Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2EX726YC9DQJMWEC2KDRGG

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven's Nest smelled of old wood and spilled secrets. A jazz record crackled through speakers hidden in the ceiling beams, something low and mournful, all brass and melancholy. Rory wiped down the bar for the third time, watching the door. She didn't recognise him at first. The man who walked in wore a thousand-pound suit, charcoal grey, cut to hide the weight he'd put on since university. His hair had receded, what remained cropped short and silver at the temples. But the walk. That loose, easy stride that had once carried him through every party, every pub crawl, every bad decision they'd ever made. "James." He stopped mid-step, head turning. Those eyes still had the same colour, that deep river-blue, but everything else had aged a decade ahead of schedule. "Aurora Carter." His voice cracked on the second syllable. "Bloody hell." She set down the cloth. "What are you doing in London?" "You're not in Cardiff anymore either, apparently." He slid onto a stool, the leather creaking under him. "I'm here for a conference. Corporate law. Three days of networking and pretending I still care about tort reform." "And you found this place how?" "Walked past. Saw the sign." He gestured at the green neon above the entrance. "Felt right." Silas emerged from the back room, his limp more pronounced tonight. He took in James with a single sweep of his hazel eyes, cataloguing him the way he catalogued everyone who entered his bar. Danger assessment. Social standing. Potential for trouble. "I know him," Rory said. Silas nodded once, retreated to the far end of the bar, and began polishing a glass that didn't need polishing. Watching. Always watching. "You run this place now?" James asked. "I deliver for a Chinese place down the street. Live upstairs." "Delivery." He said it like she'd announced she was joining the circus. "You graduated top of your class. Scholarship to Cardiff. Your dad's a barrister." "People change." "Do they?" He pulled at his collar, loosening a tie that cost more than her monthly rent. "I thought they just... accumulated. More money, more responsibilities, more ways to disappoint everyone who ever believed in them." The air between them thickened. "You look good," she said. The lie sat heavy on her tongue. "Don't." His laugh came out hollow. "I look like what happens when you spend fifteen years doing exactly what's expected of you. Married the right woman. Bought the right house. Took the right job at the right firm." He held up his left hand. Gold band, expensive, well-worn. "Two kids. A boy and a girl." "And you're unhappy." "I'm exhausted, Rory. There's a difference." She poured him a whiskey without asking. He wrapped his fingers around the glass, and she noticed the tremor. Fine, barely there, but present. "Remember the summer we hitchhiked to Cornwall?" he asked. "James." "We slept on the beach. Got arrested for trespassing at that old manor house. You kissed me under the pier." "You're married." "I know." He drank the whiskey in one swallow. "I know. But I remember it anyway. I remember *us*." Rory studied him. The boy who'd taught her to smoke, who'd held her hair back when she drank too much, who'd promised to run away with her to anywhere that wasn't Cardiff. They'd been eighteen, invincible, full of stupid dreams and cheaper beer. "You're not that person anymore," she said. "Neither are you." "No." She touched the scar on her wrist, that crescent-shaped reminder of a childhood she'd spent trying to escape. "I'm not." "What happened to you, Aurora? You had plans. You were going to be a lawyer, fight for the little guy, change the world." "Evan happened." The name landed between them like a stone dropped into still water. James's face went pale under the bar's dim light. "Evan Cross? The one you dated in third year?" "That's the one." "What did he do?" "He broke me." She said it flatly, the way she'd learned to say it in therapy. "Not all at once. Slowly. Methodically. By the time I realised what was happening, I'd lost my friends, my confidence, my ability to trust my own judgment. I fled to London with nothing but a suitcase and Eva's phone number." James set down the empty glass. "I didn't know." "No one did. That was the point." "I should have been there." "You had your own life, James. We'd drifted apart by then. That's what people do." "Bullshit." His voice rose, drawing a glance from Silas. "We were supposed to be different. We promised-" "Promises don't mean anything when you're twenty-two and terrified." She refilled his glass. "You're not the same person who made those promises. Neither am I." He stared at the amber liquid. "Do you ever wonder what would have happened if we'd actually run away that summer?" "Every day." The words hung there, raw and exposed, like a wound that hadn't quite healed. "I should go," he said. "My wife's waiting at the hotel." "Of course." He stood, adjusted his jacket, and for a moment, she saw the ghost of the boy she'd known. The one who laughed too loud and stayed up too late and believed that love was enough to conquer anything. "You still have my number," she said. "Does it matter?" "I don't know." She picked up his empty glass. "But you've got it anyway." He walked to the door, paused with his hand on the handle, and looked back. The green neon cast strange shadows across his face. "I'm sorry, Aurora." "For what?" "For becoming exactly what we swore we'd never become." The door swung shut behind him. Silas appeared beside her, silent as always. "Old friend?" "Ancient history." "Those are the worst kind." He took the glass from her hand. "They never stop writing themselves."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.328
