Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GMBBJBH6RT601HM0RHJC0

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Duration:
1m 39s
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$0.013859
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Together

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Her quarry was thirty yards ahead and gaining ground. Detective Harlow Quinn rounded the corner onto Old Compton Street hard enough that her leather soles skidded on rain-slick pavement. The night’s downpour had turned Soho into a smear of neon reflections—ruby red from the noodle shop sign, acid green from The Raven’s Nest across the way, amber from the streetlamps bleeding through the drizzle. She registered the bar’s distinctive sign as she passed, a familiar landmark she’d walked by a hundred times on cases, but12 “Suspect southbound on Dean Street toward Shaftesbury,” she barked into the radio clipped at her shoulder. “Request immediate backup.” Nothing but static in return. The rain was killing the signal, or dispatch was having another one of their nights. Didn’t matter. She’d been in tougher spots without a net. The man she was chasing—mid-thirties, gaunt, a grey hoodie plastered to his frame—had bolted from a break-in on Berwick Street with a messenger bag full of something that jingled. Jewelry, her initial assessment had said. But Quinn had glimpsed the contents when the suspect stumbled going over a bin: glass vials, amber liquid sloshing inside them, anded in tissue paper stained dark at the corners. Nothing a jeweler would stock. Nothing she recognized. She pushed harder, her lungs burning. Forty-one wasn’t old, but eighteen years of foot chases left their receipts in the cartilage. The watch on her left wrist—her father’s, the leather softened to the texture of old skin—read half past eleven. The streets were thinner than they should’ve been for a Friday. The rain, maybe. Or something else. She’d learned to trust the prickle at the back of her neck, and it was screaming now. The suspect cut left into an alley she didn’t know. Narrow. Filled with dumpsters and the wet-metal stink of restaurant exhaust. Quinn slowed at the mouth of it, one hand going instinctively to the extendable baton on her belt. Alleys like this were where partners got killed. *Like Morris.* The thought came unbidden, sharp as a splinter, and she shoved it down where it belonged. She entered. The alley dead-ended at a maintenance door set into the brickwork. The door was ajar, a sliver of darkness beyond. No other exits. The suspect was either inside or she’d lost him entirely. Quinn drew her baton and extended it with a flick. The click was reassuring in the wet quiet. “Metropolitan Police,” she called into the gap. “You’re trapped. Come out with your hands where I can see them.” Silence. Then, from somewhere below, a metallic clatter. Footsteps on corrugated steel. The door opened onto a service stairwell heading down. Far, far down. The kind of descent that didn’t make sense for a kitchen or a cellar. Quinn shouldered through and started descending, her footsteps ringing in the enclosed space. The walls were old tile, cracked, stained with decades of damp. After two flights, the stairs turned and kept going. After four, the air temperature dropped sharply. She could smell something now: ozone, like the aftermath of a lightning strike, and underneath it a sweet decay she associated with Victorian cemeteries. She should stop. She should wait for backup, cordon the entrance, call in Tactical. Every procedure manual she’d trained on said so. Every instinct she’d honed since Morris died told her the same. She kept going. The stairwell emptied into a vast underground chamber—an abandoned Tube station, she realized, the architecture unmistakable once her eyes adjusted. But this wasn’t any disused station she’d seen in her files. The platform signs were204 stripped away. The tiled walls were draped in fabric, tapestries and canvas sheets that turned the space into a warren of makeshift stalls. Lanterns hung from the arched ceiling on chains, burning with a light that was too steady and too blue to be gas or electric. And figures moved everywhere. Dozens of them. More. A crowd thick enough to lose yourself in. *The Veil Market.* She’d heard whispers. Every cop who worked vice or organised crime in central London heard whispers eventually. A floating black market that catered to the strange, the wealthy, and the desperate. It moved every full moon, they said. It required a token to enter. It55 wasn’t supposed to exist. Quinn had always filed those whispers under superstitious nonsense. She stood at the base of the stairs,14 rain still dripping from her coat onto floor tiles that showed through the rugs—original tiles, pre-war, geometric patterns in faded green and cream. The crowd parted around her with the smooth indifference of Londoners avoiding eye contact, but40 but something about their movements16 was just wrong. Several of themhooded cloaks had that swallowed their silhouettes. One vendor’s stall displayed rows of glass jars holding things suspended in fluid