. The order receipt, folded twice in her pocket, had gone soft from the rain. No customer name. No phone number. Paid in advance. Delivery notes: Bring it past the oak stones. Leave it where the flowers don’t sleep. Yu-Fei would have binned the ticket if the payment hadn’t cleared with a tip large enough to cover three nights’ takings. She had stood beneath the Golden Empress’s buzzing strip light, arms folded, mouth flat, while Rory tied the bag shut. “No one normal ordered this.” “That narrowed London down.” “Rory.” “I’d be back before closing.” “You were already meant to be off.” “Then I had no shift to miss.” Yu-Fei had pointed the ladle at her like a weapon. “If anything with antlers asked for prawn toast, you ran.” Rory had smiled, because it was easier than admitting the pendant had started to pulse the moment the receipt slid from the printer. A slow crimson throb under her shirt. Warm. Patient. As if it recognised the address before she did. Now the park stretched ahead, black and wet and wide. The city sat behind her with its sodium lamps and drunk voices and buses coughing through puddles, but the moment she stepped through the gate, the noise fell away. Not faded. Fell. Like someone had shut a thick door at her back. Her phone screen showed no service. “Of course.” The word landed at her feet and went nowhere. Rain hung in the air but did not fall. Each drop shivered on bare branches and blades of grass, caught between sky and earth. The path glimmered with a skin of water. Beyond it, old trees stood in ranks, their trunks blackened by night, their limbs bent into shapes that looked less grown than arranged. Rory adjusted the strap of the delivery bag. Steam had long stopped leaking through the zip. Inside sat two cartons of chilli oil dumplings, one portion of salt-and-pepper squid, a box of sesame noodles, and a tub of black bean sauce that had tipped sideways somewhere on the District line. “Leave it where the flowers don’t sleep,” she muttered. “Could’ve put ‘bench near the loo’ like everyone else.” The pendant warmed in answer. She pulled it from beneath her jumper. The deep crimson stone sat in its silver setting, thumbnail-sized, glowing from within. It had never looked like jewellery. Too deliberate. Too aware. Its light brushed her fingers red, catching on the small crescent scar at her left wrist. A breeze moved through the grass. No leaves rustled. Rory stopped. The grass ahead bent in a long, narrow line, as though something low and thin had passed through it. Then another line crossed the first. Then a third, nearer the path. She listened. Nothing. Not silence. Silence had shape. This felt padded, stuffed into her ears. No traffic. No fox scream. No wings. No creak from the trees. Her own breathing sounded rude. “Delivery for whoever had more money than sense.” No answer came. She walked on. The ancient oak standing stones appeared where the map on her phone had become a grey grid. They rose from a shallow dip beyond a knot of hawthorn, taller than Rory, dark with old rain, each one formed from oak so ancient and petrified that it looked half wood, half bone. Roots knuckled around their bases. Wildflowers crowded the boundary in impossible colour, bright under the moonless sky: bluebells, marigolds, foxgloves, white blossoms thin as paper. They bloomed as if July had been trapped here and forced to kneel in November’s mud. The air changed at the stones. London smelled of petrol, river water, hot metal, old food. The grove beyond smelled of wet moss and honey and something shut too long in a drawer. Rory stood before the boundary and pressed two fingers to the pendant. It thudded once. The delivery bag shifted. She looked down. The zip sat open by a finger’s width. Rory held still. She had closed it at the restaurant. Checked it twice on the train. Once at the park gate. A soft clink came from inside. Container against container. “Don’t.” The bag stilled. Rory gripped the strap until it dug into her palm, then yanked the zip shut. The sound seemed too loud. It tore through the grove’s dead air and came back wrong, stretched thin, as if something in the trees copied the noise with a mouth too wide. Zzzzip. Rory’s throat tightened. “Cute.” She stepped between the oak stones. Cold passed through her. Not over her skin — through her ribs, behind her eyes, under the nails. For one blink she saw the clearing in daylight: bees hanging over clover, a woman’s bare feet beside a pool, gold hair sinking into green water, a red handprint on bark. Then night snapped back. The