leniency0.656
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount971
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.55% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount971
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"potential"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"potential"
2"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences60
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences60
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences103
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords971
ratio0.001
matches
0"us"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount544
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.74
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"James"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas4
James4
Gold1
Rory3
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"James"
4"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
21.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite healed"
1"appeared beside her, silent as always"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount971
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences103
matches
0"believed that love"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean15.41
std14.35
cv0.931
sampleLengths
041
16
258
31
425
511
611
736
86
916
1041
115
1223
137
1411
1525
162
1736
185
1912
2055
213
226
2324
249
251
2620
272
2819
2943
307
313
3221
3323
342
3521
369
373
384
3956
409
417
425
4315
4417
4525
4621
472
4814
4911
99.42% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences60
matches
0"been eighteen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs102
matches
0"was joining"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences103
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount549
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.030965391621129327
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.007285974499089253
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences103
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences103
mean9.43
std7.51
cv0.796
sampleLengths
010
119
212
36
421
513
63
721
81
95
1020
119
122
135
146
1517
1619
176
1814
192
2011
2123
222
232
243
255
2620
271
282
297
3011
3112
3213
332
3417
3519
365
375
387
396
4038
414
427
433
446
457
4612
475
489
491
74.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4563106796116505
totalSentences103
uniqueOpeners47
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
15.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences49
matches
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2"He stopped mid-step, head turning."
3"His voice cracked on the"
4"She set down the cloth."
5"He slid onto a stool,"
6"He gestured at the green"
7"He took in James with"
8"He said it like she'd"
9"He pulled at his collar,"
10"His laugh came out hollow"
11"He held up his left"
12"She poured him a whiskey"
13"He wrapped his fingers around"
14"He drank the whiskey in"
15"They'd been eighteen, invincible, full"
16"She touched the scar on"
17"She said it flatly, the"
18"His voice rose, drawing a"
19"She refilled his glass"
ratio0.51
0.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences49
matches
0"The Raven's Nest smelled of"
1"A jazz record crackled through"
2"Rory wiped down the bar"
3"She didn't recognise him at"
4"The man who walked in"
5"His hair had receded, what"
6"That loose, easy stride that"
7"He stopped mid-step, head turning."
8"Those eyes still had the"
9"His voice cracked on the"
10"She set down the cloth."
11"He slid onto a stool,"
12"He gestured at the green"
13"Silas emerged from the back"
14"He took in James with"
15"Silas nodded once, retreated to"
16"He said it like she'd"
17"He pulled at his collar,"
18"The air between them thickened."
19"The lie sat heavy on"
ratio0.918
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The man who walked in wore a thousand-pound suit, charcoal grey, cut to hide the weight he'd put on since university."
1"He took in James with a single sweep of his hazel eyes, cataloguing him the way he catalogued everyone who entered his bar."
2"Silas nodded once, retreated to the far end of the bar, and began polishing a glass that didn't need polishing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He slid, the leather creaking under him"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.141
leniency0.281
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.5089%