Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2E7X67C9A4ZGS93DADVDMT

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The brass door handle of The Raven's Nest had barely warmed to my palm when a familiar laugh cut through the hum of conversation. Not loud, not boisterous. A measured thing, practised like a handshake. But I knew its bones. Eva stood at the far end of the bar, her back half-turned, one elbow propped on the scarred mahogany. She'd cut her hair. The long copper waves I remembered were gone, replaced by something severe and dark that brushed her jaw. A grey blazer hung from her shoulders with the kind of effortless expense that screamed Knightsbridge, not our old shared wardrobe of charity shop finds. Silas caught my eye from behind the bar and nodded once. I could have left. Should have, maybe. But my feet carried me forward. "Eva." She turned. The smile came first, automatic, before recognition flickered and caught. "Rory." My name left her lips like she'd been saying it every day. Like four years hadn't stretched between us. "God, look at you." Her eyes did the inventory I'd just performed on her, and I watched her catalogue my scuffed trainers, the delivery jacket still smelling faintly of ginger and soy, the dark circles that had taken up permanent residence beneath my eyes. "Still delivering takeaway, then?" "Still leading with the jab, then?" A beat of silence. Then that laugh again, the one I remembered from late nights in our Cardiff flat, but now it carried something brittle at its edges. "Fair enough." She gestured to the stool beside her. "Sit. Please. I'm buying." I slid onto the cracked leather. Silas materialised without being summoned, a neat trick he'd perfected. "Your usual, Rory?" "The gin. Whatever's open." Eva's glass held something amber and expensive-looking. Single malt, if I had to guess. Her father's drink. That thought pressed against something tender in my chest. "Look at us," she said, not quite meeting my eye. "Two Cardiff girls in London. Who'd have thought?" "You always said you'd end up here." "And you always said you wouldn't." The gin arrived. I took a longer pull than was polite. "Things change." "They do." She swirled her whisky, watched the legs drip down the crystal. "I heard about Evan. After. Must have been... difficult." Difficult. A neat little word for a fist to the ribs, for the locks I'd changed twice, for the reason I'd fled west in the middle of the night with a rucksack and a black eye that the police had documented and then filed away. "Silas helped." "He's good at that." She glanced toward the bar, where Silas was polishing glasses with the patient focus of a man who missed nothing. "Better than I was." The words landed softly, but the weight behind them pressed against the space between us. "You offered me your sofa." "For about thirty seconds before you bolted." "I didn't want to be anyone's burden." "Burdens are what friends carry." She said it to her glass, not to me. "I'd have carried it. I'd have—" Her jaw tightened. "Anyway. Ancient history." A group of young men near the door burst into laughter. Someone had put Tom Waits on the jukebox, all gravel and broken piano keys. "How's Cardiff?" I asked. "Haven't been back. Not since the funeral." The gin turned sharp on my tongue. "Whose funeral?" "Your father's. About two years ago. I assumed you knew." The bar's ambient noise dropped away. Just the blood rushing in my ears and Eva's careful, guarded expression. "No. I didn't know." "He'd been ill. Cancer. Jennifer wrote to my mum, hoping I'd know where you were. I didn't, obviously." She took a sip of whisky. "I made the drive anyway. The service was nice. Your mother read a poem. Something by Yeats." Brendan Carter. Barrister. Father. A man who'd taught me to argue by arguing against everything I believed, just to see if I could hold my ground. Who'd called my fleeing to London "a phase" and my refusal to press charges against Evan "an embarrassment." Dead. Two years dead, and I'd been cycling through Soho with lomein growing cold in my bag. "You could have found me." "Could I?" She set her glass down with more force than necessary. "You vanished, Rory. New phone, new number, no forwarding address. Silas wouldn't tell me anything, and I did ask." "I needed a clean break." "From Evan, yes. From me?" The question hung in the amber light. "I didn't know how to be the person you remembered." "And who was that?" "Someone with potential. Someone who wasn't running." Eva exhaled slowly. She reached into her blazer and pulled out a wallet, from which she extracted a worn photograph. She slid it across the bar. It was us. Sixteen, maybe seventeen, on the pier at Penarth. Wind-whipped hair and ridiculous sunglasses. I'm laughing at something off-camera, and Eva's looking at me with the particular intensity of teenage friendship, that ferocious certainty that this person will be yours forever. "I never forgot who you were," she said. "Even when you became someone else." "Eva—" "I'm getting married. June. To a man named Thomas who works in finance and thinks Pinot Grigio is adventurous." She said it flatly, like she was reading from a briefing document. "Mother's thrilled. Father would have been, if he'd lived to see it." "And you?" "Me?" She smiled, and for the first time all evening, it reached her eyes. Made them sad. "I'm still figuring out what I'm allowed to want." The door opened behind us. A gust of cold March air. Silas looked up, and something flickered across his face—the briefest tightening around the eyes. "Rory," he said. "Back room. Now." His tone brooked nothing. I looked at Eva, at the photograph still between us, at all the years we'd never get back. "I have to—" "Go." She tucked the photo