Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2E3HRZHYDM2DPK3H1BYJ1X

Run Details

Duration:
3m 23s
Cost:
$0.008834
Provider:
DeepSeek

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon from the sign outside cast shifting shadows across the scuffed floorboards. Aurora pressed the door open with her shoulder, the hinge groaning like a long-closed coffin. She paused inside the threshold, letting her eyes adjust. The Raven’s Nest swallowed light. Old maps peeled from the walls in curling corners, their edges browned like tea-stained pages. Black-and-white photographs of dead men and forgotten streets hung in frames that needed dusting. The air held the scent of spilled whiskey and wood polish, a smell that tried to be respectable and failed. Behind the bar, a man rolled a glass between his palms. His back was to her. Grey-streaked auburn hair. Broad shoulders, slightly stooped. When he turned, the light caught the signet ring on his right hand. His eyes—hazel, those she remembered; even in the dim, they held that same stillness she had once trusted. Aurora’s feet rooted to the floor. Of all the bars in London. Colva, that’s what he used to call her when she was a teenager loitering around his back porch in Cardiff, stealing his books and asking impertinent questions. But that name belonged to a girl who didn’t exist anymore. Silas didn’t notice her at first. He set the glass down and wiped his hands on a towel. When he finally lifted his chin and caught her in his periphery, the glass slipped his grip and cracked against the counter. The sound was tiny, a single note of breakage in the empty room. “Rory.” Not a question, but a breath he’d held for a decade. She didn’t correct him. The name still fit, even if the skin it draped felt tighter these days. She stepped forward, the heels of her worn boots clicking an unsteady rhythm. “Silas. I didn’t think you’d be here. Or anywhere.” He smiled, but it didn’t reach his eyes. “I own the place. So, here is where I am.” “Prudent.” “Boring, more like.” He gestured at a stool. “You going to hover in the doorway like a courier afraid of dogs?” She walked to the bar and sat. The leather of the stool sighed under her weight. Up close, the maps behind him showed routes she couldn’t trace, lines crisscrossing continents like scars across a palm. Silas had added more grey since she’d last seen him. The limp in his left leg, that old injury she’d never heard the full story of, made itself known as he shifted to face her. He reached under the counter and produced two glasses, then a bottle with no label. “Still drinking that amber poison?” she asked, her voice steadier than her hands. “Still asking questions you don’t need the answers to.” He poured two fingers into each glass. The liquid caught the bar’s faint light, gleaming like trapped sunlight. He slid one glass toward her. “Last I heard, you were in Cardiff. University. Law, was it?” “Pre-law.” Aurora wrapped her fingers around the glass but didn’t lift it. “I left.” “You said.” “Did I?” She didn’t remember sending any letters, any calls. The years between had hardened into a wall she’d built herself. “Your father told me. Years ago, when I still called him. Before everything.” The sentence ended in a shrug that was not careless. “You were going to litigate the world into order. Change the system from within, I think you said. Big words for a seventeen-year-old who’d never been further than Swansea.” The memory surfaced unbidden: a summer evening, his back garden in Roath, the air thick with lilac and diesel from the nearby A48. She’d been wearing a ridiculous straw hat she’d found in his shed, declaiming about justice while he cleaned his old service pistol. He’d listened without interruption, the way gardeners listen to birdsong. She’d felt seen. Now she felt seen in a way she didn’t want. “I didn’t become a lawyer.” “I see that.” His gaze flicked to her wrists. The left one, covered by her sleeve, but his eyes lingered as if he could see through the fabric to the scar beneath. She fought the urge to adjust her cuff. “What are you doing in London, Rory?” “Delivering food. For a Chinese restaurant in Chinatown.” “Golden Empress?” “Yu-Fei’s place. You know her?” “Everyone knows everyone in this part of Soho.” He took a sip of his drink. “You’re a long way from the Inns of Court. What happened to changing the system?” Aurora lifted her glass. The whiskey burned before it touched her lips, the scent alone a memory. “The system changed me.” She drank. “Or maybe I just realized some systems don’t want changing.” Silas leaned forward, his elbows on the bar. The signet ring clicked against the wood. “That doesn’t sound like the girl who once broke into my locked cabinet to read classified files because she ‘disagreed with the concept of state secrets.’” “I was an idiot.” “You were brave.” The word hit her like a slap. She set the glass down too hard; whiskey sloshed over the rim. “Brave got me a flat I can barely afford and a job where people scream at me for cold noodles. Brave’s overrated.” “Is that what you tell yourself?” He said it gently, which made it worse. She glared at him, but the glare had no backbone. It wilted into the dim light. “What do you want me to say, Silas? That I still give a damn about the world? That I’m back in London to make a difference?” She laughed, a single sharp note. “I’m here because I ran. From a man who thought my ribs were his personal property. From a family that kept asking why I didn’t just ‘try harder.’ So, no. I don’t care about changing anything. I care about surviving.” The bar fell silent. Outside, a taxi rumbled past, its engine a distant growl. Silas’s expression didn’t shift, but his knuckles whitened around his glass. He had always been good at hiding things, except from her. The regret was there, swimming in his hazel eyes like a fish just below the surface. Regret for not knowing, for not being there—for all the things he hadn’t stopped. But he didn’t apologize. He knew her well enough to understand that apologies were just another burden she’d have to carry. Instead, he said, “You need a place to stay?” “I have a place.” “Where?” “Above this bar, actually. I’m renting the flat from the previous owner. He didn’t mention you.” “I bought the building three years ago. I don’t deal with tenants directly. A management company handles it.” The information seemed to cost him something. “So, you’ve been living above me. For how long?” “Two months.” She traced a circle on the bar with a drop of spilled whiskey. “I didn’t know. I didn’t ask who owned it.” “You didn’t want to know.” Aurora didn’t answer. The maps behind him blurred into a watercolor of old lines. She thought of the flat upstairs, the thin walls, the way the green neon from the sign bled through her window at night. She’d chosen it because it was cheap and because the hum of the bar below made her feel less alone. Now she understood that the hum had been him all along, thirty feet below her bed, living his quiet life while she unpacked her damage in silence. “You look older,” Silas said. It wasn’t a criticism. “So do you.” “I’ve earned it.” He tapped his knee. “This thing aches before it rains. I read the obituaries every morning to see if anyone I knew made the rotation. I’ve forgotten more languages than I speak.” He paused, studying her. “But you, Rory—you’re not old. You’re tired. It’s different.” “Tired is just age without the wisdom.” He didn’t laugh. The space between them filled with the weight of ten years, a decade of silence and vanishing. She had been nineteen when he left Cardiff suddenly, a midnight departure with a phone call that consisted of two words: “It’s done.” She never learned what “it” was. He never explained. Now, in his bar, with the maps of the world behind him, he was the same man but diminished. Less the spymaster she’d imagined and more a keeper of things that had already rusted. “I looked for you,” Aurora said, the words escaping before she could cage them. “After you left. I went to your house. Your neighbor said you’d gone abroad. Some kind of consulting work.” “Something like that.” “You could have called. Later, I mean. When you were back.” “Could I?” He refilled his glass, the motion mechanical. “What would I have said? ‘I’m here to disrupt your life again with my shadows and my secrets’? Your father always hated me. He thought I was grooming you for some kind of intelligence recruitment.” “Were you?” Silas considered the question like a man tasting a complicated wine. “I was grooming you to ask better questions. To not accept the easy answers the world hands out like sweets. I never wanted you in my world—that world. You deserved a normal life. University. A career. A partner who didn’t use his fists.” The last words came out with a rasp. He cleared his throat. “I miscalculated.” “It wasn’t your fault.” “It wasn’t your fault either.” The statement hung between them, unadorned. Aurora stared at the whiskey in her glass, the amber now clouded from her fingerprints. She had spent two years with Evan convincing herself that every bruise was her failure, every harsh word a reflection of something rough inside her that needed sanding down. Even now, with him miles away, the thought pattern remained sticky, a web she kept walking into. “Eva helped me leave,” Aurora said, filling the silence with something practical. “My friend from school. She’s the reason I’m in London. She found me the job at Golden Empress.” “The angel with the mobile phone,” Silas said, a ghost of humor returning. “Where is she now?” “Gone. She met someone, moved to Manchester last year.” Six months after I arrived. The friendship had not survived the