that were distinctly not human organs and distinctly not animal either. A woman in a sharp pinstripe suit walked past leading something on a leash that Quinn’s mind tried very hard to reinterpret as a hairless dog and failed. Twenty yards ahead, the suspect in the grey hoodie was shoving through the crowd toward a deeper part of the market where the stalls gave way to204 makeshift tents and shadowed alcoves. He glanced back. Their eyes met across the blue-lit chaos, and Quinn saw something in his face that she hadn’t expected: terror. Not the furtive panic of a cornered burglar. Real, marrow-deep terror. The look of a man who had stolen from something he was now desperately afraid of displeasing. He disappeared into the darkness between two tents. Quinn stood at the edge of the market proper. The smell of ozone was stronger here. The05 conversations around her were happening in languages she didn’t recognize, and the geometry of the station seemed subtly wrong, the arches206 just slightly too high, the platform edges crumbling into a darkness that felt less like absence of light and more like presence of something else. She thought about Morris. The alley in Whitechapel. The call that had come too late. The way the crime scene photos had shown patterns in the blood that no blade could have made. The way her superiors had closed the case in three weeks and told her very firmly to stop asking questions. She thought about the vials in the suspect’s bag. Amber liquid. Dark-stained tissue. Quinn checked her radio one last time. Dead. She26 clipped it back to her shoulder and adjusted her grip on the baton. Her backup wasn’t coming. Her procedure manual had nothing for this. But18 she had a suspect in flight, evidence in play, and the same bone-deep certainty that had driven her for eighteen years: the truth was204 the truth, no matter how strange the light it hid in. She stepped into the market. The crowd absorbed her instantly, bodies pressing close and then recoiling once they registered the badge at her belt, the baton in her hand, the raw human authority she carried like a suit of armour. Reactions varied—wariness, amusement, something that might have been respect. A vendor with black-stained fingernails and eyes the color of spoiled milk grinned at her as she passed. “Lost, little copper?” the woman rasped, her voice coming from somewhere lower than her throat should allow. Quinn didn’t break stride. “Where did he go?” The vendor’s grin widened. “Which direction do you want to be13?” Quinn kept moving, deeper into the labyrinth of stalls. The lanterns grew sparser here. She passed a table of weapons that looked forged from bone, a cage holding something that chittered wetly in the shadows, and finally a tent of thick canvas that blocked the passage entirely except for a single flap held open by a hand. A hand she recognized. Tomás Herrera stepped into the light. Former paramedic, NHS stripped license, current mystery. His file had crossed her desk six months ago during an investigation into stolen hospital supplies, but she’d never been able to make anything stick. Warm brown eyes in an olive face,12 a Saint Christopher medallion glinting at his throat, a scar running the length of his left forearm that she knew came from a knife attack in Seville, where he was born. He looked20 tired. He looked like a man who had been expecting someone else. “Detective Quinn,” he said,16 and his accent carried the lilt of southern Spain. “You’re a long way from procedure.” She stopped three feet from him. Close enough to strike if necessary. “You know me.” “I know who you’re chasing,”205 he corrected. “And I know that if you follow him into the deep market, you won’t come out. Not as yourself.” “Is that a threat?” “It’s a medical opinion.” He held her gaze without flinching. “The man you’re after stole supplies from someone who doesn’t forgive. Supplies he’ll try to sell to the kind of buyer who shops down here. If you go after him now, the people he stole from will find you both. And they won’t distinguish between a thief and a police officer.” Quinn32 studied him. The scar. The medallion. The exhaustion in his posture that spoke to someone who had been stitching up problems in the dark for a very long time. “You provide medical care for people like the ones in this market,” she said. It wasn’t a question. Tomás inclined his head slightly. “Among others.” “Then you know what’s in those vials.” Something flickered across his face. Fear? No, something older. Grief. “I know,” he said quietly, “that06 the40 there are forces that your procedures can’t address and your handcuffs can’t hold. I know you’ve lost people to them before. Detective Morris.” The name hit her like a body blow. Quinn’s baton rose before she could stop herself. “What do you know about Morris?” “I know that the crime scene photos didn’t show everything. I know that14 the pathologist wrote a 15 report that got buried.” He paused, and when he spoke again, his voice was gentler than she was equipped to handle right now. “I know40 you’ve been looking for35 for answers for three years and48 finding only