Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GDGRDG3QQN1GPNEM43ZSY

Run Details

Duration:
1m 37s
Cost:
$0.003530
Provider:
DeepSeek

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pendant pulsed against her sternum as Aurora Carter stepped off the footpath and into the unlit margin of Richmond Park. It had done that before—a low, rhythmic heat like a second heartbeat catching up to her own—but never this strongly, never this late, never when she had come without a clear purpose. She had only known she needed to walk, that the night was too warm and the city too loud, and that the silver chain around her neck had tugged her south and west through the empty streets until the trees swallowed the sky. Ahead, the ancient oaks of the boundary stood in their rough circle, their bark silvered by a moon that hadn’t yet risen high enough to be seen. No one else was in the park. She hadn’t passed a soul since the gate. The silence had a curious weight, as if the air itself was listening. She hesitated beside the nearest standing stone—a slab of oak turned fossil-hard, taller than she was—and the pendant throbbed twice, a demand. “All right,” she breathed, and her voice fell flat, absorbed by the moss and the leaf-litter. She stepped through the gap between the stones. The shift arrived not as a jolt but as a slide. The summer heat vanished, replaced by a September cool that belonged to a different hour. The wildflowers underfoot were wrong for the season: campion and foxglove and star-shaped blossoms she couldn’t name, all of them pale and half-open as if they had been caught mid-yawn. They released a scent like burnt sugar and wet iron. Above them, the trees leaned inward with branches that had never learned symmetry. Rory pushed her straight black hair behind her ears and stood still, cataloguing. The grove was a clearing—barely thirty feet across—ringed by more of the standing oaks. In the centre, a patch of clover that might have marked a long-forgotten hearth. Nothing moved. No wind touched the leaves, yet somewhere behind her a twig snapped with the crispness of a footstep. She spun. The path between the stones sat empty, a tunnel of dark leading back to the park. She counted to ten, watching the shadows for a second movement, but the shadows only stretched toward her as the moon finally hauled itself above the treeline. Its light was too yellow, like a lamp burning bad oil. The pendant pulsed again, a sharp spike of warmth that made her press a hand to her collarbone. She had worn the Heartstone for three months and it had never been a threat. Now the heat bordered on pain. “What do you want?” she asked the clearing. Her own voice came back at her a beat too late, flattened into a half-echo that didn’t belong in open air. She had the sudden, unwelcome thought that the grove was tasting the sound. Carter, she told herself, out-of-the-box thinking. You’re in a pocket realm. Time is unreliable. You walk in, you walk out. She set her jaw and stepped toward the centre, meaning to cross to the far side and prove she could. The clover rustled under her trainers, and with each step the wildflowers on the periphery seemed to turn their heads a little, tracking her passage like slow heliotropes. At the centre of the clearing she stopped again. The pendant was now hot enough that she could feel the shape of the crimson gem printed on her skin beneath her shirt. She lifted the chain to check for the glow, and as she did, a flicker of motion unspooled at the extreme left of her vision—a pale shape that had too many joints, sliding behind the trunk of the largest oak. She twisted her whole body that time, torch hand coming up. The beam of her phone’s light scoured the trunk and found nothing but bark-furrows and a single moth the colour of old bone. The moth beat its wings twice and then dropped straight down as if shot. Rory’s breath shortened. She forced it long again. Two years she had lived in London, had fled an ex who taught her fear like a second language, and she had promised herself she would never again let an unseen thing dictate how fast her heart beat. But the grove was undoing that promise stitch by stitch. A sound began. It crept in from the edge of audibility, a humming that could have been wind across a bottleneck except there was no wind. It had a tune, a lullaby that never resolved, and underneath it ran a whisper so faint it was almost the hiss of her own blood. The whisper formed a name. *Malphora.* Her stomach dropped. No one called her that. No one alive, at least. The name had surfaced months ago in a nightmare, a voice in the dark that had known things about her she had never spoken aloud. She had scribbled it in a journal and never said it again. The whisper came a second time, closer. *Malphora. We saw you coming.