Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2FDW4RJGVH9M73NY7BJQBG

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door chimed, a tinny sound swallowed by the low hum of conversation and clinking glasses. I didn't look up from polishing the same glass I'd been holding for the last five minutes. The rhythm was automatic, a muscle memory that let my mind drift somewhere else. Somewhere quieter. "Whiskey. Neat. The good stuff, not the paint thinner you keep under the counter." The voice cut through the bar's ambient noise like a blade. Familiar. Wrong. I set the glass down and finally looked up. She stood at the counter, rain beading on the shoulders of a charcoal wool coat that cost more than my monthly rent. Her hair was shorter now, cropped close to her scalp in a way that accentuated the sharp angles of her jaw. The soft roundness I remembered from university photos had been planed away, replaced by something harder. More deliberate. "Laila." "Rory." She didn't smile. "Been a while." The name hung between us like smoke. I hadn't been Laila in years. Not since before Evan. Not since I'd fled Cardiff with nothing but a duffel bag and Eva's promise of a spare couch. "How did you find me?" "You're not hard to find when you know where to look." She pulled out a bar stool, the legs scraping against the worn floorboards. "Silas still keeps good company." Of course. She'd know about the Raven's Nest. Laila had known everything about everyone. That had been her gift. "Whiskey," she repeated, sliding a card across the counter. Black. No name. The kind that got you into places where people didn't ask questions. "The Macallan. Twenty-five year." I poured it without meeting her eyes. The amber liquid caught the dim light, casting shadows that danced across my hands. I'd learned to read people in the years since I'd left. The way they held their glass. The pause before they answered a question. The micro-expressions that flickered across their faces when they thought no one was watching. Laila was watching. She always had been. "You look good," she said, not meaning it. "You look like you've been busy." Her laugh was hollow. "Busy. That's one way to put it." I set the glass down harder than necessary. The liquid sloshed against the rim but didn't spill. "What do you want, Laila?" "To catch up. Is that so strange?" "We haven't spoken in seven years." "Time moves differently for people like us." "People like us." I leaned against the back counter, folding my arms. "You mean people who disappear without a word?" Her fingers tightened around the glass. A crack in the armour. "I had my reasons." "We all have reasons." I let the silence stretch. "Doesn't make them good ones." The bar hummed around us. A couple in the corner argued in hushed tones. Somewhere, a glass shattered. The regulars barely flinched. "You knew about Evan," I said finally. "What he was. What he did." "Rory-" "You knew, and you didn't tell me. You let me walk into that relationship blind." Her jaw tightened. "I tried to warn you. You didn't want to hear it." "Warning me and telling me the truth aren't the same thing." "Would you have believed me?" She set the glass down. Empty. "If I'd told you your perfect boyfriend had a record a mile long. That the last girl he dated ended up in hospital. That he'd been investigated twice and never charged. Would you have believed me, or would you have called me jealous and stopped taking my calls?" I didn't answer. We both knew the truth. "That's what I thought." She signalled for another drink. "You were in love. Love makes people stupid. Makes them blind." "Maybe I wanted to be blind." "Then you got what you wanted, didn't you?" The words hit like a slap. I felt the sting bloom across my cheek, though she hadn't moved. Hadn't raised her voice. That was Laila's skill. Cutting deep without ever drawing blood. "What happened to you?" I asked. "Life happened." She swirled the whiskey in her new glass. "The kind that doesn't leave room for sentiment." "Is that why you left? Because you couldn't feel anything anymore?" Her eyes met mine. For a moment, I saw something flicker there. A ghost of the girl who'd held my hand at my mother's funeral. Who'd stayed up with me all night when I couldn't sleep, talking about nothing and everything. Who'd promised we'd always have each other's backs. "I left to survive." Her voice was barely a whisper. "Some of us don't get to keep our soft parts." "Neither did I." "Then you understand." I didn't. Not really. But I understood enough. "What do you want from me, Laila?" "I want you to know I'm sorry." She set the glass down, her hands steady. "I was a coward. I saw what was coming and I ran instead of staying to help you through it." "Help me?" A bitter laugh escaped. "You disappeared. Left me alone with him." "I know." Her voice cracked. "I know, and I'll carry that with me forever." "Carrying it isn't enough." I reached under the counter and pulled out a bottle of cheap bourbon. The one I kept for nights when the memories got too loud. "You have to live with it." "I am." The bar's neon sign flickered. Rain lashed against the windows. Somewhere outside, London kept spinning, indifferent to the weight of old wounds. "I'm leaving tomorrow," Laila said. "Going back to Cardiff. Thought I'd say goodbye properly this time." "Properly." I poured myself a shot. "That's a new word for you." "I've changed." "People don't change. They just get better at hiding." Her smile was sad. "Maybe that's all