Fae Grove opened before her. It should have been smaller. A clearing in Richmond Park had no right to hold that much distance. The wildflowers spread in a pale carpet beneath the trees, petals open to the dark. The trunks formed a crooked circle, but between them stretched more blackness than the park could contain. A narrow stream cut through the grass without a sound, its surface smooth as blown glass. Above, no stars showed. The sky looked close enough to touch. Rory checked her phone again. No service. The time read 00:23. She frowned. She had arrived at the park at 00:23. The pendant pulsed against her fingers. “Brilliant. Time nonsense.” A sound came from the far side of the clearing. A fork scraped across ceramic. Rory’s head turned. The noise came again. Slow. Delicate. Not loud, but intimate, as if someone ate at a table behind her shoulder. Scrape. Tap. Scrape. The delivery bag’s weight pressed into her hip. “Customer?” The word sank into the flowers. Something pale moved between two trees. A sliver. A face, perhaps, though too high from the ground. When Rory fixed on it, there was only bark, moonless shadow, a scatter of white blossoms. She swallowed and moved towards the centre of the grove. The grass did not wet her boots. Rain pearled on each blade yet left no damp. Flowers brushed her ankles with soft, searching touches. Some turned their heads as she passed. Foxgloves dipped. Bluebells leaned close. The receipt in her pocket crackled. Rory pulled it out. The ink had changed. Where the printed address had been, thin black letters crawled across the damp paper, forming and unforming like insects trapped beneath skin. NOT THERE. She stared. The letters dissolved. New ones rose. NOT FOR YOU. Rory folded the receipt with care and tucked it back into her pocket. “Then someone had poor admin.” A laugh sounded from the stream. Small. Wet. A child’s laugh through a mouth full of water. Rory stepped back. The stream remained smooth. No ripple. No bank disturbed. On the far side, the wildflowers grew thicker, their stems pale and crowded. Among them stood a flat stone, waist-high, its surface clear of moss and rain. A place for an offering. A place for a meal. Leave it where the flowers don’t sleep. The flowers around that stone were closed. Every blossom in the grove watched the night with open faces except that small ring. Those petals had folded tight, heads bowed, stems rigid. Rory exhaled through her nose. “There we go.” She crossed the stream at its narrowest point. Her boot landed on water that held like glass. Halfway across, something knocked from beneath. Once. Rory froze. A second knock struck under her sole. Then fingers spread against the underside of the stream. Long, grey fingers. Pressed flat to the clear surface beneath her boot. The nails were black and thin, bending backwards where they met the glassy water. A palm followed, then part of a face slid into view below: one bright blue eye, wide and human, staring up from the wrong side. Rory stopped breathing. The face beneath the stream had her eye. Her cheek. Her shoulder-length black hair drifted around it in a slow halo, though the stream was no deeper than her hand. The thing under the water opened its mouth. Rory saw no bubbles. Heard no voice. Its lips shaped one word. Run. Rory lifted her boot. The hand slapped the underside with such force the stream rang like a struck bowl. Rory stumbled onto the far bank. Her pulse battered her jaw. She did not look back until both feet stood in the closed ring of flowers. The stream lay empty. Narrow. Shallow. Black stones under clear water. The flat offering stone waited ahead. Its surface bore old knife marks. Not random scratches. Names, carved in tight rings, each one cut over another until the letters became a nest of wounds. Rory could not read them. Her eyes slid away when she tried. She set the delivery bag down. The pendant cooled. For the first time since the restaurant, the Heartstone went still. Rory crouched and opened the bag. The smell of garlic, chilli, fried squid and sesame oil climbed into the air. It did not belong among moss and honey and old wood. It smelled human. Warm kitchens. Burnt fingers. Plastic lids. Yu-Fei shouting over the extractor fan. Rory gripped that smell like a handle. She placed the cartons on the stone one by one. Dumplings. Squid. Noodles. Sauce. The black bean tub had split at one corner. Dark sauce bled across the stone and filled the carved names. It moved against the slope, creeping upward, threading through cuts in the