Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2DQSEWTAKWT6VQC9W4R5N4

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Duration:
28.1s
Cost:
$0.000617
Provider:
DeepSeek

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air changed first. Rory felt it against her skin like a silk scarf drawn across her face—heavier, sweeter, warmer than any autumn afternoon had a right to be in London. One moment she was pushing through a tangle of rhododendrons in Richmond Park, thorns snagging her jeans. The next, the undergrowth simply opened. She stumbled into a clearing that shouldn't exist. The sky above was wrong. Still blue, still daylight, but the quality of light was different—amber-tinged, like looking through honey. The trees around the clearing's edge were oaks, but they were *too* old, their bark rutted with symbols that shifted when she tried to focus on them. Standing stones ringed the space, pale granite veined with something that glittered like crushed silver. "Rory." She felt Nyx before she saw them, a coolness at her shoulder that had nothing to do with temperature. The Shade had materialized from the shadows of an elder oak, their form more solid than she'd ever seen it—still a silhouette of living darkness, but with edges that seemed to sharpen in this place. Their violet eyes glowed like coals. "We should not be here," they said, their voice that familiar whisper-carried-wind. "This ground is not entirely Earth." "This is Isolde's grove," Rory said, and the words came out certain. She didn't know how she knew. The Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt pulsed against her sternum, warm and steady as a second heartbeat. "She said to come when the Veil thinned." "You told a Fae-touched Seer where you live." Nyx's voice carried no judgment, only observation. "That is either brave or foolish." "Both," Rory said, and stepped forward. The grass underfoot was springy, dense, and thick with wildflowers that made no botanical sense. Bluebells grew beside roses, which bloomed beside snowdrops, all in the same square foot of earth. A patch of clover released something like woodsmoke when her boot brushed it. The scent wrapped around her: warm bread, roasted meat, something floral she couldn't name. Her mouth watered unbidden. *Don't eat anything*, she reminded herself. Every story about Fae territory started with that rule. Don't eat. Don't drink. Don't take gifts. The Heartstone pulsed again, and this time she felt a directional pull to it—a gentle tug toward the grove's center, where three standing stones formed a crude archway. Beyond it, the air shimmered like heat haze over asphalt. "Isolde?" Rory called. The silence that answered was dense, expectant. She heard no birds, no distant traffic, no planes. The grove had scooped out a pocket of reality and sealed the edges. Even the breeze that stirred her hair smelled wrong—or right, maybe, in the way that Faerie was supposed to smell. Like the memory of a place she'd never been. "I don't like this," Nyx said. They had drawn up beside her, and she saw that they held something—a blade of moonlight and shadow, their hand wrapped around a hilt that seemed to drink the light. "There is power here. Old power. The kind that does not belong to mortal keeping." "You're not exactly mortal either," Rory said. "I am not. Which is why I recognize what we walk toward." Rory's hand went to her pocket, fingers brushing the cold length of the Fae-Forged Blade Isolde had sent her two weeks ago, delivered by a crow that had fixed her with a patient, knowing eye before flying away. The moonsilver was always cold, but today it seemed to hum against her palm, a low vibration like a tuning fork. She drew it. The leaf-shaped dagger caught the amber light and scattered it, tiny rainbows dancing across the grass. The archway stones groaned. Rory froze. The sound hadn't come from the stones themselves—it came from the *air* between them, a tectonic shift that made her teeth ache. The shimmering haze parted, and she saw a path beyond. Not the park. Not London. A path of crushed white stone that curved through grounds that stretched impossibly far, drenched in a warm amber sky. Vines heavy with grapes hung overhead. The grapes were the size of plums, dark and blushed with red, and they dripped something that might have been nectar. Every breath was intoxicating. "Dymas," Nyx whispered. "We see the spill of Gluttony's realm beyond the Veil." "Isolde's grove connects to Hel?" "The Veil is thin here. It touches many things." Nyx turned their head, and Rory caught something like hunger in their violet gaze. "The Seer chose this place deliberately." Rory stepped through the arch. The temperature jumped ten degrees. The honey-light deepened, turning the grapes translucent, and she heard music—distant, throbbing, a beat that matched her pulse. She felt *fuller* here, more present, as if this world fed something in her that Earth never had. *That's what it's supposed to feel like*, she thought. *This is what excess tastes like.