move, or maybe the friendship had been a life raft that Eva had clung to as long as she could before her own needs pulled her away. Another unspoken regret, more recent but no less sharp. Silas nodded slowly. He picked up the broken glass from earlier—she’d forgotten about that in the swell of their talk—and dropped the pieces into a bin under the counter. “So, you’re alone here. Delivering noodles. Living in a box above a bar.” “When you say it like that, it sounds poetic.” “It sounds like running.” Aurora pushed her glass away. The whiskey sat half-finished, a small amber puddle. “Maybe I am running. But at least I’m running in place instead of backwards.” “And the boy? The one who—” “Evan.” His name in her mouth was a stone she’d swallowed again and again until it stopped tearing her throat. “He’s still in Cardiff. Last I heard, he’s telling people I left because I was ‘emotionally unstable.’” She made air quotes with her fingers. “He’s not entirely wrong.” “Horseshit.” Silas’s voice sharpened. “That kind of self-deprecation is just his voice in your head. Burn it.” His certainty almost made her cry. She bit the inside of her cheek and looked away, at the photographs on the wall. A picture of a bridge. A street in Prague. A man in a long coat, face blurred by motion or by design. The history in this room wasn’t hers, but she felt it press against her like a crowd. “When I knew you,” she said, her voice quiet, “you had this rule. ‘Never regret the things you survived.’ Do you still believe that?” Silas moved out from behind the bar, the limp more pronounced now. He came around to her side and leaned against the counter next to her, both of them facing the photographs like museum visitors. “I survive everything I regret. Which makes the rule something I say to children who’ve never had to survive much at all.” “You used to say a lot of things to me.” “You were a bright light, Rory. People like me see bright lights and we can’t help but try to fill them with what we know. Whether it’s good or not.” He folded his arms. “I’ve spent years wondering whether anything I told you ever helped.” “It didn’t stop me from ending up here.” “No. But you’re here, not there. And you’re talking, not cowering.” He glanced at her, a sideways look that held no pity. “Sometimes that’s all the victory we get.” Outside, the evening deepened. Through the bar’s small windows, the sky purpled into night. The green neon cast its sickly glow across the pavement, a beacon Aurora had seen every evening for two months without knowing its source. Now she would see it and think of him, standing in his den of maps and dead spies, surviving alongside her but apart. “I should go,” she said. “I have an early shift. People need their breakfast noodles.” “You’re welcome to stay. The bar’s not busy.” “I live upstairs. Technically, I’m already staying.” Silas almost smiled, a real one this time. “Then come down for a drink whenever the ghosts get too loud. I’m always here.” She stood up, the stool scraping a noise into the floor. “Why? Why did you buy this place? Why stay in a back-street bar in Soho when you could be anywhere?” Silas looked at the maps behind him, then back at her. “Because I’m waiting for the people I failed to walk through that door. So I can tell them I’m sorry.” The answer, so unguarded, stole whatever response she might have had. Aurora reached out and touched his hand, just for a second, the cold metal of his signet ring against her fingers. He didn’t pull away. Then she turned and walked up the stairs at the back of the bar, the steps that led to her flat, each one a quiet beat of time. She didn’t look back, and Silas didn’t call after her. But as she closed her door, she heard him pick up the pieces of the broken glass again, a soft clinking in the silence, like a morse code for things left unsaid. The neon from the sign painted green bars across her floor. She didn’t turn on the light. Instead, she sat in the window, looking down at the street, and let the memory of the conversation settle into her bones—not as comfort, but as weight. The weight of time, of all the years she had spent forgetting the girl she used to be, the one who broke into cabinets and trusted too easily and believed that the world could change. Silas had known that girl. And in his eyes, even now, she still existed, a ghost waiting to be acknowledged. Aurora drew her sleeve up and looked at the scar on her wrist, the crescent shape small and ridged. An accident from childhood. A healing that had left a mark. Some things didn’t need to be regrets to stay with you forever. She stayed there until the bar closed, listening to the murmur of voices below, the clink of glasses, the sound of Silas moving through his quiet rituals. When the sign finally switched off, plunging the street into ordinary darkness, she was still awake.
