Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2DQWTBCYCKDC2YY4MDP7P2

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Scotch hadn't changed. Same peaty burn, same slow warmth. Silas set the bottle back on its shelf, fingers tracing the familiar label without needing to look. Muscle memory from years of pouring drinks for men who'd do exactly what Jimmy Marsden was doing now. Staring into his glass like it held answers. "I heard it was the knee," Jimmy said. No greeting. No preamble. The man hadn't changed in that regard, at least. Always starting conversations halfway through, expecting the world to catch up. "Prague." Silas dried a tumbler with a cloth that had seen better days. "Stairwell. Six floors." "Six floors." Jimmy nodded slowly. "Lucky it wasn't seven." "Lucky." The Raven's Nest hummed its usual midweek quiet. Two regulars at the far end nursing pints and silence. The green neon from the sign outside cast fractured patterns through the window, staining Jimmy's grey overcoat in sickly hues. He'd been handsome once. Cruel handsomeness, the kind that made people forgive the sharpness underneath. Now the face sagged, the sharpness grown dull. Eyes that used to calculate now just watched, waiting for something that wouldn't come. "You look well," Jimmy said. "Don't." "Pardon?" "Don't do the pleasantries. You never had the stomach for them." Jimmy laughed, a dry rattle. The tumbler Silas was polishing caught the light. The silver signet ring on his right hand clicked against the glass. "Fair enough." Jimmy lifted his Scotch. "To not doing pleasantries, then." Silas didn't raise his own glass. "What brings you in, James?" "Can't a man visit an old friend?" "You've been in London three weeks. The Radisson Edwardian, if you're still partial to their breakfast buffet. You've visited the National Gallery twice, the British Museum once, and spent four afternoons in a betting shop on Edgware Road. Today you walked past this bar three times before coming in." Silas set the tumbler down. "So I ask again. What brings you in?" Jimmy's hand trembled. Just slightly. A tremor that hadn't been there before. "They were right about you." He took a long swallow. "Still the Spymaster." "Once." "Never once. Always." Jimmy set the glass down and turned on his stool, facing the room properly. The maps on the walls, the black-and-white photographs. "You know, I thought about this place. After. Wondered if you'd kept it. Wondered if you'd turned it into something legitimate. Something soft." "It's a bar." "It's never just a bar with you." A muscle tightened in Silas's jaw. The cloth in his hands stilled. "You vanished, James. Twelve years. No word. No trace." He let the pause stretch. "And now here you are, drinking my Scotch, making observations about my bar." "I retired too. Eventually." "Not by choice, I heard." Jimmy's eyes flicked up, and for a moment, the sharpness returned. Not dull. Hidden. "No," he said quietly. "Not by choice." The regular at the end of the bar stood, leaving coins on the counter. Silas collected them automatically, eyes never leaving Jimmy. When the door swung shut, the silence between them grew heavier. "Maria passed," Jimmy said. "Three years ago." "I know." "Of course you do." He turned back to his glass. "Cancer. Quick. At least there's that." Silas poured himself a drink. The bottle was older than the one on the shelf, taken from a cabinet below the register. He didn't offer it to Jimmy. "She asked about you. Before the end." Jimmy's voice had gone flat, the way men do when they've told the story too many times to feel it anymore. "Wanted to know if I'd ever made things right." "And what did you tell her?" "I told her I didn't know how." Jimmy looked at Silas then, properly looked at him, and Silas saw what he hadn't seen when the man first walked in. The hollow spaces behind the eyes. The weight of a decade spent carrying something too heavy. "I still don't." Silas drank. The Scotch burned going down, and he welcomed it. "Prague was a setup," Jimmy said. "Not the operation. The fallout. The stairwell." "I'm aware." "They told me you were already dead. That I was buying time, drawing them away from the extraction point. Told me you'd never make it out anyway." He spun the glass between his fingers. "I believed them because I wanted to. Because it was easier than going back for you." Silas's expression didn't shift. Years of practice kept it still, kept the old anger banked and buried. But the signet ring dug into his finger as his hand tightened on the glass. "I heard the shots. Six floors up. Echoes in that concrete stairwell, remember? Sounded like hammers." Jimmy shook his head. "And I kept walking. Right out the back. Got in the car. Filed my report." "Exemplary report, I'm told." "Don't." "Don't what? Give credit where it's due?" "Don't handle me." The shatter in Jimmy's voice was sudden, cracks spreading through the flatness. "I've had handlers. I've had debriefings and psych evaluations and three separate exit interviews, Silas. I know what it looks like when someone's managing me." Silas set his glass down. Deliberate. Careful. "Then stop being manageable, James. Say what you came to say." Jimmy stared at him. The green neon flickered outside, a brief stutter of light. "I came to say I'm sorry." The words hung between them, naked and inadequate. "Twelve years of sorry. Twelve years of wondering if the limp was worse than they said. If you'd lost the leg entirely. If you'd lost anything else. Your work. Your sense of purpose. Your trust in the people who should have had your back." "My trust was never the issue." Silas leaned forward, both hands flat on the bar. The signet ring glinted. "You were my handler, James. My backup. You were supposed to be the one watching my six. That's what trust is. Not believing someone won't betray you. Believing they'll choose differently when it counts." "I made the wrong choice." "You made the easy choice." "Yes." "And now you want absolution." Jimmy closed his eyes. When he opened them, the hollows were deeper, as if the conversation had scooped out whatever was left. "No," he said. "I don't want absolution. I want you to know that I've been paying for it. Every day. Every morning I wake up and remember which stair I was on when I heard the first shot. Every night I go to sleep wondering if today was the day I should have finally called, finally come here, finally done what Maria asked." He reached into his overcoat and pulled out an envelope. Thick, worn at the edges. He placed it on the bar between them. "What's that?" "What I should have given you twelve years ago. When I still could." Silas didn't touch it. The