Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GTTXBRBV3CWNA37THPK9F

Run Details

Duration:
1m 57s
Cost:
$0.004286
Provider:
DeepSeek

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain began just after dusk, a slanting silver sheet that turned Soho’s streets into mirrors. Aurora shouldered through the doors of The Raven’s Nest, and the green hum of the neon sign outside followed her in, a low electric whisper against the wet wool of her coat. She shook the damp from her hair—black, straight, cropped at the shoulders—and let her eyes adjust to the dim. The bar smelled of aged oak and something bitter, like old newspapers soaked in whisky. Maps covered the walls, their edges curled, their continents yellowed and cracking. Black-and-white photographs of men in fedoras and women with sharp lipstick crowded the spaces between. A fan turned slow overhead, chasing shadows across the floor. She hadn’t meant to come here. The rain had driven her, a sudden downpour that drowned her delivery route and left her soaked through the thin jacket she’d grabbed in a rush. The Golden Empress was three streets away, but her bicycle sat tangled at the curb, and her phone was dead. The Nest’s green light had cut through the storm like a half-remembered beacon. A man stood behind the bar, polishing a glass with a rag that looked older than the building. His hair was auburn threaded with grey, neat as a soldier’s, and a trimmed beard followed the line of his jaw. He moved with a stillness that felt deliberate, each gesture measured. When he shifted his weight, Aurora caught the hitch—a slight drag in his left leg as he turned. Silas Blackwood didn’t look up at the sound of the door. He set the glass on a shelf and spoke to the air between them. ‘Kitchen’s closed. Bar stays open another hour.’ Aurora’s voice came out steadier than she felt. ‘Still pouring the good stuff, or have you switched to petrol?’ The rag stopped moving. Silas lifted his head, and the light caught his eyes—hazel, with flecks of green near the pupil. For a moment, nothing. Then a crease appeared between his brows, a tiny fault line in his composure. ‘Laila?’ The name hit the air like a stone dropped into still water. Aurora felt her spine straighten. No one called her that. Not since she was fifteen and still thought the world might make sense. ‘Rory,’ she said. ‘It’s Rory now. Been a long time, Silas.’ He leaned the rag over his shoulder and braced both hands on the bar. The silver signet ring on his right hand gleamed. ‘Twenty years? No, you were a scrap of a thing last I saw you. Legs like matchsticks and that dreadful Welsh accent you got from your mother.’ ‘Still got it. The accent, not the matchsticks.’ She stepped closer, and the lamplight caught the small crescent scar on her left wrist, pale against her skin. Silas noticed. She saw his gaze drop to it and then flick back to her face, cataloguing the changes—the sharper cheekbones, the deeper set of her bright blue eyes, the way she held her shoulders like someone expecting a blow. ‘Your father didn’t mention you’d be in London.’ ‘My father doesn’t know.’ The words fell between them, heavy with all the things unstated. Silas reached for a bottle without being asked. He poured two fingers of something amber into a clean glass and slid it across the bar. ‘On the house. Consider it a late coming-of-age gift.’ Aurora wrapped her fingers around the glass but didn’t drink. The whisky smelled like peat and smoke, a scent that dug up memories she’d buried under years of careful forgetting. She remembered this bar from childhood visits—tucked in a corner while her father and Silas talked in low voices, the clink of ice cubes like a private language. She’d drawn on napkins with a stubby pencil the bartender gave her, sketching dragons and castles while the men discussed things she wasn’t meant to hear. Back then, Silas moved without a limp, and his laugh came easy. ‘You look different,’ she said. ‘Age does that. So does a misstep in Prague.’ He tapped his left knee with the knuckle of his ring finger. ‘Titanium plate. Sets off alarms at airports and predicts the rain better than the Met Office.’ ‘I meant the quiet. You used to fill a room.’ Silas’s expression flickered—something almost gentle, then gone. ‘Rooms get smaller when you’ve spent years in the kind of silence that listens back.’ Aurora took a sip of the whisky. It burned a path down her throat, and she let it ground her. Outside, the rain drummed against the windows, and a car sloshed past on the cobblestones. The bar was empty except for them and a man in the far corner nursing a pint and staring at his phone with the glassy-eyed focus of someone avoiding home. ‘You still in the game?’ she asked. ‘Or does the Spymaster just polish glasses now?’ Silas knew what she was asking. He’d been MI6 when she was a child, a shadow her father trusted with secrets heavier than a young girl could understand. She used to imagine him in foreign cities, speaking in codes and vanishing into crowds. The man behind the bar now seemed smaller, more solid. Realer. ‘Retired,’ he said. ‘The Nest keeps me busy. The occasional consultation, the odd lost soul wandering in from the rain.’ He paused, and his eyes held hers. ‘Speaking of which.’ Aurora set the glass down. The whisky left a ring of amber on the wood, and she traced it with her fingertip. ‘I left Cardiff two years ago. Ended up here.’ ‘Here as in London, or here as in this bar?’ ‘Both. I work a few streets over. Delivery girl for a Chinese place.’ Silas’s lips pressed into a line. He didn’t say what she saw in his face—that she was Brendan Carter’s daughter, that she’d been studying law, that this was not the life she’d been meant for. Instead, he refilled her glass, though she hadn’t asked. ‘Your father would worry.’ ‘My father worries about headlines and case files. He doesn’t know I left the university. He doesn’t know about Evan.’ She said the name like it was a rotten thing she’d stepped in. ‘He doesn’t know I’m in London, sleeping in a flat above a diner and spending my days on a bike in the rain.’ The silence that followed was thick with everything Silas didn’t ask. Who Evan was. What he’d done. Why she’d run. The questions hung unspoken, and she was grateful for it. The scar on her wrist pulsed with a phantom ache, a memory of a slammed door and a broken bottle and a night she’d rather forget. ‘Men like that,’ Silas said finally, ‘they leave marks you can’t see.’ Aurora looked at him sharply. ‘How do you know it was a man?’ ‘Because I’ve seen the shape of it in your shoulders. You flinched when the door blew shut. You keep your back to the wall.’ She hadn’t realized she’d chosen the stool at the bar’s end, where the wall was at her spine and the whole room spread before her. Instinct, bred from two years of watching shadows and learning to listen for footsteps on stairs. ‘I got out,’ she said. ‘That’s what matters.’ ‘Did you?’ The question wasn’t unkind. It was surgical, the way he might have asked an agent if they’d truly shaken a tail or just stopped looking over their shoulder. Aurora felt the weight of it settle in her chest. ‘Some days I think so. Other days I’ll catch a reflection in a window and not recognize myself. That was never me. But then I wonder if that me was ever real.’ Silas took her glass and drank from it himself, a deliberate act that blurred the line between host and confidant. ‘We all become strangers to ourselves. The trick is deciding which stranger you want to be.’ The clock on the wall ticked past eleven. The man in the corner folded his phone and shuffled out into the rain, leaving a damp patch on his stool. Silas moved to lock the door, his limp more pronounced after standing so long. The bolt slid home with a solid clunk. ‘You knew my father before the bar,’ Aurora said. ‘Before the title and the big cases.’ ‘I knew him when he was just a scrappy Irishman with a talent for arguing and a girl from Cardiff who’d agreed to marry him. We ran in the same circles during the Cold War. Different sides of the same dirty coin.’ ‘He never spoke about those days.’ ‘None of us did.’ Silas returned to the bar and began wiping down the counter, the rag moving in slow circles. ‘Some stories are better left in the dark. They grow fangs when you drag them into light.’ Aurora watched the motion of his hand, the silver ring catching the dim glow. ‘Is that why you never came back? After Prague, I mean. You just… vanished.’ ‘I sent your father a letter.’ ‘A letter.’ She almost laughed. ‘I was seventeen. I waited for you at that stupid café near the bay, the one with the terrible scones. You promised you’d take me fishing. Proper fishing, you said, not the tourist nonsense.’ The rag stilled. Silas’s face went through a series of minute shifts—something resembling pain, then the kind of resignation that comes from long practice. ‘I was in a hospital in Vienna for six months. The knee was the visible damage. The rest took longer to mend.’ ‘You could have called. Written. Anything besides silence.’ ‘I thought I was doing you a kindness.’ The words landed like a physical blow. Aurora felt the sting behind her eyes and blinked it away. She’d spent years nursing a quiet resentment toward the man who’d taught her to tie knots and spot a tail and then disappeared without explanation. Now, seeing the deep lines around his eyes and the way he favored his leg when he thought no one was watching, the anger deflated. ‘It wasn’t a kindness,’ she said. ‘It was just another absence.’ Silas set the rag aside and leaned his weight on his good leg. ‘I’m not good at being known, Rory. Never was. The job stripped away everything that wasn’t necessary, and by the time I was out, I’d forgotten how to be anything but operational.’ ‘And now?’ ‘Now I run a bar and talk to ghosts. Some of them have the decency to walk through the door on rainy nights and remind me what I gave up.’ The confession hung in the air, raw and unexpected. Aurora reached across the bar and covered his hand with hers. The gesture felt foreign, like trying to speak a language she’d once known fluently but had lost to disuse. ‘Eva called me,’ she said. ‘After everything with Evan. She said, “Come to London. I know a place.” She didn’t mention the bar by name. Just gave me an address and told me to trust her.’ ‘Eva’s a good friend.’ Silas didn’t pull his hand away. ‘She’d stop by every few months, ask about you. I told her to send you here if things ever went south.’ ‘You knew? All this time, you knew I was in London?’ ‘I knew you were here. I didn’t know if you’d want to see me.’ Aurora withdrew her hand and cradled the empty glass. The whisky had left a warm trail in her chest, but the hollow feeling persisted. ‘I’m not the girl you remember, Silas. I’m not Laila anymore, with her big plans and her father’s name to hide behind. I’m just Rory, who pedals through traffic and goes home to a single room and a hot plate. Some days I think I’m running. Most days I think I’m just surviving.’ ‘There’s a difference?’ ‘I used to think so. Now I’m not sure.’ Silas straightened the glasses on the shelf with a precision that spoke of routine. ‘Survival is a kind of strength. Don’t let anyone tell you different. But running—that’s just motion without direction. You deserve more than that.’ ‘Do I?’ The question came out sharper than she intended. ‘I let a man take everything I had and then spent two years pretending I’d chosen this life. I haven’t spoken to my father since Christmas, and every phone call feels like a lie I’m too tired to maintain.’ ‘Your father loves you.’ ‘My father loves a version of me that doesn’t exist. The same way I loved a version of you that was probably never real. The Spy master who could fix anything. The man who promised to teach me the knots sailors use and then vanished.’ Silas flinched. It was a small thing, a tightening around the eyes, but Aurora saw it. She pressed on, the words spilling out now like water through a crack in a dam. ‘I kept waiting for you to show up and make sense of everything. When Evan started drinking, I thought, “Silas will know what to do.” When I walked out of that hospital with twelve stitches in my arm, I thought, “Silas will find me.” But you were just another ghost in a city full of them.’ ‘I’m not a ghost, Rory. I’m a tired old man with a bad knee and a head full of regrets. And you’re right—I should have been there. I should have done a dozen things differently. But regret is cheap currency. It doesn’t buy back the years, and it doesn’t heal what’s broken.’ The rain had softened outside, reduced to a gentle patter against the glass. The green neon sign buzzed steadily, its light painting pale stripes on the wet pavement. Aurora stood, and the stool scraped against the floor. ‘I should go. I have an early shift tomorrow, and my bike’s probably floating down the street by now.’ Silas reached under the bar and pulled out a key, old brass with a faded tag. ‘There’s a flat upstairs. Empty. Used to be storage, but I had it converted a while back. It’s not much, but it’s dry, and it’s yours if you want it.’ ‘I have a place.’ ‘You have a room above a diner. I have a flat with a working heater and a lock on the door. Think about it.’ Aurora took the key. Her fingers closed around the cool metal, and she felt the weight of the offer—not just shelter, but something that looked like a bridge, however fragile, across the gap of missing years. ‘I’m not the girl you remember,’ she said again, because it felt like the only truth she had left. Silas reached up and touched the signet ring on his finger, a habitual gesture. ‘Neither am I. But maybe we can figure out who we are now. No ghosts, no expectations. Just two people who used to know each other, trying to remember how to be human.’ The clock struck midnight, a low chime that echoed through the empty bar. Aurora slipped the key into her pocket and pulled her damp coat tighter around her shoulders. She moved toward the door, then stopped with her hand on the bolt. ‘You ever miss it? The life before the bar, before all of this?’ Silas’s smile was a thin, weary thing. ‘Every day. But missing something isn’t the same as wanting it back.’
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The job stripped away [away]"
1"You deserve more [more]"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.08
96.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2574
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.03% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2574
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"electric"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"beacon"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"weight"
count4
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"unspoken"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"sense of"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"electric"
1"whisper"
2"beacon"
3"measured"
4"weight"
5"flickered"
6"silence"
7"traced"
8"unspoken"
9"pulsed"
10"footsteps"
11"sense of"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences169
matches
0"was grateful"
1"felt the sting"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences169
filterMatches
0"wonder"
1"think"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences246
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2562
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions32
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1965
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity0.97
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest2
Golden1
Empress1
Aurora17
Blackwood1
Welsh1
Silas19
Sets1
Met1
You6
Chinese1
Brendan1
Carter1
Evan2
Cold1
War1
Prague1
Written1
Laila1
Rory1
Christmas1
Spy1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Aurora"
3"Blackwood"
4"Welsh"
5"Silas"
6"You"
7"Brendan"
8"Carter"
9"Evan"
10"Laila"
11"Rory"
places
0"Soho"
1"Sets"
2"Prague"
3"Written"
globalScore1
windowScore1
93.18% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences132
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"smelled like peat and smoke, a scent that"
1"seemed smaller more solid"
2"looked like a bridge, however fragile, ac"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.781
wordCount2562
matches
0"not much, but it’s dry"
1"not just shelter, but something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences246
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs85
mean30.14
std20.94
cv0.695
sampleLengths
067
152
265
368
425
57
619
739
81
935
1011
1150
128
1359
148
154
1636
179
1896
195
2037
2110
2222
2365
2415
2554
2630
2731
2810
2913
3044
314
3256
3356
3412
3513
3624
3741
388
392
4038
4132
4236
4351
4416
4542
466
4738
4828
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences169
matches
0"being asked"
1"been meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs348
matches
0"was asking"
1"was watching"
15.10% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences246
ratio0.045
matches
0"She shook the damp from her hair—black, straight, cropped at the shoulders—and let her eyes adjust to the dim."
