Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GGZFQ5Y45JF5TRVREYHV7

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The cold bit through Quinn’s knees as she crouched in the chamber. Damp. Underground. The air tasted of old stone and something metallic, like blood left too long on copper. “Ritual killing.” Eva Kowalski’s voice had that breathless academic quality she always got around dead things. “Look at the markings. Pheron’s third circle.” Quinn didn’t look. She looked at the body instead. Male, forties, expensive shoes scuffed. No wallet in sight, but his watch remained – a chunky stainless-steel thing that caught the portable lamp’s glare. Robbery didn’t fit. “You’re sure?” DS Pritchard asked from the archway. He’d taken off his hat, a sign of respect that Quinn found unnecessary. “I mean, it’s a locked room. No windows. Only one door, and we had to break the chain to get in.” “From inside,” Quinn said. “Ma’am?” She stood, brushing dirt from her knees. “The chain. It was looped through the handles from inside.” She pointed to the heavy iron links scattered by the door. “Pulled tight, padlocked. Someone locked themselves in.” Pritchard glanced at Eva. The redhead adjusted her glasses, tucking hair behind her ear. “That doesn’t preclude ritual suicide. Pheron’s texts describe voluntary sacrifice. The practitioner offers themselves to the shade-” “Shade.” Quinn’s voice was flat. “You mean a ghost.” “Not exactly. Shades are something else. Sentient energy given form by concentrated belief.” Quinn returned to the body. The man lay on his back, arms crossed over his chest. Neat. Too neat. No signs of a struggle, but his knuckles were bruised. Defensive wounds, maybe, but the dust around him told a different story – footprints were concentrated near the door, then a single set leading to the centre of the circle. His own, by the tread pattern. “No signs of forced entry,” she said, more to herself than the room. “No witness. No murder weapon. Just a bloke in a chalk circle with his arms folded.” “Could be a blade,” Pritchard offered. “Small, maybe. Wound’s hidden under his shirt.” “We’ll let the pathologist confirm.” Quinn knelt again. The victim’s collar was rumpled, but the rest of his clothes were pristine. His left shoe – polished leather, Italian make – had a small scuff on the toe. Recent. The chalk circle was clean except for where his body lay. If he’d struggled, there’d be smudges. Eva stepped closer, pointing to a symbol near the victim’s head. “That’s the binding sigil. It’s supposed to anchor the shade to the sacrifice. If you look at the alignment of the arcs, they’re oriented to magnetic north. That’s accurate. This was done with precision.” “Or copied from a book.” Quinn’s eyes traced the circle. The chalk was consistent, no breaks. But the thickness varied slightly – one section near the south-east edge was thinner, as if the artist had been rushing. Amateur hour. “I still think-” “Your job is to consult on the occult aspects, Eva. My job is to figure out who killed him and why.” Quinn straightened, pulling out her torch. The chamber was small, maybe four metres across, with a low brick ceiling. Shelves lined one wall, holding glass jars filled with cloudy liquid. Pickled specimens. The smell wasn’t blood. It was formaldehyde. “What is this place?” Pritchard asked. “Looks like a Victorian cold storage room. But those jars aren’t antiques.” Quinn trained the beam on the far corner. A workbench held soldering equipment, copper wire, a small brass compass in pieces. The face was etched with sigils, the casing verdigris-green. She walked over, careful not to disturb anything. The compass needle was missing. Two other half-finished devices lay scattered. A tool kit. Rubber gloves. Tinned solder. “He was repairing something,” Quinn said. Eva joined her, peering at the compass. “That’s Veil Market work. Shade artisan. See the sigils? Those are not meant for display. This compass detects supernatural rifts.” “So our victim was a fence for magical contraband.” “Or a collector. Some of these artefacts are valuable.” Quinn picked up a receipt from the bench. The paper was crisp, dated two days ago. *Brass wire, 2 metres. Silver powder, 1 oz. Veil Compass components.* Paid in cash. No shop name, just a PO box in Camden. “He was building a new one. Or fixing it.” She turned the receipt over. On the back, a phone number, written in pencil, partially smudged. A few digits were legible: 0207 555. Rest unreadable. Pritchard cleared his throat. “Detective, the pathologist’s team is here. They want to remove the body.” “Not yet.” Quinn crouched again, this time by the victim’s head. She moved carefully, avoiding the chalk circle. The man’s eyes were closed, but his mouth was slightly open. She shone the torch inside. No obvious injuries. Then she noticed the faint blue tint around his lips. Cyanosis. She smelled it then – a faint sweet odour, like burnt almonds. Mixed with the formaldehyde it was almost imperceptible. “Poison,” she said. “What?” Eva came closer. “There’s no sign of-” “Cyanide. Smell it. It’s faint, but it’s there.” Quinn stood, backing away from the circle. “He didn’t die from a ritual. He ingested something. The circle was drawn after he was already dead.” Pritchard frowned. “But the chain. Locked from inside.” “Someone locked him in after. Or he locked himself in before taking the poison, and then the killer added the circle as misdirection.” Quinn’s mind raced. “The bruises on his knuckles – he fought someone, but not here. Not in this room. There’s no displacement in the dust. He was dropped.” Eva looked pale. “Then the symbols... they were meant to look like a ritual to hide a murder?” “Looks like.” Quinn pulled out her phone, snapped photos of the remains, the workbench, the compass parts. “Pritchard, get forensics to sweep the place. I want every millimetre swabbed. And find out who owns this chamber. Check property records for the church above.” “Church?” “We entered through a crypt under St. Clement’s. The door was hidden behind an old altar. Someone knew this place existed.” She pocketed the receipt and turned to Eva. “You said Veil Market changes locations. How do you find it?” “You need a bone token. And a guide.” “Our victim had a receipt from a PO box in Camden. I want to know who owns it.” Eva nodded slowly. “I can make inquiries. Discreetly.” “Do it.” Quinn took one last look at the body. The neat, arranged posture. The closed eyes. The faint smile on his lips. Peaceful. He’d known what was coming. But the evidence whispered a different story. The scuffed shoe. The missing wallet. The fresh solder on the workbench. He’d been in the middle of something, and someone had stopped him. Under the body, she noticed a glint. She knelt again, carefully lifting the fabric of his sleeve. A small brass compass, like the one on the bench, lay tucked under his left armpit. The needle was still intact, trembling faintly, pointing directly at the north wall. Quinn used tweezers from her coat to retrieve it. The compass was warm to the touch, the needle spinning lazily now that it was free. “What does it point to?” Eva’s eyes widened. “A rift. Something close. Very close.” Quinn looked at the north wall. Solid brick. But behind it, there might be more than mortar and stone. “Get a crowbar,” she said. “We’re not done.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Quinn knelt again [again]"
