Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2E0YG9FVVMHFRDV2V0BYB5

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Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.003022
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DeepSeek

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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The tear hung in the air behind the standing stones of Richmond Park like a heat shimmer over sun-scorched asphalt. Rory clutched the silver chain around her neck. The Heartstone pulsed against her collarbone—steady, warm, insistent. “It knows,” came the wind-soft whisper from the shadow at her side. Nyx had condensed from the twilight, their violet eyes fixed on the distortion. “The pendant sings a very old song.” Isolde’s pale lavender gaze tracked the rift without blinking. She left no imprint on the wildflowers that brushed her bare ankles. “Hunger shapes the door. Feed it, and it will open.” Rory’s fingers brushed the cold moonsilver dagger tucked against her ribs. The blade thrummed like a tuning fork. “Feed it what?” “A truth. A desire. A drop of blood.” The Half-Fae’s smile had no warmth. “The gate is not picky.” Rory pressed her thumb into the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a childhood mark she’d long forgotten to notice. “I want to understand what I am.” The pendant flared crimson, and the tear inhaled. — The ground on the other side was not ground at all. Rory’s boots sank into soft, giving moss that exhaled the scent of crushed cardamom. The sky above boiled a deep amber, streaked with vermillion like the yolk of an egg stirred into honey. No sun. The light bled from everywhere and nowhere, saturating the air with the drowsy glow of late afternoon in high summer—though the heat carried a strange, spiced weight that clung to the skin. Nyx pulled themselves upright, the shadow-body losing its fluid edges for a moment, sharpening into a humanoid silhouette. “This is Old territory. Predates the mortal concept of sin.” “Dymas,” Isolde said. She stood entirely still, her silver hair pooling around her like spilled mercury as she gazed at the vast slope before them. “The first of the indulgent kingdoms. Prince Belphegor’s vineyard. Do not eat anything.” Rory’s stomach clenched in immediate, irrational protest. The air itself teased her palate—roasted stone fruits, dark chocolate, the caramelized edge of a slow-braised shank. She swallowed hard and forced her attention outward. The land unfurled in fat, languid curves. Row upon row of trellised vines marched down a gentle hillside, heavy with grapes the colour of bruised plums. Beyond, orchards of twisted, silver-barked trees sagged under globes of fruit that shone like polished garnet. Beehives shaped like miniature cathedrals leaked a steady golden drip into carved stone basins. Paths of crushed white shell wound between garden beds where herbs ruffled themselves in a breeze that carried the faint sound of distant laughter—many-voiced, syncopated, drunk. “Who’s tending all this?” Rory started forward, the moss springy underfoot. Her pendant had cooled, but it still hummed like a plucked harp string. “Contracted souls.” Nyx’s whisper threaded through her mind more than her ears. “Culinary masters who traded centuries of service for a taste of eternity. They cannot leave the kitchens.” Rory spotted movement below. A figure in a smock the colour of dried blood pruned a vine with shears that sparked faint blue. The worker’s eyes caught the amber light and reflected none of it—flat, hollow, utterly focused. Its movements were precise, almost mechanical, yet tender. Love without passion. She shivered. “They look like people.” “They were,” Isolde murmured. “Are. Bought with contracts no mortal tongue should speak. They hunger now for perfection, not food. That is the true gluttony.” The slope rounded toward a long, low building of creamy stone veined with copper. Arches opened onto a courtyard where fountains did not spray water but cascades of steaming broth that filled the air with aromatic pearls of fat. At long tables, figures dined in silence, their faces painted in expressions of ecstasy that never reached their eyes. They lifted goblets that refilled themselves, forked morsels of meat that never diminished on the plate. “We should move around,” Rory said, her mouth dry. The pendant’s warmth hummed lower now, toward her belly. She felt the pull of the tables like a hook behind her navel. “There’s a gate sealed beyond the kitchens—at least that’s what your vision said, Isolde.” “The Seer does not recall visions. The Seer only witnesses.” Isolde stepped onto the crushed-shell path, and still the pale fragments refused to shift. “But yes. A door that tastes of yearning. Beyond the feasting hall.” Nyx drifted closer, their void-dark form bleeding a chill that cut the spiced heat. “I can slip ahead. No light, no shadow-trap. But the smell here is bred to entangle. Even my senses itch.” “Stay together.” Rory’s voice came out sharper than she intended. The Fae-Forged Blade was already in her hand; she didn’t remember drawing it. The moonsilver glowed faintly, a blue-white edge against the amber fug. “If anyone offers me a canapé, I’m stabbing first and asking questions never.” They followed the shell path into the herb gardens. The