change ever is." I raised my glass. "To hiding, then." "To surviving." We drank. The whiskey burned, a familiar warmth that didn't quite reach the cold places. Laila stood, adjusting her coat. "Take care of yourself, Rory." "I always do." She paused at the door, her hand on the handle. The green neon cast shadows across her face. For a heartbeat, I saw the girl I'd known. The one who'd laughed too loud and loved too fiercely. "Goodbye, Laila." "Goodbye, Aurora." The door swung shut. The rain swallowed her footsteps. I finished my drink and reached for another glass to polish. The motions were automatic. The same rhythm I'd been keeping for the last five minutes. The last five years. Some things, I guessed, never really changed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"I said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.266
leniency0.531
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.031
90.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1080
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"charged"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"flickered"
2"silence"
3"shattered"
4"perfect"
5"charged"
6"flicker"
7"whisper"
8"weight"
9"warmth"
10"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences95
matches
0"felt the sting"
1"was sad"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1080
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Some things, I guessed, never really changed."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions14
wordCount674
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.89
worstName"Laila"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Laila"
discoveredNames
Laila6
Evan1
Cardiff1
Eva1
Raven1
Nest1
Black1
Empty1
London1
persons
0"Laila"
1"Evan"
2"Eva"
3"Raven"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite reach the cold places"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.926
wordCount1080
matches
0"Not since I'd fled Cardiff with nothing but a duffel bag"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean16.36
std14.55
cv0.889
sampleLengths
049
114
222
361
41
57
635
75
829
919
1028
1159
127
138
146
1511
1622
177
186
197
2020
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2214
2322
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251
2615
2714
2811
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3120
326
338
3432
356
3618
3711
3849
3920
403
413
428
437
4435
4513
4614
4735
482
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences95
matches
0"been planed"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs117
matches
0"was watching"
1"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences141
ratio0
matches(empty)
98.65% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount674
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.04154302670623145
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011869436201780416
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean7.66
std5.77
cv0.754
sampleLengths
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214
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414
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1116
122
131
144
153
167
176
184
1918
205
2124
225
232
246
256
265
279
281
292
3012
314
327
3314
3411
356
367
3714
383
394
408
416
424
437
448
459
465
477
486
497
49.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3546099290780142
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners50
81.30% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences82
matches
0"Somewhere, a glass shattered."
1"Somewhere outside, London kept spinning,"
ratio0.024
44.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences82
matches
0"I didn't look up from"
1"I set the glass down"
2"She stood at the counter,"
3"Her hair was shorter now,"
4"She didn't smile"
5"I hadn't been Laila in"
6"She pulled out a bar"
7"She'd know about the Raven's"
8"she repeated, sliding a card"
9"I poured it without meeting"
10"I'd learned to read people"
11"She always had been."
12"she said, not meaning it"
13"Her laugh was hollow."
14"I set the glass down"
15"I leaned against the back"
16"Her fingers tightened around the"
17"I let the silence stretch"
18"I said finally"
19"Her jaw tightened."
ratio0.439
27.07% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences82
matches
0"The door chimed, a tinny"
1"I didn't look up from"
2"The rhythm was automatic, a"
3"The voice cut through the"
4"I set the glass down"
5"She stood at the counter,"
6"Her hair was shorter now,"
7"The soft roundness I remembered"
8"She didn't smile"
9"The name hung between us"
10"I hadn't been Laila in"
11"She pulled out a bar"
12"She'd know about the Raven's"
13"Laila had known everything about"
14"That had been her gift."
15"she repeated, sliding a card"
16"The kind that got you"
17"I poured it without meeting"
18"The amber liquid caught the"
19"I'd learned to read people"
ratio0.866
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The rhythm was automatic, a muscle memory that let my mind drift somewhere else."
1"The amber liquid caught the dim light, casting shadows that danced across my hands."
2"A ghost of the girl who'd held my hand at my mother's funeral."
36.76% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"She pulled out, the legs scraping against the worn floorboards"
1"she said, not meaning it"
2"She set, her hands steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.078
leniency0.156
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.031
83.2676%