* Rory’s hands curled into fists. “We?” she said, and her voice stayed steady because she was angry now, angry at whatever game this was. “Show yourselves.” The grove laughed. Not a single voice—a susurrus of them, high and low, overlapping like fallen leaves. The sound had no source; it welled up from the clover, seeped from the standing stones. The pendant blazed, and she yanked the chain free of her shirt. The gem was glowing, a deep crimson heartbeat that painted her fingers in blood-coloured light. For the first time she felt the pendant tug toward something—not the stone beneath her feet, but the spaces between the oaks. At the southern boundary, one of the oaks seemed to shiver. Its bark rippled like a horse’s flank shaking off a fly. From behind it, a figure began to resolve. Tall. Antlered, or crowned with branches, she couldn’t tell which because the moonlight refused to settle on it. The shape had width but no depth, a silhouette cut from the static between stations. It stood perfectly still, and yet she had the overwhelming impression of many eyes, a patience that had been waiting since long before Cardiff, long before London, long before the Heartstone had been hung around her neck. Rory took a step back. Her heel crushed a campion flower, and the scent of burnt sugar intensified until she tasted it on her tongue. The antlered thing didn’t move, but the space between them shrank anyway—the clearing folding in on itself a fraction of an inch, the distance closing like a throat constricting. “I’m leaving,” she said, and the words were for herself as much as for it. She turned toward the gap in the stones. The path was gone. Not blocked—erased. A wall of seamless oak trunks stood where the boundary had been a minute earlier, their bark running with a sap that pulsed to the same rhythm as the pendant. Her phone’s torch flickered once and died, leaving her with only the moon and the ruby light from her chest. *Not yet,* the whispers said. A dozen voices, a choir of children and crones. *Not yet. You came to us. We’ve been so patient.* A touch ghosted the back of her neck. Cold and dry as a leaf-skeleton. She flinched and spun, and there was nothing there, but the feeling of being watched doubled and redoubled, and now she could see them—the things at the edges. Shapes that were never quite there when she looked directly. A hand with too many fingers withdrawing into the foxglove. A face that was only a smile, broad and crescent-shaped, melting into the bole of an oak. Footsteps that weren’t footsteps, but the sound of something pulling itself along the ground just beyond the ring of light. Her heart hammered, and the pendant hammered with it. The antlered figure still stood at the southern edge, motionless as ever, but she knew without knowing that it was closer than before. The temptation to run was a physical pressure in her legs. She clamped down on it. Running in a Fae-touched place was an invitation. Running meant chasing. Instead, she closed her eyes. The whispers surged, disappointed, hungry. She blocked them out and let her other senses sharpen: the iron-sugar scent, the false cold, the subtle wrongness of gravity that made her feel as if she were standing on a slight incline even though the ground was flat. The grove was a pocket, a fold in the world. Folds had seams. Seams could be torn. She opened her eyes. The antlered thing had moved—not a step, but a tilt of its head, a gesture of interest. Rory took a breath and uncurled her fist from the pendant. The gem was now too hot to touch for long, but she pressed her palm against it anyway, letting the pain ground her. “You don’t own me,” she said quietly. “You can’t have me just because I walked in.” The laughter this time was a single note, the sound of a harp-string plucked too hard. *Can’t we?* And then, in a voice that was almost her own: *You brought the key, Malphora. You carried it all this way.* The pendant pulsed so violently that the light flared through her fingers, and for half a heartbeat she saw the grove as it truly was: the trees, yes, but threaded through with something older, something vast and patient and woven through the roots like a second nervous system. The antlered figure was not separate from the oaks; it was the oaks, or they were it, a single dreaming consciousness that had opened an eye. The vision snapped away. Rory staggered, gasping. The path between the stones was back, but it was not empty. A shape blocked it—a girl, maybe eight years old, bare feet caked in moss, hair the colour of foxglove petals. She smiled a too-wide smile and raised a hand. Five fingers, then six, then seven, multiplying in a slow gesture. The child’s mouth moved, but the voice came from everywhere. *We only want to play.* Rory’s mind raced through every story she had ever read, every bar-side lecture Silas had ever given her about the Fae and their rules. Politeness. Names. Gifts. She locked her gaze on the child and gave nothing. Not her name, not her thanks, not her fear. The pendant’s heat was now a steady, searing pulse, as if the Heartstone itself was screaming. She understood, with the clarity that comes only when the rational mind has exhausted its options, that the grove had been calling the pendant since the moment it was forged. That she was not a trespasser; she was a delivery. She took one careful step backward, then another. The antlered presence had not moved, but the child-shape faded at the edges, her smile unspooling into a smear of moonlight. The whispers became a single sustained note, a chord of longing that vibrated in Rory’s molars. Her shoulder blades touched the bark of the standing stone she had passed on her way in. She had not reached it—the distance had simply folded, the grove spitting her out as if it couldn’t decide whether to hold or release. The pendant’s light dimmed to a sullen glow, and the heat began to recede. Beyond the stone ring, Richmond Park was still and ordinary. A distant aircraft blinked across the sky. The ordinary world, so close. But when she looked back through the gap, the grove was no longer empty. A dozen figures stood at the tree line, faint as watermarks. The antlered one lifted a hand—no, a branch, many-branched, tipped with something that might have been fingers or buds. It did not beckon. It waited. The child’s voice, the last to fade, brushed her ear as she stepped through the boundary. *You’ll come back. They always do.