Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2E27TK0ETCR8EM74541HFB

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory's fingers before she registered the face. Silas caught it with a flat palm, no hurry, the sound of crystal on wood swallowed by the bar's familiar murmur. "Steady." She didn't answer. The woman at the door hadn't spotted her yet, scanning the dim room with the squint of someone who'd spent too many years under office lighting. Her coat was cashmere, deep charcoal, cut sharp at the shoulders. Hair pinned back, no strand out of place. Gold studs at her ears that probably cost more than Rory's monthly rent on the flat upstairs. Claudia Byrne. Three years collapsed into the space of a breath. Same bones beneath the polish, same tilt to her chin, but the softness that had once rounded her cheeks had been carved away. Starved or sculpted, Rory couldn't tell. "The solicitor life paying well," Silas murmured, drying the glass. "Old friend." "Is that what we're calling them tonight?" Before Rory could respond, Claudia's gaze swept the bar and locked. The smile that followed didn't reach her eyes. She navigated the scattered tables with the ease of someone who'd learned to command rooms, heels clicking a rhythm that felt like a countdown. "Rory Carter." Claudia slid onto the stool beside her, handbag placed precisely on the counter. "God. Look at you." "I'd say the same." Rory's voice came out steadier than she felt. "But you've made that redundant." Claudia laughed, a polished sound. "Brutal as ever." She signaled Silas with a flick of two fingers. "Gin and tonic. Whatever's premium." Silas's eyebrow lifted a fraction. He poured without comment, setting the drink on a coaster before retreating to the till. The silence between them thickened. Claudia sipped, studying the glass. "You vanished. No calls. No texts. Your father cornered me at the Swansea conference last year. I had to pretend I knew you were alive." "I left Cardiff in a hurry." "So I gathered." Rory watched her take another sip. The rings on Claudia's fingers were new, a wedding band among them. Platinum, simple. Rory didn't ask. "How did you find me?" "A paralegal moonlights as a food blogger. Wrote a glowing review of Golden Empress. Mentioned the delivery girl with the bright blue eyes." Claudia smiled again, thin. "Small world." "Too small." "Don't be like that." Claudia turned on her stool, facing Rory fully. The move was deliberate, a courtroom pivot. "I've thought about you. Worried. You were my best friend, and then you were just... gone. Evan wouldn't talk about it. Wouldn't say a word." Rory's jaw tightened. "Evan's not the talking type." "No." Claudia's gaze dropped to her glass. "He never was." The weight of those three words hung between them, heavy with everything Claudia hadn't said three years ago. The dinners where Rory had worn long sleeves in August. The excuses. The way Claudia's eyes had flickered to the bruise on Rory's wrist and then away, choosing silence, choosing comfort. "Your mother sends cards," Claudia said. "To my parents' address. Every Christmas. She doesn't know where you are either." "That's intentional." "She's not well. The last card said something about treatment." Rory's fingers curled around her own glass, the condensation cold against her palm. She'd known. She'd read every card, tucked them into a shoebox under her bed, answered none. The guilt was a familiar ache, dulled by time but never absent. "Tell me you're happy," Claudia said, quieter now. "Tell me running away to London was worth it." "Would it matter if I wasn't?" "It would matter to me." A laugh escaped Rory, sharp and humourless. "Would it? You sat across from me at Costa for two years while I made excuses about slipping in the shower. You never asked." Claudia flinched. The mask cracked, just for a moment, revealing something raw beneath. "I was a coward." "You were comfortable." "Both." Claudia's voice broke on the word. She set her glass down with more force than necessary, the gin sloshing. "I think about it all the time. What I didn't do. What I should've done. I looked up the statistics last month, did you know that, on average, it takes-" "Don't." "I'm sorry." The apology landed like a stone in still water. Rory let it sink, felt the ripples, said nothing. Silas materialised beside them, replacing Claudia's drink with a fresh one. "On the house," he said, his gaze lingering on Rory a beat too long. A question. She gave the slightest shake of her head. "The owner's protective," Claudia observed after he'd gone. "He's a friend." "You've got a talent for finding those. Better friends than I was." "Claudia." "I mean it." She turned her new glass in her hands, the gesture uncharacteristically nervous. "I was hoping... I don't know what I was hoping. That you'd be doing badly, maybe. That I'd been right to stay out of it, that it all sorted itself out. But you're thinner. Quieter. There's something in your eyes that wasn't there before, and I hate that I know what it is." The bar hummed around them, conversations overlapping, ice clinking, the low thrum of the bass from the speaker above the door. Rory was acutely aware of the small crescent scar on her wrist, hidden beneath her sleeve, the one she'd told people was a childhood accident. "Why are you really here?" she asked. Claudia's expression shifted, a door closing. "I'm in London for the weekend. A firm retreat. I saw the review and thought... why not." "Try again." A long pause. Then Claudia reached into her handbag and withdrew an envelope, cream-coloured, expensive stock. She placed it between them on the bar. "Your father hired a private investigator last month. He knows you're in London. He's been calling my office, asking if I've heard anything." She pushed the envelope toward Rory. "That's the name of the firm. The investigator. I thought you should know before he finds you himself." Rory didn't touch the envelope. "And why would you warn me?" "Because I owe you." Claudia stood, gathering her bag. "And because Evan helped him. Gave him the PI's number. Told your father he just wants closure, that he's worried about you." The air in the bar felt suddenly thin. "He's still in Cardiff," Claudia said, her voice dropping. "Still the same. Still talks about you like you're coming back any day now. And