1"When he shifted his weight, Aurora caught the hitch—a slight drag in his left leg as he turned."
2"Silas lifted his head, and the light caught his eyes—hazel, with flecks of green near the pupil."
3"She saw his gaze drop to it and then flick back to her face, cataloguing the changes—the sharper cheekbones, the deeper set of her bright blue eyes, the way she held her shoulders like someone expecting a blow."
4"She remembered this bar from childhood visits—tucked in a corner while her father and Silas talked in low voices, the clink of ice cubes like a private language."
5"Silas’s expression flickered—something almost gentle, then gone."
6"He didn’t say what she saw in his face—that she was Brendan Carter’s daughter, that she’d been studying law, that this was not the life she’d been meant for."
7"Silas’s face went through a series of minute shifts—something resembling pain, then the kind of resignation that comes from long practice."
8"But running—that’s just motion without direction."
9"And you’re right—I should have been there."
10"Her fingers closed around the cool metal, and she felt the weight of the offer—not just shelter, but something that looked like a bridge, however fragile, across the gap of missing years."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount294
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount2
adverbRatio0.006802721088435374
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences246
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences246
mean10.41
std7.22
cv0.693
sampleLengths
016
132
219
315
412
515
610
76
826
920
1013
1118
1221
1311
1418
1511
1614
172
185
198
2011
214
2217
234
2414
251
2612
275
285
2913
303
313
325
3314
349
352
3612
3713
383
395
4019
412
4238
438
444
4511
468
4717
483
496
48.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.34552845528455284
totalSentences246
uniqueOpeners85
83.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences159
matches
0"Then a crease appeared between"
1"Instead, he refilled her glass,"
2"Just gave me an address"
3"Just two people who used"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences159
matches
0"She shook the damp from"
1"She hadn’t meant to come"
2"His hair was auburn threaded"
3"He moved with a stillness"
4"He set the glass on"
5"He leaned the rag over"
6"She stepped closer, and the"
7"She saw his gaze drop"
8"He poured two fingers of"
9"She remembered this bar from"
10"She’d drawn on napkins with"
11"You used to fill a"
12"It burned a path down"
13"He’d been MI6 when she"
14"She used to imagine him"
15"I work a few streets"
16"He didn’t say what she"
17"He doesn’t know I left"
18"He doesn’t know about"
19"You flinched when the door"
ratio0.283
73.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount123
totalSentences159
matches
0"The rain began just after"
1"Aurora shouldered through the doors"
2"She shook the damp from"
3"The bar smelled of aged"
4"Maps covered the walls, their"
5"A fan turned slow overhead,"
6"She hadn’t meant to come"
7"The rain had driven her,"
8"The Golden Empress was three"
9"The Nest’s green light had"
10"A man stood behind the"
11"His hair was auburn threaded"
12"He moved with a stillness"
13"Silas Blackwood didn’t look up"
14"He set the glass on"
15"Aurora’s voice came out steadier"
16"The rag stopped moving."
17"Silas lifted his head, and"
18"The name hit the air"
19"Aurora felt her spine straighten."
ratio0.774
62.89% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences159
matches
0"Now, seeing the deep lines"
1"Now I’m not"
ratio0.013
88.61% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"A man stood behind the bar, polishing a glass with a rag that looked older than the building."
1"She saw his gaze drop to it and then flick back to her face, cataloguing the changes—the sharper cheekbones, the deeper set of her bright blue eyes, the way she…"
2"Silas took her glass and drank from it himself, a deliberate act that blurred the line between host and confidant."
3"Silas’s face went through a series of minute shifts—something resembling pain, then the kind of resignation that comes from long practice."
4"She’d spent years nursing a quiet resentment toward the man who’d taught her to tie knots and spot a tail and then disappeared without explanation."
5"Her fingers closed around the cool metal, and she felt the weight of the offer—not just shelter, but something that looked like a bridge, however fragile, acros…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I have, and my bike’s probably floating down the street by now"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"I haven’t (have)"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
88.3880%