Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2FB2WCGAS181BNCESQK7SS

Run Details

Model:: DeepSeek V4 Flash (Reasoning)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 34.5s
Cost:: $0.000673
Provider:: DeepSeek

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
80.37%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
36.21%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
39.59%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
82.28%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
96.81%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
49.08%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
44.44%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
40.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
67.67%	Technical jargon density	(details)
41.67%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
78.57%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
71.8899%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

Richmond Park smelled of damp earth and the lingering warmth of a sun that had already tucked itself behind the trees. Rory followed Nyx along a deer path that seemed to twist back on itself, the grass brushing her ankles in a language she couldn't read. The shade moved ahead of her, a ripple of darkness against the deepening twilight, their form never quite solid, never quite still.

“It’s close,” Nyx said, their voice a scrape of dry leaves across stone. “I feel the Veil thinning. Like fabric worn to thread.”

Rory’s fingers brushed the Heartstone pendant resting against her collarbone. It remained cool, dormant. No Hel portal here, then. She wasn’t sure if that relieved her or not. The Fae were their own kind of danger.

The path opened onto a ring of standing stones—ancient oaks, their bark weathered into faces that watched with silent patience. Moss clung to the grain like forgotten promises. Between two of the largest trunks, the air shimmered. Not with heat, but with something deeper. A distortion that made Rory’s eyes water if she stared too long.

“Through there,” Nyx said. They didn’t move forward. “I cannot step through uninvited. The Fae know my kind. They will not grant me passage unless you ask for me.”

Rory looked at them. “You want me to invite a shade into a Fae grove?”

“Isolde knows I come in peace. She has seen it.” Nyx’s violet eyes flickered, two coals in the dark. “But the boundary is hers to command. She will feel you cross, and she will feel me follow at your call.”

Rory pressed her lips together, then nodded. “Come with me.”

She didn’t wait for a reply. She stepped between the oaks.

The world folded.

The air changed—first cold, then warm, then something that was neither, a silk-smooth temperature that seemed to wrap around her skin like water. The scent of damp earth and city exhaust vanished, replaced by a sweetness so thick it made her head swim. Honeysuckle? No. Something stranger. A perfume that reminded her of the first peach she’d ever eaten, juice running down her chin in a Cardiff summer, but laced with wild thyme and the metallic tang of ozone.

She blinked. The grove stretched before her, and it was not the same forest.

The light was soft amber, as though the sun had decided to linger at perpetual golden hour. But there was no sun—only a glow that seemed to emanate from the very air, from the leaves, from the petals of flowers that bloomed in colors she had no name for. A deep violet that pulsed faintly. A blue so pale it was almost white, like the sky of a dream. And everywhere, everywhere, the scent of things ripening.

The trees were oaks, but they were different. Their trunks spiraled, bark smooth as river stone, and their leaves hung in cascades of green and silver. Some bore fruit—small, golden orbs that gave off a soft light. Rory reached out without thinking, her fingers brushing one. It was cool, and the light from it rippled across her skin like water.

“Remarkable,” Nyx said from behind her. They had followed at her invitation, their shadow form darker against the grove’s perpetual glow. “The Veil here is so thin I can taste the other side. Time runs differently in this pocket. An hour could be a day—or a minute.”

Rory pulled her hand back. “Isolde?”

No answer but the rustle of leaves that seemed to whisper her name.

She walked deeper, her boots silent on moss that felt like velvet. The ground was soft, giving slightly underfoot. She noticed she left no prints. Neither did Nyx, but that was expected. The grove didn’t hold onto marks.

A stream crossed her path, its water silver-bright, moving against the logic of gravity, flowing uphill in a lazy spiral. The sound it made was not water—it was a low, resonant hum, like the vibration of a cello string. Bending, Rory dipped a finger in. The water was cold, but it tingled, as though charged with static. She brought her finger to her lips. The taste was sharp, mineral, and for a moment she saw a flash of something—a face, a field of wheat, a door opening into darkness.

She jerked her hand back, heart hammering.

“The water holds memories,” Nyx said. “Be careful what you drink.”

Rory nodded, swallowing. The unease settled deeper under her ribs, but it was layered with wonder. This place was alive in a way the world outside was not. Every leaf trembled with awareness. She could feel the grove watching, not with hostility, but with curiosity. Like a cat considering a mouse.

She passed a circle of mushrooms, their caps pale blue, glowing faintly. In their center lay a bone—small, delicate, the rib of a bird or maybe something larger. She didn’t touch it.

The path curved, and the standing stones rose again, smaller this time, carved with spirals and crescent moons. Between them, on a flat stone draped in moss, sat something that caught the amber light: a slender dagger, its blade leaf-shaped, the metal the color of moonlight. The Fae-forged blade. Isolde’s gift, left for her.

Rory’s breath caught. She reached for it, and the moment her fingers closed around the hilt, the blade warmed—just slightly, as if recognizing her touch. The hilt fit her palm perfectly, the leather bound with silver wire. It felt alive.

“She knew you would come,” Nyx murmured.

Rory turned the blade over, watching the faint luminescence dance along its edge. The unease hadn’t left, but now it was tangled with something fiercer—a quiet thrill, a sense of being exactly where she was meant to be.

The grove hummed around her. Somewhere, a wood thrush began to sing a melody that didn’t follow mortal scales. The flowers seemed to turn toward the sound, their petals trembling.

Rory sheathed the blade at her belt and looked up. Through the trees, a figure moved—tall, silver-haired, leaving no footprints on the moss.