surface until letters glistened black. Behind her, the fork scraped again. Scrape. Tap. Scrape. Closer this time. Rory did not turn. “Order’s here. Enjoy your food.” A chair creaked. There had been no chair. Rory reached for the empty bag. A voice spoke from the trees. “That wasn’t your name on the ticket.” The voice sounded like it came from three throats in three places: behind the flat stone, at the stream, inside the delivery bag. It used a woman’s pitch but held no breath. Rory’s fingers closed around the strap. “No name on the ticket.” “You read what it showed you.” “I read what paid.” A pause. Leaves did not move. The closed flowers around her ankles trembled as if something below them breathed. “You carried warmth across the stones.” “Lucky you. Kitchen hadn’t shut.” “You carried a door.” Rory looked at the pendant. The crimson gem had gone dark. Not dim. Dark. Its surface drank what little light the clearing had. “That’s not part of the meal deal.” Something shifted at the edge of her vision. Rory kept her gaze on the stone. Her father had once taught her the trick of watching a courtroom without looking at any one face: choose a fixed point, let the rest move in the margins. She used it now. The cartons steamed in front of her. The black sauce crawled through names. At the edges, shapes moved between trunks. Tall. Thin. Too still when watched. A wet child’s giggle bubbled from the stream again. The voice returned. “Who gave you the red heart?” Rory slid the empty bag over her shoulder. “Unknown benefactor.” A twig snapped to her left. Then another on her right. The shapes had stepped from the trees. They looked almost like people, in the way a scarecrow looked almost like a farmer from a car window at speed. Limbs too long. Heads tipped at angles necks should not bear. Their faces caught no detail, only hollows where eyes belonged and the wet gleam of teeth set in vertical lines. Bark clung to some of them. Flowers grew through others. One held a fork made from white bone. Rory’s skin tightened across her arms. She counted four. No, five. No, the gaps between them counted too. The nearest stood beside the stream. Its feet did not press the grass. Its head tilted towards the offering stone. “Your name isn’t Aurora Carter here.” Rory’s mouth dried. The pendant gave one faint pulse. Not warmth now. Pain. It pinched under her ribs and spread down her left arm to the crescent scar on her wrist. The scar burned white. The creature with the bone fork scraped the tines down its own forearm. No blood came. Only the sound of cutlery on plate. Scrape. Tap. Scrape. “What is it here?” Rory shifted her stance. The stream lay behind her. The boundary stones were too far across the clearing. The delivery bag hung empty, useless except for the metal thermos Yu-Fei had shoved in the side pocket before Rory left. For tea, Yu-Fei had claimed. For swinging at bastards, her eyes had added. Rory slid her hand towards it. The flowers around her boots clenched tighter. The voice lowered. “Malphora.” The name moved through the grove. Not spoken. Passed. Petal to petal. Root to root. It ran up the trees and shuddered through the standing stones beyond. The shapes at the edge of the clearing bowed their heads, not in respect but appetite. Rory’s fingers found the thermos. “No.” The nearest thing twitched. The pendant flared crimson. For one breath the grove turned red: flowers like open mouths, trees like ribs, the stream full of faces pressed against its underside. Dozens of them. Men, women, children, all pale and wide-eyed, palms flattened beneath the water glass. Among them floated Rory’s double, hair drifting, mouth stretched around silent warning. Then darkness returned. The bone fork touched the stone. It speared a dumpling and lifted it. Steam coiled around its fingers. “You brought the first course.” Rory pulled the thermos free. The creature’s empty face turned towards her. “What did you think you brought?” The thermos felt solid in her hand. Ridiculous. Stainless steel with a dent near the lid and Yu-Fei’s red nail varnish smeared along one side. Rory pictured the kitchen, the fryers, the cracked tile by the back door. Real things. Heavy things. “Dinner.” She swung. The thermos struck the offering stone instead of the creature. Metal rang against carved oak-hard rock. The lid burst loose. Tea sprayed across the cartons and over the black sauce. Yu-Fei had not packed tea. The liquid hit the stone silver-bright. The carved names hissed. The things in the clearing recoiled. Not far. Enough. Rory