plants were nightmare lush. A sage bush grew leaves large as dinner plates, grey-green and fuzzy, releasing a camphor whisper when Rory’s sleeve brushed it. Chive blossoms exploded into sizzling miniature firework displays whenever a bee—if the thumb-sized iridescent things were bees—bumped into them. Peppercorns clustered on vines that writhed slowly, polishing themselves against one another with a sound like tiny ceramic eggs tapping. Nyx paused before a tree bearing fruits shaped like teardrops. The skin was golden, translucent, and inside something luminous pulsed in a slow, hypnotic rhythm. “A heartapple. Mortal monarchs waged wars to taste these. One bite cures sorrow for a lifetime.” “And the cost?” Rory kept walking. “The sorrow does not vanish. It is merely deferred—to someone you love.” Her throat tightened. The pendant beat in counterpoint to the fruit’s inner glow. She could feel the warmth of the tree reaching for her, a polite, seductive pressure at the edge of her thoughts. She tightened her grip on the blade, and the cold steel shoved the intrusion back like a slammed door. The herb garden opened onto a wide terrace paved with obsidian tiles that reflected the amber sky so perfectly it seemed the group walked on clouds. At the terrace’s centre, a fountain taller than any they’d seen before stood silent: a sculpture of a man and woman tangled in a dance, mouths open as if to drink the sky. From their stone throats came no broth—only a fine, glittering mist that tasted of salt and damp stone when Rory breathed too close. “The Lamentation Fountain,” Isolde said. Her riddler’s cadence softened to something almost sad. “It weeps for every meal left uneaten in the mortal world. Hunger denied.” Rory watched the mist bead on Isolde’s silver hair, on Nyx’s coalesced form, on her own knuckles. The droplets did not evaporate. They clung, warm and weightless, feeding a deep, aching nostalgia for childhood kitchens, for her mother’s hands kneading dough, for the whistle of a kettle in a Cardiff flat that no longer existed. She felt the crescent scar on her wrist itch. Nyx’s whisper sharpened. “Something has noticed us.” At the far edge of the terrace, a pair of doors swung inward on silent hinges. Not a feast hall—this was a passage walled in honeycomb tile, each hexagonal cell containing a preserved ingredient suspended in amber fluid. Truffles veined with deep violet. Tiny birds whose feathers still smoldered. Salt crystals grown into perfect cubes the size of fists. The corridor breathed out a draft of cold, smoky air, and with it came the first real sound since they’d entered Dymas that wasn’t laughter or bubbling broth: the steady, wet slap of a cleaver on meat. “Kitchens,” Rory breathed. “The gate’s beyond them.” Isolde’s lavender eyes caught the corridor’s deeper darkness. “Every dish here is a wager. Taste nothing, and we pass as shadows. Let one morsel cross your lips, and Dymas will claim its due.” Nyx billowed forward, their form stretching thin to test the threshold. The honeycomb light painted their shadow-flesh in streaks of amber and umber. “Then let’s be shadows. Quickly and quiet.” Rory stepped after them, the obsidian tiles throwing her reflection back in duplicate beneath her feet—a hundred Rorys marching into the amber throat of Gluttony’s heart, all of them holding the same cold, glowing blade, all of them hungry in ways they could not name.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"utterly"
2"slowly"
3"perfectly"
4"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1392
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count4
2
word"desire"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"mechanical"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"yearning"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"dance"
count1
12
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"whisper"
2"desire"
3"warmth"
4"weight"
5"stomach"
6"mechanical"
7"silence"
8"yearning"
9"chill"
10"could feel"
11"dance"
12"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences83
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences104
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1379
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.76% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount1099
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.36
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone1
Nyx8
Half-Fae1
Rory15
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde7
Cardiff1
Dymas1
Rorys1
Gluttony1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Half-Fae"
2"Rory"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Rorys"
6"Gluttony"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.818
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.725
wordCount1379
matches
0"not spray water but cascades of steaming broth"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean37.27
std23.94
cv0.642
sampleLengths
036
132
231
321
419
528
68
71
878
928
1038
1132
1282
1324
1429
1549
166
1725
1874
1945
2036
2134
2247
2374
2441
256
2612
2753
2882
2926
3064
317
3296
337
3433
3530
3645
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs180
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences104
ratio0.096
matches
0"The Heartstone pulsed against her collarbone—steady, warm, insistent."