silences. Those answers are here, Detective. But not tonight. Not like this.” Beyond him, in the darkness of the deep market, something roared. The sound was17 low and resonant, felt in the chest more than heard, and every lantern in the station flickered simultaneously. Every figure in the crowd went still for one synchronized heartbeat before the market resumed its murmuring commerce, faster now, urgent. “Your suspect just made contact with his buyers,” Tomás said. “You’ve got maybe ten minutes before the thieves find them. And us.” Quinn stared into the06 the darkness beyond him. Every fiber of her training said go forward. Every instinct that had kept her alive for eighteen years on the force, that had whispered warnings in alleys and interview rooms and darkened stairwells, said listen to the medic with the medallion. “I need55 answers,” she said. Tomás nodded. “Come back with a bone token on the next full moon. I’ll show you what I can.” He reached into his pocket and pulled out something small and pale, holding it out to her. A fragment of carved bone, no bigger than a coin, etched with a symbol her eyes didn’t want to focus on. “This gets you past the entrance. One time use. Don’t lose it.” Quinn took the token. It was warm against her palm, pulsing faintly like a second heart. Another roar split the air, closer this time. The lanterns guttered. “Go,” Tomás said. Harlow Quinn was many things—stubborn, precise, haunted—but she was not stupid. She turned her back on the04 the deep market and began the long climb up the service stairwell into the rain-soaked streets above, the bone token24 token heavy in her pocket and the48 the promise of answers heavier still. Behind her, Tomás Herrera pulled the canvas tent flap closed, and the market swallowed him whole. When she emerged into the alley off Old Compton Street ten minutes later, drenched and silent, the maintenance door was55 gone. Just brickwork, old and unbroken,40 the mortar40 weathered by decades. No trace of the stairwell behind it. Quinn stood in the rain and turned the token over in her fingers. The Green neon of The Raven’s Nest glowed at the end of the alley, reflected16 in puddles and wet cobblestones. She had a lot of questions. She had exactly thirty days until the next full moon. She12 started walking.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.071
85.60% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2083
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count3
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
highlights
0"sharply"
1"very"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2083
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count2
3
word"aftermath"
count1
4
word"electric"
count1
5
word"firmly"
count1
6
word"glinting"
count1
7
word"lilt"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count2
9
word"synchronized"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"silence"
2"footsteps"
3"aftermath"
4"electric"
5"firmly"
6"glinting"
7"lilt"
8"flickered"
9"synchronized"
10"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences159
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences159
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences175
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords5
totalWords2072
ratio0.002
matches
0"Like Morris."
1"The Veil Market."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"It moved every full moon, they said."
99.52% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1783
uniqueNames26
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn18
Old2
Compton2
Street3
Soho1
Raven2
Nest2
Berwick1
Friday1
Silence1
Victorian1
Tactical1
Morris3
Tube1
Veil1
London1
Londoners1
Whitechapel1
Herrera2
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville1
Spain1
Tomás6
Green1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Morris"
5"Veil"
6"Londoners"
7"Herrera"
8"Saint"
9"Christopher"
10"Tomás"
places
0"Old"
1"Compton"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"Berwick"
5"Tactical"
6"London"
7"Whitechapel"
8"Seville"
9"Spain"
globalScore0.995
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a man who had been expecting"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2072
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean36.35
std29.85
cv0.821
sampleLengths
09
176
219
330
473
574
665
72
833
918
1019
1112
1290
1333
143
1598
1652
179
18115
1982
208
2163
2253
2313
2469
255
2679
278
2811
2957
304
3190
3219
3315
3426
354
3661
3730
3818
397
407
4140
4222
4367
4453
4522
4649
475
4869
4916
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences159
matches
0"got killed"
1"were draped"
2"was equipped"
35.68% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs284
matches
0"was killing"
1"was having"
2"was chasing"
3"was screaming"
4"was shoving"
5"were happening"
6"wasn’t coming"
28.57% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences175
ratio0.04
matches
0"The night’s downpour had turned Soho into a smear of neon reflections—ruby red from the noodle shop sign, acid green from The Raven’s Nest across the way, amber from the streetlamps bleeding through the drizzle."
