Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2E2AND4FA5A56YM44BFBC5

Run Details

Duration:
2m 38s
Cost:
$0.004779
Provider:
DeepSeek

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air between the three ancient oaks shivered like heat rising off summer stone. Rory felt the pulse first, a steady warmth blooming against her sternum where the heartstone pendant lay hidden beneath her jacket. She pressed her palm over it, the tiny crimson gem answering with a low, rhythmic throb that matched the quickening of her own heart. Somewhere beyond the interlocked branches, Richmond Park lay wrapped in the grey hush of a December afternoon, but here, at the boundary, the light bent wrong. Isolde halted with the silver spill of her hair brushing the backs of her knees. Her bare feet left no impression in the frost-stiffened grass. She lifted one slender hand and traced a shape against the air—a spiral that ended in a flick of her wrist, as if she were turning a key. The standing oaks groaned, and the space between them puckered, then pulled apart with the soft, wet sigh of a wound opening. “The door has opened,” Isolde said. Her voice had the unsettling clarity of a flute heard through fog. “But the path forward will ask a price.” Rory swallowed. The rational part of her mind—the part that had spent years cramming legal precedent and tort law into her skull—insisted that she was staring at nothing more than three old trees. But the pendant seared against her skin now, and the air that pushed through the gap tasted of honey and ozone and something older than either. Behind her, Nyx shifted. The Shade’s form was a tall smear of living shadow, their edges flickering like a candle flame in a draft. Violet eyes glinted, pupils shifting like ink dropped in water. “I do not like this threshold,” they whispered, and their voice came from everywhere at once, a murmur carried on a wind that didn’t exist. “It feels like a mouth waiting to close.” Rory glanced back. Nyx had saved her more than once by slipping between one patch of darkness and another, but here, in the flat afternoon light, their solidity seemed strained. “We don’t have to go through,” she said. “But you will,” Isolde said. It wasn’t a question. Her pale lavender eyes settled on Rory with the unhurried weight of centuries. “You did not walk across half of London and find a half-Fae in her exile to turn back at the first shiver of wonder. Come.” The half-Fae turned and stepped into the wavering gap. One moment she was there, the next the world swallowed her whole—no flash, no sound, just an absence where a body had been. Rory set her jaw, tightened her fingers around the strap of her bag, and followed. The passage felt like falling sideways through a curtain of cold silk. For one heartbeat her ears popped, and then her feet landed on ground that gave like a living sponge. The light shifted from grey winter gloom to a golden-green luminescence that seemed to well up from the earth itself. Rory blinked, her vision swimming. She stood in a meadow that could not exist. Moss spread underfoot in rippling waves of emerald and teal, so thick and springy that each step released a puff of fragrance—crushed mint, sun-warmed thyme, and a thread of something floral and nameless. Wildflowers nodded in the strange, directionless light, their petals foxglove-pink, cobalt, and a deep burnt orange that seemed to smoulder at the edges. They bloomed in layered profusion, defying season and sense. Overhead, the sky was a soft, perpetual lavender, empty of sun yet bright as a pearl held up to flame. Nyx materialised beside her with a sound like a gasp torn from silk. Their form wavered, shadows peeling away from their silhouette in streamers that writhed before snapping back into place. “This place rejects me,” they said, and the whisper held an edge of pain. “The shadows here do not belong to my kind. They… resent.” Rory saw it then. Where Nyx stood, the moss darkened, but not in a natural way—the blackness coagulated, then recoiled as if the Shade were an irritating foreign body. A patch of wildflowers near their feet curled away, petals folding into tight, defensive buds. Nyx lifted one arm, fingers tipped in solid shadow, and a nearby frond of fern shivered and edged backward along the ground like a retreating insect. “The Grove remembers that you tread between realms,” Isolde said without turning. “It does not trust what it cannot claim. Walk, and it will learn to tolerate you. Stop, and it might try to push you out.” Rory touched Nyx’s forearm—cool and faintly trembling under her fingertips. “Stay close to me.” The Shade inclined their head, the violet glow of their eyes pulsing once. They moved deeper. The meadow gave way to a slope where trees grew in clusters, their bark silver and smooth as polished bone. Leaves like hammered tin chimed gently when a breeze stirred, though Rory felt no wind on her cheeks. At the base of one such tree, a stream looped around a bend and flowed upward over a tumble of stones, its water thick and mercury-bright. Rory crouched, mesmerised, and watched a single fallen petal ride the current skyward, spinning lazily. “Don’t touch it,” Isolde said. The words were remote, almost disinterested. “The waters of the Grove are not for quenching mortal thirst. They remember what was and what will be, and they burn the tongue with truth.” Rory straightened, her