1"The light bled from everywhere and nowhere, saturating the air with the drowsy glow of late afternoon in high summer—though the heat carried a strange, spiced weight that clung to the skin."
2"The air itself teased her palate—roasted stone fruits, dark chocolate, the caramelized edge of a slow-braised shank."
3"Paths of crushed white shell wound between garden beds where herbs ruffled themselves in a breeze that carried the faint sound of distant laughter—many-voiced, syncopated, drunk."
4"The worker’s eyes caught the amber light and reflected none of it—flat, hollow, utterly focused."
5"The Fae-Forged Blade was already in her hand; she didn’t remember drawing it."
6"Chive blossoms exploded into sizzling miniature firework displays whenever a bee—if the thumb-sized iridescent things were bees—bumped into them."
7"From their stone throats came no broth—only a fine, glittering mist that tasted of salt and damp stone when Rory breathed too close."
8"Not a feast hall—this was a passage walled in honeycomb tile, each hexagonal cell containing a preserved ingredient suspended in amber fluid."
9"Rory stepped after them, the obsidian tiles throwing her reflection back in duplicate beneath her feet—a hundred Rorys marching into the amber throat of Gluttony’s heart, all of them holding the same cold, glowing blade, all of them hungry in ways they could not name."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1124
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"over sun-scorched asphalt."
1"twisted, silver-barked trees"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.02224199288256228
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006227758007117438
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences104
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences104
mean13.25
std8.04
cv0.607
sampleLengths
020
18
28
312
413
57
69
712
810
911
107
113
1214
135
1421
157
168
1711
1814
1919
202
2132
2218
2310
243
2522
2613
277
2817
298
307
3119
3216
3314
3426
3511
3613
3712
3817
394
4019
4115
428
433
442
454
464
4721
4814
4925
66.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4230769230769231
totalSentences104
uniqueOpeners44
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences77
matches
0"She left no imprint on"
1"She stood entirely still, her"
2"She swallowed hard and forced"
3"Her pendant had cooled, but"
4"Its movements were precise, almost"
5"They lifted goblets that refilled"
6"She felt the pull of"
7"They followed the shell path"
8"Her throat tightened."
9"She could feel the warmth"
10"She tightened her grip on"
11"Her riddler’s cadence softened to"
12"They clung, warm and weightless,"
13"She felt the crescent scar"
ratio0.182
18.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences77
matches
0"The tear hung in the"
1"Rory clutched the silver chain"
2"The Heartstone pulsed against her"
3"Nyx had condensed from the"
4"Isolde’s pale lavender gaze tracked"
5"She left no imprint on"
6"Rory’s fingers brushed the cold"
7"The blade thrummed like a"
8"The Half-Fae’s smile had no"
9"Rory pressed her thumb into"
10"The pendant flared crimson, and"
11"The ground on the other"
12"Rory’s boots sank into soft,"
13"The sky above boiled a"
14"The light bled from everywhere"
15"Nyx pulled themselves upright, the"
16"She stood entirely still, her"
17"Rory’s stomach clenched in immediate,"
18"The air itself teased her"
19"She swallowed hard and forced"
ratio0.883
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
21.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Rory’s boots sank into soft, giving moss that exhaled the scent of crushed cardamom."
1"The light bled from everywhere and nowhere, saturating the air with the drowsy glow of late afternoon in high summer—though the heat carried a strange, spiced w…"
2"Beyond, orchards of twisted, silver-barked trees sagged under globes of fruit that shone like polished garnet."
3"Paths of crushed white shell wound between garden beds where herbs ruffled themselves in a breeze that carried the faint sound of distant laughter—many-voiced, …"
4"Arches opened onto a courtyard where fountains did not spray water but cascades of steaming broth that filled the air with aromatic pearls of fat."
5"At the terrace’s centre, a fountain taller than any they’d seen before stood silent: a sculpture of a man and woman tangled in a dance, mouths open as if to dri…"
6"From their stone throats came no broth—only a fine, glittering mist that tasted of salt and damp stone when Rory breathed too close."
7"The corridor breathed out a draft of cold, smoky air, and with it came the first real sound since they’d entered Dymas that wasn’t laughter or bubbling broth: t…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory said, her mouth dry"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.152
leniency0.303
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.121
78.6291%