* Rory walked. She didn’t run. She counted her steps, one through a hundred, and when she reached the paved footpath the moon was high and white and ordinary. The pendant had gone cold against her skin. She stopped, turned off the path onto a bench, and sat with her hands pressed flat on her knees, breathing. For a long while she didn’t move. The certainty remained, lodged in her chest like a splinter: whatever had spoken to her in the grove was still there, still watching, still patient. And it had called her by a name she had never given anyone. Malphora. The name that had come in a nightmare. The name that meant something, something she couldn’t yet parse. She touched the pendant through her shirt. It felt like any other piece of silver, cold and still. She didn’t take it off. She didn’t throw it into the grass. She sat until the shivering stopped, and then she stood and walked back toward the lights of the city with the distinct, irrational feeling that something was walking beside her, just out of sight, matching her stride for stride.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
95.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2187
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.84% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2187
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"pulsed"
count4
1
word"rhythmic"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"echo"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count1
8
word"flicker"
count1
9
word"resolved"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count3
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"resolve"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"footsteps"
count2
15
word"raced"
count1
16
word"searing"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"vibrated"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"rhythmic"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"throbbed"
5"warmth"
6"echo"
7"could feel"
8"flicker"
9"resolved"
10"whisper"
11"stomach"
12"resolve"
13"flickered"
14"footsteps"
15"raced"
16"searing"
17"pulse"
18"vibrated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences167
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences167
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences169
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords42
totalWords2171
ratio0.019
matches
0"Malphora."
1"Malphora. We saw you coming."
2"Not yet,"
3"Not yet. You came to us. We’ve been so patient."
4"Can’t we?"
5"You brought the key, Malphora. You carried it all this way."
6"We only want to play."
7"You’ll come back. They always do."
97.22% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Carter, she told herself, out-of-the-box thinking."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount2147
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.42
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Carter2
Richmond2
Park2
September1
Heartstone3
London2
Rory9
Cardiff1
Fae-touched1
Malphora4
Silas1
Fae2
You6
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"September"
3"Heartstone"
4"Rory"
5"Silas"
6"You"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Fae-touched"
5"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like any other piece of silver, co"
61.81% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.382
wordCount2171
matches
0"not as a jolt but as a slide"
1"not the stone beneath her feet, but the spaces between the oaks"
2"not a step, but a tilt of its head, a gesture of interest"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences169
matches
0"walk, that the"
1"thought that the"
2"undoing that promise"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean49.34
std25.76
cv0.522
sampleLengths
096
177
224
379
461
556
639
78
834
968
1072
1148
1256
1357
141
1550
1612
1726
1882
19100
2054
2115
2264
2324
2499
2559
2667
2755
2816
2939
3074
3169
325
3346
3456
3545
3655
3722
3850
3916
406
4156
4264
4369
96.86% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences167
matches
0"been caught"
1"been hung"
2"was gone"
3"was forged"
69.65% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs358
matches
0"was listening"
1"was tasting"
2"was undoing"
3"was glowing"
4"were standing"
5"was screaming"
6"was walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences169
ratio0.095
matches
0"It had done that before—a low, rhythmic heat like a second heartbeat catching up to her own—but never this strongly, never this late, never when she had come without a clear purpose."
1"She hesitated beside the nearest standing stone—a slab of oak turned fossil-hard, taller than she was—and the pendant throbbed twice, a demand."
2"The grove was a clearing—barely thirty feet across—ringed by more of the standing oaks."
3"She lifted the chain to check for the glow, and as she did, a flicker of motion unspooled at the extreme left of her vision—a pale shape that had too many joints, sliding behind the trunk of the largest oak."
4"Not a single voice—a susurrus of them, high and low, overlapping like fallen leaves."
5"The sound had no source; it welled up from the clover, seeped from the standing stones."
6"For the first time she felt the pendant tug toward something—not the stone beneath her feet, but the spaces between the oaks."
7"The antlered thing didn’t move, but the space between them shrank anyway—the clearing folding in on itself a fraction of an inch, the distance closing like a throat constricting."
