Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2DJE7786KK346TR41Y1BQX

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The door chimed, a tinny sound against the low hum of conversation and clinking glass. Rory didn't look up from polishing a wine glass, her rag tracing slow circles on the crystal. The scent of old wood and spilled whiskey clung to the air, a familiar comfort. Then she heard the laugh. It cut through the bar's noise, sharp and familiar, but wrong. Like a favourite song played in the wrong key. She set the glass down, the rag forgotten. Two women stood by the coat rack, unwinding scarves. The shorter one, with a cascade of red hair and a voice that carried, was definitely a stranger. But the other one. The tall one with the hesitant posture and the way she scanned the room before committing to enter. Rory knew that scan. She knew the way the woman's hand rested on her own elbow, a self-soothing gesture. She knew the slight downturn of the mouth, the careful way she held herself, as if bracing for impact. Time had been generous to Eva's features, etching fine lines around her eyes and mouth. But it had also sharpened her. The softness Rory remembered from university, the girl who cried at adverts and laughed with her whole body, was gone. In its place was a woman carved from marble. Polished. Distant. Their eyes met. Recognition flickered, a brief flare in Eva's gaze. Then it was gone, replaced by a practiced blankness. A social smile touched her lips, thin and polite. Rory's stomach dropped. She should have stayed in the back. Should have let Silas handle the front. But it was too late. "Rory?" The name came out questioning, as if Eva wasn't sure she had the right person. "Rory Carter?" "It's Aurora, now." The words came out before she could stop them. A correction. A wall. "Aurora." Eva tasted the name, rolling it on her tongue. "Suits you." "Drinks?" "Just a soda water. Lime." Rory turned to the optics, her hands working on autopilot. She could feel the weight of Eva's gaze on her back, assessing. Comparing. The silence stretched. "This place suits you," Eva said finally. "Better than the lecture halls, anyway." Rory set the glass down, the ice cubes clinking against the sides. "I dropped out." "I know." Eva's voice was soft. "Your mother called mine. Said you'd moved to London. That you were..." She trailed off. Rory slid the drink across the bar top. "I'm fine." "Are you?" The question hung in the air, charged with a history neither of them had the courage to touch. Rory's hand went to her wrist, her thumb tracing the crescent scar. A nervous habit she thought she'd buried years ago. "Business must be good," she said, changing the subject. "The suit. The watch. Evan treating you well?" The name landed like a slap. Eva's composure cracked, just for a second. A flicker of something raw and wounded in her eyes. Then the mask slid back into place. "He's fine." A pause. "We're divorced. Two years now." Rory's breath hitched. She busied herself with polishing another glass, a futile gesture. "I'm sorry." "Don't be." The words were clipped. Final. Another silence fell between them, but this one was different. Heavier. It carried the weight of unspoken accusations and shared history. Rory remembered driving through the night, Eva's hand in hers, the city lights a blur. She remembered promises whispered in the dark. *We'll be fine. We have each other.* Now they had this. A glass of soda water and a lifetime of careful distance. "How long are you in town?" Rory asked. Eva shrugged, a fluid movement that was somehow elegant and dismissive. "Just tonight. Meeting someone. Business." "Right." The jukebox switched tracks, a mournful blues number filling the space between them. Rory wanted to say something, anything, to bridge the chasm. *Do you remember the time we got locked in the library? Do you still hum when you're nervous? Do you ever think about the sound of the rain on the university roof?* Instead, she said, "I deliver for a Chinese place now. Part-time." Eva's smile tightened. "That sounds... nice." "Don't patronise me." The words came out sharper than intended. Eva recoiled, a flash of hurt crossing her face before she regained control. "I wasn't," she said, her voice measured. "I'm genuinely happy for you, Rory. I am." "For what? That I'm delivering noodles and living above a bar?" The bitterness in her own voice surprised her. She had thought she'd made peace with her choices. But seeing Eva, polished and put-together, made her feel small. Made her feel like the same broken mess who had fled Cardiff with nothing but a suitcase and a phone number. "You're alive." Eva's voice cracked. "You're alive, and that's more than I could hope for. Do you know what your mother told mine? She said you'd vanished. That no one knew where you were. I spent three years thinking you were dead, Rory. Three years wondering if I should have tried harder. If I should have dragged you out of that flat myself. If I should have-" She stopped, her jaw clenched. Her hand was shaking, the soda water glass trembling in her grip. Rory felt the air leave her lungs. Three years. She'd been gone three years. "I'm sorry," she whispered. The words felt inadequate. Hollow. "I couldn't. I couldn't look at you without remembering." "Remembering what?" "Everything." Rory's voice broke. "The escape. The fear. The way he made me feel like I was nothing. And you were there. You saw it all. I couldn't be the person you saved anymore. I needed to be someone else." Eva's mask crumbled entirely. Tears welled in her eyes, but she blinked them back. "I never wanted you to be saved. I just wanted you to be *here*." The door chimed again. A man in a suit entered, scanning the room. Eva's contact. The business meeting. She looked at the man, then back at Rory. A decision hung in the air. "The meeting can wait," she said softly. "Can we talk? Really talk?" Rory looked at her. At the woman she had run from. At the friend she had abandoned. The marble facade was gone, and beneath it was the girl who had held her hand while she cried. The girl who had promised to never let go. She took a deep breath. "Yeah." Her voice was steadier now. "Yeah, I think I'd like that." Eva waved the man away with a gesture that was both apologetic and firm. He shrugged and left, the door swinging shut behind him. Rory pulled out two clean glasses. Poured them both a whiskey. Neat. "To second chances?" she offered. Eva took the glass. Their fingers brushed. "To finding our way back," she said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva said finally [finally]"