envelope sat there, patient as a landmine. "I'm dying," Jimmy said. "Pancreatic. Like Maria, but faster. Months, maybe. It's why I'm here. Not for forgiveness. For this." He tapped the envelope. "Information. Contacts. Everything I've gathered since they cut me loose. Because I've been watching, Silas. The same people who set us up in Prague are still active. Still making the same mistakes. Still sacrificing people for convenience." "And you want me to finish it." "I want someone to finish it." Jimmy stood, the stool scraping against the floor. "But you're the only one who might. You're the only one who'd understand what it's worth." Silas looked at the envelope. Then at Jimmy. The man who'd left him bleeding in a stairwell, who'd walked away while the hammers echoed, who'd spent twelve years rotting from the inside with the knowledge of it. "Where will you go?" "Back to the Radisson. Tomorrow, Edinburgh. After that..." He shrugged. "Wherever the time takes me." He turned toward the door, his overcoat hanging loose on a frame that had lost too much weight. "James." Jimmy stopped. "The envelope." Silas's voice was quiet, measured. A scalpel rather than a hammer. "If I open it, I'm in. You understand that. Whatever rabbit hole you've mapped out, whatever ghosts you've been chasing, they become mine." "I know." "And you'll be dead before I reach the bottom." Jimmy smiled. A ghost of the old cruelty, softened by time and disease. "I'm counting on it," he said. "At least then you won't have to wonder if I walked away again." The door swung open, letting in a draft of Soho's stale night air. Then it closed, and Jimmy Marsden was gone, and Silas stood alone behind the bar with an envelope full of old sins and a Scotch that suddenly tasted like ash. He turned the envelope over. His name was written across the front in Maria's handwriting. The glass shattered before he realized he'd thrown it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Jimmy nodded slowly [slowly]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
2"He turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.325
leniency0.65
rawRatio0.115
effectiveRatio0.075
89.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1460
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.36% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1460
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"fractured"
count1
5
word"calculate"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"echoes"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"sense of"
count1
13
word"echoed"
count1
14
word"measured"
count1
15
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"tracing"
2"familiar"
3"silence"
4"fractured"
5"calculate"
6"stomach"
7"trembled"
8"flicked"
9"weight"
10"echoes"
11"flickered"
12"sense of"
13"echoed"
14"measured"
15"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1460
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount747
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity3.48
worstName"Jimmy"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Jimmy"
discoveredNames
Scotch4
Jimmy26
Marsden2
Raven1
Nest1
Silas18
Soho1
Maria1
persons
0"Scotch"
1"Jimmy"
2"Marsden"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Silas"
6"Maria"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"tasted like ash"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1460
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences148
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean18.72
std18.14
cv0.969
sampleLengths
045
18
232
316
49
51
675
75
81
91
1011
1125
1211
1311
147
1562
1612
1713
181
1948
203
217
2212
2327
244
255
2614
277
2833
297
302
3116
3228
3337
346
3548
3611
3713
382
3950
4032
4135
424
431
447
4540
467
4711
4814
4958
97.88% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"was gone"
1"was written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs139
matches
0"was doing"
1"was polishing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences148
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount749
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.03337783711615487
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.012016021361815754
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean9.86
std9.58
cv0.971
sampleLengths
04
16
217
318
48
58
62
72
89
911
1013
113
125
134
141
158
1610
1720
184
1911
208
2114
225
231
241
2511
265
278
2812
296
305
316
325
337
3454
358
363
372
387
3910
403
411
4217
438
4423
453
467
476
486
4914
64.41% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4189189189189189
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners62
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences77
matches
0"Always starting conversations halfway through,"
1"Then at Jimmy."
2"Then it closed, and Jimmy"
ratio0.039
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences77
matches
0"He'd been handsome once."
1"He took a long swallow"
2"He let the pause stretch"
3"he said quietly"
4"He turned back to his"
5"He didn't offer it to"
6"He spun the glass between"
7"He reached into his overcoat"
8"He placed it on the"
9"He tapped the envelope"
10"He turned toward the door,"
11"He turned the envelope over."
12"His name was written across"
ratio0.169
37.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences77
matches
0"The Scotch hadn't changed."
1"Silas set the bottle back"
2"Muscle memory from years of"
3"The man hadn't changed in"
4"Silas dried a tumbler with"
5"Jimmy nodded slowly"
6"The Raven's Nest hummed its"
7"The green neon from the"
8"He'd been handsome once."
9"Eyes that used to calculate"
10"Jimmy laughed, a dry rattle."
11"The tumbler Silas was polishing"
12"The silver signet ring on"
13"Jimmy lifted his Scotch"
14"Silas didn't raise his own"
15"Silas set the tumbler down"
16"Jimmy's hand trembled."
17"A tremor that hadn't been"
18"He took a long swallow"
19"Jimmy set the glass down"
ratio0.844
64.94% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences77
matches
0"Now the face sagged, the"
ratio0.013
57.14% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Cruel handsomeness, the kind that made people forgive the sharpness underneath."
1"The man who'd left him bleeding in a stairwell, who'd walked away while the hammers echoed, who'd spent twelve years rotting from the inside with the knowledge …"
2"He turned toward the door, his overcoat hanging loose on a frame that had lost too much weight."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Jimmy stood, the stool scraping against the floor"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences80
tagDensity0.1
leniency0.2
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.3458%