Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GMRWXM8KKCBK4PP33ZN9P

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came at a quarter past midnight. Not the casual rap of a drunk neighbour or the insistent buzz of a delivery. Three sharp knocks. Measured. Deliberate. The kind of knock that knew exactly who it was looking for. Ptolemy hissed from his perch on the windowsill. The tabby's ears flattened against his skull, his tail a bristled question mark. I set down my takeaway container, the noodles already cold. The deadbolts were slid home, all three of them, but my hand still hesitated over the brass latch. *Don't be paranoid. London's full of people who knock at odd hours.* London was also full of people who knocked and then did terrible things once you let them in. Eva's research notes covered the coffee table like a paper mosaic, and if anyone from the wrong side of town saw what she'd been digging into— The knock came again. Harder. "Open up, Rory." My blood turned to ice water. That voice. That particular lilt of French tucked beneath clipped English consonants. I hadn't heard it in two years, but it lived somewhere deep in my bones, coiled and waiting. *Lucien.* I pulled back the bolts. The chain rattled against the doorframe. When the door swung open, he stood in the dim hallway light looking exactly as I remembered and nothing like I wanted him to be. Slicked-back platinum hair catching the yellow glow. Charcoal suit immaculate despite the hour. The ivory-handled cane gripped in his right hand, knuckles white. And those eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on me with an intensity that made me want to slam the door and slide every bolt back into place. "Late for takeaway." His gaze flicked past me to the cooling noodles. "Or early. Depends on your relationship with dinner." "What do you want, Lucien?" "A moment." He leaned on his cane, shifting weight. "Preferably inside, where the walls have ears I've already paid off." "You think I'd let you in?" "I think you've already let me in." He nodded toward the open door behind me. "Three deadbolts and you opened for me. That's not nothing." *Bastard.* Always reading the room, always twisting the details into his favour. "You have sixty seconds." I stepped aside, just enough. "Then you're out." The flat swallowed him whole. He moved past me, close enough that I caught the scent of expensive cologne and something smokier beneath it, something that clung to his clothes like a second skin. He surveyed Eva's cluttered living room with the practiced disinterest of someone cataloguing exits, weaknesses, points of interest. "You're still delivering for Yu-Fei's." "Still stalking me?" "Still paying attention." He settled into the armchair by the window, the one with the broken spring that sagged left. He didn't wince. "You look well." *Liar.* My reflection in the microwave's glass showed dark circles and tangled hair. I looked like I'd been dragged through three shifts and a breakup. "Forty seconds." "Straight to business then." He reached into his jacket, slow and deliberate, and pulled out a manila envelope. The paper was worn at the edges, creased from folding and refolding. "I need your help." I laughed. The sound came out hollow. "You have a funny way of asking for favours." "This isn't a favour." He tossed the envelope onto the coffee table. It landed against a stack of Eva's research, sending a few pages skittering. "It's a warning." "I don't want your warnings." "You'll want this one." I didn't move. The envelope sat there like a dead thing, promising trouble I didn't need. My life had been quiet since I'd left Cardiff. Quiet and small and safe. No abusive exes. No supernatural entanglements. Just noodles and deliveries and the weight of pretending I wasn't running from everything. "Pick it up, Rory." "Or what?" "Or I stay here until you do." He settled deeper into the chair, crossing one leg over the other. "I can be patient. You know this." *Two years.* Two years since I'd walked out of his life, since I'd told him I never wanted to see him again, since I'd let him believe I was just another human too scared to deal with what he was. The truth was simpler. I wasn't scared of what he was. I was scared of what I wanted to become when I was around him. I snatched the envelope. The paper tore under my fingers, rough and impatient. Inside were photographs. Five of them. The first showed Eva, laughing outside the British Library, a stack of books tucked under her arm. The second showed her walking Ptolemy on a leash through Spitalfields Market. The third— I stopped breathing. The third showed a man in a dark coat, his face obscured by a fedora's brim, standing outside the flat on Brick Lane. The same flat I was standing in right now. "Who is this?" "That's what I need your help finding out." The fourth photograph showed Eva's door, the numbers 2B visible in the frame. The fifth showed a symbol carved into the wood. A crescent moon wrapped around an inverted cross. Recognition flickered cold and sharp. "Evan." The name left my mouth like poison. Lucien's expression didn't change, but something shifted in his mismatched gaze. "Your ex is more connected than you told me." "I told you he was dangerous." "You told me he was an arsehole who couldn't take no for an answer." Lucien leaned forward, the cane's tip tapping the floor once. "You didn't tell me he was a cultist." "I didn't know." But even as I said it, pieces clicked into place. Evan's late nights. The books he kept locked in his study. The way his eyes went distant when I asked where he'd been. "I didn't want to know." "And yet here we are." The photographs trembled in my hands. Eva's face stared up at me, oblivious, trusting, unaware that a man from my past had found his way to our door. "Why do you care?" The question came out sharper than I intended. "You and I ended badly. You could have sent a text, a warning. You didn't have to come yourself." Lucien stood. The cane took his weight, but there was nothing frail about the way he moved. He closed the distance between us until I could see the fine lines at the corners of his mismatched eyes, could count the silver threads woven through his platinum hair. "I came myself," he said, "because I couldn't bear to let anyone else deliver this news." "Don't." "Don't what?" "Don't pretend you still have feelings." I stepped back, putting the coffee table between us. "We're done. We've been done." "Are we?" He tilted his head, and the ghost of a smile played at his lips. "You opened the door." "That doesn't mean anything." "It means you're still curious." He tapped his cane against the floor again, a soft tick-tock rhythm. "It means when you see trouble coming, you look me up. Even if you hate that you do." I wanted to argue. I wanted to throw him out and burn the photographs and pretend none of this was happening. But the symbol on Eva's door burned in my memory, and the weight of all the things I'd left unsaid sat heavy in my chest. "What's your plan?" My voice came out steadier than I felt. "I thought you'd never ask."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"I stepped aside [aside]"
1"I stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.078
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1233
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1233
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"mosaic"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"intensity"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"weight"
count4
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"mosaic"
2"lilt"
3"intensity"
4"flicked"
5"weight"
6"flickered"
7"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences93
matches
0"was scared"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences127
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords17
totalWords1231
ratio0.014
matches
0"Don't be paranoid. London's full of people who knock at odd hours."