Isolde.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	6
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	14
tagDensity	0.429
leniency	0.857
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

80.37%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1019

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	2

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"slightly"
2	"perfectly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

36.21%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1019

totalAiIsms

found

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	1

word	"silk"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"remarkable"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"velvet"
count	1

word	"charged"
count	1

word	"trembled"
count	1

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"dance"
count	1

word	"sense of"
count	1

highlights

0	"warmth"
1	"shimmered"
2	"flickered"
3	"silk"
4	"pulsed"
5	"remarkable"
6	"whisper"
7	"velvet"
8	"charged"
9	"trembled"
10	"could feel"
11	"dance"
12	"sense of"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"d with wonder"

39.59%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	91
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
repeatedSegmentCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	33
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1008
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	7
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

82.28%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

886

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.35

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Park	1
Nyx	8
Rory	12
Heartstone	1
Hel	1
Fae	2
Cardiff	1
Fae-forged	1

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Rory"

places

0	"Park"
1	"Cardiff"

globalScore

0.823

windowScore

0.833

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"path that seemed to twist back on itself, the grass brushing her ankles in a language she couldn't read"
1	"temperature that seemed to wrap around her skin like water"
2	"glow that seemed to emanate from the very air, from the leaves, from the petals of flowers that bloomed in colors she had no name for"
3	"leaves that seemed to whisper her name"
4	"felt like velvet"
5	"as if recognizing her touch"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

2.976

wordCount

1008

matches

0	"Not with heat, but with something deeper"
1	"No answer but"
2	"not with hostility, but with curiosity"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	91
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

33.6

std

24.22

0.721

sampleLengths

0	68
1	23
2	36
3	56
4	29
5	15
6	40
7	10
8	11
9	3
10	79
11	14
12	77
13	60
14	47
15	6
16	13
17	38
18	89
19	7
20	11
21	51
22	32
23	54
24	40
25	7
26	38
27	30
28	23
29	1

96.81%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was layered"
1	"was tangled"
2	"was meant"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	148
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.11

matches

0	"The path opened onto a ring of standing stones—ancient oaks, their bark weathered into faces that watched with silent patience."
1	"The air changed—first cold, then warm, then something that was neither, a silk-smooth temperature that seemed to wrap around her skin like water."
2	"But there was no sun—only a glow that seemed to emanate from the very air, from the leaves, from the petals of flowers that bloomed in colors she had no name for."
3	"Some bore fruit—small, golden orbs that gave off a soft light."
4	"The sound it made was not water—it was a low, resonant hum, like the vibration of a cello string."
5	"The taste was sharp, mineral, and for a moment she saw a flash of something—a face, a field of wheat, a door opening into darkness."
6	"In their center lay a bone—small, delicate, the rib of a bird or maybe something larger."
7	"She reached for it, and the moment her fingers closed around the hilt, the blade warmed—just slightly, as if recognizing her touch."
8	"The unease hadn’t left, but now it was tangled with something fiercer—a quiet thrill, a sense of being exactly where she was meant to be."
9	"Through the trees, a figure moved—tall, silver-haired, leaving no footprints on the moss."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	901
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	32
adverbRatio	0.03551609322974473
lyAdverbCount	8
lyAdverbRatio	0.008879023307436182

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	91
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

11.08

std

7.47

0.674

sampleLengths

0	21
1	25
2	22
3	13
4	10
5	10
6	4
7	5
8	9
9	8
10	20
11	8
12	9
13	7
14	12
15	4
16	4
17	21
18	4
19	11
20	19
21	21
22	7
23	3
24	6
25	5
26	3
27	23
28	20
29	1
30	1
31	2
32	32
33	2
34	12
35	17
36	32
37	6
38	14
39	8
40	8
41	18
42	11
43	9
44	14
45	6
46	15
47	26
48	5
49	1

49.08%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	7
diversityRatio	0.34065934065934067
totalSentences	91
uniqueOpeners	31

44.44%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Somewhere, a wood thrush began"

ratio

0.013

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It remained cool, dormant."
1	"She wasn’t sure if that"
2	"They didn’t move forward."
3	"She didn’t wait for a"
4	"She stepped between the oaks."
5	"Their trunks spiraled, bark smooth"
6	"It was cool, and the"
7	"They had followed at her"
8	"She walked deeper, her boots"
9	"She noticed she left no"
10	"She brought her finger to"
11	"She jerked her hand back,"
12	"She could feel the grove"
13	"She passed a circle of"
14	"She didn’t touch it."
15	"She reached for it, and"
16	"It felt alive."

ratio

0.227

40.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Richmond Park smelled of damp"
1	"Rory followed Nyx along a"
2	"The shade moved ahead of"
3	"Nyx said, their voice a"
4	"Rory’s fingers brushed the Heartstone"
5	"It remained cool, dormant."
6	"She wasn’t sure if that"
7	"The Fae were their own"
8	"The path opened onto a"
9	"Moss clung to the grain"
10	"A distortion that made Rory’s"
11	"They didn’t move forward."
12	"Rory looked at them."
13	"Nyx’s violet eyes flickered, two"
14	"Rory pressed her lips together,"
15	"She didn’t wait for a"
16	"She stepped between the oaks."
17	"The world folded."
18	"The air changed—first cold, then"
19	"The scent of damp earth"

ratio

0.84

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	75
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

67.67%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The path opened onto a ring of standing stones—ancient oaks, their bark weathered into faces that watched with silent patience."
1	"The air changed—first cold, then warm, then something that was neither, a silk-smooth temperature that seemed to wrap around her skin like water."
2	"The light was soft amber, as though the sun had decided to linger at perpetual golden hour."
3	"Between them, on a flat stone draped in moss, sat something that caught the amber light: a slender dagger, its blade leaf-shaped, the metal the color of moonlig…"

41.67%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx said, their voice a scrape of dry leaves across stone"

78.57%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.357

leniency

0.714

rawRatio

0.2

effectiveRatio

0.143

71.8899%