hand hanging in midair. The pendant hummed constantly now, a low thrum that made her collarbone itch. “What is this place? Really.” Isolde paused at the crest of the slope. Her silver hair hung motionless, untouched by the chiming breeze. “A wound between Earth and the Fae realm. A scab that never quite healed. The Veil grows thin here, especially near the solstice. This clearing exists in the space between breaths—neither wholly one thing nor the other. Time does not keep its shape. The flora blooms because here, it is always midsummer and always the moment before the first frost. It is beautiful, and it is dangerous, because beauty in the Fae-touched world is never a gift freely given.” Nyx moved to a patch of deeper shade beneath a willow whose fronds were not green but threads of molten gold. They attempted to sink into the darkness—a habit, a comfort—and the shadow beneath the tree hissed and recoiled, shoving them back into full solidity so violently that they stumbled. A sound escaped them, something between a curse and a growl. “I told you. This place has chosen me for a foreign body.” A flicker of something that might have been sympathy passed through Isolde’s ancient eyes. “The shadow of a shade is not welcomed where Fae light rules. Stand in the light for a little while, Nightwhisper. You may find it does not burn as you fear.” They walked on in silence that was not silent. The air carried a low, constant music—a thrumming as if the earth itself were humming a lullaby just below Rory’s range of hearing. Every few steps, she caught a snatch of distant flute, a ripple of harp strings that stopped the moment she tried to focus. Tiny winged shapes darted among the flower heads, no bigger than dragonflies, their bodies translucent. At one point a creature like a miniature fox made of gossamer and moonlight peered at her from behind a mushroom cap the size of a dinner plate, then vanished with a pop. The slope levelled into a small clearing ringed by mushrooms that glowed with a soft, bioluminescent blue. In the centre, a pool lay as still and dark as polished obsidian. It reflected the lavender sky perfectly, yet no image of the surrounding trees marred its surface, as if it were a hole cut out of the world rather than a body of water. Isolde stopped at the edge. “Here,” she said. “The Grove keeps its dreams. Look, child, and you may see what the Veil whispers. But know that a glimpse is not a promise. The road you walk afterward is still your own.” Rory stepped to the rim, her heart pounding. The heartstone pendant flared with sudden, urgent heat, and she felt the Fae-forged blade strapped against her thigh turn icy cold, as if winter itself were seeping through the sheath. Nyx hung back, their form a tense, quivering silhouette at the clearing’s edge; the blue mushroom light painted their edges a sickly violet. She knelt. The pool’s surface did not ripple. It accepted her reflection for the span of a breath, then swallowed it whole. Images bloomed in the black: a crown of black iron wreathed in cold flame, a doorway made of fused bones opening onto an amber sky, a glimpse of Nyx—but changed, their form haloed in a corona of violet light, their face, for one terrible moment, almost human and screaming. Then a field of stars, and Isolde’s voice, clear as a bell, saying, *“The glutton’s price is paid in memory. The shadow’s path forks at the winter gate. Choose, and the choice will unmake you.”* Rory gasped and rocked back onto her heels. Her breath came short and sharp. The images faded, and the pool was again nothing but a dark mirror. She looked up at Isolde. “What does that mean?” Isolde’s face was expressionless. “It means what it says, and it says what it means. That is the curse of the half-blood seer—I cannot lie, so I speak in echoes. You will understand when understanding is necessary.” Nyx drifted closer, avoiding the mushrooms’ glow. “What did you see?” “Fire. A crown. You.” She swallowed. “A door of bones. Something about a winter gate.” The Shade’s violet eyes narrowed. “The winter solstice is nearly upon us. The Veil will be at its weakest. If there is a door in Hel that opens then…” “That is a worry for another hour,” Isolde interrupted. She turned away, her bare feet making no imprint on the luminous moss. “The Grove has shown you its dream. Now you must give something in return, or it will not let you leave. It is a simple law.” Rory pushed herself upright, brushing damp, fragrant earth from her knees. “What kind of something?” “Something true. A memory will do—new and bright, something you have never spoken aloud.” The request settled like a cold stone in her gut. Nyx said nothing, but their silence was a pressure against her shoulder blades. Rory closed her eyes, sifting through the clutter of her mind. The memory that rose, unbidden, was not of Evan’s fists or her father’s disappointed lectures, but the last morning she’d spent with her mother before leaving for London. The way her mother had pressed a packet of Welsh cakes into her hands, her eyes too full to speak, the scarf she’d knitted in Rory’s favourite blue wrapped around her neck. *“You’ll come back, cariad. You’ll come back and it’ll all be different.”