back into her wallet. "I know how it works. His kind, your kind. That part of you hasn't changed at all." She stood, straightened her blazer, and pressed something into my palm. A business card. Thick cream stock. Eva Carrington, it read. Barrister at Law. Her Chambers were in the Temple. "June," she said. "St. Margaret's in Westminster. I've already written your name on the guest list. Always have." Then she was gone, the door swinging shut behind her with the soft click of finality. Silas materialised at my elbow. "We've got a situation." I pocketed the card and followed him toward the bookshelf that wasn't a bookshelf, my father's death settling somewhere behind my ribs like a stone dropped into deep water. I'd carry it later. Grieve it later. Now, the night was still moving, and Silas's limp was more pronounced than usual, which meant whatever waited behind that door was worse than what I'd just survived.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.281
leniency0.561
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1136
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1136
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"effortless"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"crystal"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"potential"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"measured"
2"effortless"
3"flickered"
4"silence"
5"crystal"
6"weight"
7"potential"
8"intensity"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences83
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1135
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount804
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity0.87
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Knightsbridge1
Like1
Cardiff1
Difficult1
Silas6
Tom1
Waits1
Eva7
Brendan1
Carter1
London1
Evan1
Dead1
Soho1
Penarth1
Made1
March1
Carrington1
Law1
Chambers1
Temple1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Difficult"
3"Silas"
4"Tom"
5"Waits"
6"Eva"
7"Brendan"
8"Carter"
9"Evan"
10"Dead"
11"Carrington"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Soho"
3"Penarth"
4"Law"
5"Temple"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite meeting my eye"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1135
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean16.94
std15.06
cv0.889
sampleLengths
040
166
211
313
41
512
624
740
84
96
1028
1113
1216
133
144
1526
1618
177
186
1911
202
2122
2245
232
2428
2515
265
277
287
2926
3025
314
327
337
342
3510
3618
374
3841
3944
4017
415
4231
435
445
457
4610
474
487
4926
92.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences83
matches
0"were gone"
1"being summoned"
2"was gone"
50.75% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs134
matches
0"was polishing"
1"was reading"
2"was still moving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences123
ratio0.008
matches
0"Silas looked up, and something flickered across his face—the briefest tightening around the eyes."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount809
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.030902348578491966
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006180469715698393
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean9.23
std8.05
cv0.872
sampleLengths
024
14
27
35
419
54
618
725
811
94
103
116
121
132
1410
1513
167
174
1840
194
206
214
2224
239
244
256
2610
273
284
297
307
313
329
3310
348
357
366
373
388
392
4013
419
421
4344
442
4524
464
4715
485
497
78.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4959349593495935
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners61
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences73
matches
0"Then that laugh again, the"
1"Just the blood rushing in"
2"Then she was gone, the"
ratio0.041
66.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences73
matches
0"She'd cut her hair."
1"I could have left."
2"My name left her lips"
3"Her eyes did the inventory"
4"She gestured to the stool"
5"I slid onto the cracked"
6"Her father's drink."
7"she said, not quite meeting"
8"I took a longer pull"
9"She swirled her whisky, watched"
10"She glanced toward the bar,"
11"She said it to her"
12"Her jaw tightened"
13"She took a sip of"
14"She set her glass down"
15"She reached into her blazer"
16"She slid it across the"
17"It was us."
18"I'm laughing at something off-camera,"
19"She said it flatly, like"
ratio0.384
76.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences73
matches
0"The brass door handle of"
1"A measured thing, practised like"
2"Eva stood at the far"
3"She'd cut her hair."
4"The long copper waves I"
5"A grey blazer hung from"
6"Silas caught my eye from"
7"I could have left."
8"The smile came first, automatic,"
9"My name left her lips"
10"Her eyes did the inventory"
11"A beat of silence."
12"She gestured to the stool"
13"I slid onto the cracked"
14"Silas materialised without being summoned,"
15"Eva's glass held something amber"
16"Her father's drink."
17"That thought pressed against something"
18"she said, not quite meeting"
19"The gin arrived."
ratio0.767
68.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Now, the night was still"
ratio0.014
83.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"A grey blazer hung from her shoulders with the kind of effortless expense that screamed Knightsbridge, not our old shared wardrobe of charity shop finds."
1"I pocketed the card and followed him toward the bookshelf that wasn't a bookshelf, my father's death settling somewhere behind my ribs like a stone dropped into…"
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, not quite meeting my eye"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.123
leniency0.246
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.9230%