1"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.372
leniency0.744
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.093
91.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1133
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1133
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"tracing"
count2
1
word"crystal"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count2
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"etching"
count1
5
word"marble"
count2
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"silence"
count2
11
word"charged"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"carried the weight"
count1
14
word"unspoken"
count1
15
word"measured"
count1
16
word"jaw clenched"
count1
17
word"scanning"
count1
18
word"facade"
count1
highlights
0"tracing"
1"crystal"
2"familiar"
3"scanned"
4"etching"
5"marble"
6"flickered"
7"stomach"
8"could feel"
9"weight"
10"silence"
11"charged"
12"flicker"
13"carried the weight"
14"unspoken"
15"measured"
16"jaw clenched"
17"scanning"
18"facade"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
2
label"hung in the air"
count2
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
1"jaw clenched"
2"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences115
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences115
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords40
totalWords1133
ratio0.035
matches
0"We'll be fine. We have each other."
1"Do you remember the time we got locked in the library? Do you still hum when you're nervous? Do you ever think about the sound of the rain on the university roof?"
2"here"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
45.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount865
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity2.08
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva18
Rory17
Silas1
Final1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.46
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if bracing for impact"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1133
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"knew that scan"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean19.2
std16.11
cv0.839
sampleLengths
047
125
28
349
44
534
652
73
826
917
105
1118
1216
1312
141
155
1626
1713
1815
1921
2010
212
2239
2317
246
2524
269
2715
287
2950
3015
318
3216
331
3455
3511
366
373
3820
3915
4059
4167
4217
4314
4418
452
4640
4728
4818
4915
86.96% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences115
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
2"were clipped"
3"got locked"
4"been gone"
5"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs170
matches
0"was shaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences138
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount867
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.02306805074971165
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.00461361014994233
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean8.21
std7.06
cv0.86
sampleLengths
015
117
215
35
411
59
68
79
818
94
1018
114
1215
1319
1415
156
1620
179
181
191
203
218
229
239
243
257
267
275
2816
292
3012
312
322
3310
342
351
365
3710
3812
391
403
417
426
4312
443
456
4615
478
482
492
57.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.39855072463768115
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners55
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences99
matches
0"Then she heard the laugh."
1"Then it was gone, replaced"
2"Then the mask slid back"
3"Instead, she said,"
ratio0.04
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences99
matches
0"It cut through the bar's"
1"She set the glass down,"
2"She knew the way the"
3"She knew the slight downturn"
4"Their eyes met."
5"She should have stayed in"
6"She could feel the weight"
7"She trailed off"
8"she said, changing the subject"
9"She busied herself with polishing"
10"It carried the weight of"
11"She remembered promises whispered in"
12"*We'll be fine."
13"We have each other.*"
14"she said, her voice measured"
15"She had thought she'd made"
16"She stopped, her jaw clenched."
17"Her hand was shaking, the"
18"She'd been gone three years."
19"She looked at the man,"
ratio0.253
61.01% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences99
matches
0"The door chimed, a tinny"
1"Rory didn't look up from"
2"The scent of old wood"
3"It cut through the bar's"
4"She set the glass down,"
5"The shorter one, with a"
6"The tall one with the"
7"Rory knew that scan."
8"She knew the way the"
9"She knew the slight downturn"
10"Time had been generous to"
11"The softness Rory remembered from"
12"Their eyes met."
13"Recognition flickered, a brief flare"
14"A social smile touched her"
15"Rory's stomach dropped."
16"She should have stayed in"
17"The name came out questioning,"
18"The words came out before"
19"Eva tasted the name, rolling"
ratio0.798
50.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Now they had this."
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Eva shrugged, a fluid movement that was somehow elegant and dismissive."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"The name came out, as if Eva wasn't sure she had the right person"
1"she said, her voice measured"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.186
leniency0.372
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.047
85.1701%