Run: 2026-04-25-01KQ2GXQ19T12QEZZKZXV86JKH

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Duration:
2m
Cost:
$0.017173
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Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bone token burned cold against Detective Harlow Quinn’s palm before she even ducked under the police tape. She’d felt that chill three times in eighteen years. Twice, the cases had ended in paperwork stamped *unsolved* and a dead partner. The third time, DS Morris had laughed it off as static from the Underground lines. Six months later, he’d bled out in an alley with no wounds the coroner could explain. So no. Not static. “Detective Quinn.” PC Thistle’s voice wobbled at the edges. Fresh out of probation. Someone at the Met had a sick sense of humour, assigning him to a scene two hundred metres inside an abandoned Tube station. “We’ve, ah, we’ve got a situation.” “We’ve always got a situation.” The Camden Town spur had been sealed since the Blitz. Rust flaked from the arched ceiling like bloody snow. Emergency floodlights on tripods washed everything in surgical white, which made the shadows deeper where they cut off. No graffiti down here. That was the first thing wrong. Camden kids tagged everything from postboxes to police horses, yet these tiled walls were pristine except for the soot. The second thing would be the body. A man sat propped against the old ticket booth, chin on his chest, hands folded in his lap. Late fifties. Grey suit, good tailoring. No visible injuries except the pale waxy quality to his skin that said *dead* before Quinn got within ten feet. “Called in by whom?” “Anonymous tip.” Thistle consulted his notepad like it might bite him. “Female, voice distorted. Said we’d find a ‘judgment’ at the Veil Market. Took us six hours to work out she meant down here.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “Anyone else know that name?” “Just you, ma’am. And the caller, I suppose.” “Keep it that way.” The Veil Market. Bone tokens. A moving supernatural bazaar that set up shop in London’s forgotten spaces. She’d spent three years chasing its existence through back-alley whispers and archived reports that read like fever dreams. Three years since Morris died clutching a brass compass with a needle that spun counterclockwise. She crouched beside the body. No lividity pooling in the legs. “He didn’t die here.” “SOCO thinks cardiac arrest. Natural causes.” “In a sealed Underground station.” Thistle shuffled. “Trespassers find their way into all sorts of places.” “Find their cufflinks too?” Quinn used her pen to lift the dead man’s sleeve. Heavy silver links, monogrammed *AB*. “This suit cost three grand. Shoes are handmade. He didn’t crawl through a maintenance hatch.” She tilted his chin up with gloved fingers. “Look at the dust on his jacket. Same as everywhere else down here. But the soles of his shoes are clean.” Thistle leaned closer, then straightened fast. “Someone carried him.” “Someone wanted him found here.” She released the chin. “Specifically here.” “Could still be natural causes. Heart gave out, friends panicked, dumped the body.” Quinn scanned the ticket booth. The old posters curling on the walls, advertising war bonds and Players cigarettes. Something had been removed from the counter. A clean rectangle in the grime. “Friends who have access to a sealed station, don’t leave fingerprints, and967 know to call it the Veil Market.” She pulled out her torch. “Run the name Alistair Blackwood through missing persons. He fits the type.” “You know him?” “Cufflinks.” She clicked the torch on. “And I know his type.” The CSIs worked in pairs, dusting surfaces that971 wouldn’t yield prints. Quinn left them to their theatre and followed the edge of her beam deeper into the station. Past the ticket hall, the platform stretched into darkness the floodlights hadn’t reached. Her footsteps echoed wrong. Too soft. The tiles swallowed sound like a carpeted room. Ten metres from the body, she found the stall. It was had been set up like a market booth. Folded metal table, the kind used at village fetes. Velvet cloth in faded purple draped across the top. And on the cloth, a neat arrangement of objects that made Quinn’s stomach clench. An empty birdcage. Brass, delicate, the door hanging open. A set of scales, both pans level. A single bone token, identical to the one390 one she’d found in Morris’s pocket, identical to the one cooling in her own palm right now. “Detective?” Quinn didn’t turn. “What is it, Thistle?” “Found an ID. Name’s Edmund Vance. Not Blackwood.” “Good for him.” “Solicitor, Fifty-seven. Reported missing by his firm three days ago. No connection to Camden, no history of trespass, no nothing. Clean as a whistle.” “Until he wasn’t.” Quinn picked up the bone token. It hummed against her skin, just below audible. “The stall. Tell me what you see.” Thistle’s torch joined hers. “Fancy dress props?” “Try again.” “I don’t know, some sort of… art installation? Performance piece? Camden’s full of—” “An empty cage.” She pointed. “Scales. A token. Three objects. All symbolic.” “Symbolic of what?” “Soul cages. Judgment scales. Passage tokens.” Quinn’s voice stayed flat, professional, the same tone she’d used describing bullet trajectories in court. “It’s an altar, Constable. Someone performed a ritual down here, and Edmund Vance was the offering.” Thistle laughed. A short, nervous bark that died fast when Quinn didn’t join in. “You’re serious.” “His heart stopped. No marks on him. He’s seated like a man waiting for a train, except he’s196 waiting facing the ticket booth, not the platform. His shoes are192 spotless. Someone carried a fourteen-stone solicitor through a sealed Underground station, arranged him like a doll, and left an altar ten metres away. That’s not natural causes. That’s ceremony.” “Ritual killings are usually messier,” Thistle said790 said. “Blood. Symbols on walls. The occult lot love their theatrics.” “Theatrics are for amateurs.” Quinn pocketed the token. “Whoever did this wanted Vance to seem peaceful. Undisturbed. Natural, like you said.” She swept her beam across the platform’s edge. The tracks had been pulled up decades ago, leaving a shallow trench filled with rubble. “They almost succeeded.” “Almost?” Quinn didn’t answer. She was staring at something on the wall behind the altar. A mark, faint against the soot-stained tiles. Not