created_at"2026-04-25T13:43:44.163Z" 4/25/2026, 1:43:44 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.36
leniency0.719
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2578
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
2"suddenly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2578
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"weight"
count4
1
word"gleaming"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"silence"
count4
5
word"mechanical"
count1
6
word"disrupt"
count1
7
word"unspoken"
count1
8
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"gleaming"
2"flicked"
3"traced"
4"silence"
5"mechanical"
6"disrupt"
7"unspoken"
8"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences145
matches(empty)
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences145
filterMatches
0"listen"
1"feel"
2"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences202
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2571
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions37
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount1686
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
London1
Cardiff2
Roath1
Aurora12
Silas15
Evan1
Six1
Eva1
Prague1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Aurora"
3"Silas"
4"Evan"
5"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Roath"
3"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.778
wordCount2571
matches
0"Not a question, but a breath he’d held for a decade"
1"not as comfort, but as weight"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences202
matches
0"understand that apologies"
1"understood that the"
2"believed that the"
3"known that girl"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs84
mean30.61
std24.69
cv0.807
sampleLengths
092
154
250
353
412
540
618
71
821
985
1013
1144
1214
132
1421
1552
1658
1715
1847
198
202
215
2230
2333
2441
254
263
2741
2814
2988
3066
3121
329
334
341
3516
3634
3724
385
3984
409
413
4248
437
4452
4534
4633
473
4811
4944
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"been nineteen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs277
matches(empty)
72.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences202
ratio0.025
matches
0"His eyes—hazel, those she remembered; even in the dim, they held that same stillness she had once trusted."
1"She set the glass down too hard; whiskey sloshed over the rim."
2"Regret for not knowing, for not being there—for all the things he hadn’t stopped."
3"He picked up the broken glass from earlier—she’d forgotten about that in the swell of their talk—and dropped the pieces into a bin under the counter."
4"Instead, she sat in the window, looking down at the street, and let the memory of the conversation settle into her bones—not as comfort, but as weight."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1697
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.02769593400117855
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004714201532115498
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences202
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences202
mean12.73
std8.57
cv0.673
sampleLengths
014
115
29
35
415
514
620
711
85
93
104
1113
1218
136
146
1527
1611
176
1812
1922
2013
2112
224
2314
2413
259
268
2710
281
298
3013
317
329
3319
3410
3525
3615
3713
3816
3911
406
4111
4212
432
442
4510
4611
4723
4829
4923
51.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3415841584158416
totalSentences202
uniqueOpeners69
70.42% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences142
matches
0"Instead, he said,"
1"Then she turned and walked"
2"Instead, she sat in the"
ratio0.021
70.70% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences142
matches
0"She paused inside the threshold,"
1"His back was to her."
2"His eyes—hazel, those she remembered;"
3"He set the glass down"
4"She didn’t correct him."
5"She stepped forward, the heels"
6"He smiled, but it didn’t"
7"He gestured at a stool"
8"She walked to the bar"
9"He reached under the counter"
10"she asked, her voice steadier"
11"He poured two fingers into"
12"He slid one glass toward"
13"She didn’t remember sending any"
14"She’d been wearing a ridiculous"
15"He’d listened without interruption, the"
16"She’d felt seen."
17"His gaze flicked to her"
18"She fought the urge to"
19"He took a sip of"
ratio0.373
58.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount114
totalSentences142
matches
0"The green neon from the"
1"Aurora pressed the door open"
2"She paused inside the threshold,"
3"The Raven’s Nest swallowed light."
4"The air held the scent"
5"His back was to her."
6"His eyes—hazel, those she remembered;"
7"Aurora’s feet rooted to the"
8"Colva, that’s what he used"
9"Silas didn’t notice her at"
10"He set the glass down"
11"The sound was tiny, a"
12"She didn’t correct him."
13"The name still fit, even"
14"She stepped forward, the heels"
15"He smiled, but it didn’t"
16"He gestured at a stool"
17"She walked to the bar"
18"The leather of the stool"
19"Silas had added more grey"
ratio0.803
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences142
matches
0"Now she felt seen in"
1"Now she understood that the"
2"Now, in his bar, with"
3"Even now, with him miles"
4"Now she would see it"
ratio0.035
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Colva, that’s what he used to call her when she was a teenager loitering around his back porch in Cardiff, stealing his books and asking impertinent questions."
1"She’d been wearing a ridiculous straw hat she’d found in his shed, declaiming about justice while he cleaned his old service pistol."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags32
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she asked, her voice steadier than her hands"
1"Aurora said, the words escaping before she could cage them"
2"Silas said, a ghost of humor returning"
3"she said, her voice quiet,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences89
tagDensity0.112
leniency0.225
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.022
91.4360%