8"Not blocked—erased."
9"She flinched and spun, and there was nothing there, but the feeling of being watched doubled and redoubled, and now she could see them—the things at the edges."
10"The antlered thing had moved—not a step, but a tilt of its head, a gesture of interest."
11"The antlered figure was not separate from the oaks; it was the oaks, or they were it, a single dreaming consciousness that had opened an eye."
12"A shape blocked it—a girl, maybe eight years old, bare feet caked in moss, hair the colour of foxglove petals."
13"That she was not a trespasser; she was a delivery."
14"She had not reached it—the distance had simply folded, the grove spitting her out as if it couldn’t decide whether to hold or release."
15"The antlered one lifted a hand—no, a branch, many-branched, tipped with something that might have been fingers or buds."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2181
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount77
adverbRatio0.03530490600641907
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.007336084364970197
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences169
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences169
mean12.85
std9.63
cv0.749
sampleLengths
021
132
243
327
47
58
613
722
816
98
1011
1115
1230
1310
1413
1513
1614
1714
182
1918
202
2116
2227
2311
2418
2515
266
278
2821
2913
306
315
323
336
3420
3528
369
3723
3840
3911
4023
4114
423
435
4438
4510
463
4723
4826
495
38.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.27218934911242604
totalSentences169
uniqueOpeners46
21.65% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences154
matches
0"Instead, she closed her eyes."
ratio0.006
69.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences154
matches
0"It had done that before—a"
1"She had only known she"
2"She hadn’t passed a soul"
3"She hesitated beside the nearest"
4"she breathed, and her voice"
5"She stepped through the gap"
6"They released a scent like"
7"She counted to ten, watching"
8"Its light was too yellow,"
9"She had worn the Heartstone"
10"she asked the clearing"
11"Her own voice came back"
12"She had the sudden, unwelcome"
13"You’re in a pocket realm."
14"You walk in, you walk"
15"She set her jaw and"
16"She lifted the chain to"
17"She twisted her whole body"
18"She forced it long again."
19"It crept in from the"
ratio0.377
47.66% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount127
totalSentences154
matches
0"The pendant pulsed against her"
1"It had done that before—a"
2"She had only known she"
3"She hadn’t passed a soul"
4"The silence had a curious"
5"She hesitated beside the nearest"
6"she breathed, and her voice"
7"She stepped through the gap"
8"The shift arrived not as"
9"The summer heat vanished, replaced"
10"The wildflowers underfoot were wrong"
11"They released a scent like"
12"Rory pushed her straight black"
13"The grove was a clearing—barely"
14"The path between the stones"
15"She counted to ten, watching"
16"Its light was too yellow,"
17"The pendant pulsed again, a"
18"She had worn the Heartstone"
19"she asked the clearing"
ratio0.825
32.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences154
matches
0"Now the heat bordered on"
ratio0.006
34.16% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences92
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"The wildflowers underfoot were wrong for the season: campion and foxglove and star-shaped blossoms she couldn’t name, all of them pale and half-open as if they …"
1"In the centre, a patch of clover that might have marked a long-forgotten hearth."
2"The pendant pulsed again, a sharp spike of warmth that made her press a hand to her collarbone."
3"Her own voice came back at her a beat too late, flattened into a half-echo that didn’t belong in open air."
4"She lifted the chain to check for the glow, and as she did, a flicker of motion unspooled at the extreme left of her vision—a pale shape that had too many joint…"
5"The gem was glowing, a deep crimson heartbeat that painted her fingers in blood-coloured light."
6"It stood perfectly still, and yet she had the overwhelming impression of many eyes, a patience that had been waiting since long before Cardiff, long before Lond…"
7"A face that was only a smile, broad and crescent-shaped, melting into the bole of an oak."
8"Footsteps that weren’t footsteps, but the sound of something pulling itself along the ground just beyond the ring of light."
9"She blocked them out and let her other senses sharpen: the iron-sugar scent, the false cold, the subtle wrongness of gravity that made her feel as if she were s…"
10"The pendant’s heat was now a steady, searing pulse, as if the Heartstone itself was screaming."
11"She understood, with the clarity that comes only when the rational mind has exhausted its options, that the grove had been calling the pendant since the moment …"
12"The antlered one lifted a hand—no, a branch, many-branched, tipped with something that might have been fingers or buds."
13"The name that meant something, something she couldn’t yet parse."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, and the words were for herself as much as for it"
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
72.7422%