Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GWRHXSMV8JY4FFAYHWEMS

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Duration:
55.3s
Cost:
$0.001642
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DeepSeek

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air hit Rory first — sweet and cloying, like overripe fruit left too long in the sun. She pressed the back of her hand to her nose. "God, that's strong." Nyx shifted beside her, their form darker than the amber sky bleeding light across the horizon. The Shadow’s voice slipped through her thoughts like wind through cracked stone. *That scent is fermenting honey and dying flowers. It masks worse things beneath.* Isolde glided ahead without leaving prints in the copper-colored grass. Her silver hair caught light that shouldn’t have existed — there was no sun here, only that constant warm glow pressing down from everywhere at once. "Dymas welcomes with appetite. Refuse nothing offered, but taste nothing freely given." Rory’s fingers found the Heartstone beneath her shirt. It pulsed, hot and steady, matching the rhythm of her own heartbeat. They’d stepped through a tear in the Veil near Covent Garden — a jagged wound in reality that Nyx had sensed, Isolde had confirmed, and Rory had been stupid enough to agree to investigate. The pendant had nearly burned her skin raw as they crossed. Now they stood on a ridge overlooking what shouldn’t exist. Vineyards stretched in impossible spirals below, heavy with grapes the color of bruises. Orchards marched in perfect geometric patterns, their branches bending under fruit that glistened wetly. A river cut through the valley — but it ran thick and slow, more syrup than water, catching the amber light and throwing it back in ribbons of gold and crimson. "It’s beautiful," Rory whispered. "It’s hungry," Isolde corrected. They descended. The grass felt wrong under Rory’s boots — too soft, like walking on silk instead of vegetation. Tiny flowers bloomed in her footprints and withered seconds later, their petals curling into ash. She stopped watching them after the third step. A sound rolled across the valley. Deep, resonant, somewhere between a bell and a groan. *The feasting halls,* Nyx murmured. Their form had grown sharper since they’d arrived, edges more defined. *Prince Belphegor’s domain. His kitchens never close.* "The demon of Gluttony runs a restaurant?" *He runs an empire of excess. There’s a difference.* The path curved around an orchard where pomegranates cracked open on their own, spilling seeds that wriggled like maggots before burrowing into the soil. Rory gagged. Isolde’s hand pressed between her shoulder blades, cool even through her jacket. "Do not stop walking. Do not gawk. They notice when you notice." "Who notices?" The Seer’s lavender eyes flicked sideways. "Everything here." Rory felt it then — the weight of observation. Not hostile, not yet. Curious. The vines twisted to follow their passage. The trees leaned, almost imperceptibly. Even the syrupy river seemed to slow as they passed, its current pausing to examine them. The Heartstone throbbed. "They know we’re here." *We crossed their threshold uninvited,* Nyx said. *Hospitality hasn’t been offered. We’re not guests. We’re ingredients.* Ahead, Isolde raised one pale hand. She’d stopped at the edge of a courtyard that Rory hadn’t noticed materializing from the landscape — flagstones of polished obsidian, arranged in concentric circles around a fountain that flowed with something too thick to be water. The liquid caught the light and held it, suspending golden motes within its depths. "It’s mead," Isolde said, answering the question Rory hadn’t asked. "Fermented from the honey of damned souls. One sip, and you’d forget your own name. Your grief. Your rage. Eventually, your hunger for anything else." Rory stared at the fountain. Her throat was suddenly very dry. "It’s not real thirst," she said aloud, more to herself than anyone. "It’s the air. The smell. It’s trying to — " *Manipulate you,* Nyx finished. *Yes.* A figure moved between the columns beyond the courtyard. Human-shaped, but too tall. Too thin. Joints bending where joints shouldn’t bend. It wore a chef’s apron over skin the color of old parchment, and its hands were wrapped around a cleaver that dripped something dark. It didn’t seem to see them. It passed through the colonnade and disappeared into a doorway that exhaled steam and screaming. Rory’s voice came out smaller than she wanted. "What are they doing in there?" "Preparing a feast," Isolde said. "The souls here are contracted. They cook for eternity, creating dishes no mortal palate could comprehend. The demon lords dine on their creations. In exchange, the chefs are never hungry again." "But never full either, I'm guessing." Isolde’s silence was answer enough. They circled the courtyard, giving the fountain a wide berth. Rory’s hand hadn’t left the Fae blade at her hip since they’d entered the valley. The moonsilver was freezing now, cold enough to bite through her jeans where the sheath pressed against her thigh. Good. Cold meant it was working. Cold meant danger was close. The path led them into the orchards proper. Up close, the trees were wrong in ways the distance had hidden. Their bark was ridged like hardened skin. Their roots pulsed with sluggish circulation. And the fruit — The fruit had faces. Not explicit. Just a suggestion of features pressed into the flesh of each peach, each plum, each swollen pear. Mouths frozen mid-scream. Eyes squeezed shut. "Isolde." "I see them." *The trees are cultivated souls,* Nyx said. They’d pulled themselves taller, broader, positioning their darkness between Rory and the nearest trunk. *They were once gluttons. Now they feed others forever. An elegant punishment.