* "This way." The voice came from everywhere and nowhere, woven through the grapevine and the grass. Isolde. Rory followed the path. The gardens around her were immaculate but organic—no straight lines, no careful beds. Fruit trees grew in casual clusters, their branches bent under the weight of apples and pears and fruits she didn't recognize, things like pomegranates crystallized into gems. Fountains of wine burbled at intervals. Roasting pits lay empty but still warm, smelling of honey and herbs. No one was here. The abundance was for itself, or for ghosts, or for an audience that had not yet arrived. Nyx walked at her side, their incorporeal form now fully solid, as if Dymas demanded substance from everything that entered. Their features had resolved—sharp cheekbones, a mouth too wide for a human face, eyes that held no whites, only glowing violet. "You are corporeal," Rory said. "I am *visible*." There was something like fear in their voice. "This realm does not understand shadows. It consumes everything, including hidden things." The Heartstone flared hot against Rory's chest. She gasped, clawing at her collar, and pulled the pendant free. The deep crimson gem was glowingnot from within, but with a light that seemed drawn *toward* it, a hungry pull. "There's a Hel portal," she breathed. "Close. The Heartstone can feel it." "The Seer's grove was created at a nexus," Nyx said. "It touches Dymas, and Dymas touches all of Hel. The portal is likely beneath us." Rory looked down. The white stone path was solid, but through a gap between flagstones, she saw something glimmer. Far below, deep in the earth, a vein of crimson light pulsed in time with the Heartstone. *That's not a vein of ore. That's a artery of something else.* "Nyla." The voice was soft, melodic, and it came from the arch of a flowering trellis ahead. Isolde stepped out from behind it—or through it, Rory couldn't tell. The Half-Fae Seer moved without sound, and when she walked, the grass did not bend. Her silver hair hung to her waist, catching the amber light, and her pale lavender eyes held Rory like she was the only interesting thing in any realm. "You came," Isolde said. "I knew you would. The threads of your fate are remarkably stubborn." "You sent me a blade," Rory said. "And you sent me instructions to come here on the thinning. What is this place?" Isolde smiled, and it was not a kind smile. "This is the bruise where the Veil is weakest. This is a door, Aurora Carter. A door that your Heartstone can open." She tilted her head, studying her. "But you knew that already. You felt it the moment I gave it to you." Rory's fingers tightened on the pendant. "You gave me this." "Through intermediaries. Yes." Isolde clasped her hands before her. "I am bound by the Fae compulsion. I cannot lie. But I can withhold. I can mislead. And I can give gifts that are also chains." She stepped closer, and her eyes were ancient, and sad, and utterly devoid of pity. "The Heartstone is a key. The blade is a tool. And you, Rory Carter, are the hand that will turn one or swing the other." Nyx moved between them, a wall of living shadow. "If you have trapped her in a bargain—" "No bargain," Isolde said. "No debt. Just a door, and a choice, and the weight of what comes after." She met Rory's gaze over Nyx's shoulder. "The Veil is thinning. The winter solstice approaches. And in Dymas, Prince Belphegor is preparing a feast that will pull pieces of Earth into his realm permanently." "What pieces?" Isolde's smile sharpened. "The pieces you love." The Heartstone pulsed. The Fae blade hummed. And somewhere, deep beneath the grove, the portal to Hel beat like a heart waiting to wake. Rory looked at the dagger in her hand, at the pendant around her neck, at the amber-lit paradise of Gluttony leaking through the Veil. She'd come to find answers. She was starting to think she'd only find more questions.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.442
leniency0.884
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1499
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1499
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"tinged"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count4
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"dancing"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"crystallized"
count1
11
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"tinged"
2"familiar"
3"whisper"
4"pulsed"
5"shimmered"
6"silence"
7"dancing"
8"pulse"
9"weight"
10"crystallized"
11"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
88.44% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences105
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords33
totalWords1486
ratio0.022
matches
0"too"
1"Don't eat anything"
2"air"
3"fuller"
4"That's what it's supposed to feel like"
5"This is what excess tastes like."
6"visible"
7"toward"
8"That's not a vein of ore. That's a artery of something else."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1138
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Richmond1
Park1
Nyx9
Shade1
Rory19
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Fae4
Faerie1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde8
Earth1
Dymas1
Half-Fae1
Seer1
Hel1
Gluttony1
Veil1
Don4
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Shade"
2"Rory"
3"Heartstone"
4"Blade"
5"Isolde"
6"Dymas"
7"Seer"
8"Gluttony"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Pendant"
4"Fae"
5"Earth"
6"Hel"
7"Veil"
globalScore0.665
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"edges that seemed to sharpen in this place"
1"something like woodsmoke when her boot brush"
2"hilt that seemed to drink the light"
3"something like hunger in their violet gaze"
4"something like fear in their voice"
5"seemed drawn toward* it, a hungry pull"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.673
wordCount1486
matches
0"not from within, but with a light"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences128
matches
0"saw that they"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean26.54
std21.28
cv0.802
sampleLengths
04
150
28
362
41
560
618
743
821
96
1062
1122
1238
133
1458
1551
167
1712
1859
1919
204
2159
2231
2313
245
2529
265
2741
2815
292
3015
3162
3221
3341
345
3523
3638
3712
3825
3936
4012
411
4270
4316
4422
4552
4610
4775
4817
4953
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs205
matches
0"was pushing"
1"was glowing"
2"was starting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences128
ratio0.094
matches
0"Rory felt it against her skin like a silk scarf drawn across her face—heavier, sweeter, warmer than any autumn afternoon had a right to be in London."