* She spoke the memory aloud, haltingly, the words tasting of dust and longing. As she spoke, the air thickened; the moss at her feet drank in the sound, and the pool rippled once, a slow, concentric wave that travelled inward instead of out. When she finished, a path opened through the circling mushrooms—a trail of silver-veined pebbles leading back the way they had come. Isolde smiled, and it was the saddest expression Rory had ever seen on a face so beautiful. “The Grove accepts. Walk, now. Do not stray from the stones.” The return was faster, yet it felt longer. The light never changed, the distant music never faltered, but the trees seemed to lean in closer, their chiming leaves a language just beyond Rory’s hearing. Nyx walked at her side, their form growing steadier with each step away from the pool. When they finally passed through the wavering gap between the oaks, the grey December twilight hit Rory like a physical blow. Richmond Park smelled of cold mud and traffic fumes, and the sun had slipped below the horizon, leaving the sky an exhausted smear of orange and indigo. She checked her watch. Hours had passed. They had been inside, by her reckoning, half an hour at most. Her breath plumed in the freezing air, and she turned to find Isolde watching from the other side of the trees. The half-Fae lifted one hand in a gesture that could have been farewell or warning. Then she was gone, and the three oaks were just three old oaks again, their bark gnarled and ordinary. Nyx exhaled, a sound like wind dying in a hollow. “I have walked the space between shadows for centuries, and I have never felt so unwelcome as in that place.” Rory pulled her jacket tighter, the pendant now cool and still against her chest. “The Grove gave us something, though. A warning. A riddle.” She met Nyx’s glowing gaze. “Whatever’s coming, it involves Hel and a door. And you.” The Shade said nothing for a long moment. Then they turned their head toward the darkening park. “Then we should be ready. The solstice is close, and I do not trust riddles that name me.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.351
leniency0.703
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2211
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"lazily"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"lazily"
2"really"
3"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2211
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"wavering"
count2
7
word"silk"
count2
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"wavered"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"silence"
count2
13
word"pounding"
count1
14
word"echoes"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"warmth"
2"rhythmic"
3"throb"
4"traced"
5"weight"
6"wavering"
7"silk"
8"gloom"
9"wavered"
10"whisper"
11"flicker"
12"silence"
13"pounding"
14"echoes"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences114
matches(empty)
80.20% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences114
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen81
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords34
totalWords2196
ratio0.015
matches
0"“The glutton’s price is paid in memory. The shadow’s path forks at the winter gate. Choose, and the choice will unmake you.”"
1"“You’ll come back, cariad. You’ll come back and it’ll all be different.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount1660
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
December2
Nyx14
Shade5
Rory21
Isolde14
Fae-forged1
Evan1
London1
Welsh1
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Shade"
2"Rory"
3"Isolde"
4"Evan"
5"Welsh"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.867
windowScore0.833
38.89% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"seemed strained"
1"felt like falling sideways through a cu"
2"luminescence that seemed to well up from the earth itself"
3"something between a curse and a growl"
63.39% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.366
wordCount2196
matches
0"neither wholly one thing nor"
1"not green but threads of molten gold"
2"not of Evan’s fists or her father’s disappointed lectures, but the last morning she’d spent with her mother before leaving"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"insisted that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean53.56
std27.03
cv0.505
sampleLengths
085
175
226
359
467
538
647
747
856
994
1056
1170
1237
1327
1482
1537
1625
1797
1873
1945
20103
2163
2241
2361
24106
2536
2637
2711
2815
2929
3048
3115
3214
33106
3464
3528
3698
3774
3830
3939
4035
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs272
matches
0"were turning"
1"was staring"
2"were humming"
3"were seeping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences138
ratio0.087
matches
0"She lifted one slender hand and traced a shape against the air—a spiral that ended in a flick of her wrist, as if she were turning a key."
1"The rational part of her mind—the part that had spent years cramming legal precedent and tort law into her skull—insisted that she was staring at nothing more than three old trees."
2"One moment she was there, the next the world swallowed her whole—no flash, no sound, just an absence where a body had been."
3"Moss spread underfoot in rippling waves of emerald and teal, so thick and springy that each step released a puff of fragrance—crushed mint, sun-warmed thyme, and a thread of something floral and nameless."
4"Where Nyx stood, the moss darkened, but not in a natural way—the blackness coagulated, then recoiled as if the Shade were an irritating foreign body."