your father believes him." She left the envelope on the counter. At the door, she paused, looking back. "For what it's worth, Rory... I did ask. Once. He said you were clumsy. That you'd always been clumsy. And I wanted to believe it so badly that I did." Then she was gone, the door swinging shut, the green neon from the sign outside throwing ghostly light across the empty stool. Silas appeared beside Rory, his hand closing over the envelope before she could reach for it. "You're not going to like what's in there." "I know." "Do you want me to open it?" She looked at him, at the quiet authority in his face, the old intelligence burning behind his eyes. "I want a head start." "Then you'll have one." He pocketed the envelope. "We'll handle it. Together." Outside, a car engine turned over. Tyres on wet asphalt. Somewhere, a man who'd once put his hands around her throat was still smiling, still charming, still telling everyone she was clumsy. And now he had a private investigator.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Claudia smiled again [again]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.295
leniency0.59
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.033
87.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1241
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1241
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"crystal"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"navigated"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"familiar"
2"scanning"
3"navigated"
4"eyebrow"
5"silence"
6"weight"
7"flickered"
8"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences77
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1241
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount723
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity2.9
worstName"Claudia"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Claudia"
discoveredNames
Rory19
Byrne1
Claudia21
Silas6
August1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Byrne"
2"Claudia"
3"Silas"
places
0"August"
globalScore0.048
windowScore0
53.85% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a countdown"
1"appeared beside Rory, his hand closing over the envelope before she could reach for it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1241
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean19.39
std16.46
cv0.849
sampleLengths
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265
32
438
510
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1017
1122
1220
1335
146
153
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175
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192
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2419
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296
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333
3450
351
362
3718
3835
398
403
4112
421
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4446
457
4623
472
4824
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96.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences77
matches
0"been carved"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs120
matches
0"was still smiling"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences120
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount724
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.03729281767955801
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011049723756906077
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean10.34
std8.3
cv0.802
sampleLengths
011
121
21
33
426
511
68
717
82
99
1023
116
1210
132
147
1511
168
1724
1815
194
2012
215
225
2312
245
255
2615
275
285
2925
306
313
326
3312
342
353
365
3727
382
392
4012
417
4225
433
445
457
463
4718
4810
492
67.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.43333333333333335
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners52
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"Then Claudia reached into her"
1"Then she was gone, the"
2"Somewhere, a man who'd once"
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences69
matches
0"She didn't answer."
1"Her coat was cashmere, deep"
2"She navigated the scattered tables"
3"She signaled Silas with a"
4"He poured without comment, setting"
5"She'd read every card, tucked"
6"She set her glass down"
7"he said, his gaze lingering"
8"She gave the slightest shake"
9"She turned her new glass"
10"She placed it between them"
11"She pushed the envelope toward"
12"She left the envelope on"
13"She looked at him, at"
14"He pocketed the envelope"
ratio0.217
39.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences69
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"Silas caught it with a"
2"She didn't answer."
3"The woman at the door"
4"Her coat was cashmere, deep"
5"Hair pinned back, no strand"
6"Silas murmured, drying the glass"
7"The smile that followed didn't"
8"She navigated the scattered tables"
9"Claudia slid onto the stool"
10"Rory's voice came out steadier"
11"Claudia laughed, a polished sound."
12"She signaled Silas with a"
13"Silas's eyebrow lifted a fraction."
14"He poured without comment, setting"
15"The silence between them thickened."
16"Claudia sipped, studying the glass."
17"Rory watched her take another"
18"The rings on Claudia's fingers"
19"Rory didn't ask."
ratio0.841
72.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"Before Rory could respond, Claudia's"
ratio0.014
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The woman at the door hadn't spotted her yet, scanning the dim room with the squint of someone who'd spent too many years under office lighting."
1"She navigated the scattered tables with the ease of someone who'd learned to command rooms, heels clicking a rhythm that felt like a countdown."
2"Somewhere, a man who'd once put his hands around her throat was still smiling, still charming, still telling everyone she was clumsy."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Claudia smiled again, thin"
1"he said, his gaze lingering on Rory a beat too long"
2"She turned, the gesture uncharacteristically nervous"
3"Claudia said, her voice dropping"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Silas murmured (murmur)"
1"Claudia observed (observe)"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.115
leniency0.23
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.066
84.9105%