* "Poetic." *Demons appreciate irony.* One of the branches dipped toward them as they passed — offering, Rory realized with sick fascination, a perfectly ripe fig. The split in its flesh formed something that looked almost like a smile. She walked faster. They broke through the treeline into a clearing dominated by a single oak. Unlike the other trees, this one was enormous and genuinely ancient — gnarled bark thick with age, branches spreading like a cathedral ceiling overhead. And unlike the orchard, it wasn’t wrong. It was simply old. Deeply, impossibly old. "There," Isolde breathed. "There — that’s what we’re looking for." The Seer crossed to the oak and pressed both palms against its trunk. Her silver hair lifted in a wind that touched nothing else. For a long moment, nothing happened. Then the bark shifted, opening seams that weren’t meant for human eyes, revealing a hollow space within that flickered with violet light. "A root system," Isolde murmured. "This tree doesn’t belong to Dymas. It was here before the princes claimed this realm. It remembers the old paths — the ways between all worlds." Rory stepped closer. The hollow was large enough to crawl into. "Where does it lead?" "Everywhere. Nowhere. The Fae Grove. The mortal plane. Deeper into Hel." Isolde turned, and her lavender eyes held something Rory had never seen in them before. Surprise. "It’s asking permission." "Trees don’t — " *Malphora.* Nyx’s use of that name stopped her cold. The Shadow rarely used it. It was the name the demons knew her by, the name whispered through the darker corners of London’s supernatural underground. The name that meant something she still didn’t fully understand. *The tree knows you. It knows what you carry.* The Heartstone pendant burned. Rory winced and pulled it free of her shirt, and the crimson gem was not just glowing now — it was blazing, throwing red light across the clearing, painting the ancient oak in shades of blood and wine. "Do it," Rory said, and her voice didn’t shake even though the rest of her wanted to. "Ask." She pressed her palm against the bark. The tree opened fully. The violet light swallowed them whole — and the journey downward began, roots like tunnels, soil that wasn’t soil, the distant sound of something vast breathing in the darkness below. The Feast Halls of Dymas fell away behind them.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.067
88.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1276
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1276
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"depths"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"perfect"
2"silk"
3"flicked"
4"weight"
5"throbbed"
6"depths"
7"silence"
8"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences118
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
77.90% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans13
markdownWords79
totalWords1294
ratio0.061
matches
0"That scent is fermenting honey and dying flowers. It masks worse things beneath."
1"The feasting halls,"
2"Prince Belphegor’s domain. His kitchens never close."
3"He runs an empire of excess. There’s a difference."
4"We crossed their threshold uninvited,"
5"Hospitality hasn’t been offered. We’re not guests. We’re ingredients."
6"Manipulate you,"
7"Yes."
8"The trees are cultivated souls,"
9"They were once gluttons. Now they feed others forever. An elegant punishment."
10"Demons appreciate irony."
11"Malphora."
12"The tree knows you. It knows what you carry."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
67.73% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1094
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.65
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory18
Shadow2
Isolde11
Heartstone3
Veil1
Covent1
Garden1
Nyx7
Belphegor1
Seer2
Ahead1
Fae1
One1
Surprise1
London1
Feast1
Halls1
Dymas1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Shadow"
2"Isolde"
3"Heartstone"
4"Nyx"
5"Belphegor"
6"Seer"
7"Dymas"
places
0"Veil"
1"Covent"
2"Garden"
3"London"
globalScore0.677
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1294
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean20.87
std17.11
cv0.82
sampleLengths
028
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241
348
420
545
610
758
84
94
102
1140
1215
1323
147
159
1638
1712
182
198
2042
213
224
2316
2457
2535
2611
2722
285
2945
3021
3114
3236
336
345
3544
3611
3737
384
3925
401
413
4233
431
443
4534
463
4751
4810
4952
96.34% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences118
matches
0"been offered"
1"were wrapped"
2"was ridged"
96.91% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs194
matches
0"was working"
1"was blazing"
2"was not just glowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences139
ratio0.086
matches
0"The air hit Rory first — sweet and cloying, like overripe fruit left too long in the sun."
1"Her silver hair caught light that shouldn’t have existed — there was no sun here, only that constant warm glow pressing down from everywhere at once."