did not wait to understand. She snatched the pendant chain, yanked it over her head, and slammed the Heartstone onto the wet, shining stone among the split cartons and crawling sauce. The gem stuck there. Crimson light bled through the silver liquid, spreading across the offering stone in branching lines. The names lit from within. The grove inhaled. Every flower opened. Not gently. Petals snapped wide, rows upon rows, revealing dark centres that looked like pupils. The voice lost its shape. “Take it back.” Rory backed away from the stone. “No refunds after midnight.” The stream behind her knocked. Once. Twice. Then every hand beneath the water struck at the same time. The glassy surface rang through the grove, a hundred palms beating from below. The sound filled Rory’s skull. The shapes shuddered, their long limbs jerking as if strings had been pulled through their joints. Across the clearing, between the oak standing stones, a thin slice of London appeared: a wet path, a crooked park sign, the orange blur of a distant lamp. Rory ran. The grass grabbed at her boots. Flower stems whipped her ankles. Something hooked the delivery bag and tore it from her shoulder. She let it go. Behind her, the bone fork clattered against stone. “Malphora.” The name chased her low through the flowers. “Malphora.” Her scar burned. Her breath tore cold down her throat. At the stream, the water held firm beneath her first step. On the second, it cracked. A grey hand burst through and seized her ankle. Fingers closed like wire. Rory hit the far bank on her palms, mud grinding into her skin. The thing under the stream pulled once, hard enough to drag her knee back into the water. She twisted and kicked. The face beneath the surface rose through the crack. Her face. Her blue eye. Her black hair plastered to a brow that was not quite hers. Its mouth opened above the waterline, and this time sound came out. “Don’t leave me wearing you.” Rory’s free boot struck its jaw. The grip loosened. She scrambled forward, nails ripping through moss, and lurched to her feet. The standing stones waited ahead, but the gap between them narrowed with each step. Oak roots writhed at their bases, threading together, closing the way like fingers interlacing. Rory lowered her shoulder and drove through. Cold split her chest. The grove vanished. She stumbled onto the wet path in Richmond Park, struck the ground hard, and rolled onto her back beneath a sky full of London’s low orange cloud. Sound crashed back. Traffic. Wind. A siren far off. Rain striking leaves. Her own breath, raw and ugly. For several seconds she lay there, staring up, one hand clamped around her left wrist. The crescent scar no longer burned. Her phone buzzed in her pocket. Rory jerked, then dug it out with shaking fingers. Service had returned. The time read 00:24. A message from Yu-Fei lit the screen. You alive? Rory dragged herself upright. Mud streaked her jeans. Her palms stung. The delivery bag was gone. The pendant was gone. Across the path, beyond the hawthorn, the oak standing stones stood dark and still. Between them, deep in the black, something scraped a fork across a plate.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.05
leniency0.1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
98.31% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2965
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2965
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"throb"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count2
7
word"lurched"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"throb"
2"silence"
3"pulsed"
4"weight"
5"trembled"
6"warmth"
7"lurched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences383
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences383
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences422
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2966
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
63.98% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions90
wordCount2790
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Richmond3
Park3
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Bring1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory48
District1
July1
November1
Fae1
Grove1
Yu-Fei8
London3
Rain3
Scrape6
Tap3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Empress"
4"Rory"
5"July"
6"Yu-Fei"
7"Rain"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"November"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
5"London"
globalScore0.64
windowScore0.667