1"Lucien."
2"Bastard."
3"Liar."
4"Two years."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount946
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.74
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
London2
French1
English1
Eva7
Cardiff1
Two2
British1
Library1
Ptolemy2
Spitalfields1
Market1
Brick1
Lane1
Lucien4
Evan1
persons
0"French"
1"Eva"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Evan"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Two"
3"British"
4"Library"
5"Spitalfields"
6"Brick"
7"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like I'd been dragged through thre"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1231
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean19.23
std14.88
cv0.774
sampleLengths
08
132
221
328
412
544
65
73
86
930
101
1136
1249
1320
145
1520
166
1725
1812
1912
2052
215
223
2326
2425
252
2634
2716
2828
295
304
3150
324
332
3426
3540
3625
3713
3837
393
4032
413
428
4330
445
458
4620
476
4832
4941
93.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences93
matches
0"were slid"
1"been dragged"
2"was worn"
43.14% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs170
matches
0"was looking"
1"wasn't running"
2"was standing"
3"was happening"
75.37% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences127
ratio0.024
matches
0"Eva's research notes covered the coffee table like a paper mosaic, and if anyone from the wrong side of town saw what she'd been digging into—"
1"And those eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on me with an intensity that made me want to slam the door and slide every bolt back into place."
2"The third—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount951
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.026288117770767613
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002103049421661409
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean9.69
std7.23
cv0.746
sampleLengths
08
115
23
31
41
512
68
713
810
918
103
119
1218
1326
144
151
163
176
182
1910
2018
211
225
236
2425
257
266
2710
2826
2912
308
315
329
3311
346
3515
3610
3712
389
393
405
4129
4218
435
443
4520
463
473
4813
4912
48.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.3858267716535433
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners49
39.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"Just noodles and deliveries and"
ratio0.012
77.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences84
matches
0"I set down my takeaway"
1"My blood turned to ice"
2"I hadn't heard it in"
3"I pulled back the bolts."
4"His gaze flicked past me"
5"He leaned on his cane,"
6"He nodded toward the open"
7"I stepped aside, just enough"
8"He moved past me, close"
9"He surveyed Eva's cluttered living"
10"He settled into the armchair"
11"He didn't wince."
12"I looked like I'd been"
13"He reached into his jacket,"
14"He tossed the envelope onto"
15"It landed against a stack"
16"I didn't move."
17"My life had been quiet"
18"He settled deeper into the"
19"I wasn't scared of what"
ratio0.357
49.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences84
matches
0"The knock came at a"
1"The kind of knock that"
2"Ptolemy hissed from his perch"
3"The tabby's ears flattened against"
4"I set down my takeaway"
5"The deadbolts were slid home,"
6"London's full of people who"
7"London was also full of"
8"Eva's research notes covered the"
9"The knock came again."
10"My blood turned to ice"
11"That particular lilt of French"
12"I hadn't heard it in"
13"I pulled back the bolts."
14"The chain rattled against the"
15"Charcoal suit immaculate despite the"
16"The ivory-handled cane gripped in"
17"His gaze flicked past me"
18"He leaned on his cane,"
19"He nodded toward the open"
ratio0.821
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He moved past me, close enough that I caught the scent of expensive cologne and something smokier beneath it, something that clung to his clothes like a second …"
1"It landed against a stack of Eva's research, sending a few pages skittering."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Lucien leaned, the cane's tip tapping the floor once"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.039
leniency0.078
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.9365%