1"Still blue, still daylight, but the quality of light was different—amber-tinged, like looking through honey."
2"The Shade had materialized from the shadows of an elder oak, their form more solid than she'd ever seen it—still a silhouette of living darkness, but with edges that seemed to sharpen in this place."
3"The Heartstone pulsed again, and this time she felt a directional pull to it—a gentle tug toward the grove's center, where three standing stones formed a crude archway."
4"Even the breeze that stirred her hair smelled wrong—or right, maybe, in the way that Faerie was supposed to smell."
5"They had drawn up beside her, and she saw that they held something—a blade of moonlight and shadow, their hand wrapped around a hilt that seemed to drink the light."
6"The sound hadn't come from the stones themselves—it came from the *air* between them, a tectonic shift that made her teeth ache."
7"The honey-light deepened, turning the grapes translucent, and she heard music—distant, throbbing, a beat that matched her pulse."
8"The gardens around her were immaculate but organic—no straight lines, no careful beds."
9"Their features had resolved—sharp cheekbones, a mouth too wide for a human face, eyes that held no whites, only glowing violet."
10"The deep crimson gem was glowing—not from within, but with a light that seemed drawn *toward* it, a hungry pull."
11"Isolde stepped out from behind it—or through it, Rory couldn't tell."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1158
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"familiar whisper-carried-wind."
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.02849740932642487
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.0069084628670120895
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean11.61
std8.39
cv0.723
sampleLengths
04
127
217
36
48
55
615
727
815
91
1019
1135
126
1312
146
1512
166
1717
188
1915
206
216
2215
2316
2413
2514
264
276
289
292
302
313
3228
3310
343
357
369
3713
3820
399
406
4130
4215
437
4412
4538
4621
473
4816
494
42.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.3203125
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners41
74.07% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"Still blue, still daylight, but"
1"Even the breeze that stirred"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences90
matches
0"She stumbled into a clearing"
1"She felt Nyx before she"
2"Their violet eyes glowed like"
3"they said, their voice that"
4"She didn't know how she"
5"Her mouth watered unbidden."
6"She heard no birds, no"
7"They had drawn up beside"
8"She drew it."
9"She felt *fuller* here, more"
10"Their features had resolved—sharp cheekbones,"
11"She gasped, clawing at her"
12"Her silver hair hung to"
13"She tilted her head, studying"
14"She stepped closer, and her"
15"She met Rory's gaze over"
16"She'd come to find answers."
17"She was starting to think"
ratio0.2
37.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences90
matches
0"The air changed first."
1"Rory felt it against her"
2"The next, the undergrowth simply"
3"She stumbled into a clearing"
4"The sky above was wrong."
5"The trees around the clearing's"
6"She felt Nyx before she"
7"The Shade had materialized from"
8"Their violet eyes glowed like"
9"they said, their voice that"
10"Rory said, and the words"
11"She didn't know how she"
12"The Heartstone Pendant beneath her"
13"Nyx's voice carried no judgment,"
14"Rory said, and stepped forward"
15"The grass underfoot was springy,"
16"Bluebells grew beside roses, which"
17"A patch of clover released"
18"The scent wrapped around her:"
19"Her mouth watered unbidden."
ratio0.844
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Standing stones ringed the space, pale granite veined with something that glittered like crushed silver."
1"She felt Nyx before she saw them, a coolness at her shoulder that had nothing to do with temperature."
2"The Shade had materialized from the shadows of an elder oak, their form more solid than she'd ever seen it—still a silhouette of living darkness, but with edges…"
3"The grass underfoot was springy, dense, and thick with wildflowers that made no botanical sense."
4"Bluebells grew beside roses, which bloomed beside snowdrops, all in the same square foot of earth."
5"Rory's hand went to her pocket, fingers brushing the cold length of the Fae-Forged Blade Isolde had sent her two weeks ago, delivered by a crow that had fixed h…"
6"A path of crushed white stone that curved through grounds that stretched impossibly far, drenched in a warm amber sky."
7"The honey-light deepened, turning the grapes translucent, and she heard music—distant, throbbing, a beat that matched her pulse."
8"Nyx walked at her side, their incorporeal form now fully solid, as if Dymas demanded substance from everything that entered."
9"Their features had resolved—sharp cheekbones, a mouth too wide for a human face, eyes that held no whites, only glowing violet."
10"The deep crimson gem was glowing—not from within, but with a light that seemed drawn *toward* it, a hungry pull."
11"Her silver hair hung to her waist, catching the amber light, and her pale lavender eyes held Rory like she was the only interesting thing in any realm."
46.05% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"they said, their voice that familiar whisper-carried-wind"
1"Rory said, and the words came out certain"
2"She stepped, and her eyes were ancient, and sad, and utterly devoid of pity"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.605
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.093
75.7583%