painted. Scorched. The outline of a hand, fingers spread, burned into the ceramic like a photographic negative. Right hand. Adult. Wearing a ring on the third finger. “Photograph this,” she said. “The altar, the scorch mark, the body’s position relative to both. Document everything before SOCO moves it.” “Where are you going?” “To find someone who knows what this means.” Thistle stepped into her path. A bold move for someone who’d flinched at the bone token’s name. “Ma’am, with respect, this is my scene too. If there’s something790 something you’re not sharing—” “I’ve shared more than I should.” Quinn’s eyes were very brown and very hard. “Call your mum tonight, Constable. Tell her you love her. And800 and if anyone asks what we found down here, the only thing you mention is the body. Clear?” “Not remotely.” “Good. Now photograph the handprint.” She walked back toward the surface, past the CSIs and their847 their dusted surfaces, past Edmund Vance and his clean shoes, past the ticket booth that had held something important enough to leave a clean rectangle in seventy years of filth. Her left wrist itched under the worn leather watch strap. Habit. The compass Morris died for was locked in her desk drawer at the Yard, wrapped in evidence bags and three layers of professional denial. But the bone token was real, and it was209 was cold again, and the Veil Market moved every full moon. The next full moon was in four days. Quinn climbed the maintenance stairs into Camden’s Saturday chaos, where tourists posed with bronze statues and street performers swallowed swords for spare change. None of them knew what slept beneath their feet. None of them had seen a man die of soul theft. But she knew someone who might understand the handprint. Someone who spent her days buried in occult archives at the British Museum. Eva Kowalski owed her a favour. Time to collect.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.246
leniency0.491
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1331
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"very"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1331
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"sense of"
count1
2
word"pristine"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"sense of"
2"pristine"
3"scanned"
4"footsteps"
5"echoed"
6"velvet"
7"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences137
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords1331
ratio0.002
matches
0"unsolved"
1"dead"
2"AB"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount858
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Harlow1
Quinn15
Morris4
Underground1
Thistle8
Fresh1
Met1
Tube1
Camden3
Town1
Blitz1
Veil2
Market2
London1
Heavy1
Players1
Edmund1
Vance1
Yard1
Saturday1
British1
Museum1
Kowalski1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Thistle"
4"Market"
5"Edmund"
6"Vance"
7"Kowalski"
places
0"Camden"
1"Town"
2"London"
3"British"
globalScore0.626
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1331
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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std19.22
cv0.924
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342
45
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67
744
84
934
108
118
124
1350
1415
156
165
1711
1863
199
2011
2113
2267
233
2411
2555
269
272
2840
299
307
3125
321
337
348
353
3624
3724
387
392
4013
4112
423
4337
4416
4558
4618
4747
481
4939
90.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences95
matches
0"been sealed"
1"been removed"
2"been pulled"
3"was locked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs138
matches
0"was staring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences137
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount860
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.015116279069767442
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences137
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences137
mean9.72
std8.17
cv0.841
sampleLengths
018
19
213
315
416
52
62
79
84
923
106
115
1210
139
1418
154
166
1719
187
1918
202
214
2220
234
2411
2523
263
275
288
294
303
312
3212
3318
3415
355
366
374
386
395
402
419
4214
435
4423
4521
466
473
489
492
97.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.6204379562043796
totalSentences137
uniqueOpeners85
41.15% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"Twice, the cases had ended"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences81
matches
0"She’d felt that chill three"
1"She’d spent three years chasing"
2"She crouched beside the body."
3"She tilted his chin up"
4"She released the chin"
5"She pulled out her torch"
6"She clicked the torch on"
7"Her footsteps echoed wrong."
8"It was had been set"
9"It hummed against her skin,"
10"She swept her beam across"
11"She was staring at something"
12"She walked back toward the"
13"Her left wrist itched under"
ratio0.173
64.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences81
matches
0"The bone token burned cold"
1"She’d felt that chill three"
2"The third time, DS Morris"
3"PC Thistle’s voice wobbled at"
4"Someone at the Met had"
5"The Camden Town spur had"
6"Rust flaked from the arched"
7"Emergency floodlights on tripods washed"
8"That was the first thing"
9"Camden kids tagged everything from"
10"The second thing would be"
11"A man sat propped against"
12"Thistle consulted his notepad like"
13"Quinn’s jaw tightened."
14"The Veil Market."
15"A moving supernatural bazaar that"
16"She’d spent three years chasing"
17"She crouched beside the body."
18"Quinn used her pen to"
19"She tilted his chin up"
ratio0.79
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
31.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"She’d spent three years chasing its existence through back-alley whispers and archived reports that read like fever dreams."
1"Three years since Morris died clutching a brass compass with a needle that spun counterclockwise."
2"And on the cloth, a neat arrangement of objects that made Quinn’s stomach clench."
3"She walked back toward the surface, past the CSIs and their847 their dusted surfaces, past Edmund Vance and his clean shoes, past the ticket booth that had held…"
4"Someone who spent her days buried in occult archives at the British Museum."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.035
leniency0.07
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.6893%