1"The man she was chasing—mid-thirties, gaunt, a grey hoodie plastered to his frame—had bolted from a break-in on Berwick Street with a messenger bag full of something that jingled."
2"The watch on her left wrist—her father’s, the leather softened to the texture of old skin—read half past eleven."
3"The stairwell emptied into a vast underground chamber—an abandoned Tube station, she realized, the architecture unmistakable once her eyes adjusted."
4"She stood at the base of the stairs,14 rain still dripping from her coat onto floor tiles that showed through the rugs—original tiles, pre-war, geometric patterns in faded green and cream."
5"Reactions varied—wariness, amusement, something that might have been respect."
6"Harlow Quinn was many things—stubborn, precise, haunted—but she was not stupid."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1574
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"Real, marrow-deep terror."
1"same bone-deep certainty"
adverbCount49
adverbRatio0.031130876747141042
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.009529860228716646
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences175
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences175
mean11.84
std10.11
cv0.853
sampleLengths
09
120
235
321
416
53
65
715
82
98
1029
116
1230
135
143
156
1615
1719
1811
193
203
2117
2210
231
2410
2518
268
2718
282
2911
309
313
3210
3310
348
357
3612
371
387
394
409
413
4214
4313
4411
459
467
4724
483
4911
59.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.4228571428571429
totalSentences175
uniqueOpeners74
46.95% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences142
matches
0"Then, from somewhere below, a"
1"Just brickwork, old and unbroken,40" 1/1/2040, 12:00:00 AM
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences142
matches
0"Her quarry was thirty yards"
1"She registered the bar’s distinctive"
2"she barked into the radio"
3"She’d been in tougher spots"
4"She pushed harder, her lungs"
5"She’d learned to trust the"
6"she called into the gap"
7"She could smell something now:"
8"She should stop."
9"She should wait for backup,"
10"She kept going."
11"It moved every full moon,"
12"It required a token to"
13"She stood at the base"
14"He glanced back."
15"Their eyes met across the"
16"He disappeared into the darkness"
17"She thought about Morris."
18"She thought about the vials"
19"Her backup wasn’t coming."
ratio0.261
48.03% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount117
totalSentences142
matches
0"Her quarry was thirty yards"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn rounded the"
2"The night’s downpour had turned"
3"She registered the bar’s distinctive"
4"she barked into the radio"
5"Nothing but static in return."
6"The rain was killing the"
7"She’d been in tougher spots"
8"The man she was chasing—mid—thirties,"
9"Jewelry, her initial assessment had"
10"Nothing a jeweler would stock."
11"Nothing she recognized."
12"She pushed harder, her lungs"
13"The watch on her left"
14"The streets were thinner than"
15"The rain, maybe."
16"She’d learned to trust the"
17"The suspect cut left into"
18"Quinn slowed at the mouth"
19"Alleys like this were where"
ratio0.824
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
ratio0
6.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The man she was chasing—mid-thirties, gaunt, a grey hoodie plastered to his frame—had bolted from a break-in on Berwick Street with a messenger bag full of some…"
1"Quinn shouldered through and started descending, her footsteps ringing in the enclosed space."
2"Lanterns hung from the arched ceiling on chains, burning with a light that was too steady and too blue to be gas or electric."
3"Every cop who worked vice or organised crime in central London heard whispers eventually."
4"A floating black market that catered to the strange, the wealthy, and the desperate."
5"The look of a man who had stolen from something he was now desperately afraid of displeasing."
6"The05 conversations around her were happening in languages she didn’t recognize, and the geometry of the station seemed subtly wrong, the arches206 just slightl…"
7"But18 she had a suspect in flight, evidence in play, and the same bone-deep certainty that had driven her for eighteen years: the truth was204 the truth, no mat…"
8"Reactions varied—wariness, amusement, something that might have been respect."
9"She passed a table of weapons that looked forged from bone, a cage holding something that chittered wetly in the shadows, and finally a tent of thick canvas tha…"
10"The exhaustion in his posture that spoke to someone who had been stitching up problems in the dark for a very long time."
11"Every instinct that had kept her alive for eighteen years on the force, that had whispered warnings in alleys and interview rooms and darkened stairwells, said …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.071
82.1879%