1"Quinn crouched again [again]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.423
leniency0.846
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.077
71.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1219
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"carefully"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"lazily"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
2"slowly"
3"lazily"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1219
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"pristine"
count1
1
word"magnetic"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"unreadable"
count1
5
word"raced"
count1
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word"glint"
count1
highlights
0"pristine"
1"magnetic"
2"traced"
3"etched"
4"unreadable"
5"raced"
6"glint"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences107
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords11
totalWords1226
ratio0.009
matches
0"Brass wire, 2 metres. Silver powder, 1 oz. Veil Compass components."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
22.65% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions39
wordCount746
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.55
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Kowalski1
Pritchard6
Eva9
Italian1
Compass1
Paid1
Camden1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Kowalski"
2"Pritchard"
3"Eva"
4"Italian"
5"Compass"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore0.227
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1226
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean24.52
std17.01
cv0.694
sampleLengths
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236
342
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51
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731
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1065
1129
1213
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1539
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1942
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239
249
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2634
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318
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3518
3643
371
3840
398
4018
418
4229
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4446
4525
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479
4819
498
98.70% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"was rumpled"
1"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs127
matches
0"was coming"
37.82% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences136
ratio0.037
matches
0"No wallet in sight, but his watch remained – a chunky stainless-steel thing that caught the portable lamp’s glare."
1"Defensive wounds, maybe, but the dust around him told a different story – footprints were concentrated near the door, then a single set leading to the centre of the circle."
2"His left shoe – polished leather, Italian make – had a small scuff on the toe."
3"But the thickness varied slightly – one section near the south-east edge was thinner, as if the artist had been rushing."
4"She smelled it then – a faint sweet odour, like burnt almonds."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount744
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"other half-finished devices"
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.03494623655913978
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.012096774193548387
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean9.01
std6.77
cv0.751
sampleLengths
012
11
21
316
416
57
63
76
85
919
103
118
1213
1321
144
151
167
1721
187
194
2010
2117
225
234
2413
255
2611
271
282
2910
3030
316
3213
3316
346
357
368
3713
3816
391
4011
416
4211
4334
4410
456
4621
472
483
4927
74.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.47058823529411764
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners64
38.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then she noticed the faint"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences87
matches
0"She looked at the body"
1"He’d taken off his hat,"
2"She stood, brushing dirt from"
3"She pointed to the heavy"
4"His own, by the tread"
5"she said, more to herself"
6"His left shoe – polished"
7"It was formaldehyde."
8"She walked over, careful not"
9"She turned the receipt over"
10"She moved carefully, avoiding the"
11"She shone the torch inside."
12"She smelled it then –"
13"She pocketed the receipt and"
14"He’d known what was coming."
15"He’d been in the middle"
16"She knelt again, carefully lifting"
ratio0.195
57.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences87
matches
0"The cold bit through Quinn’s"
1"The air tasted of old"
2"Eva Kowalski’s voice had that"
3"Quinn didn’t look."
4"She looked at the body"
5"Robbery didn’t fit."
6"DS Pritchard asked from the"
7"He’d taken off his hat,"
8"She stood, brushing dirt from"
9"She pointed to the heavy"
10"Pritchard glanced at Eva."
11"The redhead adjusted her glasses,"
12"Quinn’s voice was flat"
13"Quinn returned to the body."
14"The man lay on his"
15"His own, by the tread"
16"she said, more to herself"
17"Quinn knelt again"
18"The victim’s collar was rumpled,"
19"His left shoe – polished"
ratio0.805
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"If he’d struggled, there’d be"
ratio0.011
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"No wallet in sight, but his watch remained – a chunky stainless-steel thing that caught the portable lamp’s glare."
1"But the thickness varied slightly – one section near the south-east edge was thinner, as if the artist had been rushing."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, more to herself than the room"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.135
leniency0.269
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.1068%