2"They’d stepped through a tear in the Veil near Covent Garden — a jagged wound in reality that Nyx had sensed, Isolde had confirmed, and Rory had been stupid enough to agree to investigate."
3"A river cut through the valley — but it ran thick and slow, more syrup than water, catching the amber light and throwing it back in ribbons of gold and crimson."
4"The grass felt wrong under Rory’s boots — too soft, like walking on silk instead of vegetation."
5"Rory felt it then — the weight of observation."
6"She’d stopped at the edge of a courtyard that Rory hadn’t noticed materializing from the landscape — flagstones of polished obsidian, arranged in concentric circles around a fountain that flowed with something too thick to be water."
7"And the fruit —"
8"One of the branches dipped toward them as they passed — offering, Rory realized with sick fascination, a perfectly ripe fig."
9"Unlike the other trees, this one was enormous and genuinely ancient — gnarled bark thick with age, branches spreading like a cathedral ceiling overhead."
10"Rory winced and pulled it free of her shirt, and the crimson gem was not just glowing now — it was blazing, throwing red light across the clearing, painting the ancient oak in shades of blood and wine."
11"The violet light swallowed them whole — and the journey downward began, roots like tunnels, soil that wasn’t soil, the distant sound of something vast breathing in the darkness below."
96.29% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1085
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.04423963133640553
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.011981566820276499
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean9.31
std7.97
cv0.856
sampleLengths
018
110
23
316
412
58
65
710
826
912
108
1112
1234
1311
1410
1513
1614
1731
184
194
202
2117
2215
238
246
259
265
2711
283
294
307
316
323
3324
342
3512
3612
372
386
392
409
414
421
437
445
4516
463
474
487
494
66.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.45323741007194246
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners63
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences103
matches
0"Even the syrupy river seemed"
1"Just a suggestion of features"
2"Deeply, impossibly old."
3"Then the bark shifted, opening"
ratio0.039
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences103
matches
0"She pressed the back of"
1"It masks worse things beneath.*"
2"Her silver hair caught light"
3"It pulsed, hot and steady,"
4"They’d stepped through a tear"
5"She stopped watching them after"
6"Their form had grown sharper"
7"His kitchens never close.*"
8"*He runs an empire of"
9"*We crossed their threshold uninvited,*"
10"We’re not guests."
11"She’d stopped at the edge"
12"Her throat was suddenly very"
13"she said aloud, more to"
14"It wore a chef’s apron"
15"It didn’t seem to see"
16"It passed through the colonnade"
17"They circled the courtyard, giving"
18"Their bark was ridged like"
19"Their roots pulsed with sluggish"
ratio0.282
57.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount83
totalSentences103
matches
0"The air hit Rory first"
1"She pressed the back of"
2"Nyx shifted beside her, their"
3"The Shadow’s voice slipped through"
4"*That scent is fermenting honey"
5"It masks worse things beneath.*"
6"Isolde glided ahead without leaving"
7"Her silver hair caught light"
8"Rory’s fingers found the Heartstone"
9"It pulsed, hot and steady,"
10"They’d stepped through a tear"
11"The pendant had nearly burned"
12"Vineyards stretched in impossible spirals"
13"Orchards marched in perfect geometric"
14"A river cut through the"
15"The grass felt wrong under"
16"She stopped watching them after"
17"A sound rolled across the"
18"*The feasting halls,* Nyx murmured."
19"Their form had grown sharper"
ratio0.806
97.09% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"Now they stood on a"
1"Now they feed others forever."
ratio0.019
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Her silver hair caught light that shouldn’t have existed — there was no sun here, only that constant warm glow pressing down from everywhere at once."
1"Orchards marched in perfect geometric patterns, their branches bending under fruit that glistened wetly."
2"The path curved around an orchard where pomegranates cracked open on their own, spilling seeds that wriggled like maggots before burrowing into the soil."
3"She’d stopped at the edge of a courtyard that Rory hadn’t noticed materializing from the landscape — flagstones of polished obsidian, arranged in concentric cir…"
4"It wore a chef’s apron over skin the color of old parchment, and its hands were wrapped around a cleaver that dripped something dark."
5"It passed through the colonnade and disappeared into a doorway that exhaled steam and screaming."
6"Then the bark shifted, opening seams that weren’t meant for human eyes, revealing a hollow space within that flickered with violet light."
7"The violet light swallowed them whole — and the journey downward began, roots like tunnels, soil that wasn’t soil, the distant sound of something vast breathing…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said aloud, more to herself than anyone"
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Rory whispered (whisper)"
1"Isolde corrected (correct)"
2"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
3"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.267
leniency0.533
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.267
83.0235%