99.49% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences198
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like jewellery"
1"sounded like it came from three throats in"
2"looked like pupils"
3"not quite hers"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.674
wordCount2966
matches
0"Not loud, but intimate, as if someone ate at a table behind her shoulder"
1"not in respect but appetite"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences422
matches
0"petrified that it"
1"hold that much"
2"gripped that smell"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs256
mean11.59
std14.75
cv1.273
sampleLengths
039
114
224
341
45
54
61
75
87
97
1010
1110
1241
1352
146
152
169
1755
1850
1918
205
2146
226
233
242
2531
262
271
2824
295
308
313
323
3392
346
3527
3612
373
384
393
408
4121
426
433
441
453
4647
471
483
491
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences383
matches
0"been trapped"
1"been pulled"
2"was gone"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs462
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences422
ratio0.002
matches
0"Not over her skin — through her ribs, behind her eyes, under the nails."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2590
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount76
adverbRatio0.029343629343629343
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0023166023166023165
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences422
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences422
mean7.03
std6.09
cv0.867
sampleLengths
039
114
23
33
43
58
67
721
820
95
104
111
125
137
147
1510
1610
1723
187
191
201
219
2210
2329
242
251
2610
276
282
299
309
3115
328
3323
348
358
3634
379
389
395
407
4113
426
432
442
4516
466
473
482
4919
44.94% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats32
diversityRatio0.31516587677725116
totalSentences422
uniqueOpeners133
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount10
totalSentences313
matches
0"Then another line crossed the"
1"Then a third, nearer the"
2"Once at the park gate."
3"Then night snapped back."
4"Then fingers spread against the"
5"Too still when watched."
6"Then another on her right."
7"Only the sound of cutlery"
8"Then darkness returned."
9"Then every hand beneath the"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount55
totalSentences313
matches
0"She had stood beneath the"
1"Her phone screen showed no"
2"She pulled it from beneath"
3"It had never looked like"
4"Its light brushed her fingers"
5"Her own breathing sounded rude."
6"She walked on."
7"They rose from a shallow"
8"They bloomed as if July"
9"It thudded once."
10"She looked down."
11"She had closed it at"
12"It tore through the grove’s"
13"She stepped between the oak"
14"It should have been smaller."
15"She had arrived at the"
16"She swallowed and moved towards"
17"She crossed the stream at"
18"Her boot landed on water"
19"Her shoulder-length black hair drifted"
ratio0.176
68.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount245
totalSentences313
matches
0"Aurora Carter reached Richmond Park"
1"The order receipt, folded twice"
2"Delivery notes: Bring it past"
3"Yu-Fei would have binned the"
4"She had stood beneath the"
5"Yu-Fei had pointed the ladle"
6"Rory had smiled, because it"
7"A slow crimson throb under"
8"The city sat behind her"
9"Her phone screen showed no"
10"The word landed at her"
11"Rain hung in the air"
12"Each drop shivered on bare"
13"The path glimmered with a"
14"Rory adjusted the strap of"
15"Steam had long stopped leaking"
16"The pendant warmed in answer."
17"She pulled it from beneath"
18"The deep crimson stone sat"
19"It had never looked like"
ratio0.783
31.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences313
matches
0"As if it recognised the"
1"Now the park stretched ahead,"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences87
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Inside sat two cartons of chilli oil dumplings, one portion of salt-and-pepper squid, a box of sesame noodles, and a tub of black bean sauce that had tipped sid…"
1"The grass ahead bent in a long, narrow line, as though something low and thin had passed through it."
2"It tore through the grove’s dead air and came back wrong, stretched thin, as if something in the trees copied the noise with a mouth too wide."
3"Oak roots writhed at their bases, threading together, closing the way like fingers interlacing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.025
leniency0.05
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.05
92.9024%