5"Rory touched Nyx’s forearm—cool and faintly trembling under her fingertips."
6"They attempted to sink into the darkness—a habit, a comfort—and the shadow beneath the tree hissed and recoiled, shoving them back into full solidity so violently that they stumbled."
7"The air carried a low, constant music—a thrumming as if the earth itself were humming a lullaby just below Rory’s range of hearing."
8"Nyx hung back, their form a tense, quivering silhouette at the clearing’s edge; the blue mushroom light painted their edges a sickly violet."
9"Images bloomed in the black: a crown of black iron wreathed in cold flame, a doorway made of fused bones opening onto an amber sky, a glimpse of Nyx—but changed, their form haloed in a corona of violet light, their face, for one terrible moment, almost human and screaming."
10"As she spoke, the air thickened; the moss at her feet drank in the sound, and the pool rippled once, a slow, concentric wave that travelled inward instead of out."
11"When she finished, a path opened through the circling mushrooms—a trail of silver-veined pebbles leading back the way they had come."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1398
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.0357653791130186
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.005722460658082976
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean15.91
std10.59
cv0.666
sampleLengths
014
121
224
326
415
510
628
722
86
912
108
112
1231
1326
144
1520
1610
1725
188
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2027
218
225
234
2413
2525
269
2723
2815
2912
3019
3120
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3433
3523
369
3720
3813
3918
4014
4111
424
4325
4415
4526
4612
4725
4810
4917
46.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3115942028985507
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences105
matches
0"Somewhere beyond the interlocked branches,"
1"Then a field of stars,"
2"Then she was gone, and"
3"Then they turned their head"
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences105
matches
0"She pressed her palm over"
1"Her bare feet left no"
2"She lifted one slender hand"
3"Her voice had the unsettling"
4"they whispered, and their voice"
5"It wasn’t a question."
6"Her pale lavender eyes settled"
7"She stood in a meadow"
8"They bloomed in layered profusion,"
9"Their form wavered, shadows peeling"
10"they said, and the whisper"
11"They moved deeper."
12"Her silver hair hung motionless,"
13"They attempted to sink into"
14"They walked on in silence"
15"It reflected the lavender sky"
16"It accepted her reflection for"
17"Her breath came short and"
18"She looked up at Isolde."
19"She turned away, her bare"
ratio0.238
40.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences105
matches
0"The air between the three"
1"Rory felt the pulse first,"
2"She pressed her palm over"
3"Isolde halted with the silver"
4"Her bare feet left no"
5"She lifted one slender hand"
6"The standing oaks groaned, and"
7"Her voice had the unsettling"
8"The rational part of her"
9"The Shade’s form was a"
10"Violet eyes glinted, pupils shifting"
11"they whispered, and their voice"
12"Rory glanced back."
13"Nyx had saved her more"
14"It wasn’t a question."
15"Her pale lavender eyes settled"
16"The half-Fae turned and stepped"
17"Rory set her jaw, tightened"
18"The passage felt like falling"
19"The light shifted from grey"
ratio0.838
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
ratio0
54.79% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"She pressed her palm over it, the tiny crimson gem answering with a low, rhythmic throb that matched the quickening of her own heart."
1"The rational part of her mind—the part that had spent years cramming legal precedent and tort law into her skull—insisted that she was staring at nothing more t…"
2"The light shifted from grey winter gloom to a golden-green luminescence that seemed to well up from the earth itself."
3"Where Nyx stood, the moss darkened, but not in a natural way—the blackness coagulated, then recoiled as if the Shade were an irritating foreign body."
4"The air carried a low, constant music—a thrumming as if the earth itself were humming a lullaby just below Rory’s range of hearing."
5"The slope levelled into a small clearing ringed by mushrooms that glowed with a soft, bioluminescent blue."
6"It reflected the lavender sky perfectly, yet no image of the surrounding trees marred its surface, as if it were a hole cut out of the world rather than a body …"
7"The heartstone pendant flared with sudden, urgent heat, and she felt the Fae-forged blade strapped against her thigh turn icy cold, as if winter itself were see…"
8"As she spoke, the air thickened; the moss at her feet drank in the sound, and the pool rippled once, a slow, concentric wave that travelled inward instead of ou…"
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"they said, and the whisper held an edge of pain"
68.92% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"a bell saying (a bell saying)"
2"Isolde interrupted (interrupt)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.27
leniency0.541
rawRatio0.3
effectiveRatio0.162
80.4708%